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Ohana means Family

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I think the dialogue is important because it gives a mini description of the paragraph.

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I think a good title would be "The Little Things"

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maybe a little more imagery in each of the memories. Like the feelings you have on the snowmobile or the way the crotchet hats felt etc.

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"Years To Remember"
- Kolby C.

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its a little long maybe pick your two favourite moment and combined them then use your last paragraph to end it and wrap it up

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What if at the you show a scene that shows/not tells what it is like without them?

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Starting each paragraph with dialogue worked pretty well to introduce the topic in each paragraph.

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You could shorten up your conclusion paragraph and take out paragraphs that weren't as memorable

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The piece isn't too long. The small moments in each story allow for the ending to be all that much more meaningful

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It seems a little long. If you were too remove a few of the vignettes it would be shorter and not feel like it is jumping around as much

-Alec

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I really like this

( playful, but mostly out for blood. )

- Katie

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A good title would be something like "unbreakable bonds with sisters" or "Sibling Memories"

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I like how you start with dialogue. It makes me think of how I am with my siblings.

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I like how you ended your writing with a lesson at the end... like not taking things for granted.

- Katie

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I like the little moments

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All paragraphs started with eye opening dialogue

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A good title would be " Life with Sisters."

- Katie :)