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Hi Everybody,

Ferris showed me this page, and I have read your work. I'm really impressed by your writing. Reading about your studying during lockdown was very interesting. Well done! Keep up the great work!!!

Pete Cullum
ESOL Tutor
Bromley by Bow Centre

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Dear Ferris,

Thank you very much for letting me read the student’s padlets - I enjoyed reading the stories of experiences, good and bad! There is no doubt that online shopping has been a boon during this pandemic but I got confused and ordered 250 KGS of cheese when I did my first grocery shopping on line!!
The students grammar and expression is very good and I wish them every success as they develop those skills; while we don’t write many letters these days, we certainly write plenty of e mails and learning how to do this well is important.

I wish you and all your students every blessing and i look forward to coming and meeting you all before too long.

Yours,

Ann

The Rev’d Canon Councillor Ann Easter, Commissioner for InterFaith Dialogue.

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So, Ferris has rightly badgered me to make sure I write a post for the E2 class group.  I have read all of your individual work submissions and contributions about online shopping an what you have learnt.  All your assignments were interesting.  The digital skills you have used to express your English language capabilities is simply awesome.  I am very proud of you all and your achievements.  I am sure you all will continue to improve your English skills with Ferris to help and guide you through your learning journey.  I sincerely look forward  to reviewing and commenting on your next series of English assignments.
Thank you

Mark Townsend,
Area Manager
Newham Adult Learning Service

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Dear Ferris

Thank you for giving me the chance to read these Padlets.  I have thoroughly enjoyed them – please pass my congratulations to everyone involved, and my best wishes for their classes, and for the future.

Online shopping is so much a part of our lives now.  Its interesting to read about everyone’s experience – the positive aspects, and the simplicity, but the frustrations too.

Best wishes,

Stephen Timms

MP for East Ham

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Pomi
"Online shopping " It's very popular now. In the past decade PUN there has SVA been dramatic changes in our lives.There are so many websites wherein customers are able to compare the prices from PRE different suppliers and chose the best SP deal  EWs.
People are very busy.They don't have time to go shopping so they order online, especially these days.✔️ You can  also get bargains any time of the year by shopping online. ✔️
A few months ago, I ordered a dress for my daughter .When  the dress came  I wasn't  satisfied with it.EWs/PRO because it was too small so I returned it. That's PUN why I don't  like to shop online.
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Well done Pomi. You have clearly outlined some problems and advantages of online shopping. You have also evaluated them. This is a skillful piece of writing. Complete the corrections for a final grade.

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Murshada
Online shopping has always astonished people, but it is attracting more and more customers these days because of the ongoing pandemic.

My daughter has been down recently because her birthday wouldn't be like the previous ones.✔️ That's why I ordered a surprise present for her. PUN A Barbie Dream House! ✔️When the package came, she felt more than overjoyed. Honestly, when I ordered the present, I didn't think that the delivery would be so quick.✔️ I felt very satisfied with everything; the delivery, the packaging and the quality!✔️ I am glad I shopped online from the most well known mobile-shopping app.✔️
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Excellent work Murshada. You have used some great vocabulary in some good language structures. You have controlled your tenses well. You have also been able to express pleasure, disappointment and satisfaction. A top piece of work. Just one punctuation error can you identify and correct it?
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Immense opportunities are being provided by technology, which play a vital role in human life! ✔️With the evolution of modern technology, theART internet offers people more and more convenience. With the help of the internet people can do a lot of things without going out! ✔️✔️
Among those, the most fascinating thing WW for people is online shopping. I never did  VT online shopping before lockdown. Because of the lockdown, I completely WW drugged SP/VT myself into this. That was the easiest way to find my groceries during this WW uncertain time. Generally, I like to do shopping in stores because I can observe the product’s PUN quality.✔️
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Well done. Tangima. You have been really ambitious in using your vocabulary. This is a really energetic and forceful piece of writing. It is very descriptive and you have expressed your opinions well.
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BEAUTY
There are many ways to shop and one of them is online shopping✔️. Online shopping have SVA  advantages and disadvantages as well.
Online shopping saves our time. We can buy anything at home. I like to do shopping online.

I remember when I first started shopping online it was for my new born baby pod nest bed. ✔️The Products [was so far CONFUSED] , because when I saw that the ART colour was bright grey but when I received it  they was gave  VT me wrong colour and the ART quality wasn't good. I returned it,and   they gave me my money back WW .

All in all, online shopping is good, but we must be careful. ✔️
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Well done Beauty. You have used this piece to express your opinions about online shopping and to evaluate it. Your finally sentence is a lovely summary. Most of your grammar structures are good. Complete the corrections for a final mark.
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Kamrun
Online shopping is quick and convenient.✔️  We can shop on PRE a wide selection of shops around the world simultaneously to find the perfect item WW at the right price.I like to do shopping WF online. I have visited so many online shopping sites and ordered so many goods from those sites.✔️  I  bought a birthday present for my friend. She liked that very much.
Recently,I have started online grocery shopping WF  EW.It is super convenient to choose a slot.
Overall, online shopping has become the easiest, quickest,and the most efficient way to buy.✔️ ✔️
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A highly entertaining piece of writing Kamrun. You have controlled your grammar and used your vocabulary well. You have expressed pleasure, surprise and preference here. Well done. Do your corrections and you will get a final grade.
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Fahmida
Who does not like to shop?✔️✔️ ✔️   Most people like to go to shops and some people like to shop online. But I'm a person who likes both. ✔️ ✔️ Shopping online has become the ART popular method ever since more people have access to Internet.

