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9/08 Entrance ticket: What is your voice? 

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9/08 Entrance ticket: What is your voice? 

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My voice isn't always verbal. Body language can often tell someone what someone means and feels. It involves the ability of being heard without the need to speak. My voice is my outlet of expressing my thoughts and feelings.

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09/08 What I think Jennifer Sinor is saying 

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09/08 What I think Jennifer Sinor is saying 

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I think she's expressing how vital it becomes to truly put into perspective everything needed to identify a voice. When Bryan Doyle wrote "Leap" he used all of his possible resources to truly understand what happened. Your voice will need constant edits and drafts because your first thoughts aren't always fully there. When thinking about your voice, it's not tone and vocabulary. It's about how deep you're willing to go to reach your true voice.

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09/08 Flash Nonfiction excercise -- writing a letter to someone we haven't seen in a long time and explaining ourselves

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09/08 Flash Nonfiction excercise -- writing a letter to someone we haven't seen in a long time and explaining ourselves

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Dear old friend,

How are you? I hope youre doing well in Florida, the sunny state. What have you been up to? Are you still knitting? I still have the little yellow blanket you made me. Some many things have changed since we've last spoken. Let me catch you up.

I'm in college now and it's going well. So far my classes are good and I've been able to keep up with my work. I also have a job now. I have an I.T job in school and I love it! Plus, I think it'll look good on my resume since I'm majoring in computer science. So far I've been alright with the experience.

I also crochet now! I'd love to make you a yellow blanket for you; I think you'd love it. It definitely keeps me occupied. I would love to go visit you or for you go come here. I feel like it's been ages since we last saw each other.

My dad and I are always thinking about you!

With love,
Alexa

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09/08 Exit Ticket: Describe your voice and what are your takeways

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09/08 Exit Ticket: Describe your voice and what are your takeways

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My voice as an ever involving form of myself. Thoughts and values are often overlooked when thinking about your voice. However, this doesn't mean it's a different voice. It's the same. My voice is the firmness and confidence within myself. We all have different opinions about what our voices mean. However, I think we all came to the agreement that it is more than what we say. It's how we act, react, and revise our opinions the more we learn.

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09/13 Entrance Ticket: What are some "harsh" and "tender" voices in your head? 

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09/13 Entrance Ticket: What are some "harsh" and "tender" voices in your head? 

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My inner self critic lacks compassion with anything I do. It never seems to be good enough for myself. Even when I've reached my goal, that "harsh" voice tells me I should've set my standards higher. In the contrary to my empathic voice, who shows understanding to others. That voice comforts them with positive affirmations. I'm able to give them the benefit of the doubt because I'm self aware of the struggles they could possible be going through. Perhaps even the same as mine. I think that would be me if I wasn't so harsh on myself.

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I love Emperor's New Groove

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09/13 Exit Ticket: What was your reaction to the essay "Dumber Than" AND what are your takeaways from today. 

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09/13 Exit Ticket: What was your reaction to the essay "Dumber Than" AND what are your takeaways from today. 

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I was very surprised with such a blunt ending. I see what he means with flash writing; you aren't able to get deep into a characters thoughts. You have to go back and really look into his style of framing sentences to understand it to the full extent. The irony of it was completely brilliant. I love how he transitions back into the farm people's narrative and they are completely unfazed by the fact he committed murder. They don't sense any regret or guilt. "They always knew". You personally then have to reflect how could they be so blind to their own faults.

My takeaways for today are that one's voice is a compilations of many inner thoughts and voices. We get to see how we almost think the same way. Then one reading each others letters, we get to experience each other's raw emotions. We feel a deeper connection to the writing itself.

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ummm that ending took a QUICK hard turn. He just lightly grazed over the fact that they're responsible of constant bullying and harassment of a man who killed multiple women across state boarders.

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09/15 Entrance Ticket: Explain what you understand to be the voiced of innocence and experience.

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09/15 Entrance Ticket: Explain what you understand to be the voiced of innocence and experience.

