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In "Racism Is Terrible. Blackness Is Not." Imani Perry explains how African Americans know they matter and they are aware of their self worth. She uses explains how some comments can misleading as those who mean to offer comfort often speak of being black as a misfortune. My favorite line from the article is, "Joy is not found in the absence of pain and suffering. It exists through it." This means even though black Americans go through many trials and tribulations they still live their lives with joy.

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In "Workism is Making Americans Miserable" , Derek states that the majority of insured Americans get healthcare through their workplace.  He uses this information to explain the concept of workism in order to illustrate to his audience how the work system in the USA is making workers miserable.

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in "Workism is Making Americans Miserable" Derek Thompson uses religion as way to explain how some Americans are work obsessed. Putting it that way really helps get his point across. I also want to look to do something like this in my next paper

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In the article "Racism is Terrible. Blackness is Not," the author included a poem to help explain one of her ideas. When the author was discussing her identity, she refers to a poem which states, “Come windless invader, I am a carnival of, stars a poem of blood” (Paragraph 6). The author uses this source to emphasize her claims that African Americans must be recognized for their sufferings, without being pitied.

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In "The Ideas that Won't Survive The Coronavirus" the author mentions things that many of us experienced. "Horror stories are surfacing from doctors and nurses, people afflicted with Covid-19, and those who have lost loved ones to the disease.

Many of us are getting a glimpse of dystopia. Others are living it."
I like how he puts it into perspective of how much worse some people had it, like healthcare workers.

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The image at the beginning of the "Racism is Terrible. Blackness is not" article helps build the article. It adds an image in a way that contributes to the message of the passage as the whole, by showing a black man in the center in a sort of light laughing and being joyful. This is just an extra piece that overall helped build the authors claims.

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In "Workism is Making Americans Miserable", Derek Thompson begins the article with a summary of a prediction of what working in the 21st century was supposed to be like, including the problem of too much free time. Thompson connects this prediction to the obsessive focus that most Americans have about work, and it is interesting to see the contrast. The vast difference between this prediction that believed people would be working a whole lot less and what is currently the case causes the reader to start thinking about the main idea of the article before the author really even introduces it.

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In the article, "Workism is making Americans miserable", Thompson connects the mentality workaholics has to religious faith. He connects their desks to alters- a very powerful analogy- and makes it very clear that the brains of these workaholics act similarly to religious fanatics. -Edward

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In the article, "Workism is making Americans miserable", Thompson connects the mentality workaholics has to religious faith. He connects their desks to alters- a very powerful analogy- and makes it very clear that the brains of these workaholics act similarly to religious fanatics. -Edward

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In the article "The Ideas that Won't Survive the Coronavirus", the author connects COVID to a movie villain, and our response to COVID as an even greater enemy. The author writes this to emphasize the fact that there are many structural flaws in our society that must be fixed before we can take on any other "villains".

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In the article "Workism is Making Americans Miserable," Derek Thompson uses history to aid his explanation about workism. Instead of  heading straight into how workism is portrayed in today's modern world, he uses the history behind workism to help reader's better understand the change on the idea/religion of workism. He connects the old ways of working to the new ways of working and compare and contrasts them to come up with a clearer image on the whole idea.

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In the second Paragraph of "Racism is Terrible. Blackness is not." Imani Perry uses a narrative of his past experiences to connect with the article. "I cannot remember a time in my life when I wasn’t earnestly happy about the fact of
my blackness. When my cousins and I were small, we would crowd in front of the
mirrors in my grandmother’s house, admiring our shining brown faces, the
puffiness of our hair."

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Throughout the article "Racism is terrible. Blackness is not," Imani Perry makes many claims about how history empowers African Americans. She later connects this to modern day racism and shows how though empowerment in history Perry views this type of racism. Perry used the first sentence to connect to her arguments later in the article. This makes for a very well put together piece and I hope I can use it in my writing.