Once  I ordered a gift through Amazon. I didn't get a chance to go MWs the shop as everything was closed because of lockdown,PUN that is why I ordered through online. But it was so disappointing because they delivered the wrong item. ✔️ I returned it and they gave me PRO my money back. Apart from this I never face VT any problem with online shopping.
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This is excellent high quality work Fahmida. Your grammar structures are controlled very well. You have used natural language and you have done this to express opinion and to evaluate. You have also described an event. Well done. Complete the corrections for a final grade.
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I started online shopping in 2016. My wife doesn't like online shopping, but my daughter likes online shopping PRO. Online shopping is a good thing, but a bad thing as well, because sometimesNUM I get wrong items delivered. After I started to order onPRE Wish, Amazon and Ebay I ordered a watch and a bag for my daughter. WW I moved to London in 2018. PUN In London EWs I started to order in EW online shopping to some items for PRE my house . Now I spend most of my time in WW  online shopping. Sometimes I get some offers onEW online shopping.WO EWs
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Really well done Nasir. This is very clear. You have some good well controlled grammar. You have made a good description of your shopping online activities. You have also spoken about the way in which you see advantages and disadvantages. Do the corrections and I will give you a final grade.
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ACCURACY 3
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Shabana
I started shopping online a long time ago in 2014 for the first time and I started using EBAY and Amazon. ✔️ My first ordered  WF was a bigger WF storage box 📦. My ordered WF was belayed SP . I was so worried 😟 so I contacted eBay helpline by tasting SP  them a massage SP . They are Contoct VT the seller and the seller told the eBay team . He had been contacted VT the delivered WF man said why he hasn’t VT delivered. They the delivered WF man he EW went to the wrong address. So the seller contacted the delivered WF man and texted him the right address. Then the next day I received the my item. Then the seller apologies VT for the the mistake and
eBay team contact VT me apologies VT as well. Since now WW I get no problems shopping online.
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Well done Shabana. You have clearly told us about an event in your online shopping experience. You have expressed an opinion about it. At the beginning you had some good grammar structures. We need to work on your word forms. Do the corrections and I will grade your work finally.
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Momotaj
At first I started shopping online in 2017 in Italy. In Italy I used to shop onPRE "Wish". After I came in PRE London, I ordered  VT in the EW online through "eBay" and "Amazon". I first bought a handbag in the EW online. It was beautiful, but there was very little space inside.✔️ When I first ordered in the EW online I was very worried, MW if  whether it will VT be of good quality or not,  CON or if they will deliver on time.  WO I don't like to order in the EW online shopping EW. My husband and my daughter like to do online shopping, because it is easier for them.✔️
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This is good progress Momotaj. You have two very good sentences. You have expressed your feelings about online shopping. Do the corrections to get full marks in your grading.
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A New Padlet. Please think back to our week on "Online Shopping". I want you to write a Padlet about "online shopping". Tell one story about online shopping. Maybe you made a mistake. Maybe it was your first time? Perhaps it was a surprise present. How did you feel when you tried to buy something online. Tell us a story about online shopping. You have 80 to 100 words. Please do not write more than 100 words. Your deadline is next Friday 3 July. I will be grading your Padlets then.

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Jeevan
The internet a good things a bad as well.[CONFUSED]. PRE Those days PUN I was in college CON my teacher gived WF/ART an assignment, PUN/PRO was based at PRE/ART an environment.I wasn't a good WW on  web side SP.
I remember that time NUM, PRO My CAP aunt helped  at PRE my work. She teachs VT me how to use online ART/WW .I learnt lots of things NUM on EW online. PUN how to use Skype, Facebook etc.CAP Then I increase VT at EW my knowledge. I felt a EW good.during at this WW moment.PUN I MW able to join the Zoom CAP classes every week.
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Well tried Jeevan. You have given us an idea about how much you have learned about the internet. You have used some good vocabulary here. You need to practise prepositions and articles. Do the corrections and I will grade your work.
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Tangima
Internet !✔️✔️ It’s a small word but it is deeply involved of PRE our lifestyle. After marriage I went WW to Italy with my husband.✔️ I had never been so far away from my parents. ✔️✔️ During that time I started using the ART internet to communicate with my beloved parents.

My husband instructed me  PRE how to use it and how to open an email account, Skype and much more.✔️ As a human being MW I was also very curious to know new things. I was astonished at PRE how technology helped SVA us to communicate from one end of the world to the other!✔️
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You made a great start with a one word "sentence" well done. It really drew me into reading your text. You have been ambitious in your writing and use of grammar. You have given us an idea about how astonishing and useful the internet is and how you have grown in your understanding of it. Well done Tangima.
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ACCURACY 4
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BEAUTY
We are leaving WW a ART technological  environment NUM. Technology made VT WW life faster and easier.
I remember when I first used the internet  WW  I was in Bangladesh. When I got married my husband gave me a smartphone.✔️ In this WF time NUM I couldn't used VT some of the ART apps. At PRE That time I felt very lonely. EWs Thise time WW my husband showed WW me how to open the ART google account, PUN/CAP How to use Skype, Facebook, email and CON many of EW things . At that time EWs  I felt WW very happy and I saw my family in PRE the EW Skype. Now I can, how to EWs use online and I am doing online Zoom classes.
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Well done Beauty. Some great language here. You have been ambitious with your grammar. Sometimes you have repeated the same phrase too  often. Do the corrections and I will grade the work.

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Kamrun
The internet has played a important role in our daily life and even the ways in which we interact with our loved ones✔️✔️.I remember at that ART  time EW I heard about the world wide web.Since my father worked in another district,SP/PUN/CAP it  was hard for him to come home every weekend.✔️
My uncle told us about some apps which we could use for video calls✔️✔️, PUN EWs  WhatsApp  CAP, CON/CAP Skype . He taught VT me how to use   VT these WW apps. After that we used these WW apps to talk with my father everyday. It was really amazing. It WF makes our life much easier.
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Well done Kamrun. You made such a good and interesting start here. You have shown why you first went online and how important it was for you. Finish the corrections and I will grade your work.
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ACCURACY 4
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Murshada
Back in the day, the internet wasn't as convenient as it is today.✔️✔️ Individuals couldn't afford it, but luckily my husband and I could. ✔️