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From my understanding, the voiced of the innocence is simply retelling the encounter. It doesn't involve the depth of emotions. It could be compared to when a child is trying to explain what happened to an adult.  "The Voice of Innocence relates the facts of the story, the surface subject or action" (p.71). Children often see everything as black and white and can't comprehend how actions have repercussions and reasoning. In the contrary to the voiced of the experienced. They're able to go back to the actions and understand their feelings and how they feel about to currently. It provides a sense of justice to the character. Silverman states "the Voice of Experience, meanwhile, conjures these items into the magic I actually felt at the time, but was too inchoate to express" (p.72). It's able to invite the reader to experience the same things she was once feeling. The reader is able to involve themselves into the reading with the figurative language used.

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I really love the sentence "I lag behind my family as we walk from the tin-hangar airport, cross the tarmac, and climb into the sweltering cabin of the Caribair plane" (p.73). I feel like it uses both the voiced of the innocence and experienced in the same sentence. Although she's describing how she lagged behind her family she uses the description of "tin-hangar" in attempt to allow us to envision her experience.

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09/15 Flash Notification Excercise -- Using the Voice of Innocence, describe one specific image of your childhood hometown. Then using the Voice of Experience, continue to describe it in such a way that it metaphorically conveys how you feel about it, reflecting back, incorporating knowledge and language you lacked in the past.

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09/15 Flash Notification Excercise -- Using the Voice of Innocence, describe one specific image of your childhood hometown. Then using the Voice of Experience, continue to describe it in such a way that it metaphorically conveys how you feel about it, reflecting back, incorporating knowledge and language you lacked in the past.

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The year was 2012, I was finally in fourth grade. This was it; it was finally the year I’ll be able to move up to 5th grade and change schools. I was elected class president and we’re even going to get a brand-new playground. Everything was sailing smoothly until we received news that a hurricane was coming our way. My parents were panicking, trying to gather everything we could from our house near the water and move to my cousin's house across town. I was told to grab my prize possessions; I picked up my blanket of course. And that was it, the last time I saw my house standing.

The sense of urgency smelt in the air; you could slice the tension between my parents' gaze, meeting mine telling me that everything would be okay. A little water never hurts anyone. Besides, we have doors, how will the water even get in anyways?

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09/15 Exit Ticket: What are your takeaways from today? 

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09/15 Exit Ticket: What are your takeaways from today? 

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Today were were able to compare how we first viewed our voice to how we now perceive it. We are now able to understand the different voices we use and how we use them. Past events are now re-visited with an experienced voice to give depth to the situation. We learned that there is a dynamic balanced between the voice of the innocent and experience and how we interchange them to connect to the reader.

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<< It’s kinda like we're all revising our thoughts out loud with each other 

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<< It’s kinda like we're all revising our thoughts out loud with each other 

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09/15 Connection between "Leap", "Dumber Than", and  "Archipelago". 

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09/15 Connection between "Leap", "Dumber Than", and  "Archipelago". 

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09/22 Entrance Ticket: What was your experience in making your padlet? What did you discover about yourself? What was important that you shared about yourself? How did you do that? 

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09/22 Entrance Ticket: What was your experience in making your padlet? What did you discover about yourself? What was important that you shared about yourself? How did you do that? 

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I really enjoyed our liberty in making our own padlet. I was able to see my own growth of thinking just with a few days in class. I put in a touch of my own private connections and humor. It becomes more than just reading and writing. I was able to reflect. I then took a look at my classmates padlet and I loved getting inspiration to add something to mine or learn more about them.

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I love how we both have different interpretations of the assignment but we came to the same conclusion. Tashauni provided me with more of her personal thoughts and feelings. Which I like because I feel like that's something I lack in my own writing. We both agreed that Arnold was able to reflect on her journey in this job. " One of the reasons I can’t stop going to the hospital: the kids don’t avert their eyes when they see each other." (p.10) Arnold realized that these children only see themselves as children. Although we could often feel pity for them, children are children above all else. They aren't their cancer.

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09/22 Exit Ticket: What are your takeaways from today? 

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09/22 Exit Ticket: What are your takeaways from today? 

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I loved seeing everyone's padlet and having them describe it. It becomes more personal when they talk about it. I feel like as a class we were able to connect as a whole more. As for "You Owe Me", I believe that Arnold was able to interchange her voice from the experienced and innocent so we could have a deeper understanding as to why she stays in this job. Most importantly, she used her voice just as Bryan Doyle did in "Leap". She used the children's experience to describe their lives.

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09/27 Entrance Ticket: What does revision mean to you? 

