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Lily was done with her homework and had the permission to watch television. She remembered that her favourite monster movie had their very last episode. So she went to the living room excitedly and on the television. She thought it was cute and funny and thought that her brother would like it.

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When she called her brother he also wanted to watch it. But after a while, he thought that it wasn't so good for him. So he snatched the remote controller from Lily and changed the channel to a soccer match. She was shocked about what Tom did.

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One day Lily was watching her favorite cartoon so loud that David her brother heard the television .But he was up to something so when he came down he said Lily that is a nice show that you are watching he said, but exactly his plan worked in mind of David's i should not snatch it because she would be upset.

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Lily tried to take the remote controller back but Tom did not let her. Lily pulled the remote controller and Tom pulled the other side. They both let go of it and it dropped onto the floor. There was a loud crash! Tom and Lily exchanged worried looks on their faces and peek to see if the remote controller was broken. But when thet look down there were small peices shattered everywhere!

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Their Mother was inside the kitchen cooking dinner but when she heard the crash, she dashed out of the kitchen without cheecking on the vegetables first. She ran to the living room where Tom and Lily was. She shouted " Why is the remote controller broken?!" She shouted looking at the broken peices.
" We are sorry ......." said both Tom and Lily and they explained what happened. Their mother asked them to just play other things together. But when she headed back to the kitchen, she realised that the vegetables were burned.

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So David snatched the remote controller from Lily and she was unhappy about this case she was so upset that she thincked in her mind what did I do wrong to him and David watched his soccer match happily.

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But their Mother came in and left the fire still on in the kitchen while she was cooking bacon and rice for dinner and she heard a loud sound she thought she dropped something, so she looked at the ground of the living room and what she saw was horrible it was the tv remote she was shocked to see something expensive so she gave them a scolding and she told them you must take turns both of you or else you both can't watch the television for one week.

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Her brother ate quickly and told their mother that he did not have homework. So he could watch the TV,thats when bad things started to happen tom snatched the remote from lily's hands and changed the channel to the soccer match.

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Lily was done with her homework her mother assigned her and had the permission to watch the TV as it was the weekend. She was elated because her favorite show had a new episode and dashed to the living room. She found it funny and interesting so she decided to call her brother Tom to come and watch with her.

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Her brother Tom came and asked her what is the matter? "Look at this new episode it is very funny. Do you want to watch with me?" said Lily. "Ok!" answered Tom. After awhile, Tom began feeling bored and snatched the remote control from Lily.

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Their mother came at started scolding them "WHY ARE YOU TWO FIGHTING! GIVE ME THE REMOTE THE BOTH OF YOU CANNOT USE THE TELEVISION FOR A WEEK!" . "Sorry mama..."they responded. they learnt their lesson and never fought for this small things

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After Lily and her brother, Tom came back from school, they did their homework as quickly as they could. When Lily was done with her homework, she wanted to watch her favorite show so she took the permission to watch television.

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Lily was stemming hot that she was out of control so she wanted to hit him but she knew that it was wrong so instead they quarreled of witch show is better they quarreled day and night until something horrible happend .

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Lily was mad..(oh no!) she hit tom and tried to snatch the remote away. Her brother moved the remote away and hit lily back.then the started shouting at each other and their mother heard this

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Lily did not notice Tom taking the remote control from her and switching it to another chanel as she turned the volume too loud and her eyes were concentrated on the screen. "Hey!Tom give me back the remote control!" shouted Lily.  "Never!" exclaimed Tom. They both started to quarrel and arguing with each other about which show they should watch. Bang!The remote control fell on the floor. "Oh no we are going to be in trouble!"gasped Lily and Tom. Luckily,the remote control did not break as there was a mat on the floor.

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Lily had come back home after school. She ate her food, finished her homework and asked her mother for permission to watch the television. She was watching the TV when her brother came home...

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Their mother heard them quarreling and rushed out of the kitchen without out checking the soup. "What happened?"commanded mother. When  their mother looked down at the remote control on the ground,she bellowed "You two are siblings and you are supposed to be sharing!We are very sorry replied Lily and Tom. "What is that smell?" asked Tom. "Hmm...said mother. "Oh no the soup is burnt!" said mother. She rushed to the kitchen and was shocked to find the soup was splattered everywhere.