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In “The Ideas that Won’t Survive The Coronavirus”, Viet Nguyen explores using comparisons of real life examples to have the reader understand his ideas. He connected the coronavirus to be a classic Hollywood narrative that has a superhero, villain and constant plot. It allowed the reader to understand how the virus is only the villain, not the complete plot. I want to incorporate a comparison within my writing to ensure the reader understands my message and understands what is going on.  Additionally, I noticed Nguyen leads with a question and this is something I want to do as well. It makes the reader more engaged with the rest of the story.

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In the article "The Ideas That Wont Survive The Coronavirus", the author Viet Thanh Nguyen uses rhetorical questions like "Is it too much to hope that the forced isolation of many Americans, and the forced labor of others, might compel radical acts of self-reflection, self-assessment and, eventually, solidarity?" to connect two ideas. Nguyen uses the rhetorical question to connect the idea he was talking about before to the idea that he is going to bring up and start talking about.

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Author, Viet Thanh Nguyen, of "The Ideas That Won't Survive The Coronavirus" provides emphasis and further context in presenting her main objectives through posing different questions throughout the text. By doing so, it does not only allow the readers and audience to think about a response to the questions, but also allows for a deeper and more critical understanding of the true meaning Nguyen gets across within her writing. Additionally, while Nguyen also poses er own thoughts in answering these questions, she also allows for readers to think outside of her thought process and pose their own opinions based on what they understood and perceived through her writing.

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In "The Ideas That Won't Survive The CoronaVirus", the author Viet Thanh Nguyen proposes questions to her audience throughout the article which I found to be a great way to make the reader reflect on the points the author makes. It also keeps the audience engaged with the writing and get them thinking about what point the author is really attempting to make. This writer's move is something I definitely hope to incorporate in my future writing.

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In "The Ideas that Won't Survive the Coronavirus," Viet Nguyen uses personal anecdotes to briefly mention his personal experiences. He also speaks in the 1st person narrative to get the readers’ attention.

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In the article "Racism is Terrible. Blackness is Not," the author includes a short 3 lined poem towards the end of her paper. The inclusion of the poem brings a different perspective to the article. In the paragraph above the poem, the author is trying to describe how she is feeling. The poem she includes describes her exact emotions. Instead of just writing out her true emotions, the poem is used in a way to help the audience understand her feelings in a deeper context. It allows the audience to think, instead of just reading verbatim what her emotions are.

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In  “Workism is Making Americans Miserable”, the author uses a metaphor, comparing work to religion, to describe how people will become workaholics sooner or later.

In “Racism Is Terrible. Blackness Is Not.”, the author also uses a metaphor, describing her self as "part of a sobbing school" to show how there is tragedy in her life.

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In "Workism is Making Americans Miserable," the writer repeatedly makes connections between work and religion to explain the current mindset people have regarding their jobs. The typical mindset towards one's job is to make it their identity. People work longer and harder than they did before, even when they don't need to (like Thompson mentions when he discusses the rich). The modern day view is to practically worship your career/job. I think this connection Thompson uses is very effective and I would like to try making connections in my writing to better explain how current/popular views on matters may be wrong.

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In the Ideas that wont survive the coronavirus a writers move he uses is a personal anecdote, “Sometimes people ask me what it takes to be a writer. The only things you have to do, I tell them, are read constantly; write for thousands of hours; and have the masochistic ability to absorb a great deal of rejection and isolation. As it turns out, these qualities have prepared me well to deal with life in the time of the coronavirus.” He uses this writers move to connect with the reader and show how he is dealing with covid.

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One writer's move that helps build a piece of writing is using one sentence paragraphs. In “The Ideas That Won’t Survive the Coronavirus,” Viet Thanh Nguyen uses a one sentence paragraph to draw emphasis to his point that some people are experiencing a sense of dystopia during the pandemic. Using a one sentence paragraph can be very effective as it easily stands out. This writer's move builds within the piece as it can add emphasis to a specific theme or idea that the writer wants to incorporate throughout the piece.

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Exploring the Discourse- Hannah Blomquist

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Exploring the Discourse- Hannah Blomquist

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Reading about inequality through sports opens up a new perspective in many different aspects. From professional to youth sports, we can understand the inequality among these individuals. Many arguments have been built among personal experiences as well as research in order to create a strong argument as to why this gap is evident and potentially shrinking.

