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Thesis Statement:

Palawan is one of the best tourist spots in the Philippines because of its beautiful and eye-catching attractions such as the Puerto Princesa Underground River and the Big Lagoon in El Nido, natural resources such as marbles and oil, and the honest of the residents. APPROVED

TS 1:
To begin with, Palawan provides plenty of beautiful and natural attractions such as Puerto Princesa underground river and Big lagoon in El Nido Palawan.

APPROVED

TS 2:
Second,  among all the natural resources found in the Philippines, Palawan is said to have abundant natural resources such as oil and marbles.

APPROVED

TS 3:
Third, the residents in Palawan are not only hardworking but also honest to the tourists.

APPROVED

Hook: Palawan is truly a paradise from its crystal clear waters to its white sand beaches and its beautiful pink-purple sky during sunset, truly a hidden gem of the Philippines.

APPROVED

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Thesis Statement: Coron, Palawan is the best tourist spot in the Philippines for it is home to countless exotic underwater species such as Barracudas and Groupers, various breath-taking sceneries (generic) , and an awesome unforgettable adventures such as diving and island hopping you will never forget.

EDITED: Coron, Palawan is the best tourist spot in the Philippines for it is home to countless exotic underwater species such as Barracudas and Groupers, it has various breath-taking places like Malcapuya Islands and Twin Lagoon, and it provides awesome and unforgettable adventures such as diving and island hopping. APPROVED

TS #1: Coron holds a countless amount of unique fish living  beneath their waters. These include giant pufferfishes, sharks ands rare seacows also known as Dugongs.  REVISE: Focus only on the content provided in the ThS

TS #2: Known for their wonderful natural environment, Coron is home to various breath-taking views that will amaze you. Places such as the Kayangan Lake, Malcapuya Islands and the Twin Lagoon. REVISE: Check the sentence construction. Kindly review the guidelines.

TS #3: If beaches aren't fun enough there are loads of fun activities one can do in Coron. The activities include island hopping, diving and hiking. Kindly review the guidelines.

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Thesis Statement:
El Nido, Palawan is a tropical paradise, with stunning seascapes such as the Big Lagoon and Bacuit Bay, spectacular wildlife like the Giant Gecko, exotic marine life, and not to mention the world-famous tourist attractions like Dilumacad River and Sibaltan.

EDITED: El Nido, Palawan is a tropical paradise with stunning seascapes such as the Big Lagoon and the Bacuit Bay, spectacular wildlife like the Giant Gecko, and world-famous tourist attractions like Dilumacad River and Sibaltan. APPROVED

TS 1:
First, El Nido Marine Life offers extremely rich and exotic species of sea creatures. REVISE: Focus only on the given examples in the ThS.
TS 2:
Second, El Nido, Palawan offers various species of spectacular wildlife. REVISE: Focus only on the given examples in the ThS.
TS 3:
Third, El Nido, Palawan is the Philippines' most famous tourist destination because of its beautiful beaches and remote villages. REVISE: Focus only on the given examples in the ThS.

Hook: Palawan is one of the most pristine, clean, and exquisite islands in the world. APPROVED

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WHITE - if the the ThS is not yet approved

PINK - if the ThS is approved already

YELLOW - if you are ready with your topic sentences

BLUE - if all the topic sentences are approved already and if you are ready with your HOOK

VIOLET: turn it violet if you're done.

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Thesis Statement: El Nido, Palawan is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its majestic sceneries such as the Small and Big lagoon, clean facilities such as public bathrooms, and objects with affordable price at ₱4,900 going there . SPECIFY THE 3RD REASON.

TS 1: The Small and Big lagoon has majestic sceneries that tourists come back for again and again. APPROVED
TS 2: El Nido islands make sure that all their facilities are clean and organizied for guests who come to the islands. APPROVED
TS 3: The lowest price going to El Nido is at ₱ 4,900, you can fly to Puerto Prinsesa and drive 5-6 hours going there instead. REVISE: How about the objects stated in the ThS?