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Lily was enjoying the episode so much that she didn't even notice that Tom secretly took the TV remote control and switched the show. When she found out that he took it, she immediately tried to snatch it back. Unfortunately, she couldn't take it back so they started a quarrel.

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Lily and her brother Tom came back from school. Lily and her brother remembered that they had homework. Lily finished her homework first she asked mother if she could watch television. Mother said yes and she went to get the remote control watched her favourite monster movie. She thought her brother would like it so she called her brother Tom to come and watch it with her.

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Her brother went to her since she called him and watch with her but after a while he felt bored of it and snatched it away from her and switch it to a soccer match. She was shocked for what he did.

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Tom and Lily had just came back from school. They quickly do their homework. Lily was the first to do finish her homework and begged her mother to watch her favourite show on the television. Lily laughed and told Tom to come and watch. Tom thought it would be exciting and so he joined.

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She glared daggers at Tom when he refused to hand over the remote control.

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During the quarrel, neither Tom nor Lily gave up. They just argued, hit each other and shouted like gorillas and howler monkeys!♨ "Give me the remote control!" Lily shouted furiously.  "Never!"  argued Tom and they went on and on...

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After sometime Tom thinks it was boring and snatched the remote. Hey! Give me back the remote! Said Lily. No, I want to watch other shows.

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As the two fought, their mother heard everything when she was working. She stomped out of the room and scolded them for making so much noise and for fighting over little things.

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Lily wanted the remote control but Tom didn’t
let her. she was furious she snatched one end of the remote control and he pulled the other site of the remote control they pulled and pulled until the remote control slipped off their hands and it fell on to the floor and shattered into pieces. They both stared at the it with worried looks.

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Mother went to see what was going on and she saw the shattered remote control. She shouted :who did this! she pointed at him and he pointed at her. Mother was furious and Lily and Tom said sorry to their mother. Their mother asked them to play with their toys. When mother went to the kitchen the vegetables were burning and she remembered she forgot to turn off the fire.

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Mother heard the quarraling and stomp in to the living room without even looking at the food especially it was still cooking! Mother realise they are fighting for the remote and now its broken!

They were grounded for a week and will have to do 29 math, science, geography, history and English homework s from mother. Just than they smelled a burning smell. They rushed to the kitchen and something was burnt!

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'Lily and Tom quarreled and fought over the remote control. Suddenly, the remote control fell to the floor.'

Write:

'Lily and Tom did not want to let go of the remote control. Tom tried to pry open Lily's fingers. Lily decided to use her nails to scratch her brother's hand in order to gain an upper hand. To their horror, the remote control dropped to the floor and broke into two. They stared at it for more than ten seconds which felt like eternity. They could only imagine what their mother would do to them.

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They started a fight snatching the remote. I want to watch my show! No! I want to watch other shows! And suddenly something shattered. Lily cried in tears.

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Lily was done with her homework so Her Mother gave her the permission to watch her favorite alien show. Lily thinks that is was very interesting and funny so she also asked Tom to watch the show with her.

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Suddenly, Tom snatched the remote control from Lily. They started quarreling.

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Tom found the cartoon show to be boring and he remembered that his favourite soccer team is having a crucial match that day so he snatched the remote control from Lily and changed it to the soccer channel. Lily was shocked and shouted at him.

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When Tom came, after a while he felt that the show was kind of boring. So he snatch the remote from Lily's hand.

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Lily was shocked by what Tom did. Tom said "it wasn't even interesting" let's watch soccer matches. Lily didn't even like it too, so lily snatch back the remote and change it to her favorite show again. Tom decided to snatch it back but this time Lily hold the remote tighter. Tom was furious and raised his fist but he accidently hit the remote on the ground. "BANG"! there was a loud crash! They was shocked to see the remote shattered into pieces every where!

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When their Mother heard the quarreling, She ran out of the kitchen to see what is the matter. When she saw the remote she shouted angrily who did this! Tom and Lily pointed at each other and said he/she did it! Mother said whoever did this apologize right now! They apologize and decided never to do that again.

