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Good to see your contributions and material experimentation. Layout can be improved but well done overall!

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Nice reflections and annotations. Try to be more consistent with layout and type. Lovely contributions!

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Great to see your contributions! Layout and type work well. Nice material experiments.

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Great to see your contributions, type and layout can be improved

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Good process, reflection, annotation - great to see your contributions. Layout can be improved

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Lots of material experimentation and process - reflections are great! Layout can be improved

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Lovely contributions and reflections - type and layout working well. Keep it up!

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Great to see your contributions. Type can be a bit smaller and try to be more consistent with layout

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Wonderful and great to see updates! Lots of process and layouts working well

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Nice initial sketches. Would be good to see these developed in further details. Explore and test the visual composition as well.

The film tests work well as a series of images in a sequence. Try to play around more with cuts and transitions. Keep things simple to begin with. Refer to resource below:

https://www.backstage.com/magazine/article/types-of-cuts-in-film-75730/

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Your sketches have a really nice architectural quality to them. It's great to see you adapt that visual direction. Would be good to play around more with the composition and collage.

Good to see the film tests as well. It's nice to see you explore different techniques and transitions. I like that your approach is simple - important to get the simple things right first. Refer to resource below for more on transitions/cuts:

https://www.backstage.com/magazine/article/types-of-cuts-in-film-75730/

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Try to add more detail in your sketches. Spend time capturing the details and drawing them in. This is a good start and can be developed further. Think about how they could come together in a visual collage as well.

It's nice to see you testing the film sequences. However, currently your camera is moving too fast. Slow this down and keep the transitions/cuts as simple as possible. Refer to resource below:

https://www.backstage.com/magazine/article/types-of-cuts-in-film-75730/

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Your sketches are really nice. Lots of visual detail. Would be good to explore them further as a composition. Think scale, foreground, background, etc.

It's nice to see you test transitions/cuts in the film sequence. Try not to overcomplicate this too much. Keep it simple in the beginning. Refer to resource below:

https://www.backstage.com/magazine/article/types-of-cuts-in-film-75730/

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Nice set of sketches - lots of detail which is great to see. Play around with the visual composition more, testing balance, scale, composition, foreground, background, etc.

Great to see you compose the film as a sequence. Try not to overcomplicate the transitions/cuts to begin with - keep it simple. Refer to this resource below:

https://www.backstage.com/magazine/article/types-of-cuts-in-film-75730/

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Nice to see the sketches, they have incredible details, really well done. Would be great to use these and test the visual collage further. Think about foreground/background and scale/composition.

The film tests works well and could be built on even more. Try to keep the camera stable while filming, this helps a lot in making the shots look more professional. It's good to see you play around with the editing as well. You don't always need a complex transition to make the shots come together. You can also use a jump cut. If you don't know what the different types of cuts are - have a look here:

https://www.backstage.com/magazine/article/types-of-cuts-in-film-75730/

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Your images and film tests are quite lovely - really well done. It's clear that you are experimenting with these processes. Try to keep the camera more stable if possible - this helps a lot in making the shots look more professional. That being said, I really like the way you're thinking of the shots as a sequence. Finally, it would be good to test the visual collage/composition a bit further using your initial sketches.

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Great to see your research - your sketches have incredible detail, really well done. Would be great to think more about the collage as a composition that shows a slice of the city. I really like the film tests as a starting point. Perhaps play around with some of the other filming techniques we discussed as well: Pan, closeup etc.

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Nice sketches of Shanghai city - would be good to see some more collage tests, thinking about bringing them together as a composition. Great to see the film tests!! Try a few more of the filming techniques we discussed like panorama, zoom and/or closeup

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Great to see your sketches and drawings of the city. It's clear that you're looking at detail and composition. Perhaps think more deeply about scale and perspective - refer to some of the conversations around foreground and background from week 2.

Would be great to see some of the film tests as well!