When I first went online, I was in Italy, away from my family.✔️ I felt lonely, especially when my husband left for work, PUN so he decided to buy me a laptop. When he got it, he set everything up and made me a Skype account.✔️ I used it to stay in touch with my mom. We would video call everyday!✔️✔️ I was on cloud nine  because we could keep in touch although we were distant.✔️✔️
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Excellent work. So expressive Murshada. You have a very engaging style. That means you draw the reader in.
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Nasir
I first started using the internet in 2012. I got my first laptop in 2016, before MW I used only my phone.
Now I can do online shopping for children's clothesMW while sitting at home. I use the internet WW, whileCON I talk to my family via video calls. Having the internet WW makes everything easy for me  PRE to pay all the PRO bills. Online is very important  now, because the school is closed WF due to Coronavirus. My children use Google classroom for MWs homework and it's  WF very easy.
I am doing regular Zoom classes num and quizzes.
I am happy about it WW.
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Thank you for this Nasir. This describes your journey very well. Just one thing; you should use the words "the internet" instead of "online" in this text. When you have done the corrections I will grade your work.
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ACCURACY 3.5
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Living in a modern era, we cannot imagine life without the internet. It has made life easier and quicker.
As far as I remember, at the age of 14, whilst studying in school, I went online for the first time.✔️✔️ During that time I didn't have a phone, but I had WF?? a laptop which  was gifted by my father. I needed to open a gmail account, but I didn't know how to. One of my teachers PUN helped me. First, I went to google then I searched for it MWs ??. I followed the instructions they gave and was able to open an account✔️✔️. I felt so excited.
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This is very high quality work Fahmida. You have very thoughtfully put your ideas down. Your work is very accurate. How did you check it for mistakes?  Some beautiful grammar (especially the sentence with "whilst" in it. Keep going. Do the corrections and I will grade the piece.
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Pomi
We  depend VT  on the internet for so many reasons. It makes our life easier.
As far as I remember,  I first went online in 2009 whilst I was in London✔️ .I was very happy but I didn't know how to use a computer✔️. My uncle helped me and showed me  the basic things on  theART computer.
I downloaded  EW Skype and talked with my family. I was over the moon because I saw them after a long time.  I opened  a Facebook account. Slowly I  learned how to use online for shopping,  WF YouTube videos and educational programs and so on.
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Pomi you have given us a real sense of your excitement at using the internet for the first time and your increasing satisfaction at learning more. Well done.
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I used the internet  from the  PRE/MWs mobile phone. I have downloaded a few EW apps WW EW, Facebook, Skype Imo, Whatsapp, CON YouTube  When I do Zoom class I use the internet ,PUN then I do online quizzes and I chat with my classmates through Whatsapp. My children do online homework WF through Google classroom WF, Sometimes we do different EW online shopping. Everyday my children play online games. Sometimes we watch movies together. My husband pays SVA the bills through the internet . I feel happy, because it helps me a lot, but sometimes it's not good for my children, because they use it for too SP long.✔️✔️
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You have given us a good idea of how useful the internet is to you and your family and how useful it is too. Well done Momotaj. Do the corrections and I will grade the work.

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Shabana.
I got my first computer a long time ago in 2006. ✔️Me PRO and my husband were very happy .It was a desk computer. I didn’t know how to turn on my WO new computer. I was very confused. I needed to go online to chat with my family and friends ✔️. My children were very small and I had no family members in the uk CAP 🇬🇧. My husband’s friend solved our problem. He called him and my husband to explain VT me about EWs how to use the computer and go online. I downloaded Skype as my first app. We went online and video called our family members. I see our family members and talked with our family . I don’t speak English. But I am trying to learn by how to use computer and laptop.
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You have done really well here Shabana. You have some very clear sentences. It will be good to see you write this without help. Please do the corrections and I will grade the work.
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Write two paragraphs about the first time you remember going online. How did you do it? Where were you? What did you go online for? How did it feel?
You have to write between 80 and 100 words.
You must not write more than 100 words.
I will mark these assignments on Friday 12 June 2020.
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MR Ferris half term holiday.
He said that he went to work next week. But next week they have half term holiday. His wife said he doesn’t want to work. Mrs Ferris said to spend time with our family members. But he wants to make a teaching video for his students. He enjoys teaching. But his wife wants to spend some time with him. He also spends time with her. That’s why he is planning for half term. Maybe he will only teach the pre entry class. But for Entry 2 he will only do a video. He has to do some family work. He wants to spend the time with his family. He said to his wife that he wants to do one lesson.

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Pomi-
I am  talking  about  my favourite room .EWs .When you enter my house, PUN on your  EW left you will find my living room . EW/PUN This is my favourite . When we bought the  house I chose the decorations. In my living room the  floor is made out of brown wood and  theART walls are painted beige. I chose these NUM beautiful colours SP because it's a ART nice combination NUM. For this room I bought 2 brown sofas and a glass coffee table. There is a fish tank in the corner and I have  EW lots of colourful SP fish in there PRO. I like to watch  them when I  am sitting  in this room. I also have  two big vases NUM near the windows and the  TV is  placed  between them . I love the  room because I spend most of my free PRO  time in there with my family. If anyone is WF /MW come   to my house we  sit and watch TV, play games and chat with each other. WW  From my windows  I like to watch the veiws.I keep my room  simple .

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Excellent. really well done Pomi. You have written a detailed description of your favourite room and how you interact with it. The description is simple just like your room. Thank you for letting us into your favourite room. Just a bit of tidying up of the grammar to finish off before we leave it.
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Pomi --
It's a very difficult time for everyone because of the pandemic. During  lockdown  I'm  staying at home. I'm trying to keep calm and healthy. I go VT out when I need something important or  for other MWs necessary reasons. In lockdown,  I am trying to  keep my family safe and healthy. My children are really  WW getting  bored and for me their mental  health is  important. I am spending  more MW time with  EW  them. I am also MW playing with them. I'm  helping them with  their  homework .These days I am fasting because it is also Ramadan time. EW Ramadan  is the holy month NUM for Muslims/CAP.At PRE this time we are trying to do good deeds. I am reading ART the Quran and hadith  SP during the Ramadan EWs.
In PRE these days, I'm learning  in PRE different ways  EWs. I'm studying at night. Whenever I get time I am engaging with  something like reading a newspaper ,CON books and CON watching TV with subtitles. I am also doing  online quizzes and CON online classes. I'm doing  my homework EW online and  on PRE WhatsApp SP . ItPRO helps SVA me to  improve my English .
At the moment, I'm not  learning  any other subjects except English.
SVA My family are staying at home at the moment and they are making a   lot of noise NUM. It's PUN difficult  for me to concentrate   on studying. In the PRE Zoom class sometimes I don't  understand because of my ear problems.
I wish I could VT go to class  like  before but CON I know  there is  a pandemic  .Everyone is facing   some problems like me.
I'm  happy that  I'm doing  online  classes.
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Ooooh Pomi. This is so good. You have been  really clear and you have used the present continuous well. You need to watch your conjunctions a little more carefully. You could write a few more compound sentences. Well done. I sympathise with you.
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Jeevan
All around the world faces the same difficulty PRE of Covid 19. CAP/ PRE This is the time PUN we are safe staying at home so CAP I have been attending zoom classes on Mondays and Thursdays every week. This WW is very good for PRE continuing WF our studies.When I feel bored I watch English movies with my family. I always read subtitles NUM to improve my English by watching movies. PUN  I do  the homework given by teachers. I also listen VT/ WO to English CAP news these days I cannot wait for PRE when we are back to normal.