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One Sunday afternoon, Lily was watching her favourite show. It was so funny that she burst out in laughter because the monsters were talking gibberish.

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Tom wanted to watch soccer because he was done with his homework. Lily was enjoying watching her favourite show but Tom just snatched the remote control away from her. Because Lily always gets to choose what they are going to watch.

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“You are not going to get the remote control this time”, said Tom, “now it’s my turn to choose what to watch this time. Lily felt hatred towards her brother, but Tom felt happier than ever that he got the remote control.

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It was Sunday afternoon, Lily hop onto the couch and decided to watch her favourite disney cartoon. She had turned the volume abit louder that it has attract her little brother Tim attention who was playing right next to her.

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Lily was so into the movie and didn't realize that her brother already had the remote control until suddenly the movie change into soccer game.

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Tim and Lily yelled and fought each other over the remote control. Tim snatched it vigorously and without any attention the remote slide from his hand and fly directly to the screen tv.

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Mother overheard their argument and confronted them. Lily and Tom felt so guilty that they just went silent. Mother wants them to apologise to each and promise not to quarrel again. As a punishment, they are not allowed to watch television for the next 2 weeks.

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Crash!!!! They can hear Mrs Li footstep running from the kitchen towards them. Mrs Li was super shocked and scolded them instantly. They felt really sorry for what they had done. They cause alot of trouble. Both of them learned their lesson and apologized to their mother. Lily and Tim had promised not to do it again.

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Lily came home a few minutes ago and just finished her homework the teacher assigned them. She asked to watched television. On the other hand Tom had also done with his homework but he couldn't watch television.

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Lily suddenly found a movie that she thought Tom would like it. So she called Tom to watched it with her. Tom raced across the kitchen and Lily’s bedroom to the sofa. He sat on the couch and watch the movie. Lily was thinking of another movie. Tom heard a sound at the neighbours house “GOAL!” . He remembered the soccer match on the television. When Lily was about to watch another movie Tom took the remote control and switch it to soccer channel to watch it.

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A big quarrel started. Lily tried pulling the remote control and Tom’s hair but Tom’s hair is too short but she manage to grab the remote control. Tom tried pushing Lily away and grab the remote control tightly so she won’t take it. Both of them scream and fought crazily.

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Lily completed her homework upon returning from school and sought permission from her mother to watch one program on TV. She watched monster movie and found it interesting so she called her brother Tom to join her.

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Upon hearing Lily, Tom ran excitedly to the living area and watched the movie together with Lily. Suddenly, Tom heard his neighbor shouting "Goal" and realised there was a soccer match going on the TV. So he snatched the remote control from Lily and changed the channel to soccer match. Lily was shocked with what Tom did.

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After school, Lily came back home. Her mummy told her she can only watch television after lunch and completing her school homework, so she ate her lunch as fast as lightning and hurried to finish her homework so she can watch her favorite cartoon.

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She tried to take the remote control back from Tom but he did not give in to her. They both started pulling and pushing each other until the remote control dropped and boke into pieces.

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Their mother who was busy in the kitchen preparing dinner heard the loud noise and came out to check on what was happening. She was disappointed to see her children quarreling and the broken remote control. She asked both of them what happened. They replied apologetically that they accidentally broke the remote control and assured that they will not behave like this again. Their mother told them no more watching of TV and to play instead. After than she went back to the kitchen to realise the vegetable was burnt.

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While Lily was watching her cartoon, her brother, Tom heard the television was on, he immediately went to the living room,  snatched the remote control from Lily and switched to his soccer match. Lily was furious that Tom changed to his channel and screamed at him.

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Mother heard the loud quarrel outside the kitchen. She stepped out the kitchen founding the two of them fighting. She stomped to Tom and Lily with an angry face and scolded them “You are siblings you should take turns watching television!” Mother scolded Tom fiercely. “You do not fight with your brother!” Said mother to Lily. They apologise to each other and will never quarrel again.

