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Reading is 8
Writing is 3

Total is 11/15
73%  C

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writing, band 2, she used all three tenses in the same writing, wrong use of words, but the writing was kind of understood.

reading, band 4, there was some relevance to the question, she understood the text, she kind of retold the story which brought her mark down.

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91/15

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What Went Well:
--Good use of vocabulary.
-- good ending

Target:
--- improve Sentence structure.
--use more punctuations

READING = 8
WRITING= 3
TOTAL= 11/15
73% C

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'Mysterious events at old stone'
When I was walking down the street I saw an ancient looking stoned house looks like its full of sinister

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'Mysterious events at the Old Stone House'. When I was travelling through an empty and quite countryside area on an Autumn day, I shockingly saw an old stone house. The reason that I paused and looked closely at the abandoned structure is because it's marks of age which juxtaposes with the naturalistic surrounding. The entrance was blocked by a beaten and unfinished door which was cracked at its seams. The rotten roof was met by the branches of some of the tallest trees.  This house was wounded because of the storms which shows a tragic past and began to creep over me which increased my interest to take a closer look at the house.

While I was exploring the house, the big front door which had gone through years of dripping rain leaned against the side of the house. The wooden house was green with moisture and slippery with rot. I suddenly stared at the temporary structure on the outside of the house and realised part of it was fallen. I was scared it would fall if I stood beneath it. With a shiver I entered the house and started to observe it's decaying, bare and incomplete walls. I found that all the case were similar. A normal house would be finished and planned but this house was deserted before the fireplaces had been tiled or the woods were painted. The stairs which led to the middle of the house was without a handrail which was terrifying. Not being able to stop myself, I wanted to visit the rest of the house and I climbed up the stairs.

After my arm was grabbed from behind, I realised that I was not the only one in the house. I asked my self if there was a lonely person who owned this broken house. I was afraid to have the confidence to ask, but when I turned around and saw what it was that had scared me. I didn't know either to laugh at my concerns or feel increased wonder around my location.

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'Mysterious events at the Old Stone House'
I went to an empty isolated place on Autumn day. I saw a old historical stone house which make me feel really curiosity about the house. he house was covered by the huge trees. There is ten huge windows in the front of the house. The miserable and uneasy atmosphere make my curiosity and go closer to the place. The door is been washed my the rain for years that can't even close. The house and all the woodwork was so old and  decay. I did not stay in the place long because I'm scared that the collapse we fall on me.

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I was traveling through the countryside by myself, I came across an old house that was made out of stones. This house was surrounded by a forest, the house looked beautiful but has I moved closer to the house I had second thoughts. I entered the house to inspect even more the house looked even more strange from the inside the house was not finished some of the walls weren't built to the top because the house was in this least i wanted to inspect the house even deeper.

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'Mysterious events at Old Stone' , i was promenading in a remote country side area, The mysterious house caught my eye with its crude ancient creepy look. The condo was ringed around the rainforest , a cold breeze coming from the house  splashed me , it gave me this unbelievable memory that made my curiosity look closer.

The structure above the house worried me, the ceiling was rotten  with a high chance of collapsing , almost everything in condo was unfinished and poorly placed. Some of the materials in the house where beautiful but mysterious , therefore i couldn’t resist not exploring the interior of the house . I was not expecting the second floor of the house to be more organised and neat; the doors were fitted, the walls were finished, and the fireplace was magically completed.

There was an unexplainable rumor of a death in this house; this really makes me curious because there are no possible signs of a human living in this house. I had felt a small tap on my back, which terrified me . I was asking myself, am I the only one behind those strange dark walls? I gawk and try seeing who was behind me, I was completely dazed by what was in the house .

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Mysterious events at the old stone house

I was walking down the quite street and i saw an old house. it seemed to be unfinished and very old. It was ancient, it was also covered by trees. the curiosity of the place made me take a closer look. The aged weighty door was put to the side of the house. The house was rotten because of the massive rain and storms that happened. The house was definitely unfinished with half painted and rotten walls. I walked from room to room trying to know more about the house and it kept getting worse and even more rotten. After a while i feel something touches my arm from the back, i turn around and i see something that was really weird.