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A short but good piece Jeevan. You have expressed your feelings about this time and you have given  details of your activities. Well done. Please do your corrections.
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EFFECTIVENESS 4
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I said that  I want to work next week  but next week we have our half term holiday. My wife doesn't want me to work. She wants me to give my family some time. But I want to make a teaching video for my students. I enjoy my teaching but my wife wants to spend some time with me. I also want to spend some time with her. That's why I am planning for half term. Maybe I will only teach my Pre entry class. But for Entry 2 I will only do a video. I have to do some family work . I want to spend some time with my family. I told my wife that I only want to do one lesson.

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We are passing through PRE a very difficult time because of the pandemic. In these new and uncertain times, I am adjusting to find new ways of learning and studying. As face to face classes have been stopped, we have pivoted our learning to an online setting. We CAP are using Zoom to have video classes. My tutor also sets us assignments to do at home. I try to complete these on the same day I get them but this is not always possible, as I have other responsibilities. Apart from my English study I am also learning new recipes and things to cook for iftar. Iftar is the opening of the fasts which Muslims CAP keep during Ramadan. As it is Ramadan  CAP I am actively reading the Quran, the Muslim holy book. I am also learning new things about Islam from watching videos and reading Islamic books.

As it is Ramadan CAP now I sometimes find it difficult to complete the assignments, as I have less energy so I sometimes can't concentrate as WW normal. I stay awake until dawn to worship and pray so I find it difficult to attend all the online classes. The lack of live face to face teaching is also obstructing my learning. I wish I could go back to normal classes. I am missing the live interaction with my friends and tutor. I am also missing the other things I could do pre lockdown such as visiting friends and family.
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Ooooh this is so good Fahmida. Did you get anybody to check it for you? You have made great progress in your writing. We shall see you write this under exam conditions later.  You have very good phrasing and some excellent vocabulary. Keep this up.
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Now everything is closing schools, shops, restaurants etc..
I am staying at home with my family and we are staying in safe.
Because of the lockdown I am struggling with my daily routine for example, before I used to wake up at 8 o'clock now I wake up at 9 o'clock, I used to sleep at 10 o'clock ,PUN now I am going to sleep after midnight.
I am having difficulties in learning.
Before the lockdown it was better to go to PRE school and WW attend my lessons, but now I am doing online lessons and it's a bit confusing.PUN Sometimes I am having wi-fi WF problems NUM as well and my children are disturbing me by making noises and it's hard to focus.
Everyday I'm getting stressed and tired .
PUN All these situations are discouraging me. I wish all of this not to happen and I wish I could go outside with my family and meet my friends and relatives.
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Some of this is the same as Momotaj's. Where you receive help you must say so. It is good to cooperate with others. It will really help you a lot. But we need to know how much of the work is your own. A nice piece of writing.
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Everyone is going through a difficult time.
PRO We WO have been staying VT at home for two months, but the pandemic  is increasing.
This is the first time that I have stayed at home for a long time and it's boring.
During the lockdown I am trying to learn some new words in English and I am improving my grammar.
Now it's the month of Ramadan so I am spending my free time by reading the Qu'ran.
Before the Coronavirus CAP I used to study in the morning while my children were attending the EW school,but now it's difficult to get time for learning, because my children are at home  EW all the time and they keep disturbing me a lot while I'm studying.
Right now, I am doing online lessons in Zoom CAP with my classmates and teacher and I am doing some quizzes given by the teacher for improving my grammar.
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Good work  Nasir. You have cooperated well to produce this. How much help did you get.  It will be good to see you do this on your own in class. Keep going. Make sure you talk about your work with others. Show it to them and ask their advice.
ACCURACY 3.5
EFFECTIVENESS 4

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BEAUTY -

At the moment we are suffering Covid19 CAP. It's not a problem only in our oown country  /ART/NUM/ WO , It's happening EW /ART worldwide SP  pandemic. Lockdown changed my mind. It's changing my routine,:especially WF changed my study routine. Before Lockdown WO I was went WW to study learning EW in  class but at the moment, I am not going. We are locked WF down at home. My children aren't going out. PUN They are bored WF at home. I am trying to EW my best. I am playing with them. Lockdown can't stop my studies SP ,They PRO continue WF. Our CAP teacher NUM is very talented. PUN He doesn't stop the class. PUN He started the online Zoom classes. Now I am studying live online SP Zoom classes at home. I am playing quizzes in online. In lockdown I am learning so many different things. I didn't VT know how to study live online Zoom classes before, but now I am studying online. It's very different for me and I am learning so many different things. I am enjoying myself PRO very much. At the moment I am studying only English language. This is my aim.

Attending Online Zoom class WF /MW  is sometimes very challenging for me . PUN Because when the class is starts VT at the time  EWs my children have lunch time. Online meetings are also giving me problems as the connection is sometimes poor. Sometimes I can't hear. Those things are disturbing me lots. I am hoping WW and  praying we will MW-v go back to our normal life.
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COMMENTS
This is a super piece of work Beauty. You have explained yourself very well. You have even given us an idea of your feelings. Well done. Please do the corrections.
ACCURACY 3.5
EFFECTIVENESS 4.5

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Lockdown has disrupted our normal life. Lockdown has forced schools to temporarily shut down and students to remain at home  PUN because of the nation’s pandemic I am struggling to keep learning. It is difficult to concentrate with all of the family members stuck at home. We are not used to spending our whole time inside the house. It is challenging for us to create a cheerful WF environment for children and ourselves at this time. It is very hard to keep them motivated but I am trying my best to keep them healthy and mentally fit. While I have online classes, my siblings are running MW   around at home and making noise NUM     CON and I have found it difficult to remain focused. The news or social media is making me stressed during this time because it makes me restless. During this uncertain time I outlined a few simple ways to keep myself and my children occupied. I am spending time with my family by playing indoor games. Currently I am involving myself in their activities, which improve my learning skills also. When lockdown is VT over and we’ll be tasked with attempting to get back to normal. I am just hoping SP that I can go outside with my family and I can join my classes normally.
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COMMENTS
Great work Tangima. Please comment and say how much help you got in doing it. I am please with your effort but I need to know what if any help you got.
ACCURACY 4.5
EFFECTIVENESS 5