Hook:

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Thesis Statement:
The White Beach in Boracay is one of the best tourist spots in the Philippines because of its enjoyable sunny weather, mouth watering food like lechon and fresh seafood, and lively adventures such as parasailing and windsurfing. APPROVED

TS 1: First, White beach has a sunny weather all through out the day. APPROVED
TS 2: Second, White beach serves mouth watering food like lechon and fresh seafood. APPROVED
TS 3: Third, White beach has a lot of fun and entertaining water sports such as parasailing and windsurfing. APPROVED

Hook: According to boracaycompass.com, the White Beach's sand is very white, powdery, soft, and never gets hot.

APPROVED

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Thesis Statement: Baguio city is one of the greatest tourist spots in the Philippines because it has a breath-taking scenic views such as the Valley of Colors and Burnham Park, a great horseback riding area in Camp John Hay, and also the Mt. Pulag National Park.

EDITED: Baguio City is one of the greatest tourist spots in the Philippines because of its breath-taking scenic views such as the Valley of Colors and Burnham Park, great horseback riding area in Camp John Hay, and Mt. Pulag National Park. APPROVED

TS 1: Baguio, with many places to explore, has a lot of beautiful places including Burnham Park and the valley of colors, where you may be very interested to visit and take pictures.REVISE: Review the content of your ThS.

EDITED: Baguio has beautiful places for tourists such as the Valley of Colors and Burnham Park. APPROVED

TS 2: When you are in Baguio, you may want to go horseback riding as Camp John Hay is the perfect place to do so. REVISE: Kindly review the guidelines.

TS 3: Lastly, Mt Pulag National Park is a magnificent paradise you should never miss when you visit Baguio.REVISE: Kindly review the guidelines.

Hook: If Baguio is such a great place to visit, then what exactly makes it famous? APPROVED

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Thesis Statement:
Palawan is the Philippines' best island because of its clean environment, extraordinarily beautiful views  like Puerto Princesa and El Nido, and amazing food like  Halo-Halo at Noki Nocs Savory House. (APPROVED)

TS 1: Palawan is known for its pristine water and clean beaches such as Nagtabon beach and Nacpan Beach.

(APPROVED)

TS 2: Palawan has extraordinarily beautiful views like Puerto Princesa and El Nido.

(APPROVED)

TS 3:There are many places to visit such as Noki Nocs and KaLui Restaurant

(APPROVED)

Hook: Palawan is a world class destination.

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Thesis Statement: Amanpulo is the best tourist spot in the Philippines for it is a private beach that provides their guests a comfortable staycation,
breathtaking milky way, and lots of activities to do  such as island hopping and snorkeling.

EDITED: Amanpulo is the best tourist spot in the Philippines for it is a private beach that provides its guests a comfortable staycation experience, breathtaking milky way, and lots of activities to do such as
island hopping and snorkeling . APPROVED

TS1: Amanpulo is the best beach in the Philippines for it is a private beach.

APPROVED

TS2: Amanpulo is one of the rarest beaches in the Philippines that has a really breathtaking milkyway.

APPROVED

TS3: Amanpulo can be enjoyed with various activities like kayaking, windsurfing, sailing, diving, island hopping, boarding on a yacht and dining in a private island while being served by hotel staff,  and snorkelling with a chance to see a "pawikan". REVISE: Focus only on the content provided in the ThS.

Hook: Amanpulo is unheard of to most people even to Filipinos. It is a luxurious and expensive island, yet why are there so many tourists in this island? APPROVED

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Thesis statement: Palawan is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its beautiful places such as the Honda bay and Tabon cave, the underground cave in Puerto Princesa, and _____________. REVISE: Kindly review the guidelines.

T1:  What's inside the underground cave in Puerto Princesa. REVISE: Kindly review the guidelines.

T2:  The beauty of Honda bay  and why you should go there    REVISE: Kindly review the guidelines.

T3:
Hook:

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Thesis Statement:  Boracay is one of the best tourist spots in the Philippines because of its phenomenal views such as its sunrise and sunset, outstanding food like Filipino-Castilian dishes, and beautiful beaches such as White Rock and Puka Beach.

EDITED: Boracay is one of the best tourist spots in the Philippines because of its phenomenal views such as its sunrise and sunset, outstanding food like Filipino-Castilian dishes, and beautiful beaches such as White Rock and Puka Beach. approved

TS 1:
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STEP 1: Post your thesis statement and wait for teacher's approval. STEP 2: While waiting, research on the important details for your chosen tourist spot in the Philippines. Take note of the WEBSITE/S for your essay's reference/s. STEP 3: When you receive an approval, construct your topic sentences (1, 2, and 3) based on your thesis statement. Wait for teacher's approval again. Then, continue your research.

