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Hi Zack I really like your story I really want to read it again I like how the story was about titans also were you put the pronunciations maybe you can add more settings.

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Hi Zach!  Wow, excellent essay!  I loved how you wrote so many details that were puzzle pieces to the ending picture!  First of all, your word choice was so vivid, it helped me picture in my mind myself not doing so much work and staying up so I could be healthy, and have fun at the same time while doing little to no work.  It would just be amazing how you pictured it!  Also, I liked your claims and how they were all true.  So, they enhanced your essay so much more, making it so you can tell an adult even that this is my opinion, and here are the reasons to prove what I think.  Next time, maybe include a bit more sentence fluency, so each sentence flows directly from one to the other, making it so the reader can understand and remember every one bit of your essay.  Overall, perfect job on your essay!

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Hi Zac! I really enjoyed your essay! Every paragraph was filled with tons of detail making the reader want to read more. Also, your zinger was explained so much about your topic-in just one sentence! Next time just remember to fix a few grammar and punctuation errors. Otherwise, amazing essay!

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Hey Zach, I really enjoyed your intro paragraph I liked how you introduced you topic smoothly and it flowed right in and didn’t sound jagged. I also could understand the claims and the data they really supported your topic and made me agree with you topic and persuaded me. Next time maybe you can make your sentences shorter and have a period or 2 to make it not sound run on, overall I enjoyed reading your story.

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Hey Zach! I really liked your essay. Your data was really evident and you backed up your claim with strong and substantial data. I feel that your conclusion helped me recap everything you were trying to convey to me. Next time you can try varying your word choice and adding some more vivid vocabulary. Instead of saying 'last minute' often, you can say the word 'procrastinating'. Overall I feel that your essay was very persuasive and was very effective!

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I really liked how you explained the details instead of glossing it over you went into character  detail  and I also like catchy hook in your beginning  the one thing you can maybe fix next time is the word choice.  Overall great job

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I like how you started off your story that will get the reader hooked.  Additionally,  I liked your awesome word choice throughout your whole story.  I think you repeated a lot of words but other than that it was great I really liked reading it.

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I like your story. I could clearly understand who is talking. It was very descriptive, and I could clearly picture what was happening in my mind. You found a way to balance the dialogue  throughout your story. At one point the information repeated twice, but overall, great story.

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I loved your story!

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Your story had lots of suspense. For example, when they left Lance, I didn’t know what was going to happen to him. I like how you ended your story in a cliffhanger, though you might want to watch out for choppy sentences next time. I just want to read more!

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I liked that there was great drama it was back to back like what's going to happen next there was also lots of describing the charters.

The only mistake I saw was there was some confusing parts it was hard to follow.

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Zach I like how you made your story adventures you’re really good at that, I think you should add a little less dialogue. Thank you