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TANGIMA *
With everything that is happening right now I am spending a lot more time at home than I am used to. I am trying to stay as close as possible to  my PRE normal routine WO because my children are learning at PRE home. For me it’s really important to maintain a routine - get up, make breakfast for them and prepare them for google class. I am helping them to complete their PUN work NUM in these days PUN and because of them I am also learning so many new things. Currently those things are improving my skills. In PRE the past WW I was studying in the ART morning NUM PUN when my children went to school but now I am studying late at night WO. I am doing online classes in this uncertain time. I am using zoom meetings for online classes. Our teacher sets up assignments and quizzes on PRE multiple sites. I am also trying to read newspapers or I MW listen about PRE daily updates of this situation. When I am feeling bored PUN I read EW books for my pleasure in these day EWs. I am not studying any other subjects at the moment. I am just focusing on English language nowadays but when my children are doing geography and science, I am also learning many  interesting things about those subjects with them.
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COMMENTS
A brilliant piece of writing Tangima. It is interesting, clear and mostly accurate. Practise it so that you can write just like this in class and independently. Well done.
ACCURACY 5
EFFECTIVENESS 5

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Shabana
This is very ART difficult time to PRE everyone . Lockdown change  VT my routine and over PRO lifestyle. But one thing to WW good to PRE everyone.We no SP over SP values over SP home and overSP  filmily SP. MW Lockdown time me and my children WO feeling VT bored 😐. PUN But we are always PRE trying to do MW best. I am making my children WF favourites NUM foods .We are playing games together and watching the EW tv CAP shows. In PRE this time  I am not studying much . PUN Because I am doing extra work at home now .But sometime NUM I doing VT the Quizzes and reading and listening WW/  PRE grammar and spelling mistakes.
This is the month of fasting for Muslims CON I am not sleeping all night because I am making the shari to PRE everyone .I am reading and listening PRE/ART Quran .I like reading news and watching the news on my phone and tv CAP .I am also doing online classes . I am doing my homework online at PRE my phone 📱 and MW help SVA me to improve my learning CON spelling I am  trying to get my life better.This are MWs facing PRO during the lockdown.
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COMMENTS
Well done Shabana. As usual you are being ambitious. This is great. Complete your corrections to improve your accuracy. You especially need to practise your prepositions ad your present continuous tense. Well done.
ACCURACY 2
EFFECTIVENESS 3.5

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STUDYING DURING
LOCKDOWN: 2

The government is forcing to close everything  WO schools,shops, restaurants etc...People are SVA staying at home, I am staying at home with my family and I am trying to do my best to be safe together.
Because of the lockdown our daily routine is changing PUN, for examplebefore we used to wake up at 7 o'clock and   now we wake up at 9 o'clock.PUN  We used go to sleep at 10 o'clock ,but WW/con now we are going to sleep after 11o'clock. I  am going through a difficult time with my learning.
At first I used to go toPRE school for MW attending my lessons and it is MW  easier for me, but now I am doing online lessons and it's a quite difficult for me, because sometimes I am having wi-fi  WF problem NUM and sometime my children are disturbing me by making loud noises and it's difficult to concentrate.
I am always getting stressed by hearing the news of the UK and of my country.
I am spending most of the time with my family ,PUN I play with them so they will not feel bored.
I wish all of this  WW  not happen.
Once the lockdown will be finish VT I will go outside with my family and I am going to meet my friends and relatives and I am going to join the lessons in school.
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COMMENTS
Well done Momotaj. We are all waiting for that day. In this piece you have expressed your feelings and frustration at this time. You have given lots of details about life in the lockdown.  Well done.

ACCURACY 3.5
EFFECTIVENESS 4.5

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Murshada
Lockdown changed my lifestyle quite a lot. I'm feeling like my routines aren't the same anymore: especially my routine for learning. These days, I'm learning about lots of topics, for example I am covering tenses and  CON countable and uncountable nouns. Because of my new timetable, I'm preferring  SP to study right after breakfast as I'm full of energy. I'm also studying in the afternoon because I feel really relaxed. Recently, we started to have online classes. This is a way I'm learning with my friends but I'm also self-learning at the same time. The main subjects I'm focusing on are English and grammar.

Lockdown has really been a motivation to me, I'm studying way harder! But it's also affecting my learning negatively, especially because this is the month of Ramadan. I'm having problems with studying because I need to worship and learn at the same time. Online meetings are also giving me problems as the connection is poor. These things are discouraging me quite a lot and I'm also feeling discouraged to study because I often get hungry when I'm fasting. I wish we could go back to our normal classes, I really want to meet my friends in person.
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COMMENTS
I feel the same way about classes Murshada. We hope we are back to normal soon. You have writen with a range of emotional language here. This is great. You have also written both positively and negatively. I noticed a couple of lovely informal uses of language in your text. Keep going. This actually Entry 3 language.
ACCURACY 4.5
EFFECTIVENESS 5

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MOMOTAJ

This is a very difficult  EWs time for me and for everyone. There is always a fear in my mind. This is the first time in my life I am staying VT locked up for so many days and I feel exhausted. During lockdown I am improving my English by learning some new tenses. Now it's Ramadan month so I spend the afternoon by reading the Quran. I am learning some new recipes NUM to cook for my family. Before the Covid-19 I used to study in the afternoon while my children are VT sleeping, but PRE in this time I am trying to have some time for studying, but it's hard for me, because now my children are at home EW all the time and they disturb me a lot while I'm studying. Now the learning system is WW changing, I am doing online Zoom CAP class with my classmates and teacher and I am playing quizzes and improving WF my English. Right now, I am learning English.
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COMMENTS
Well done for this piece which outlines your routines in the past and at present. You have controlled your grammar well in several compound sentences. Keep going.
ACCURACY 4
EFFECTIVENESS 4.5