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In chapter 1 of Atomic Habits, throughout the chapter there is a constant use of visual aid such as charts and lists that help organize the text. With this aid, the author is helping the reader further understand the points being made in relation to habits, such as the 1% increase and how it can help us reach our goals. Additionally, it manages to help the reader comprehend what they are reading throughout the chapter since the organization of the text provides structure. This will then help the text have more of a flow which will ease the actual reading process.

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In chapter 1 of Atomic Habits, James clear used a stat and a graphic to explain why one should try to get 1% better everyday. If someone gets 1% better everyday they are 38x a better person than they were a year ago. If a person is getting 1% worse everyday they are just a fraction of the person they once were a year ago. Basically if you're not getting better you're getting worse.

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Stephanie Parker mentions experiences that every reader can relate to including the pandemic. Every person reading the article had their habits and routine change. Stephanie Parker mentions how most people stopped exercising and started to drink.

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In "Atomic Habits" the author using graphs to show differences between two different outcomes. He shows the difference between 1% increase every day compared to the decrease of 1% every day. It shows how much more of a difference is made when you increase by little amounts every day and the long term impact. He then uses a similar real world example with the British cycling team. They completely changed their training methods and slowly started to see improvements, until they won many major trophies.

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In "The Science of Habits," the piece is organized into sections that are clearly labeled by bolded headings. This was a technique of organization that I don't think I have had to analyze many times in academic classes because it is not considered to be the same as a formal essay format. I would consider to adopt some form of this technique in my writing, maybe in a way that would help organize and structure the ideas better.

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While reading Listening to Sources from our Textbook I came upon three interesting insights that could very much improve my writing. The first being "Combine research findings from multiple sources to make a larger summary argument." This is a very valuable insight, being that it's one that I haven't even tried to do. I usually get my argument from a single source. This is very time consuming because I have to search for the perfect source that defends what I Have to say. The next insight would be to "Identify unanswered questions." This can be a very captivating and can grad the readers attention. A thesis like this can make the reader wonder and speculate what they're going to learn after they have read your writing. The third insight would be forgetting that quoting isn't the only way to incorporate sources. You can incorporate sources through paraphrasing and summarizing. This is something I fall victim to a lot. I very rarely paraphrase instead I often quote directly from the text.

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In "The Science of Habits" Stephanie Parker opens up her article by referring to the pandemic and how that has negatively impacted so many people's habits. "For many of us, the past year has disrupted deeply ingrained habits. Some people report exercising less, others are drinking more. As we look forward to life returning to some semblance of normal, it’s worth considering what scientists have learned about how to create good habits and break bad ones." This allusion a current event is such a great connection between her argument and the recent pandemic. By connecting these two things, it gives the audience a clear understanding of the issue at hand and how important it is to continue reading.

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In "The Science of Habits" by Stephanie Parker, she quite often provided examples that supported and explained the points she was trying to make throughout the text. Parker discusses a specific study that done to compare and contrast different strategies used to get employees in the gym. She specifically "split 2,500 employees into two groups: one that received a reward if they went to the fitness center every day at the same time for a month and another that received a reward for working out every day, regardless of the time of day". Studies like this one explain the points she makes throughout the article and help her audience understand what she's really trying to get across.

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While reading Listening to Sources/Talking to Sources from our textbook I learned about providing context to the usage of quotes and evidence. I really liked how the author goes into depth about the "They say/I say" tactic. They explain how to back up any quote with personal analysis to provide your thoughts along with your understanding of the reading. I also took away the fact that it is a good idea to paraphrase a quote and not give the full quote. This makes the reader know exactly what the writer is trying to convey. The author gives examples of verbs with a strong meaning. These verbs are more straightforward giving concise analysis with powerful inquiry.

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The first insight I have after reading "Listening to Sources/Talking to Sources" is that I should have a good balance between using sources and my personal thoughts using the "They Say/I Say" technique and by following the five strategies the author suggests for this technique. I don't want to fall into either of the extremes the author explains, especially the one about only using sources without any of my own thinking. I have definitely fallen into this extreme before.

