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the big, enormous, modern house stood glowingly in the street. the big, overflowing fountain sparkling and sprinkling all around. All the guests there lovely in there big fancy dresses and smart suits turning up, waiting outside enjoying the fountain and appearance of the house. The posh cars pulling up an arriving more people to the house.

inside the house is where it begins the steps leading up the doors all lit up, people stood at the doors to open them for the guests. waiters handing free champagne to all the guests. big glass chandeliers hanging from the celling. big glass portraits of the house owner on the wall

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The writer uses structural features to interest the reader by using, beginning, middle and end.

In the beginning we find out that 5 crates of oranges and lemons arrived from a fruiterer in New York. This is giving us an idea of the setting and that this is a wealthy area. Wec know this as receiving 5 crates was seen as getting lucky as they were expensive.

In the middle we are given a long list of the amount of instruments the place has. "a whole pitful of oboes and trombones and saxophones and violins, and cornets and piccolos and low and high drums"

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the student has commented on the extract that “the writer describes the party in such a way and in such detail it feels as if you are part of it.”. I agree with this statement because in the extract the writer does describe the party as if you are there and it is described in so much detail, it shows us as a reader that there is a lot going on in the party and the writer shows and makes us feel like we are there.

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the writer has structured the text to interest the read in the beginning the extract the wrier is focusing on the setting

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The writer uses language to describe Gatsby's mansion as humongous. My evidence for this is shown within the quotation of 'At least once a fortnight a corps of caterers came down with several hundred feet of canvas and enough coloured lights to make a Christmas tree of Gatsby's enormous garden'. This is important because it symbolises affluence and abundance in Gatsby's possession. A metaphor is hidden in the quote to gain more significance of the quote.

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There was a machine in the kitchen which could extract the juice of 200 oranges in half an hour. A butler, Oranges and lemons arrive from a fruiter in New York. A corps of caterers.

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the writer has structured the whole text as a reader in the beginning of the extract the writer is focusing on the setting and focuses on the juicer in the kitchen. evidence to show this is five crates of oranges and lemons arrived fruiter in New York. This shows us that it is in new New York and how the writer is focused on the big juicier machine.

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The enchanted Manor House was unbelievably beautiful, old and mysterious. The old stone walls carpeted with vines of green and silver ivy, Which crept along the trellises and framed the windows and balcony in a majestic way. The people came from miles around to visit splendour and grace of this astounding building.

Caitlin this is a great start, but you need to show evidence of paragraphs, so will need to show around 5 paragraphs of writing for your story.

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the writer descriptive language to describe the mansion when it say in the quote"

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To me the characters seem very stuck up and the way they are portrayed they come across that way too. The writer has made me think this way about the characters because the way the writer has wrote about “ the lights grow brighter as the earth lurches away from the sun, abs now the orchestra is playing yellow cocktail music, and the opera of voices pitches the key higher” this shows that they have more money than they need.

The way you have structured your answer to Q4 is good, but the question states “A student suggested “the writer describes the party in such a way and in such detail it feels as if you are part of it.” To what extent do you agree?  Can you comment on the student's suggestion?

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The writer has structured the text to interest me as a reader by focusing my attention on the fact they get fresh oranges and lemons every week. Not many family would of been able to afford this during the 1920’s. So this shows me as the reader that they have enough money to by luxuries. The writer changes focus in the middle of the extract by describing what is happing at the party.

This is a great start. What is now happening at the party and how does the extract reach a conclusion?

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the writer uses descriptive writing to describe the mansion. evidence to support the descriptions of the mansion is 'The bar is in full swing, and floating rounds of cocktails permeate the garden outside, until the air is alive with chatter and laughter'. the suggests that the mansion is that big it has a bar in the garden. and it also includes a metaphor saying 'the air is alive' this could mean that the atmosphere is happy.

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The writer uses language to describe the mansion by the way they have a lot of things that most people don’t have. The line “ by 7 o’clock the orchestra had arrived” this shows they have a lot of money and enough to by an orchestra. The sentence implied that they could of been waiting around for it to arrive and the writer then says “ but a whole pitiful of oboes and trombones and saxophones” this is a definition of the rule of three and can sometimes be seen as a metaphor.

Well done Caitlin this is a really good response. 4/8. Well done.

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The use of descriptive language suggests that the place is very elegant and beautiful and full of wealth. We know this as the writer says that they used to receive Crates of fruit every Friday, this shows wealth as people used to be only able to afford one crate. we also know that the people are wealthy as

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Every Friday they get fresh oranges and lemons
Fruit extractor
Buffet tables
Baked ham, crowded against salad

Well done 4/4

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1.There was a machine in the kitchen which could extract the juice
2.several hundred feet of canvas and enough coloured lights to make a Christmas tree

3.. In the main hall a bar with a real brass rail was set up, and stocked with gins and liquors
4. On buffet tables, garnished with glistening hors-d’oeuvre

Well done 4/4

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Every Friday 5 creates of oranges and lemons
a machine in the kitchen to extract juice
several hundred feet of canvas
an enormous garden

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They have a butler
They have a fruit juice extractor
They get five crates of oranges and lemons ever Friday

Well done 4/4

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1) buffet table
2) New York
3) have a butler
4) fruit juice extractor

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1) new York
2) have a butler
3) they get given many crates of fruit every Friday
4) buffet table

Well done 4/4

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Read again the first part of the source from lines 1-8.
List 4 things from this part of the text which shows wealth and extravagance.  (4 marks 5 minutes)

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Look in detail from lines 1to 20 of the source 
How does the writer use language here to describe the mansion?
You could include the writer’s choice of:  
•	Words and phrases
•	Language feature techniques
•	Sentence forms
  (8 Marks 10 Minutes)

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Your need to think about the whole source.
How has the writer structured the text to interest you as a reader?
You could write about:
•	What the writer focuses your attention on at the beginning
•	How and why the writer changes the focus as the extract develops
•	Any other structural feature that interests you
  (8 Marks 10 Minutes)

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Focus this part of your answer from lines 11 to the end of the extract.
“A student suggested “the writer describes the party in such a way and in such detail it feels as if you are part of it.” To what extent do you agree?
In your response, you could write about:
•	Your own impression of the characters
•	Evaluate how the write has created these impressions
•	Support your opinion with quotations from the text. 

(20 Marks 40 Minutes)

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You are going to enter a creative writing competition. 
-Write a description suggested by the picture
Or
-Write the end part of a story about a party you have attended.
(40 Marks 40 Minutes)

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