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STEP 1: Post your thesis statement and wait for teacher's approval. STEP 2: While waiting, research on the important details for your chosen tourist spot in the Philippines. Take note of the WEBSITE/S for your essay's reference/s. STEP 3: When you receive an approval, construct your topic sentences (1, 2, and 3) based on your thesis statement. Wait for teacher's approval again. Then, continue your research.

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Thesis Statement: The Taal Lake in Batangas is the country's best tourist spot because of its fascinating Taal Volcano, the magnificence of its world-class beauty, and its biological ecology. (Kindly review the difference between ITS and IT'S.)

Edited: The Taal Lake in Batangas is the country's best tourist spot because of its fascinating Taal Volcano, magnificent world-class beauty, and distinguished wide-spread fame. (Specify the 1st reason

TS 1: First of all, the history of Taal Lake is one of the many reasons why it is loved by the whole world. REVISE: Do not focus on the history. REview the content stated in the ThS.

TS 2: Secondly, Taal Lake's magnificence is natural as it is attractive. APPROVED

TS 3: And lastly, Taal Lake's biological ecology attracts tourists especially enthusiasts to come, learn and enjoy. REVISE: REview the content stated in the ThS.

Hook: One of the many reason why the Philippines is such a beautiful country is because of its natural tourist attractions, hence the reason why plenty of foreigners love to visit. APPROVED

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Thesis Statement: Boracay is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of the beautiful beaches such as the White beach and Balinghai beach, delicious food like fresh seafood and suckling pig and relaxing environment.

Edited: Boracay is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its beautiful beaches such as the White Beach and Balinghai Beach, delicious food like fresh seafood and suckling pig, and relaxing environment. (APPROVED)

TS 1:First, the White beach is one of the most well known beaches in Boracay it has powdery sand that never gets hot while Balinghai beach is a smaller beach and a more private beach. REVISE: Do not add supporting details.

TS 2:Second, at Boracay you can eat delicious fresh seafood that you can buy from D'Talipapa and their delicacies such as calamansi Muffin and suckling pig. REVISE: Do not add supporting details. Kindly review the guidelines.

TS 3:Third, Boracay has relaxing environment that tourists can enjoy. APPROVED

Hook: Boracay is a beautiful place to visit, but what makes Boracay the best tourist spot in the Philippines?  APPROVED

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Thesis Statement: Tagaytay City located in Cavite is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its unique sights like the Taal Volcano and Taal Lake, stunning personal glass art and puzzle collections on display featured in Museo Orlina and Puzzle Mansion Bed and Breakfast, and its fresh farm to table food offerings at Breakfast at Antonio’s and Sonya’s Secret Garden. APPROVED

TS 1: First, Tagaytay has unique sights such as Taal Volcano and Taal Lake. APPROVED

TS 2: Second, Tagaytay has stunning personal glass art found in Museo Orlina that captures the heart of the tourists.and astounding assortment of puzzles in Puzzle Mansion Bed and Breakfast. APPROVED

TS 3: Lastly, Tagaytay offers fresh and delectable farm to table food at Breakfast at Antonio's and Sonya's Secret Garden.APPROVED

Hook: Close to Metro Manila, about a three hour drive away, is an underrated city that most tourists overlook, Tagaytay City. APPROVED

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Thesis: Palawan is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its nicely calm temperature, strong and safe security, and beautiful tourist spots such as Coron and Puerto Princesa.

EDITED: Palawan is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its nicely calm temperature, strong and safe security, and beautiful tourist spots such as Coron and Puerto Princesa. APPROVED

T1: Palawan is a great tourist spot because of its warm weather.

APPROVED

T2: Palawan is a safe place to visit because it provides strong security to the tourists.

APPROVED

T3: Palawan is a lovely place to visit because of its breath-taking spots such as Coron and Puerto Princesa.