The second insight I now have is to make sure I'm not twisting around the claims from the sources I use. When I use a source I have to make sure I follow the source's claim or, if that particular article disagrees with my claim, find a new source that actually agrees with me. Thinking back, I think there have been times when I've done this so I'll have to be more careful.

One final insight I have is to use sources effectively. When I quote a source, I often use the whole sentence or sometimes even more than just one sentence and often times I include information that is completely unnecessary. I have to remember the author's tip and only add the parts that "feel indispensable to the paper," such as what I just did.

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Stephanie Parker in her article stated that we have been told by society that the new year is the perfect time to make a fresh start. This sentence made me smile because every year I create new goals but I end up not completing them. This sentence connected to me and I am pretty sure it connected with others too.

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In Atomic Habits, James Clear uses the example of the ice cube to build on his thesis about 1% changes, making his claim more understandable by using an everyday example. He explains how the ice cube doesn't seem to be melting with each degree change in temperature, but how once it hits the "breaking point" you can see it start to melt. Using this metaphor, he builds his claim and the example is overall helpful to the reader in understanding his points.

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In Science of Habits, Stephanie Parker shows us points which are familiar to us. While some of these points may be familiar, many of the explanations can be technical, but the author uses real-life examples that make it easier to understand her points. “Immediate rewards can help reinforce a new habit. A Harry Potter fan, for example, might listen to the audiobooks while exercising as an in-the-moment reward for working out.”

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One writer's move that I noted in Stephanie Parker's "The Science of Habits" was her constant use of questions. Here's one question she poses: “Don’t want to sleep in your running shoes?" What makes her use of questions interesting to the audience is her immediate response: "Consider putting them on before your morning coffee so you are ready to go.” This is a technique I enjoyed and will try to implement in my writing.

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In the science of habits, Stephanie Parker writes about how the good habits, that bring us benefits, are not the ones that we acquire easily. Parker describes how habits generally need to be developed over time, and are not immediately in the circumstance. For example, a person would perform an action several times over a period for it to actually become habitual, something that is done with a subconscious mind. Parker also emphasizes on the notably important point of how good and beneficial habits are not developed easily because the positive effects take a while to show themselves. She adds how the first and initial reaction in trying to form a healthy habit is negative, with a lack of dopamine, which is something that reinforces habits in an individual’s mind. “Desirable habits do not have immediate rewards,” substantiates the point that claims that better habits are much more difficult to form.

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"Atomic Habits" author James Clear, uses graphs and visuals within text to visually express the points he makes throughout. For example, he explains how one good habit change per day can exponentially increase a person's potential. Additionally, one negative habit per day can exponentially decay a person's potential. Afterwards, he uses a graph to show the reader what he means, which puts greater emphasis on his writing.

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James clear uses an anecdote to set up his article and he uses it to build the rest of his paper by referring back to his anecdote as an example. He talks about the British cycling team and how improving every little thing eventually helped them to win the gold medal and the Tour de France. This anecdote proves his theory of getting 1% better each day, which is why he started off his paper with a successful example of his theory.
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"Habits are like shortcuts — they’re things we can do quickly and without thinking because we’ve done them so often they’ve become automatic, says behavioral scientist Katy Milkman of the University of Pennsylvania."

I want to be able to find studies like these for my own writing. Parker is using a well accomplished individual's study to support her overarching point about habits. If she had also used this to build in the article it would flow better. I want to try and combine those two things in my own writing.

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In "The Science of Habits" Stephanie Parker uses illustrations to connect the relationship between good habits and bad habits/instant gratification. The one I particularly like was the sticks of gum in a cigarette box. As a reader, it helped me visualize how we can reinforce better behaviors while still receiving a "reward," or only making slight changes. The illustrations also contrast how we normally think about creating new habits vs. what's actually effective.

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In "The Science of Habits" Stephanie Parker uses personal examples as well as examples from other people to further explain her points. For example, when talking about how to break a bad habit Parker suggests replacing that bad habit with something else. She then uses the example that she got from a study of chewing gum when having the urge to smoke. This example shows and explains to the reader how to break a bad habit.