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Kamrun*
During lockdown we are staying at home.We are all stuck indoors. For the first time it is happening with us. We are all passing in a difficult situation.My children are feeling bored, PUN but I am always trying to doing my best. I am making VT favorite meals SP/NUM for them and I am playing VT with them.On PRE this time I am not studying like before, because CON  I am doing too SP many  WW things at home now. But sometimes I am reading VT EW books with my children. During lockdown I am changing VT my study time,PUN now I am studying late at SP/WO night.At PRE the past WW I was going to the ART learning zone for my classes but now I am doing online classes. I am not learning different types of subjects NUM, I am only learning English at the moment. Those WW things PRO are facing in PRO during lockdown. WO

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COMMENTS
This is good quality work Kamrun. You have some verb tense errors to sort out but your work is generally clear and well expressed. You have expressed your wishes well. Keep going. Complete the corrections for full marks.
ACCURACY 4
EFFECTIVENESS 4

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Pomi --
It's a very difficult time for everyone because of the pandemic. During  lockdown  I'm  staying at home. I'm trying to keep calm and healthy. I go VT out when I need something important or other MWs necessary reasons. In lockdown,  I am trying to  keep my family safe and healthy. My children are really  WW getting  bored and for me their mental  health is  important. I am spending  more MW time with  EW  them. I am also MW playing with them. I'm  helping them with  their  homework .These days I am fasting because it is also Ramadan time. EW Ramadan  is the holy month NUM for Muslims/CAP.At PRE this time we are trying to do good deeds. I am reading ART the Quran and hadith  SP during the Ramadan EWs.
In PRE these days, I'm learning  in PRE different ways  EWs. I'm studying at night. Whenever I get time I am engaging with  something like reading a newspaper ,CON books and CON watching TV with subtitles. I am also doing  online quizzes and CON online classes. I'm doing  my homework EW online and  at PRE What's Apps SP . It PRO help SVA me to  improve my English .
At the moment, I'm not  learning  any other subjects except English.
SVA My family are staying at home at the moment and they are making a   lot of noise NUM. It's PUN difficult  for me to concentrate   on studying. On PRE Zoom class sometimes I don't  understand because of my ear problems.
I wish I could VT go to class  like  before and CON I know  there is  a pandemic  .Everyone is facing   some problems like me.
I'm  happy that  I'm doing  online  classes.
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COMMENTS
Ooooh Pomi. This is so good. You have been  really clear and you have used the present continuous well. You need to watch your conjunctions a little more carefully. You could write a few more compound sentences. Well done. I sympathise with you.
ACCURACY 4.5
EFFECTIVENESS 5

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Write two paragraphs. Describe  how you are studying during lockdown. Say how you feel about it. Remember to use lots of present continuous tenses. What are you doing during this time.

The first paragraph must be about some of these:
* different things you are learning
* different times you are studying
* different ways you are learning
* different subjects you are studying.
The second paragraph must be about
* problems  in studying
*discouragements in studying
* things you wish you could do

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Nadia Fatima
Two years ago I was come VT to London.

My first and only home is in Manor Park.
I have  the ART two bedroom house. I love this house because my family and me  WO lived here with the calm and peace. I decorate the home with new furniture, wall hangings, flowers and rugs. I have a small garden in the back area,  PUN I garden VT in spring,  PUN now seeds are growing. My kids are play VT football in the garden at PRO free time, and they are very happy and CON joyful. We are very comfortable with the this house.
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COMMENTS
You have expressed your feelings for this house well Nadia. You have also done well to list and talk about examples of why you enjoy it. Please correct the errors as soon as possible.
ACCURACY 3
EFFECTIVENESS 3.5

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Kamrun
Mine just so happens to be my bedroom. My bedroom is a place where I can go to relax,or to have some alone time. It is so WW/ART quiet and  cool place. I like my room because the design, layout,and decor were all chosen by me to suit my needs. The walls are white colour EW . The walls are unique. The floor is brown colour EW. There is a large white colour EW window, and some flowers in the vase on the window pane WW. The room discribes SP my personality.I like to clean my room. My favorite thing to do in my bedroom, when I am free MWs l like EWs  to read a story book with my children. My bedroom is one of the PRO favorite place NUM in ART house, because it is a comfortable haven for me. It is that ARTplace where I can be myself, PUN I have some privacy and some quiet time to think.I just love my room
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COMMENTS
Excellent piece. This is very clear indeed Kamrun. I would like to see this haven. It sounds so peaceful.
ACCURACY 4
EFFECTIVENESS 5

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Hi . I am Shabana. My first home was in London in Green Street (CAP).When I came to (PRE/MW-ART/CAP) the UK  in London  (EWs) my husband lived in a big house with two other families. It was a (ART) very nice house. But I lived in the house {SVA/MWs-PRE/ART} for a short time. After 9 mounts we are moved {VT-/PRE} other house.That house 3 bedrooms beautiful house.There was {SVA} bigger bedrooms and {ART} big kitchen with {ART} dining {WF}. After 4th WF year’s {PUN} I buy {VT} my on {SP} house in manor park CAP. I have {ART} four bedrooms [NUM] house [PUN] . I like my house but I don’t like kitchen [PUN] my house [EW] kitchen is very small. Our my first guest wes my close friend with [PRO] children. They congratulated us for[PRE] the new house. We never had our house my neighbourhood are so nice and friendly. I really felt happy about our house.
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COMMENTS
You have done well to talk about your homes. You have corrected the first part of yuour work well but there is a lot to do in the part near the end.
ACCURACY 3
EFFECTIVENESS 3.5

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Pomi
My first home was in London in Manor Park. When I came to London my husband  lived in a flat so I lived in a 1 bedroom flat with  him. It was  a very nice and tidy flat.I liked my flat. I liked my bedroom and my living room the most because it PRO was very big and bright  rooms. But I didn't like the kitchen. The kitchen was too small. The flat was secured WF so I felt very safe.
My first  guests was SVA my aunt's  family. They came to see me. They cooked and brought it WW to my house.I felt very happy to see them.We spent all day MW and we had a great time  that day. I didn't  have any problems with my flats NUM. I lived there about 4 years.We needed a bigger house after my 2nd  child MW-v born because it was overcrowded so we bought a 3 bedroom house in  Green Avenue. We moved there in 2008.
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COMMENTS
A really clear piece of writing Pomi. You have given a warm account of your feelings about your first home. You have also described it in detail. Well done.
ACCURACY 4
EFFECTIVENESS 5