APPROVED

Hook:

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Thesis Statement: Coron is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its many islands to explore such as the Malcapuya Island and the Coron Bay, perfect weather for vacation, and many underwater activities to do like snorkeling on a WWII Japanese Shipwreck and swimming in hidden lagoons at Twin Lagoon

EDITED: Coron is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its beautiful islands to explore such as Malcapuya Island and the Coron Bay, perfect weather for vacation, and underwater activities to do like snorkeling and swimming. APPROVED

TS 1: First, the Malcapuya Island and the Coron Bay are two of the best islands to explore in Coron, Palawan.

APPROVED

TS 2: Second, there is a perfect sunny weather for a perfect vacation in Coron.

APPROVED

TS 3: Lastly, Coron allows the tourists us to go swimming in coral reefs and go snorkeling under seas or lagoons.

APPROVED

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Thesis Statement: Palawan is the best tourist spot because of its beautiful beaches such as Coron and  El Nido, courteous people, and breathtaking mountains such as Mount Victoria and Thumb Peak. APPROVED

T1: Palawan has  the most beautiful beaches like Coron and El nido which are one of the most famous tourist spots in the world  and heres the reasons. REVISE: Specify here the examples.

T2: Here are some of the reasons why the people in Palawan are one of the most courteous , they serve you drinks and even show you where to go and here are the reasons why they are one of the most courteous. REVISE: Specify here the examples.

T3: Palawan's mountains are one of the most breathtaking mountains such as Mount Victoria and Thumb Peak and here are the reasons why. REVISE: Specify here the examples.

Hook:

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Thesis Statement: Cebu is a great tourist spot because there are a lot of historical landmarks such as the Santo Nino and Magellan's Cross, they have delicious food like lechon, and you can visit and swim with the baby whale sharks.

EDITED: Cebu is a great tourist spot because of its historical landmarks such as the Santo Nino and Magellan's Cross, delicious food like lechon, and fun activity such as swimming with baby whale sharks. APPROVED

TS 1: First of all, Cebu has a lot of interesting historical landmarks such as the Santo Nino and Magellan's Cross.

APPROVED

TS 2: Secondly, Cebu has delicious food like lechon.

APPROVED

TS 3: Lastly, Cebu has a lot of fun water activities such as swimming with baby whale sharks.

APPROVED

HOOK

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Thesis Statement: Although there are plenty of islands in the Philippines, Palawan has the most tourist because of its beautiful beaches such as Coron, El Nido and Puerto Princesa.
REVISE: Aside from the beaches located in Palawan, what else could be the reasons for it being a good tourist spot?

TS 1:

TS 2:

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Thesis Statement: Palawan is known for being the best tourist spot in the Philippines that grants happiness and euphoria to all because of it's unique culture such as having festivals and parties to surprise Birthday celebrants , fun and educational activities like snorkeling and scuba diving, and the irresistible beaches like Lagen Island and Minoloc Island in Elnido Resorts.

Edited: Palawan is known for being the best tourist spot in the Philippines that grants happiness and excitement to all its tourists because of its unique culture such as having festivals like Baragatan and Kulambo festivals, fun and educational activities like snorkeling and scuba diving, and irresistible beaches like Lagen Island and Minoloc Island in Elnido Resorts. APPROVED

TS 1: First, the outstanding and energetic festivals that can impress many different people from all over the world like Baragatan and Kulambo festival. (

APPROVED

TS 2: Second, Palawan's fun and educational activities such as snorkeling and scuba-diving.
(REVISE : This is not a sentence.)

TS 3: Third, Palawan's irresistible and beautiful beaches like Lagen Island and Miniloc Island both in Elnido Resorts.   REVISE : This is not a sentence.

Hook: Palawan, known as "The Last Ecological Frontier of the Philippines" is the 13th best island in the world. (PROVIDE THE SOURCE)

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Thesis Statement: Baguio is the best tourist spot in the Philippines for its cool weather, comfortable hotel such as Camp John Hay and Baguio Holiday Villas, and for its amazing tourist spots like Philippine Military Academy, The Bell Church, and Burnham Park. (Kindly review the correct usage of quotation marks.)

Edited: Baguio is the best tourist spot in the Philippines for its cool weather, comfortable hotels such as Camp John Hay and Baguio Holiday Villas, and amazing tourist spots like the Philippine Military Academy, The Bell Church, and the Burnham Park. APPROVED

TS 1: First, Baguio has a very cool weather that will keep its tourists relaxed.