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One insight I gained from the reading is that quotes can effectively be used to introduce a new idea instead of solely being used to support an idea. This is a seemingly basic idea that I had somehow never considered and plan to use in future writings.

Another insight I noticed was to make sure the quotes used accurately convey the message of the author and are not taken out of context. This effectively makes the quote useless as the message of the text is then misrepresented.

A final insight I took away from this reading is the importance of verbs of attribution. I especially find myself repeating the same verbs when quoting sources and I found that list helpful.

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I want to incorporate evidence into my writing and make it flow better with my purpose of writing. I also want to add compare and contrasts in my writing because it keeps the writer thinking. Finally, I want to become better at providing context because it can be easy for me to forget that the reader may not have the same background information. I want to keep the information concise, but also helpful.

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In “Listening to Sources/Talking to Sources,” the author lays out several ideas on how to make your writing stronger through incorporating quotes and sources.

In Principle 4: Choose precise verbs of attribution, the author lays out a variety of words that you as an author can uses instead of the word "says." These words include, "Claims, Asserts, Relates, Recounts, Complains, Reasons, Proposes, Suggests, Contests, Shows, Argues, Explains, Indicates, Points out, and offers."

Using these words stops the writer from constantly saying says over and over when introducing quotes. Using words from the list above allow the writer to better portray the point of the source that is being incorporated. This writer's move aids us as writers in further building our informational pieces.

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After reading "Listening to Sources/Talking to Sources", I learned a few things that I believe will help me out as a writer. First, I learned that integrating sources that I don't agree with can help with my argument. Sometimes adding quotes with ideas you don't agree with can help explain or justify an argument. The author also explained the "They Say/I Say" strategy. This process first presents the published authors idea, and then introduces your own idea. This process will allow me to create stronger arguments with clear-cut ideas. I also learned about precise verbs that will replace "says" or "claims" when integrating quotes. This will create more variety in my writing as well as help me support my claims in a better way. These insights I have learned from this article will help me become a better writer with more strategies in my toolkit.

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After reading “Listening to Sources/Talking to Sources,” I learned about the They say/I say technique, and how to incorporate research into a paper in an efficient way.  I think the They say/ I say technique is a very smart way to organize a paper. Additionally, I think the 2nd principle of adding context to the sources is a useful technique. Adding context to the sources will help the audience create a deeper understanding of the research written. Lastly, I want to add more precise verbs of attribution to my writing. I tend to use “says,” “states,” and “shows” a lot in my writing. I think that using new, stronger verbs will add more information to my paper.

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After reading “Listening to sources, Talking to sources” I learned that creating your own conclusion from what the sources say is beneficial for your writing. Creating a new point rather than a restatement allows ones writing to be stronger than it initially is. Secondly, I learned it is also beneficial to quote and paraphrase aspects that you do not agree with and use that in your work. It justifies your argument and makes it stronger from the opposite perspective. Lastly, I learned that fully explaining quotes with context is necessary for the reader to understand the true reasoning and importance for what is going on. I plan on using all of these in my own writing from now on

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I want to build on my utilization of how i incorporate different sources within my writing. After reading, "Listening to Sources/ Talking to Sources" I found that collectively combining research from different sources to make a greater summary/ conclusion, will allow me to broaden my horizons and expand the points i make within my writing as they aren't only backed up by one source, but rather multiple sources that support the same argument and are still relevant and not redundant.

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I want to give a little more context when I introduce a quote. I also want to limit how long my quotes are. The more concise it is, the better and faster it gets to my point. And finally, I want to use a bigger variety of verbs when describing what my quotes say (ie. argues, explains, reasons, etc.).

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In "Atomic Habits", James Clear uses graphs to explain his ideas on goals. It is unusual in that it is not something that you would typically expect to be represented by a graph. However, it does a really good job of explaining the idea of this 1% increase as appose to the linear path people expect. I would like to add more interesting elements like these graphs to my own writing.

