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EOM 1

Notice

1. Very elaborate work

2. Gives background knowledge

3. No limits

Wonder

1. How long did this take to write?

2. Why was this so elaborate?

3. Why was the work so well written?

EOM 2

Notice

1. Has a good hook

2. Gives background information

3. No limits

Wonder

1. How long did this take?

2. What were the most important factors?

3. Why was the writing in a perfect format?

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Exemplar 1:

Notice:

1: They give background knowledge on the topic

2: Hooking people by being so broad.

3: They don't have any repetition.

Wonder:

1: I wonder why she stated the date before she put the evidence in?

2: I wonder why she introduced the evidence for the first piece of evidence and not the second one.

3: I wonder how she got the ideas for the essay.

Exemplar 3:

Notice:

1: The title font is different from the essay's font.

2: Unlike the first exemplar, he did not put the page number in ()

3: He did not repeat himself even when he was doing the evidence, he put different words, like for instance, and described that

Wonder:

1: I wonder why he put two different fonts in his essay.

2: I wonder why he used () and put the page number in () but did not in others.

3: I wonder why he put the line on the page in the page number. (Powhatan, line 4-6)

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NOTICE/Exemplar 1:

1. Great vocabulary usage

2. Very good transitions between paragraphs/transitional sentences.

3. Repeated some words like "abundant"

WONDER/Exemplar 2:

1. How long did it take to make it?

2. Did she use TheSaurus.com?

3. Why did she use very advanced vocabulary, but also sometimes use basic vocabulary?

NOTICE/Exemplar 2:

1. His first sentence was very powerful and made me want to keep reading

2. Uses imaginary scenarios to connect it to Jamestown.

3. He admired the enviormental factors that affected Jamestown but ultimately decided that the Social factors led to Jamestown's decline.

WONDER/Exemplar 2:

1. Why did he decide to use that opening sentence?

2. How long did it take him to make it?

3. Why did he use a imaginary scenario?

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1st:

Notice:

1. Very formative

2. Recalled Evidence

3. Thorough elaboration.

Wonder:

1. How long did it take?

2. How did she find her sources?

3. Why did she use both basic and advanced vocabulary?

2nd:

Notice:

1. Had a very good hook

2. Good use of vocabulary

3. He always brought his evidence back to the point of how environmental factors.

Wonder:

1. Why did he make it imaginative?

2. How long did it take?

3. Why was the conclusion short?

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Example 1

Notice

s/He used the size 11 font

s/He used the Times New Roman font

s/he hooked us in by giving us background info

Wonder

Do we have to use that font?

Do we have to use the font size?

How long should each paragraph be

Example 2

Notice

They used a different font

He used a very rich use of vocabulary

He thoroughly elaborated

Wonder

I wonder how long it took them to write

I wonder if the person made this using apps like thesaurus

I wonder if they picked the title themselves

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notice

1. It has lots of transitions

2. It gives the reader background information

3. It uses strong vocabulary

wonder

1. Is the font necessary

2. Why does he say the water didn't help with coming back when he was trying to prove the development?

3. Why is the title of BOR italicized

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Exemplar 1

Wonder

Why did he decide to start the essay the way she did?

Why did she decide to wright about Jamestown's social factors and not environmental factors?

Why did she decide to use specific transitions?

Notice

I noticed she used very good transitions

She supported all of her evidence with thorough elaboration.

She supported social instead of environmental factors.

Exemplar 2

Wonder

How long did it take to make

Why did she decide to use her opening stance?

I wonder if they or who picked the title

notice

The title font is different them the essay font

Uses figurative language to connect to Jamestown

She supported her evidence with very thorough elaboration.

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1st:

Notice:

1. Very formative

2. Recalled Evidence

3. Thorough elaboration.

Wonder:

1. How long did it take?

2. How did she find her sources?

3. Why did she use both basic and advanced vocabulary?

2nd:

Notice:

1. Had a very good hook

2. Good use of vocabulary

3. He always brought his evidence back to the point of how environmental factors.

Wonder:

1. Why did he make it imaginative?

2. How long did it take?

3. Why was the conclusion short?

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Exemplar 1

3 Notes and Wonders:

Notes:

1. She has excellent grammar that fits with her sentences.

2. Her citations are spot on.

3. She has good evidence for her statements.

Wonder:

1. I wonder what source s/he got the vocabulary from.

2. I wonder how long it took her to find the pages for the evidence.

3. I wonder how long it took her to find the right evidence.

Exemplar 2

3 Notes and Wonders:

Notes:

1. The opening sentence is captivating!

2. The work features terrific transitions throughout its sentences and effective evidence.

3. It has a strong vocabulary throughout the whole essay.

Wonder:

1. I wonder how long it took to think of the opening sentence.

2. I wonder how long it took to make those transitions.

3. I wonder what source s/he got the vocabulary from.

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Notes: She is using correct citations, and she uses strong words like 'abundant.' Another note is that she uses really good transitions.

Wonders: I wonder how long it took you to make this. I wonder if you had any problems when making it. I wonder if she stated dates in her sentences.

2

Notes: he is starting off with something that stands out to the reader. He is using strong words like tension. he uses good starting sentences. Uses really thorough evidence.

Wonder: I wonder how long it took him to find his evedences. I wonder how he found the words like tention. I wondered how long it took for him to get his opening sentance.

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Note

1. had asvanced vocabalary

2. She had a very good hook sentence

3. Repeated a lot of words

wonder

1. How long did it take?

2. How did they take to the thing in this story?

3. How did they do so advanced vocab.

3...

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notice

1. There is a very strong hook

2. There is thorough elaboration

3. There is strong vocabulary

wonder

1. Why does he add dashes to one piece of evidence

2. Why didn't he cite his evidence in parentheses

3. Why did he use present tense verbs