Edited: First, Baguio has a very cool weather that will keep its tourists relaxed. APPROVED

TS 2: Second, Baguio has many popular and comfortable hotels like Camp John Hay and Baguio Holiday Villas.

Edited: Second, Baguio has many popular and comfortable hotels like Camp John Hay and Baguio Holiday Villas. APPROVED

TS 3: Lastly, Baguio has popular and amazing tourist spots such as The Philippine Military Academy, The Bell Church, and Burnham Park.

Edited: Lastly, Baguio has popular and amazing places for its tourists such as The Philippine Military Academy, The Bell Church, and the Burnham Park. APPROVED

Hook: Baguio is definitely one of the most famous tourist spot in the Philippines, but what makes it such a famous tourist spot? APPROVED

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Thesis Statement: Coron,Palawan is one of the best places to visit in the Philippines because its beautiful water forms such as  Malcapuya beach and Kayangan lake, try fun and exciting activities like  going on a nice hike on Mt. Tapyas and go shipwreck diving, and the hospitable residents.

Edited: Coron, Palawan is one of the best places to visit in the Philippines because of its beautiful water forms such as  Malcapuya Beach and Kayangan Lake, fun and exciting activities like hiking on Mt. Tapyas and  shipwreck diving, and hospitable residents. (APPROVED⁾

TS 1:

First, Coron, Palawan has the beautiful Malcapuya Beach which people certainly enjoy going to and the Kayangan Lake which is one of clearest lakes in all of Asia. APPROVED

TS 2:
Second, you can do fun activities in Coron, Palawan like going on a morning hike on Mt. Tapyas and shipwreck diving in search for the Japanese warships in the botton of the sea.  (Do not use add supporting details in the ThS. Do not use 1st or 2nd POV.)

Edited: Second,  Coron, Palawan provides fun activities like going on a morning hike on Mt. Tapyas and shipwreck diving in search for the Japanese warships.  APPROVED

TS 3:
Lastly, Coron, Palawan has very caring and hospital residents their amazing personalities also show on their amazing hotel service for example Corto del Mar Hotel and sophia's Garden Resort. (REVISE: Focus only on the content provided in the ThS.)

Hook: Have you ever thought of why people think that Coron, Palawan is one of the best places to visit in the Philippines? REVISE: As explained in the class, do not use a question that is answerable by 'yes' or 'no'.

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Thesis Statement:

Boracay is one of the best tourist spots in the Philippines for it has powder white sand beaches such as Bulabog Beach and Balinghai Beach, fun activities to do like parasailing and ziplining, and hotels such as Discovery Shores Manila and Astoria Current

(Too wordy. Do not provide supporting details.)

Edited: Boracay is one of the best tourist spots in the Philippines for it has powder white sand beaches such as Bulabog Beach and Balinghai Beach, fun activities to do like parasailing and ziplining, and hotels such as Discovery Shores Manila and Astoria Current. APPROVED

TS 1: First, Boracay has powdery white sand beaches such as Bulagbog Beach and Balinghai Beach. APPROVED

TS 2: Second, there are many fun activities that tourists can enjoy like parasailing and ziplining.(APPROVED)

TS 3: Third, Boracay provides hotels to its tourists such as Discovery Shores Manila and Astoria Current. APPROVED

Hook: Boracay is truly an amazing and beautiful place, but what makes it such a famous tourist spot? APPROVED

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Thesis Statement: Boracay is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its white sand beaches such as the White Beach and the Puka Beach, relaxing surroundings, and it feels like a tranquil paradise.

Edited: Boracay is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its white sand beaches such as the White Beach and the Puka Beach, relaxing surroundings, and tranquil paradise. (APPROVED)

TS 1: First, Boracay has many beautiful white sand beaches like the famous White Beach and the Puka Beach. that have fine white sand that many people find very soothing to the feet when it is walked upon.  APPROVED

TS 2: Second, Boracay has a very relaxing surroundings which stressed tourist find very calming when these surroundings are taken in.  for its tourists. APPROVED

TS 3: Third, Boracay has many features that make it a tranquil and peaceful paradise which many tourists love. APPROVED

Hook: Boracay is definitely one of the most beautiful and famous places in the world, but what makes it such an amazing tourist spot? APPROVED

Sources:
http://www.manilatimes.net/piece-paradise-serene-side-island/339276/

https://boracaycompass.com/white-beach-guide/

https://boracaycompass.com/puka-beach-guide/

https://boracaycompass.com/beaches-guide/

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Thesis Statement: Boracay is known as the best tourist spot in the Philippines for its scenic beach views such as the White Beach, the Puka Shell Beach and Balinghai Beach, fine white sand, and elegant resorts such as Discovery Resort and Shangri-La Resort and Spa. APPROVED

TS 1: Boracay offers the most scenic and picturesque beach views in the Philippines such as the White Beach and Puka Shell Beach.

