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Baby boy full of joy new to the world

A beauty coming out the rough just like a pearl

First born in the family so spoiled

No home of his own sleeping in cars so loyal

Just Listen

Oldest of three and born to lead

Parents always work, three mouths to feed

Dad taught the boy to never show feelings

But the young boy needed emotional healing

Just Listen

Angry at the world but no way to express it

Built up an ulcer so he had to confess it

Tears shed feelings hurt but the boy felt better

But still holding back when he's under the weather

Just Listen

Put a ball in his hand and he start letting out anger

Football took up his time, kept him out of Oaklands danger

Still young but his mind set on the future

College was for certain he just needed something to shoot for

Just Listen

Friends loved to play around living life with no plan

The boy ventured away to private school to be a better man

Always up for a challenge, new school being the hardest

Black kid from Oakland dropping jaws from being the sharpest

Just Listen

Constantly being doubted for his mental capability

His motivation was being the first college graduate in family history

As the years go by there is always setback

The boy got up, fought harder, ready to comeback

Just Listen

The boy lasted in the high school all four years

Odds always against him but failure was never a fear

Now the young boy is going to college for free

Young Educated Black Man from Oakland he is me
Just Listen

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Define and explain at least one of your "many emotions" -

What conditions make you want to portray something to the "outsider?"

Where you listed your sources "sports, ancestry, school..." pick one and dig into it. Use it a as an anchor and clear example of how a given thing moves you to create. From there you have a foundation from where to talk about WHAT you create.

Speak in the active voice throughout. Eliminate all of the "ifs" and limit the "my art." The "my art" reminds me that I don't know what your art is.

Speak in the positive; talk about what is rather than what a thing is not.

The statement circles back onto itself. There is no clear beginning or focal point though there is plenty of rich content. Please get down to the specifics of something you have created and outline the process you go through to get there.

I create art to release a part of myself into the world.  My art usually
 comes when one of my many emotions is at a high and I want to portray
what I am feeling to the outsider's eye.  I am inspired to make art from
 so many different sources they seem random.  I am inspired by family,
sports, ancestry, school, and relationships.  My inspiration is usually a
 direct connection to something around me.  If I am with family, I will
most likely find inspiration through them.  If I am alone with my
thoughts, I most likely become inspired by past memories and sometimes
memories of mu family' past that I have heard of and attached myself to.
  If I take time to make art it signifies me.  My art will represent the
 most important parts of my life.  I am big on God, family, and sports
so my art usually will reflect one of the three.  I feel my art is
unique from others because I tend to portray big ideas in the simplest
way.  For example, I can draw out my initials in graffiti but within
each letter I draw small aspects of me.  I might draw books, shoes, and a
 football.  I like to make the viewer look closer to understand.  I
prefer to be below the surface rather than upfront.  All of my art means
 the world to me.  I feel like my art leads to key points in my life.  I
 never get rid of artwork and as I look back in my older age I can
remember what I was going through in that moment of life.  My art helps
me stay humble and remember all I went through or overcame.  My art is a
 key into me

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I create art to release a part of myself into the world. My art usually comes when one of my many emotions is at a high and I want to portray what I am feeling to the outsider's eye. I am inspired to make art from so many different sources they seem random. I am inspired by family, sports, ancestry, school, and relationships. My inspiration is usually a direct connection to something around me. If I am with family, I will most likely find inspiration through them. If I am alone with my thoughts, I most likely become inspired by past memories and sometimes memories of mu family' past that I have heard of and attached myself to. If I take time to make art it signifies me. My art will represent the most important parts of my life. I am big on God, family, and sports so my art usually will reflect one of the three. I feel my art is unique from others because I tend to portray big ideas in the simplest way. For example, I can draw out my initials in graffiti but within each letter I draw small aspects of me. I might draw books, shoes, and a football. I like to make the viewer look closer to understand. I prefer to be below the surface rather than upfront. All of my art means the world to me. I feel like my art leads to key points in my life. I never get rid of artwork and as I look back in my older age I can remember what I was going through in that moment of life. My art helps me stay humble and remember all I went through or overcame. My art is a key into me

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My prayer from today

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Prentice Powell "Good Father" on Arsenio Hall Show

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Pay attention to the mans footwork

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Cediel - Response to Aaron - Assignment #1

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Cediel - Response to Aaron - Assignment #1

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Everything you asserted in your summary makes sense to ME but when I read student writing I pretend I don't know YOU and that you are educating me about something I have no knowledge of. From that perspective your summary needs some structure such as a general description of "Rize", then transition to the introduction of Tommy and how his dance/work benefits the community, and then make your Shango connection (which requires you defining who and what he is). Bringing up the "strong pelvic thrust" of Shango should force you to then describe the movement quality of Krumping so the connection is clear to the ignorant reader.

What were your questions while viewing the film? Always follow your summary/responses with questions or comments.

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My siblings and I playing with my grandfather's second line gear

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"Mother to Son" Langston Hughes poem GREAT Viola Davis voice--then POET HIMSELF RECITES!

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Dance is the raft to keep the kids from drowning. The Krump dance style is made of pure emotion. Tommy the Clown used his position as a dancer and mentor to take the children of the neighborhood under his wing. He kept them out of trouble and played the paternal figure to a lot of the kids. Krumping reminds me of the strong pelvic thrust and body movements of Shango. Clown Groups bring happiness to places where happiness was nonexistent. The groups dance and entertain. Clowning and Krumping have no limitations. You will see hints of African, Belizian, and many other dance styles. "In the midst of krumping there is a spirit there"-Dragon. No matter where you are you can stop what you are doing to krump. Getting krump is the art of dance to forget your problems and release stress and be free. Krumping is similar to tribes in Africa and how they interact with one another for horseplay or to impress one another or to perform or a rights of passage. Krumping is all a lot of kids have and it does the healing it needs to. While dancing you do not care if you look ugly or you are out of place because you are dancing.

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Here you go Aaron! It's the video I played for prayer called "Spell Father"

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#Poetry : Spelling Absent Father (The world needs a father)

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Poem: The world needs a father Spell coordinator : Young man your spelling word is 'Father' 6year old student: Father, 'M','O','T','H'.'E','R' #freeyourmindfridays #Poetry #Spokenword #friday

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That's right. Document ALL your work. When you stepped up to dance in the Gun Violence piece you made public that you think and do independently.

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#TBT