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In "The Science of Habits" Stephanie Parker does a great job of explaining the steps of her argument. she not only cites phycologists that prove her argument, but she also cites her own personal experiences. For example, when proving that you need immediate gratification to stick to a habit she cites phycologists and tells her own personal experience of how she allows herself to listen to harry potter after a workout.

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In the New Money article, I realized that she used the very specific example of how her grandma used to count her change in the grocery store line, to help the reader understand the point she was making about how she keeps her money a private matter. I realized how using examples like these would be good to use in my paper, instead of just being very vague and using broad examples.

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Scott Korb appeals to emotion, or pathos, to create an emotional response to exacerbate the effect of his writing in "Soul-Crushing Student Essay."  The statement he used is "Perhaps they feel that only someone who has lived through something momentous — like the teenagers who survived the Parkland, Fla., shooting — has earned the right to be
heard." Allowing the reader to relate to what he is trying to describe because everyone has heard of the parkland shooting especially at the time when this article was published in 2018 allowed him to push his point forward by conceptually appealing to emotion to create this response and focus to his writing.

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From  "The Soul-Crushing Student Essay", "This has been the lesson for my students this term. Look around at what baffles you; look in at your peculiar self and how your own frontiers continue to edge back. Don’t worry, you’ll never fully grasp how the world transcends you and your ability to describe it... Now go and write. "

In " The Soul-Crushing Student Essay" by Scott Korb, he makes a connection to the readers at the end in the final paragraph. I think that since he knew there would be students reading this essay, that this would  be appropriate to incorporate to connect to them and make the essay feel relatable. The connection is made through a technique where Korb is stating some advice and wisdom that he recommends.

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In "New Money" there was a particular metaphor that I just skipped over. After describing her wealth Tressie Cottom says, "I have the kind of small money that made the family in Schitt’s Creek want to die." Reading this I didn't even realize it was a fictional family that had a lot of wealth and lost it all. So it makes perfect sense that a family who had lost their wealth would kill for it back.

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In "New Money", Cottom is able to incorporate person experiences into her writing to allow the reader to understand where she is coming from. Her grandmother would always make sure that the cashier would properly price each product and they would not be overcharged. Even as she got older, Cottom still valued money very heavily even though she had a lot more than when she was younger. "Once home I retrieved the money, wrapped it in a clean blue-and-white handkerchief and tucked it away to places I would rather not speak about in public." This shows that money is still a serious business because of how she was raised.

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New money: Directly after the picture of the purse- It is here that the author is explaining how the rules of money were handed down in her family and they were rules you maybe didn't understand, but you didn't question. She tells the story about her grandma in the grocery line, and connects it all together by explaining the rules

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In "New Money," Cottom uses the second point of view on the 4th page to explain to her readers where she came from and allows her audience to gain a better understanding about her upbringing in regards to money. She writes, "I come from people where money is a private matter, even when business is conducted in public. You always count your change in the store because white cashiers would cheat you and then claim you were stealing if you returned later to complain. You folded your money into hidden compartments so men and ne’er-do-wells could not make you for a mark. And, you always kept the money organized so that you knew at all times just how much money you had to spend." (Cottom 4) I think switching her style from first person to second person in this part was effective in engaging the reader and allowing them to imagine her upbringing.

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In "New Money" the author does an interesting thing where she tells two different stories from two different times in her life, but they both are very similar and connect to her point. I think this is an efficient way of using anecdotes to further an essays point and I would like to try this.

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“I see them text in class and talk and laugh and sometimes cry in the halls. They wear band T‐shirts, often from my era, so I assume they have taste. I watch them read.”

In "The Soul-Crushing Student Essay", Scott Korb fuses imagery with a conversational tone to build a sense of comfort and relatability that young writers will appreciate.

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In "The Soul-Crushing Student Essay", I was very intrigued by the author's use of personal anecdotes. Throughout the essay, it almost feels as if you are holding a conversation with the author instead of just reading about his thoughts. This allows the readers to better understand the point that is trying to be made as well as connect on a more personal level with the author and the message that is trying to be shared. Additionally, it helps the reader follow the flow of the text and easily read it.