APPROVED

TS 2: Boracay has the finest and whitest sand in the country.

APPROVED

TS 3: There are dozens of ravishing beach resorts in Boracay such as Shangri-La Resort and Spa and Discovery Shores.

APPROVED

Hook: Boracay is known as the most famous spot in the Philippines, but what makes this small island so alluring? APPROVED

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Thesis Statement : Baguio is one of Philippines' best tourist spot because there is a cool temperature, there are a lot of beautiful sights you could see ,and can pick Philippines' fine strawberries there. Note: Do not use 1st or 2nd POV. Do not provide supporting details. Specify the three reasons.

EDITED: Baguio is one of Philippines' best tourist spot because of its cool temperature, beautiful sights such as The Mines View Park and the Lion's Head, and a fun activity such as picking strawberries at strawberry farms. APPROVED.

TS 1: First, Baguio City has one of Philippines' mosy relaxing temperatures which reaches over 13 degrees, it already feels like air conditioning.  Do not provide supporting details.

EDITED TS1: Baguio City provides a cool temperature that tourists would love.  APPROVED

TS 2: There are many beautiful sights in Baguio City and two of them are The Mines View Park or the Lion's Head. APPROVED

TS 3: Lastly, you can pick Philippines' best strawberries which has the brightest color and the flavor really gives us an appetite. Do not provide supporting details and do not use 1st and 2nd POV.

TS 3: Lastly, a fun activity that tourists would enjoy while staying in Baguio is to pick strawberries in strawberry farms. APPROVED

Hook: According to  httfp://www.choosephilippines.com/go/heritage-sites/2609/10-reasons-love-choose-baguio-benguet/, Baguio City has one of Philippines cleanest and coldest environments and is a great spot for a vacation.

APPROVED

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Thesis Statement: Baguio is one of the best tourist spots in the Philippines because of its breath-taking environment, delicious local food such as Vizco's Strawberry Shortcake and Bulalo Steak in Sage, and amazing flower festival called Panagbenga Festival. APPROVED

TS 1: First, Baguio City has a breath-taking environment for everyone to enjoy.

APPROVED

TS 2: Second, Baguio has amazing food such as Strawberry Shortcake and Bulalo Steak. APPROVED

TS 3: Lastly, Baguio celebrates an amazing flower festival every year called Pangbenga Festival.  APPROVED

Hook: Feeling tired of the heat and pollution of the city? Come to Baguio, the summer capital of the Philippines.
APPROVED

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Thesis: Boracay is a great island that has delicious cuisines such as oyster sisig and seafood platters, a clean environment, and good facilities like clean rooms and good staff. REVISE the third reason.
TS 1: First, the delicious food like oyster sisig, sugpo and other seafood's are amazing to the tastebud's. REVISE: Focus only on the given examples in the ThS.
TS 2: Second, the place is fillled with palm tree's and clear blue water which makes a good environment for tourists and sea creatures. REVISE: Focus only on the given examples in the ThS.
TS 3: Lastly, their staff are always there to tend the needs of their guests and guests could sleep comfortably in their neat and clean room. REVISE: Focus only on the given examples in the ThS.
Hook: Is Boracay still an open tourist place? Are tourists enjoying their time there? REVISE: Provide a more catchy HOOK.

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Thesis Statement- Palawan is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its hospitable and welcoming residents, eye-catching beaches such as  Nacpan Beach and Banol Beach , and numerous activities to enjoy such as diving and eating halo-halo.

EDITED:  Palawan is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its hospitable and welcoming residents, eye-catching beaches such as Nacpan Beach and Banol Beach, and numerous activities to enjoy such as diving and eating halo-halo. APPROVED

TS 1:
The residents of Palawan are very approachable and will surely aid the tourists while they are on their trip.