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The place where I feel the most comfortable and joyful [WW] is in my living room. My living room is a [ART] pretty decent size. A cream fitted carpet cover [VT] the whole room. This room has everything that any other living room would have in it, but for me it has more than just something normal. My house is always crazy with my  siblings running  around making noise, my living room is the only place in the house where I can relax and at the same time I can keep eyes up on them. I especially love the windows in the living room. There are two windows facing the sunny side. It’s a place filled with good memories and a place Where I spend a lot of my time with my family.
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COMMENTS
Some nice use of energetic and informal language here. You really endearingly describe your room and your feelings about it. (look up endearing)
ACCURACY 4.5
EFFECTIVENESS 4.5

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My first home in London is in [PRO] Manor Park. Still, I am living in this place [WO].  It is a flat [EW]. The area around my house is quiet [SP], clean and beautiful. This is a private property and it [WF] has [SVA] a small park. Both of my children like this house because of the park. I have 2 bedrooms [NUM], one living room, a kitchen and a toilet. I feel comfortable in my house.
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COMMENTS
Well done. This is a short piece of text which has described your first home. You could have added some detail and "colour" or liveliness.
ACCURACY 3
EFFECTIVENESS 3

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Momotaj
There are three bedrooms in my house. Each [WW] bedroom  is [SVA] my favourite, I decorated every room [PRE] with my own choices. However, I spend most of my time in my bedroom and living room. My bedroom has a desk , a cupboard and a wooden bed. The floor is covered with brown wood and the walls are painted [EW] white [EW]. Our living room is neither big nor small. It's perfect for us.There are a lot of decorations in our living room. [PUN] Some decorations are made by me.[PUN]  There are many mirrors in our living room and in the corridor. [PUN] The interesting thing is that we can see the other room from the mirror. I love plants and flowers a lot, [PUN]  so [SP[ in every  room there are little plants.
My house is always bright and I am comfortable [SP] with it [PRO].
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COMMENT
A really expressive piece of writing Momotaj. It will be good to see you do this under test conditions. Well done. Well done but you did not finish correcting your work so your grade stays the same.
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Accuracy 4
Effectiveness 5

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I am Shabana.I was came [VT] from Pakistan . my [CAP] first home in London [MW-V] in green street [CAP] it was big house  I was lived [VT] with two other family members. But I lived the house [MWs-PRE/ART] short time [PUN] after 9 months we are moved [VT/PRE] other [WF] house [PUN] that house is [WW] 3 bedrooms beautiful house. there [CAP] was [SVA] bigger bedrooms and [ART] big kitchen. I like [ART] big kitchen with [ART] dining [WF]. After 4th [WF] year’s [PUN] I buy [VT] my on [SP] house in manor park [CAP] I have [ART] four bedrooms [NUM] house [PUN] I like my house but I don’t like my kitchen [PUN] my house [EW] kitchen is very small.Our first guest was my close friend with [PRO] children. They congratulated us for [PRE] the new house. we [CAP] never had our house my neighbours are so nice and friendly. I really felt happy about our house.
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COMMENT
Thank you for this Shabana. You have really tried hard. You have described your house and your feelings about it. I want you to correct what you can. Start with just the Articles/Capital letters/ Punctuation and Verb tenses. Then  I will upgrade your marks.
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Accuracy 2.5
Effectiveness 3

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Fahmida
There are two rooms in my house where I spend more time than [PRE] the other rooms. One of the [WW-DET] rooms is my bedroom and [EW/ART] the other [EW] is our living room. Now I'm going to describe [EW] our living room.
Our living room is on the first floor and it is quite big. The floor is covered with brown wood and the walls are painted white. In the middle of the room, there are two sofas with a white coffee table. There is also a small round table where I put a vase of fresh flowers. This makes our living room more beautiful.
[WW]Our living room has a big black TV which is on a square cabinet, some pictures on the wall and some candles.
I like to watch TV, play games and spend time with my family in our living room. It makes me feel good.
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COMMENTS
A very interesting and descriptive piece of writing  Fahmida. Well done. Now do the corrections for your first piece (and I will upgrade the marks for it)
GRADE
Accuracy 4
Effectiveness 4.5

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Kamrun
My first home in London is [PRE] menor [SP/CAP] park [CAP]. I am living [VT] in London [PRE] one year. Still I'm living here with my whole family [WO].It is a big flat and it's colour is white  it's a nice flat. When you come to my house you feel better [WW] it's so clean and quite [SP]. My friend help [VT] me to find a flat. When I came here they are came [VT] to meet me [PUN] that was wonderful. I have two bedroom [NUM] one living room and [EW/ART] kitchen, [CON] a toilet.I have a beautiful garden also [WO]. Both [WW] of my family, specially [WF] my kids love this garden. I don't have any problems here. I am very happy to living  [VT] here.I just love my house.......
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COMMENTS
Well done Kamrun you're getting us to love it too. A nice descriptive piece. It's not just  list. It shows your affection for your house. Now do the corrections if you want me to upgrade your marks.
GRADE
Accuracy 3
Effectiveness 4

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When you enter my house and walk in, you will find a beautiful living room. Its floor is made out of(WW) smooth wood and the walls are painted  [EW] white. This combination of colours gives a very simple but elegant vibe to the room. There are two chocolate brown sofas, a glass coffee table, a TV with a wide screen and a luminous lamp. I love to decorate my living room, so I  placed some indoor plants here and there. Plants are my best friends when decorating rooms. I particularly love my living room because this is where my entire family gets together. We spend time together, watch TV , play board games or simply talk and so on.
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COMMENT
Excellent work Murshada.  Very clear and very interesting. We will see you write this under test conditions later. Well done.
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accuracy 5
effectiveness 5

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My first house in London was in Manor Park. I lived there [PRE] less than one year but my in-laws had been living there for 15 years. When I first went to my house so many guests were there for [WW] welcoming [VT] us. I met with them. I was so excited. It was a 3 bedrooms [NUM] house. It wasn't enough big for 6 members [WW] but we were happy with our home. The garden was massive. I loved it. I had never faced any problem in [EW-PRE] there. Now we rented the house to a family and we moved to a big [WF-ADJ] house with 4 big bedrooms and a massive garden.
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COMMENT
A great description Fahmida now can you write another paragraph about the decoration and the furnishings in one of the rooms. Make some compound sentences to do this.
GRADE
Accuracy: 3/5
Effectiveness: 3/5