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In “New Money'', Cottom uses varied sentence structures within her writing. Throughout the piece she switches between using many punctuations, a normal amount and a limited amount. When she is talking about a personal anecdote she breaks down her sentences to cause tension, “Everyone waited. I waited. The cashier waited. Money was serious business.” This connection allows the audience to feel the emotions building in this situation and understand how important this topic is. A reader can connect to this topic and put themselves within this situation as well, further deepening their connection to the story.

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I would like to explore different transitions in my writing as I feel that sometimes I have a hard time connecting different thoughts. In "Soul Crushing Student Essay", Scott Korb is able to better communicate thoughts and transition to different subjects through rhetorical questions and even dialogue at times. I believe simple strategies such as these would allow me to come across more clearly and enhance the flow of my writing.

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In "The Soul-Crushing Student Essay" the author ends his paragraph with, "Look around at what baffles you; look in at your peculiar self and how your own frontiers continue to edge back. Don’t worry, you’ll never fully grasp how the world transcends you and your ability to describe it" (Korb 25). What he is doing here is taking everything he has written and throwing it out into the readers arms to handle in their own lives. This is one of the strongest ways I have seen an article end and I would like to include something similar in my essay.

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"Home for us is wherever the eldest matriarch of the family lives." - Cottom paints a vivid description of her interpretation of home by giving a brief statement about the piece needed for what a place needs for it to be home. This brief explanation invokes a sense of relatability towards the readers and makes them reflect on what home means to them.

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In "New Money" Tressie McMillan Cottom writes about how an individual’s net worth does not contribute to changing their relationship with money; their attitude towards financial matters is inculcated while they are young, is profoundly affected by the figures of authority in their life and remains resolute throughout. She emphasises on how her town that she lived in as a youngster was small and poor by saying, "All it takes is a set of new twins to be a population boom, so why bother?" The hyperbole here conveys how tiny and insignificant the town actually was, which makes the point that McMillan Cottom introduces much clearer to the audience. It is humorous for the author to assume, and so write about just one set of twins contributing entirely to a population bloom.

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In the second paragraph of “New Money,”  the author uses an allusion, where she directly compares her childhood and hometown to the setting and lifestyle of the TV show Schitt’s Creek. She writes, ”I have the kind of small money that made the family in Schitt’s Creek want to die.”  This connection helps illustrate the author’s hometown and lifestyle for the audience.  For anyone who has seen the TV show, they are able to create a deeper relationship with the author, since they know the specific setting and lifestyle of the characters.

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About halfway through Cottom's "New Money", she uses the writer's move of adding a hyphen to show emphasis
"We do not talk about money in the South—my South."
The hyphen catches the readers eye and helps show the contrast between the South verses Cottom's South.

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In "New Money", Tressie McMillan Cottom uses a writers move which I called connecting.

"Eyes fixed on the register screen. Hands poised to snatch back a meat pack that rang up wrong. A string of “uhh-hmms” to the cashier to make it all seem friendly like." The author tries to connect with the audience. She wants you to be in her place, to imagine every detail to make you emerse.

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In “The Soul-Crushing Student Essay,” Scott Korb uses questions like:

But why can’t they?”

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“But what about those queer devotions and frustrations, experiences and ideas that have stirred an individual heart into peculiarity?”

These questions allow Korb to better connect with his readers. By making the reader ask themselves a question in their head as they read, Korb is able to better draw readers' attention to his main argument about student writing and connect his readers to a conclusion.

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In "Soul Crushing Student Essay" the author uses a move that I haven't seen before in an article such as this one. Korb actually makes a connection to his target audience of college kids and college professors with his example about the tragedies in parkland. I want to use something similar to this, with my essay for example I can use a move to bring in all attention from skiers like Korb uses his example to bring in all of his target audience.

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In "New Money", Cottom incorporates a personal story about her grandmother was very private while checking out of the store. Adding in this short story helps the reader take the theme and point of the article and visualize it into something they are familiar.

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I would like to explore different strategies that would better help me formulate ideas. Too often I find myself hitting a brick wall when trying to find ideas on what to write about. Being able to explore new ways to do this would be extremely beneficial for my writing going forward.