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09/27 Entrance Ticket: What does revision mean to you? 

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1. Revamp- to clarify
2. Structure, organization
3. Want to advance your argument
4. Clear claim- thesis statement 7 topic sentences
5. New set of eyes, why? The reader will ask questions for clarify, organization and other ideas.
6. have text evidence that really supports tour insight.
7. Incorporate feedback
8. Take notes

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Top:
Higher ordered thinking
Ideas, insights reveal
Understand concept
Thesis statement
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Structure- sentence structure gives a lyrical voice and ensures clarity.
organization
Topic sentence
Bottom:
Grammar, spelling

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09/27 Essay #1 with Highlighted Protocol 

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09/27 Essay #1 with Highlighted Protocol 

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09/27 What did we hear when reading our own essays aloud? 

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09/27 What did we hear when reading our own essays aloud? 

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1. Similar content (word choice repetition)
2. Reading aloud helps you hear what you might be missing

You could practice this by yourself by reading it in front of a mirror and or recording yourself and playing it back.

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<< Me realizing I have to read MY OWN essay aloud on a Monday @8am

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<< Me realizing I have to read MY OWN essay aloud on a Monday @8am

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Nonetheless, all writers manipulate their language to convey their principle objective. Writers will present different chambers of their voice depending on whom their target audience is.

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When you revise your writing you're able to analyze how welly developed your ideas are presented and structured. Once we heard it out loud we were able to see potential word repetition, left out points, or anything that isn't clear.

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09/29 Entrance Ticket: What do you think Amy Tan means when she writes in her essay, Mother Tongue, "recently I have been made keenly aware of the different English's I do use." Share your ideas. How did her mother's presence in the audience help Tan develop this awareness? 

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09/29 Entrance Ticket: What do you think Amy Tan means when she writes in her essay, Mother Tongue, "recently I have been made keenly aware of the different English's I do use." Share your ideas. How did her mother's presence in the audience help Tan develop this awareness? 

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Amy Tan is able to switch from professional, "proper" English to a "simple" English in which people whom are close to her could understand. When speaking to relatives, who also speak a different language, they are able to interchange between the two without any miscommunication. The presence of her mother in the audience brings her to a new awareness because she never realized that her mother has never heard her use sophisticated language like that before. She's accustomed to speaking in an easier dialogue.

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09/29 What was the essay that most of you chose to write about? How has the writing changed? 

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09/29 What was the essay that most of you chose to write about? How has the writing changed? 

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I noticed that most of us choose to write about Amy Tan's essay, "Mother Tongue". I believe it's because most of us could personally connect with Tan in some shape for form. Tan gave us a lot of insight that we could expand upon connecting it to ourselves. Tashauni and I have become more comfortable with each other. We ask each other questions, even outside the letters. Sometimes we email about our prompt for the upcoming letter. We've both been able to incorporate more text evidence while still connecting it to ourselves and personalizing our experiences.

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<< Me and Tashauni emailing each other like

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<< Me and Tashauni emailing each other like

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1. We were able to distinguish the differences between having a set culture and an integrated culture.
2. When citing evidence in our letters, it makes us comprehend and relate to the writer and our letter partner more.
3. We were able to connect our past essay readings to this one.

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10/04 Entrance Ticket: Reflect on your experiences writing argumentative essays. What challenges have you had. You an refer to any number of ideas Graff discusses. 

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10/04 Entrance Ticket: Reflect on your experiences writing argumentative essays. What challenges have you had. You an refer to any number of ideas Graff discusses. 

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When writing an argumentative essay I've always had the difficulties of reminding the reader of my claim (3). Since I've previously stated my claim I feel as if constantly reminding the reader of it becomes redundant. Although my points and evidence do tie into my claim, as a writer, since I know my own claim, I could forget that the reader may get lost. The reader could forget my claim or become overwhelmed with the amount of evidence I use. I feel like a linking sentence becomes necessary for me because it reminds me to bring back my point. The linking sentence lets me tie in how relevent my evidence is.

