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Feedback on how "SMART" they are please.

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Section 2 should be section 4.
Section 4, 5, 6 are optional but overall not needed.

Can consider merging 1.1 - 1.3 into Related Work

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Write the territorial flow section

NEW - spoke to supervisor, now need to change outline

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Goal: write territorial flow section

Accomplished:
- re-written introduction
- took time to read and understand writing center feedback
- applied feedback to introduction

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- Meeting rooms
- Company hubs (e.g. a room everyone passes through to get to their individual offices)
- Information past a pay-wall (e.g. in an amusement park or local museum)

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- Internet
- Social Media & Forums
- News (TV and Radio)

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- laptop
- computers
- smart watch
- phone

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-Read Territorial Flow paper
- Mind map ideas to re-write section (Thanks Sarah)
- Rewrite skeleton for section
- Write Section

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- Do I need to introduce the prevalence of large displays in the problem section or the introduction to the introduction section?

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New Structure:
1 Intro
-- problem of space
-- prob w/ l.d
2 Research plan
-- research Qs
--  research plan
3 Related work
4 -5 -6 Individual Studies

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Block 1: fixed headings and trying to create overall structure.
Block 2 : Mind map (scroll right)

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- where do I want to move from space to territory
- where do I talk about territorial flow?

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- Does intro have the problems as subsections?
- Is RQ its own section

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- Internal or External
- Write them here to do later

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- add reference in text
- add in text discription
- check over caption

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- Do you want to include all three studies?

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Wednesday 11:35-12:05
Notes:
-explain fundamental concepts with examples
- add more transition between ideas
- intro your introduction sections with a mini introduction
- whos problem is it (When you call it a problem, is this something that the display makers need to solve? Maybe clarify who the problem relates to.)
- Amy: By the end of the initial intro, my main understanding is that cultural attitudes and behaviours can create problematic and unexpected relationships among multiple users and -- ultimately -- inhibit user use.

However, the next paragraph drops the idea of culture and focuses on the idea of the traditional one-user situation.

- context of the display use: (You mention the need to respect protocol, and then go on to give the example of cultural norms might lead a person to behae in a different way..it feels like you are about to go into a very specific context in which you are studying these displays.)

Traditional introduction:
- Amy: 12:09 1. State the real world problem you are addressing

Amy: 12:09 2. intoduce previous research trying to deal with that problem.

Amy: 12:09 3. introduce the gap -- what is so far missing in that research or where conflicts are occurring

Amy: 12:10 4. introduce how your research will fill the gap.

Amy: 12:10 You may have all these elements somewhere, but I am expecting them to come before 1.1

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Block 1: Added point 2 of skeleton into draft

Block 2: Point 3

Workshop: Thesis Investigation (paper method)

Block 3: Re-read section (problem of space) for flow and get points across.
Fixed RQs.

Block 4: Start on the large displays problem section

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- edit Intro
- Use notes/skeleton to re-write intro to problem section
- Write the problem with large displays section
- combine together into research questions
- write specific research questions or goals