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I would like to be able to incorporate personal anecdotes and humor into my writing similar to Scott Korb's writing. He also uses an rhetorical question. Opening with personal anecdotes act as a hook and keeps the reader engaged.

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In "Mirrors, Windows, and Sliding Glass Doors", Rudine Sims Bishop uses quotes from other other writings to help build off the main idea of the text that representation and diversity is important for all readers. Specifically, the quotes show how reading can be beneficial in teaching children about variations in the way English is spoken around the country. By adding the quotes, it helps to build upon and strengthen the argument that is being made through examples.

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Soul-Crushing page 3 paragraph 1. Korb states how teachers need to value the complex lives of young people. He builds off that fact that teachers don't let students express themselves in their writing. Many are even taught not to use "I" in their writing pieces. We need let students share their own thoughts and perspectives on topics.

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In The Soul-Crushing Student Essay by Scott Korb, writers moves are present throughout the text. One move that I would like to highlight is when Korb asks "But why can't they?" when talking about how students feel as though they can't use "I" in their writing. This question is near the beginning of the piece after the anecdote, it serves as a good transition to Korb's main points of the essay and into the explaining portions.

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In "New Money" Tressie Cottom uses a rhetorical question to connect with the writing. When being asked why she is putting her money into things she does not really know about she asks "How the hell would I know?" I say this is connecting the writing because she was talking about having meetings with different financial advisers and not knowing what they are talking about.

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On page 1, paragraph 8/9, of "Soul Crushing Student Essay" Korb is exploring the idea/topic of why young writer's find it difficult to express themselves. He uses a rhetorical question at the end of the paragraph to open up the topic that will inevitably cover the rest of his essay.

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In "Soul-Crushing Student Essay" Korb uses the anecdote about his fathers death to further build on his main claim in the article. The anecdote helps Korb build on the idea that students should be using their lives and personality in their writing. This anecdote shows how Korb incorporates his past experiences in his writing.

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I would like to explore more ways to find freedom through my writing. We have a lot of choice in our writing, and I have a hard time finding the right ideas to express and I think if I learned more about the importance of being able to express thoughts and feelings through my writing.

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I would like to explore more about using imagery to convey something meaningful to an audience.

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In "New Money" Tressie Cottom uses a metaphor to emphasize one of her personal anecdotes. The metaphor, "But Mother's focus rivaled Serena Williams's on a match point" was used to give a vivid picture of the scene to the reader. This writers move catches the readers attention and might peak the readers interest, allowing Cottom to share her beliefs more productively.

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In "The Soul-Crushing Student Essay" Scott Korb uses a quote from Barry Lopez to build on his idea that the world in endless in its inspiration for writing, and students should use it to their advantage. This writer's move enhances his point by bringing in an outside perspective with the same conclusion.

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New Money - 3rd page, 5th paragraph. Cottom uses this anecdote about her mother to show how money can be treated differently among different classes. Her mother grew up being very serious and private about money. However, later in the story, Cottom describes the discomfort she has when she has more money and needs to become public about it.

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Soul crushing student essay - pg 2 5th paragraph. Korb uses this to explain his point of how students were previously taught and how that they do not think their life has been important enough to write about.

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Rudine Bishop does a great job of using the mirrors, windows, and sliding glass doors as a metaphor that really helps explain the entire point of her paper that books can be these things and to help people grow and learn. So that is one thing I want to try and use in my paper are really good metaphors that help get across the idea in my writing.

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I'd like to explore humor as one of my writer's moves as I find humor very compelling in written pieces. For instance, Tressie Cottom uses humor throughout her article "New Money." This was my favorite article to read from all our mentor texts so far as I was enticed from her humor early on. I've written maybe one or two essays using humor however there weren't many essays that called for it in high school. I'd like to try it out some more now that I have the opportunity.

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A writers move I would like to explore more is starting with an opening anecdote and then transitioning into the main subject of my writing. Similar to “The Soul-Crushing Student Essay” Korb is able to organically implement his anecdote and add character into his writing while also discussing the main objectives of his writing.