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"What Ken and so many others do is protect themselves from such suffocating madness by taking on with a vengeance the identity implied in the vocational track. Reject the confusion and frustration by openly defining yourself as the Common Joe. Champion the average."  (evidence)

When teachers have a prior expectation of you and don't expect you to do well, it'll cement a thought of "I'm not good enough" in the students head. They don't want to admit defeat in that they need help because that's what the teacher expects. So they'd rather give up than give that teacher the satisfaction of being right.  (analysis)

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Mike Rose presented how when people with higher power have an set low expectation for someone; it could determine how they'll act. I think Rose points out a strong point of self-advocacy. It becomes vital to set your own standards. Teachers shouldn't dictate so many impressionable students in this way.
When writing an essay, it's import to highlight  your claim and have it adapted throughout your essay.

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I think this is where revise becomes key. When writing your first draft you often just write all your ideas all at once. When you come back and think about all these factors, that is where you begin to perfect your style. The placement of specific words will determine your tone. Although you may think an idea is profound, it may not be precise to your task. Exploring all these options could help the reader grasp your understanding of the texts.

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10/06 "Two Ways to Belong in America" Quote Analysis 

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10/06 "Two Ways to Belong in America" Quote Analysis 

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This is a tale of two sisters from Calcutta, Mira and Bharati, who have lived in the United States for some 35 years, but who find themselves on different sides in the current debate over the status of immigrants. "I am an American citizen and she is not. I am moved that thousands of long-term residence are finally taking the oath of citizenship. She is not" (Mukherjee).

She introduces the topic and gives us a gist of what will occur. I do believe that she provides us with a thesis statement. She provides us with her opinion and her stance on topic. Since her thesis statement is adaptable, she's able to incorporate it differently throughout her essay.

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10/06: "Two Ways to Belong in America"- Emily Y & Alexa Discussion Post 

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10/06: "Two Ways to Belong in America"- Emily Y & Alexa Discussion Post 

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Does the conclusion align with the introduction? If so, how?
How would you describe the author's voice? How does she create that voice, the voice of the narrator?
How is this essay structured? How does it express what the author suggested from the first paragraph?
Is there a counterargument?

Both Alexa and I agree to believe that Mira and Bharati still have contradicting perspectives towards their citizenship status in America. Within the introduction, Bharati mentions how she is a citizen and Mira is not. As they both find themselves on opposing ends, Bharati still feels superior compared to her sister. As Bharati concludes her essay, she displays more emotion with empathy towards her sister. Mira sticks to like her label as an "expatriate" Indian rather than being called an American immigrant. Being an expatriate Indian gives Mira a sense of pride while Bharati's citizenship in America gives her a sense of superiority. Bharati states that they both chose to live in America. Bharati chooses to make it her home. Mari decided to continue being a foreigner. Both the introduction and conclusion mirror each other as the introduction came in with a voice of innocence and the conclusion came out in the voice of experience.

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1) As a writer you must be able to go back to your raw writing and determine what structure you'd like to present.
2) Short sentences provides the reader with a clear strong statement.
3) You must write with purpose to engage with the reader. You have to put into perspective of how you must evolve as a writer. My next step would be to organize my writing in a way that demonstrates clear and precise ideas.

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10/08 Essay #1 Revision with Highlighted Protocol

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10/08 Essay #1 Revision with Highlighted Protocol

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My main topics for my reflection piece is formatting a strong structure and organization for my writing. Within that I'll be able to develop my voice through the piece. I feel as if once I set a foundation for my points to stand on, I'll be able to incorporate my style and tone better. My next step would be setting up an outline for myself so I could remind myself of said points and then structuring it into my writing. I was able to realize how important it is to have a clear organization for my reader to follow so they could fully understand my thoughts. I still hope to find a balance between organization and raw ideas.

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10/13 Discussion Post: Many of you have suggested that you have revised your thesis statement. How did you do that?

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10/13 Discussion Post: Many of you have suggested that you have revised your thesis statement. How did you do that?

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I went to the Writing Center and there we did a reserve outline. We highlighted the main points of my paragraphs and then found a way to install it into my thesis. I found that my thesis wasn't unison.

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When revising an essay, it's crucial to take feedback and analyze where you could improve the clarity of your thesis, organization, and word choice. Once you organize better, the reader is able to interpret the writing better. In "Rice" the author was able to describe how this rice ties into her fathers resilience. We were able to imagine her point of view.

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10/18 Entrance Ticket: Draft a descriptive narrative of the best breakfast you ever ate was. 

