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José Javier Pérez
18.30 L

Andrea, I absolutely agree with you. Almost everyone (when they are with people) uses his  their mobile in an inappropriate way at some time. But teenagers ignore everyone when they are texting. My brother says that the worst punishment for his teenage daughter it’ is not staying at home  grounding her or not receive money giving her her allowance. It’s to remove her phone! to take her phone off her!
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Andrea, I think you've nailed it!
I totally agree with you on modern technology addicts. Most of teenagers are antisocial nowadays and that's , which is sad but true.
Young people depend so  too much on technology, and that's not a bad thing at all, because it can help us in our studies for example, but it is negative when obsession is all it is about.
A similar problem happened to me a week ago at a family dinner, with my cousin. She is 14 years old, and my  some of my family members/ relatives, like my brother and my father, where trying to have a conversation with her, but she was chatting with her friends and playing videogames. It was like talking to a wall!
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Alberto Jiménez

Dear Andrea,
I totally agree with you on the way young people use modern technology. They are more and more antisocial because they use their mobile a lot and they don´t communicate face to face with other people. It´s a fact that nowadays young people depend a lot on mobiles because they usually use they  them in every situation, and I´m convinced that some young people are addictive  addicted to their smartphones, so I think that adults need to help young people them / teenagers to avoid that those modern technologies getting to take over their lives. √
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Andrea, I think you´ve hit the nail on the head. New technology makes teenagers antisocial. Nowadays, young people are addicted to new technologies, they even feel anxious and irritated when they can´t use it. It´s crazy the time they waste in front of the screen! √
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I must agree with you on modern technology (referring to mobiles) addicts, who don't know how much antisocial life can be (I don't understand, sorry. Do you mean I agree with you on the fact that there are mobile phone addicts who behave in an antisocial way?). It's true, as everybody knows, that without technology we are helpless. But when people are ignoring ignore you because they're talking with someone else, who, HELLO!,  isn't there as you are, it gets me on my nerves!! We should be aware of taking making a responsible screen-time use.
Time to be us who take over modern technologies. √
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BELY 16L
Andrea, I partly agree with you. I think that your niece should turn off her mobile phone in family meetings but I mean, teenagers were born in the digital age and new technologies are part of their lives (a bit obvious) so that they need to use them more time than the adults. Finally,I don't think modern techology is taking over our lives. √
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Dear Andrea, I couldn´t agree more with you ,modern technology is something fantastic, useful, essential in the world we are living in (That's not Andrea's opinion). I think nowadays I couldn´t live without technology it, but on the other hand, young people, in my opinion are too dependent of  on their phones; their lives are on their mobiles,they breathe internet? ,but this is something usual between  for them. They are not antisocial; it´s only the way they act behave. √
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18:30L
Andrea, that's exactly what I think. I can see an overuse of technology by youngsters; they aren't able to do anything without their mobile phones and sometimes, they aren't able to socialize face to face. I recognize that modern technology is an incredible invention. However, from my point of view, educating on over its use would be is fundamental. √
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Luis 16L
Andrea, everyone (is entitled to your opinion?) is entitled to have their own opinion, but modern technology isn’t the problem.
You have to understand your niece isn’t interested in your conversations. She does the same that  as we did when we were teenagers, but now there are mobile phones and Social Media.
I think technology helps teens feel more connected to their friends, and that is the opposite to being antisocial. √
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Andrea, that´s partly true. I sometimes feel that modern technology is taking over our lives. Unfortunately, we waste a lot of time with  on technology and it is very common seeing  to see a group of people using their phones instead of talking. On the other hand, I can see Techie1's point too. We would be lost without technology it, but we need to reduce its use, though. √
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Andrea, I totally agree with you on that. I think that being with using technology when you’re with people is a lack of respect. But I also think that your niece was with the phone doing it because she was bored, and she didn’t want to be there. So, don’t worry, next day you could take leave phones off from out of the room. √
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That's exactly what I think. Modern technology may  cause make us to miss precious time with our family and friends. I can see that in my two sons, who are teenagers too and are sometimes becoming show a bit antisocial behaviour. I think we should be careful about the use of technology, that which should not distract us from doing other things we like. √
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Dear Andrea, I agree with you on young people are  being additicted to technology. However, don't blame on them. It's adults' fault, at least part of it. From their earliest age chidren are given some tech devices for so that they don't distort  disturb adults. Eventually children are getting used to being in their own bubble, so  I don't find it strange that they are tech addicts. √
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Andrea, I wouldn’t say that at all. On the one hand, I think that your niece has crossed the line. She should  have taken part in the conversation instead of using her phone. On the other hand, I don’t agree with you on the fact that she’s antisocial because sometimes we (teenagers) use our phones because we’re bored or not interested in grown-ups’ conversations, but it that doesn’t mean that we’re antisocial. √
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Andrea, I know what you mean (understand you).We are living a technological revolution and you and me are digital immigrants.The world we used to live in is getting into a diigital age.I agree with you about on the sometimes immoderate use the young do on of their mobiles and computers but on the other hand I can also see their point of view because these gadgets, correctly used, might (become really useful) come in handy in their lives. Let's give them a chance!  √

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I partly agree with you, Andrea. You're right that modern technology is taking over our lives, especially  the mobile phone. We don't know how to live without it the phone! On the other hand, you shouldn't worry about your niece, because she isn't antisocial. She's only a digital native and a teenager. Maybe, she was just bored by  with the conversation of the olders the grown-ups' conversation.
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You have the right to be annoyed about your niece's attitude, but I think you're blaming technology for the behaviour of a teenager. Teenagers are annoying the most of the time!
For me, I would say new technologies have changed the way how we communicate with each other in the same way that  as the phone or the radio changed it some time ago. It's progress, my friend.  √
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Monday and Wednesday group from 16:00 to 18:10

Andrea , why do you shouldn't wonder that your niece is addicted to her mobile. Don't you know how she was raised ? (I guess you mean she knows, I would eliminate the following paragraph about the TV or change it into a statement instead of a question)
Did her mother put her in front of the TV instead of spending time playing with her? Next day she's coming over for dinner you should suggest that the whole family leaves their mobiles in the hall, so that no one can make use of them.√
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Monday and Wednesday group from 18:30 to 20:40 PM
Andrea, I totally agree with you on technology making teenagers antisocial. It’s a bad manners when someone is texting all the time and ingnoring the people you’re they are with. Most young people are addicted to their mobile phones and obsessed with new technologies. I really think modern technology is taking over our lives. √
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I know I’m going to come across as out of touch and a bit of a dinosaur, but I really think the way most young people use modern technology so much is almost antisocial. Let me give you an example. Last week my niece came over for dinner, she’s seventeen and addicted to her mobile phone. The whole way through dinner she was on her phone, sending messages, tweeting and chatting online with friends. It was crazy! We were all there having a conversation, but she was in her own little bubble – it was quite annoying, really. When I asked her about it her reply was “Well, I need to stay in touch with my friends”. But, I’m really not convinced that this kind of use of technology really does this. After all, there were lots of us there together and she wasn’t in touch with us at all! What do you think? Is modern technology taking over our lives?