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For all future posts please take your picture in the other direction so that I can read it. Thank you.
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Capitalize... Age of Exploration

Edit LEAD: Cermeno made the most accurate map of his time, but was still considered a failure. Why?

After you make your edits you are ready to type in a new google doc title "The Life and Times of Cermeno"

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You wrote information for the first body paragraph, not our introduction paragraph. Please rewrite using the following guidelines.
Background: The Age of Exploration was a time when Europeans explored the world. From the late 1400s to 1600s, explorers discovered many places that they had never known existed.
Lead: Have you ever wondered who named San Diego? It was a man named Sebastian Vizcaino.
Focus Statement: Vizcaino's early life, expeditions, and accomplishments helped develop California into what it is today.

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Capitalize... Age of Exploration

Edit LEAD: Have you ever wondered who discovered Alaska? Vitus Bering is the man responsible. H

Eliminate: Well you're about to learn...

Edit FOCUS STATEMENT: Bering's early life, .....

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Edit LEAD: Did you know Sir Francis Drake was the first captain to sail around the world?

You are ready to type in a new google doc title "The Life and Times of Drake"

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Revise BACKGROUND: Anza didn't explore during the Age of Exploration from the late 1400s to the 1600s, but does that make him only less of an explorer?

Revise FOCUS STATEMENT: Anza led an interesting early life, went on exciting expeditions, and had several achievements, which helped develop California into what it is today.

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Edit BACKGROUND: During the late 1400s through the 1600s explorers began exploring in hope of finding unknown land and new territories.

Edit LEAD: One notable explorer was Cermeño, who made the most accurate map of __________, but was considered a failure. Why?

Beautiful focus statement!!!!!

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Edit LEAD: Have you ever wondered who set sail for his third voyage from Plymouth England and was a member of the Royal Navy? James Cook is that explorer!
Edit FOCUS STATEMENT: ...accomplishments have helped...

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Revise FOCUS STATEMENT (blue): Cermeño's early life, expeditions, and accomplishments have helped develop California into what it is today.

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Revise LEAD: Do you know which explorer defeated the Dutch for the King and Queen of Spain and later became the the mayor of Mexico? Sebastian Vizcaino is the man responsible.

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You need to use CAPITAL letters at the beginning of sentences and for names.
REVISE: Have you ever wondered who founded San Diego and Monterey Bay? Caspar de Portola is you man!

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Great! You may type into a new google doc titled The Life and Times of Cabrillo.

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Indent!
Please CAPITALIZE the names of people.

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Great! You may type into a new google doc titled The Life and Times of Cermeño.

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Be mindful of CAPITAL letters please.
REVISE: Did you know that Juan Bautista de Anza was the best Indian fighter during his time? He also explored the first overland route from Mexico to San Francisco.
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Do you know who is the only English explorer to sail three voyages and serve in the Royal Navy? That would be Captain James Cook.

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You may type into a new google doc titled The Life and Times of Cook.

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Great! You may type into a new google doc titled The Life and Times of Bering.

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Great! You may type into a new google doc titled The Life and Times of Drake.

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I don't see any background information. Your focus statement doesn't make sense. Please revise.

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Great! You may type into a new google doc titled The Life and Times of Portola.

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Great! You may type into a new google doc titled The Life and Times of Bering.