APPROVED

TS 2:
EDITED: Next, the Nacpan Beach in El Nido and the Banol Beach are very eye-catching that will garner the tourists' undivided attention.

APPROVED

TS 3:
Diving in Tubbataha Reef and eating halo-halo in Noki Nocs Savory House are only two of the many fun activities that tourists may do while staying in Palawan.

APPROVED

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Thesis Statement: Boracay is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its blue beach waters such as the Puka Beach and White Beach, fun activities like Kite Boarding and Scuba Diving, and a peaceful and cooling breeze.

EDITED: Boracay is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its blue beach waters such as the Puka Beach and White Beach, fun activities like Kite Boarding and Scuba Diving, and peaceful and cooling environment. APPROVED

TS 1: First, Boracay has a lot of blue water beaches like the White Beach and Puka Beach.

APPROVED

TS 2: Second, Boracay has a lot of fun activities like scuba diving and kite boarding.

APPROVED

TS 3: Third, Boracay offers its tourists peaceful and cooling environment .

APPROVED

Hook: Boracay is the best tourist spot, but what can make the tourists realize that it is the best tourist spot?

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Thesis Statement: Bohol is the best tourist stop in the Philippines because of its beautiful beaches such as Doljo Beach and Alona Beach, hospitable people, and famous places such as Chocolate Hills and the Night Safari tour-Bohol-Bilar. APPROVED

TS 1: First, Bohol has magnificent beaches with wonderful scenery. SPECIFY
TS 2: Second, Bohol has hospitable people who are very warm and welcoming. APPROVED
TS 3: Lastly, Bohol has places that are very exciting and fun. SPECIFY

Hook: According to tripzilla.ph, Bohol is the 10th largest island in the Philippines?

APPROVED

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Thesis Statement: Sagada is a paradise that gifts its guests with euphoria because of the irresistible food such as their famous crusty lemon pie, unique tradition such as the mysterious hanging coffins and the relaxing scenery of nature.

Edited: Sagada is one of the best tourist spots in the Philippines that gifts its guests with euphoria because of its irresistible food such as crusty lemon pie, unique tradition represented by the mysterious hanging coffins, and relaxing scenery of nature. (APPROVED)

TS 1: Sagada is famous for its delightful lemon pie that has a sweet sensation any tourist's taste buds would crave for.

APPROVED

TS 2: Sagada's hanging coffins are clear examples of the indigenous practices of the Philippines.      APPROVED

TS 3: The relaxing scenery of Sagada's pristine nature comforts its guests. (OK)

Hook: They say no two people are alike; however, no matter how different people are from one another, they underwent the feeling of wanderlust at least once in their lives. APPROVED

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Thesis Statement: Palawan is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of it's beautiful landscape, delicious Filipino food such as the Chicken Inato and the Halo Halo, and many clear bodies of water, like the Linacapan  Island and the small lagoon in El Nido, to swim in.

Edited: Palawan is the best tourist spot in the Philippines because of its beautiful landscape, delicious Filipino food such as Chicken Inasal and Halo Halo, and clear bodies of water like the Linacapan Island and the small lagoon in El Nido. APPROVED

TS 1: First of all, The landscape of Palawan is very beautiful and rare.

APPROVED

TS 2: Second, there are lots of exotic and delicious Filipino food in Palawan like the Chicken Inasal and the Halo Halo.

APPROVED

TS 3: Thirdly, there are many clear lagoons, lakes, and other bodies of water to visit.REVISE: Focus only on the content provided in the ThS.

Hook: Have you ever wondered why Palawan is the first tourist spot people would think of when you ask them for a nice place to go in the Philippines? REVISE: Kindly review the guidelines.

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Thesis Statement: Tagaytay is one of the best tourist spots in the Philippines of its pleasant weather, fascinating view like in Tagaytay Highlands and the Taal Volcano and Lake, and delicious food like Bulalo and Josephine Resturant

EDITED:  Tagaytay is one of the best tourist spots in the Philippines for its pleasant weather, fascinating views like Tagaytay Highlands and Taal Volcano and Lake, and delicious food offered at Josephine's Restaurant. APPROVED

T1: Tagaytay has a pleasant weather which the tourists will love. because it is not to hot and not to cold

APPROVED

T2: Tagaytay has a really fascinating view you like the Tagaytay Highlands and the Taal Volcano and Lake. APPROVED

T3: Tagaytay's offers food that are so delicious like Bulalo and food at Josephine Restaurant.