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10/18 Entrance Ticket: Draft a descriptive narrative of the best breakfast you ever ate was. 

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The best breakfast I've ever had were my grandmother's homemade tamales. Waking up to the scent of fresh corn inside masa, wrapped snug between a palm leaf, was the dream. As I unwrap the soft warm leaf, the steam of the tamale hugs my face. It falls ever so delicately onto my plate. As I take my first bite, I release all the anticipation of a Salvadorian treat.

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I inhale the friendly ghost of the tamale. It expands through my body, until the ghost shakes me up straight. We float together following the nostalgic aroma of my grandmother's homemade tamales. The scent of fresh picked corn inside masa, lingers and tingles my brain. The tamale was still at slumber, wrapped in a soft warm leaf.  As I unwrap the soft warm leaf, the steam of the tamale hugs my face. It falls ever so delicately onto my plate. As I take my first bite, I release all the anticipation of a Salvadorian treat.

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10/18 Essay #2 with Highlighted Protocol: 

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I was able to present my thesis better. However, it still needs work. I'm going to have to organize it better and introduce the evidence I'm going to present within the introduction. I was able to present my voice clearer, I wasn't just retelling the essays.

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10/20 Entrance Ticket: Initial reactions to Hot Chicken. Identify at least one food description that impressed you, stopped you, or made you think (or feel your hunger).

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10/20 Entrance Ticket: Initial reactions to Hot Chicken. Identify at least one food description that impressed you, stopped you, or made you think (or feel your hunger).

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Danny Chau's description of his food from visit to a traditional Sichuanese restaurant allowed me to envision what he'd be eating. "We ordered a traditional hot pot full of meats and vegetables covered in a bubbling broth, loaded with dried whole chili pods and anesthetic Sichuan peppercorns, and topped off with what looked like a tanker explosion of crimson chili oil" (Chau 79). I connected "bubbling broth" to witches hovering over a pot of their evil potion, looking at it with bright cunning eyes. And that's exactly what he wants. He wants something that will cause him pain and pleasure at the same time. This meal melted the lines between pleasure and pain. Perhaps this is why it was one of the best meals he had ever had.

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What are your takeaways from today? What did you think about? What will you take in your lives forward? What about writing did you takeaway?

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What are your takeaways from today? What did you think about? What will you take in your lives forward? What about writing did you takeaway?

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When reading any piece, you must pay attention to minute words included because it'll allow you to connect deeper with the writing. I loved analyzing this together as a class because we were able to jump off of each others ideas and continue the deeper understanding. In my life forward, when reading something like this, I'll take into consideration how committed to the subject the writer is. The amount of passion Chau demonstrates shows that he actually did his research and did all he could and will continue to do so after this article. In order to truly understand the subject, you have to be 110% committed first.

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10/25 Entrance Ticket: What is meant by "raw emotion"?

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10/25 Entrance Ticket: What is meant by "raw emotion"?

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Raw emotion stands on your initial, yet developed thoughts. These feelings rely on your own feelings without developing logic reasoning. It only involves yourself. In Lee Martin’s “Dumber Than” he describes his encounter with a local boy who was constantly bullied, later becoming a murder, because he was “dumb”. Lee Martin becomes fed up with his actions and physically hurts him. His raw emotions project through his statement of “How was I to know, when I grabbed him by his arm, that one day when he was a grown man, he'd take a golf-club—a five iron— and beat his wife until she was dead? " (Lee 69). He didn’t put into consideration about all the victims included. He victimized himself by only caring about his own guilt. He reasoned with himself that because he didn’t know he would become a murder, he attacked him. It is a voice who establishes the story without any outside influential factors.

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Anzaldúa takes pride in her language, “So if you really want to hurt me, talk badly about my language. Ethnic identity is twin skin to linguistic identity – I am my language” (42). When you are insulting a person's language, you are insulting their being. Your voice is compiled by the interpretation of your language; it cannot be corrected or learned. Your identity is defined by you.

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I think we need to develop a more concise understanding of how to coordinate evidence and analysis. I have to recognize that I don't have a develop a clear thesis statement and need to include more clarity. I love having Tashuani as my partner, but I like having Caroline as my new partner because we're able to develop new ideas. We bounce back on each others interpretation of the reading.