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Nasir
My  first house in London is in Manor  Park . I have been living in the same house for two years. My house has three bedrooms, a living room, a nice kitchen  two bathrooms and a beautiful garden.
Our first guest was my friend and his family. My house doesn't have any problems.
My house is full of beautiful painting WF frames WO painted by my elder WF daughter.
The living room in my house is big enough and my wife decorated it very well PUN including family photos.
I have two sofas and two carpets of chocolate colour.
I have two big televisions in my house and I love to decorate my house.
I am really happy about my house.
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COMMENT
A really clear piece of writing Nasir. You need to write another paragraph. Make it five or six sentences about one of the rooms in your house or how you found your house.] Don't forget to do the corrections

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Accuracy 4
Effectiveness 4

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My first house in London is in Manor Park [CAP].
There are [SVA]three bedrooms in my house.
My house has two bathrooms,
one nice kitchen, one living room and one [WW-ART] beautiful garden. This house is perfect for my family. Our first guest was my friend and her family. Our house doesn't have any problems and I am happy with it.
In my house there are [SVA]four cupboards [NUM] in total.
In my house there are [SVA] a lot of plants and I[CAP.] really like them, l plant some vegetable plants[NUM] in my garden [PUN] ,for example onions, chilli and cucumber.
My house's  walls [PUN] colour EW is cream and in my house there are [SVA] a lot of painting NUM frames [EW] painted by my elder daughter.
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COMMENT
This is a good start Momotaj. Please make the corrections I have marked. You also need to write another five or six sentences. Write about one of the rooms in your house. Describe it in an interesting way.
GRADE
Accuracy 3.5
Effectiveness 4.5

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My first home in London was in Manor Park. I have been living in the same house for almost three years. I rented my house from a well known local agency. My family and I [PRO] live in  a three-storey terraced house.[PUN] It is very large and spacious, perfect for our family. My house has four bedrooms, a kitchen, a living room and a tiny garden. The first thing we did was cleaning and organizing the house the way we wanted it.

Our first guest was my close friend and her family.[PUN] They congratulated us for the amazing house. We never had a problem with our [WW-ART] house but the neighbours were noisy. Luckily it was quickly solved[WW]. I really felt happy about our home .

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COMMENT
A really energetic piece of writing which expressed your feelings well. Can you write another paragraph about just one of the rooms?
GRADE
Accuracy: 5
Effectiveness:5

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My first home in London was in[PRE] Manor park [SP/CAP] .lt was ART one bed room house. I found house by an[ART] agent. The house is not too big. There was [MWs] a bedroom, one kitchen, and one bathroom, and[CONJ/ART] a[WW] garden. In[PRE] that time l didn't like the house[PUN] because the house was very dirty. We live  two peoples WF I and my husband [EW/WO]. I and my husband [PRO/WO] together cleaned the house. My first guests was [SVA] my sister's[PUN] family. They came my house. I cooked lots of things. My kitchen wasn't too [WW/ADJ] big but we managed[VT]. That day I [WW-ADJ] enjoyed very much[MW-PRO]. Now I like my house.
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COMMENT
This is a good start Beauty. You have described your house in an interesting way. Now finish the corrections.

GRADE
Accuracy: 3/5
Effectiveness: 3/5

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When  I came  to the  uk [CAP]  I did  not  need  to  find  a  house  because  my sister in law  lived in [ART] same house [EWs]. It was very  different  from  other houses [PUN] it was big, [PRE] 4 bedrooms, and [PRO] had a big drive way [SP]. The first thing I did in my new house was eat food. my [CAP] first guest was my sister in law. the [CAP] house had four bedrooms. I didn't have any problems with my house, and I was happy with the house [EW-PRO]
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COMMENT
An enjoyable piece of writing. It is clearly put and mostly accurate. Can you write another short paragraph about one of the rooms in the house. Use compound sentences and adjectives to make your description interesting.
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Accuracy: 3
Effectiveness:3

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I find [VT] my new home through the map. this [PRO] is  [PRE/ART] 7th floor, and I live in 4th floor. first [CAP]I thing [SP] it's not big but new [SP] I thing [SP] it's enough for me and my family. [PRE/ART] first day, my first guest is [VT]my sister in law. we brought so menu [NOT CLEAR] food for me.
Still I am living there with my family [WO]. this [CAP] is [ART] 2 bedrooms [NUM] flat.sometimes [CAP] lift [MW-V] not working. but [EW] a beautiful sky can be seen cook [WW-PRE] the porch and free air is available. we're [CAP] are [EW] so happy with my home.
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COMMENT
It's very good to see this start Afruja. You need to add some more detail. Write another five or six sentences to describe some of rooms in your flat. Don't forget to do the corrections too.
GRADE
Accuracy: 2.5
Effectiveness:2,5

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When I came from India,  my [MW-ADJ] home was in Manor  Park.I settled with my new family.It took more time for me to settle into  my  home because everything was so different  from my home in India. My first guest was my sister in-law. I have three nice bedrooms size  [WF/WO] big terraced [MWs CONJ/ART]. I have not [WF] any [EWs] problems with my house.I have big nice garden which is decorated with different types of flowers. I am happy with my home because [PRO/V] a welcoming home.I still live in [MWS].

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COMMENT
Well done Jeevan.  It sounds like a really nice time in your life. Can you write another five or six sentences about one of the rooms and write about it.

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Accuracy: 3/5
Effectiveness: 3/5

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My first home in London is [PRE] Manor Park. Still I am living there [WO].  It is a flat house [EW]. The area around my house is quite [SP], clean and beautiful. This is a private property and  it’s [WF] have [SVA] a small park. Both of my children like this house because of the park. I have 2 bedroom [NUM], one living room, a kitchen and a toilet. I feel comfortable in my house.

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COMMENT
You have described your house well Tangima. Can you write one more paragraph and tell us about one of the rooms in your house (what is it like and what happens there?)

GRADE
Accuracy: 3/5
Effectiveness: 3/5

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Write two paragraphs about your first home in London. Describe it using adjectives, compound sentences and different tenses.
Here are some questions to help you on your way.
1. How did you find your new home?
2. How was it different to other homes?
3. What was the first thing you did in your new home?
4. Who was your first guest?
5. How many bedrooms did you have?
6. Did you have any problems with your home?
7. Were you happy with your home?
These are just a few questions. You don't have to use any of them. They are just to help you.

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My first home in London