APPROVED

Hook: My relatives tell me that Tagaytay is one of the best. So, lets better not miss a vacation there. REVISE: REVIEW THE GUIDELINES.

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Thesis Statement: Boracay is one of the best tourist spots for the summer vacation because of it's beautiful white sand beach, clean blue waters and calming environment and resorts to complete your dream vacation such as the Shangri-la's Boracay resort and spa and the Coast resort which are both rated 4 stars and above and both award wining hotels. Do not add supporting details in the ThS.

Edited: Boracay is one of the best tourist spots for a summer vacation because of its beautiful white sand beach such as Yapak Beach and Punta Bunga Beach, calming environment, and resorts such as the Shangri-la's Boracay Resort and Spa and the Coast Resort. APPROVED

TS 1:There are many fun and exciting activities to do in the island such as, scuba diving and exploring in the butterfly gardens.
REVISE: Focus only on the content provided in the ThS.

TS 2: Boracay has many beautiful whie sand beaches such as the punta buga beach and the yapak beach both beaches have white powder like sand and amazing crystal clear blue waters.REVISE: Review the content of the ThS. Review the guidelines.

TS 3: Boracay also has hotels and resorts that have fantastic service and hospitality, they both have amazing food and facilities
REVISE: Focus only on the content provided in the ThS.

Hook:

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Thesis Statement: El Nido is one of the best tourist spots in the Philippines because of its amazing diving sites such as The Paglugaban diving spot and The Entalula Island, friendly local people, and delicious seafood like grilled squid and fish and  garlic- butter shrimp. APPROVED

T1: First, the Paglugaban diving spot and the South Miniloc are is some of El Nido's best diving spots. APPROVED
T2: Second, the local people who work there are very friendly and polite to the tourists. APPROVED
T3: Lastly, the grilled squid and fish and the garlic-butter shrimp are some of the delicious food they offer to tourists. APPROVED

HOOK: My mother always say, "Palawan is paradise. Let's go to El Nido to experience that paradise." APPROVED

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Kindly indicate in the comment section your CN and the statement that you want me to check AGAIN.            For example: CN36 - Hook

If you received REVISE as a remark, kindly review the expectations and redo your work.

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The TITLE
>is creative and not a common one.
>has no quotation marks and is not underlined.

The INTRODUCTION
>has a creative hook.
>has a statement that connects the hook to the thesis statement.
>has the approved thesis statement.

The HOOK
>has a specific source if it is a quotation or statement.
examples:
According to touristspot.com, Palawan is _____.
Mother Delia once said that ____.
>is in 3rd POV unless it is a statement given by other person or a quotation. Then, provide the source.
>is CREATIVE and not just a simple statement or question. (Note: This is a challenge for everyone.)

The THESIS STATEMENT
>follows the correct format (PLACE + STAND (the best tourist spot in the Philippines) + 3 REASONS with specific examples.
>has no supporting details.
>uses only 3rd POV such as residents, people, they, their, them, it, and its.

EACH BODY PARAGRAPH
>has indention.
>has a topic sentence that is related to the thesis statement.
>has at least 4 supporting details that are directly related to the topic sentence.
>has a concluding sentence that summarizes the content of the paragraph
>has creative descriptions, sensory details or imageries to make a clear picture of the place/people/animal

The TOPIC SENTENCE
>is aligned with the approved thesis statement in terms of its content and order.
>has no supporting details.
>focuses only on the content of the ThS.
>is direct to the point and specific like the ThS.
>has 3rd POV only.

The CONCLUSION
>has a restated thesis statement. (Rephrase the ThS creatively. Add descriptions. Make your reader feel that your chosen spot is really the best for the tourists.)
>has no statement that is not supported in the essay.
>has a strong statement that will leave a strong impression about your chosen tourist spot.

The ESSAY
>has reliable references. (It could be printed.)
>is not plagiarized.
>has at least 5 descriptions, sensory details or imageries. (Kindly underline.)
>follows the 4Cs in writing: Content, Coherence, Correctness, and Clarity.