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LINK: https://docs.google.com/document/d/13zvj76T9idrNKsEs0z11_NJCgIt9tAnpIqJIkjJp1YQ/edit?tab=t.poglnpd56ad3

I would like feedback on my ending. I only wrote two sentences and I think it doesn't make sense. Can you ask me questions to give me ideas?

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Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1WMtiiAqPI-0v8wu0ICCQyfR7NXaMuW6x8vCfgQdzDkY/edit?pli=1&tab=t.tk3f7dwpej5y

I would like feedback on how discriptive the story is.

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when I changed my opinion on Minecraft by zane

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when I changed my opinion on Minecraft by zane

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watch video and read my story and tell me whats wrong pls. I wrote about my time I changed my opinion on Minecraft.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ItwXDSgyRmaZ9PL0kVthZOc3aGHlXmnJ8PkOZTMUjec/edit?tab=t.tk3f7dwpej5y

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Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1jxWvJsoHju-FhsCJJKhyMXrc_sVjgBU9Lv_BKXTl3jw/edit?tab=t.0

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ockcdWvXPTUaaDCaEAeTC6RnL352De8iT_hN1JgsWwA/edit?tab=t.tk3f7dwpej5y

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Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tYYEiso7ppfLMlLfDzIaqYYIGqwprttTiWf1vcgRA1g/edit?usp=sharing

I would like some feedback on my Turning Point. I feel like it's pretty good so far, but there is still room for improvement.

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1FDMqoDNBAbpC4W9lv8DAyJeSmbP_EAwqVSEwrd0kiFM/edit?usp=sharing. Do you think I should make this more detailed and/or longer?

Make sure to go to slide 2

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Hey guyssss! Would really love it if u comment on my draft:))))) 6 7

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1OoYvMPs9t82PsAdNC6w_ril_yi2saOSxMfw5KTaHWgk/edit?usp=sharing

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Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1OgPnTkr3tz9CNC0lgRjvkh25OMRuM8CnCz0lsIUxZm8/edit?tab=t.tk3f7dwpej5y#heading=h.mwxsdtewj0rt

I would appreciate feedback on my title and hook, because I'm not very sure what I'm doing for those.

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"Going to voice/choir"- Penelope Johnnides 

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"Going to voice/choir"- Penelope Johnnides 

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I would like feedback on how I can make my story longer, and more interesting.

penelope johnnides - Turning Point Narrative - Google Docs

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My main part I need tips on is my conclusion/reflection part, but I'd appreciate tips on any part of my story. 

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1UtRauWrFN4KrIBKc_Skn8tX_7DT8-JygZRrIZiDTw9o/edit?usp=sharing

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LINK: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Pffbazyw2oxOdM5luSV0WzoX6dUGZPEZcpgnsCYv33I/edit?usp=sharing

Can you guys please give me feeback on how I can add more details to my story and how i can make it more interesting.

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I would like feedback if I should put more dialogue and add more details https://docs.google.com/document/d/18AnrXvLwXgdTUEfxW53QCxBqaO6cDd6iGZsdpiiqBg0/edit?tab=t.tk3f7dwpej5y

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I need help with my turning point, and my personal narrative writing is about I also want some details for it

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/16LcKB3Q5wumaNurb0AOCilc8vvFprlqKEm3pdzDsH5A/edit?tab=t.0

I need help with revising my reflection and turning point, adding more details, and making it more engaging.

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link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1b5OHgQ64HS6cbAEiCF2XJgsCZZYwkypaEBBytHDespA/edit?tab=t.0

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Life lesson that will stick with me, experience in 4th grade

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Life lesson that will stick with me, experience in 4th grade

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/10G12-B5X2qdQQdhkHr5CDtuCt0Sr5fWfhi6Z5A326cs/edit?usp=sharing

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I would like some tips on adding dialogue, quotes, and a title. 

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LINK: https://docs.google.com/document/d/13zvj76T9idrNKsEs0z11_NJCgIt9tAnpIqJIkjJp1YQ/edit?tab=t.poglnpd56ad3

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Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Muufxn2IjuSg3onCXURULbLFBY6TLLVY05pG96YB7mQ/edit?tab=t.tk3f7dwpej5y

I would love some feedback on how to make the turning point more descriptive and exciting to make the readers feel like they are in that moment. Thank you!

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could you give me feed back on my report 

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1P_GucRxLdrHMQEPO4aH-1Xka32d0M5qsi4fby3iuV0Y/edit?tab=t.tk3f7dwpej5y

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1CnGPXaBMl8PRa-OPpMaoRAUMemGpEbPfk_psRbyMwFE/edit?tab=t.0#heading=h.5jn83fpa1ucm

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please give me feedback