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Both Lily and Tom started to fight for the remote control to watch their channel. They were snatching and pulling it from each other and the remote control fell to the floor, it broke into pieces. They looked at the broken remote control for 10mins and blamed each other for breaking it.

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Mom heard Lily and Tom fighting and came out from the kitchen to check on them. Lily and Tom told Mom what happen and was pushing the blame on each other. Mom was so angry and scolded the both of them, punishment was no television for 1 week and to apologised to each other.

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One day Lily went back from school, but when her mother asked her to do her homework instead she secretly on her favourite monster movie and mute but at the same time she also on the subtitle she find it fun and she tought if her brother watch it she tought he would find it fun too so she called Tom "TOM"!

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When Tom came half way doing his homework he came out with a "whaaat" and then his sister Lily said "come here Tom you should watch this monster movie its very fun"!, after a while Tom was watching and he said "this movie dosen't look good and he asked his sister if could watch next but his sister said "NO!" and thats when he remembered there was a soccer match so he quickly snatch the tv control and started to change to his channel his sister said " HEY YOU CANT TAKE THE REMOTE CONTROL LIKE THAT!" but Tom didn't listen as in his sister was talking to no one

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They were arguing non stop and then they were pulling the remote control it front and back and shouting crazily as in they are apes and gorillas they punch each other, they slap each other even their mom can't concentrate on her cooking, until this moment Lily and Tom were pulling the remote control and the remote broke INTO PIECES!

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When their mother came out of the kitchen she said "WHATS ALL OF THIS ARGUMENT ABOUT!?" and Lily said Tom snatched the remote control and Tom said no Lily started first, and they started pointing and staring their eyes at each other, they also started to accuse each other and mom said " ENOUGH THE BOTH OF YOU I TOUGHT I TOLD YOU GUYS TO STUDY WHY ARE YOU GUYS WATCHING TELEVISION AND NOW CAN YOU GUYS SEE THE REMOTE CONTROL IS BROKEN AND I HAVE TO BUY A BRAND NEW ONE!" both Lily and Tom was crying loudly and the three of them smelled something burning mother quicky rushed to the kitchen and said " NOW YOU SEE I WAS COOKING LUNCH FOR YOU GUYS BUT JUST BECAUSE OF ONE SIMPLE TV STUFF NOW THE DISH IS BURNED YOU GUYS ARE GROUNDED STAY IN YOUR ROMS I DON'T  CARE IF YOU HAVE SCHOOL BECAUSE NOW I AM THE ONE TEACHING YOU!". Lily and Tom apologise but their mom didn't acept their apology.

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One day Lily was done with her homework. She had permission to watch television. She like the show so much she turn the volume to max.

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Her brother Tom was jealous about Lily so he change the channel to soccer because he heard the neighbour said goal.

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Both of them got angry and shouted at each other. Then suddenly the remote controller drop on the floor and broke into two pieces.

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Their mother was in the kitchen cooking. Mother heard them shouting at each other. their mother shouted at them fiercely. Their mother told them to apologise to each other. Then mother smell something burning and ran to the kitchen. Lily and Tom did not know what to do.

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One afternoon during the school holidays, Lily was done with her homework. Her mother gave her permission to watch her favourite show. She turned on the volume so loud that it attract her brother's attention.

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Her brother Tom snatched the remote from her and changed the channel to his favourite soccer match. Lily was shocked and angry at her brother.

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They started to fight over the remote controller. Both of them don't want to give in. They pulled and pushed each other until the remote control dropped onto the floor and broke into pieces.

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Their mother who was cooking in the kitchen overhead their fight. So she went to stop the squabble. She was hopping mad when she saw that the remote control had broke. She scolded them for arguing and punished them by apologizing to each other and they are not allowed to watch the television for a week.

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Lilly was doing her homework , she peeked out of her room staring at the television thinking Mom was cooking so she wanted to watch the television she muted the volume to make sure no one can hear it. She was bursting in laughter in her mind her brother David saw how happy she was and felt strange how is she so happy ?

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David saw that Lilly was watching the television secretly he felt unfair why can she watch the TV when she was not done with her work . He wanted to tell Mother but then Lilly realis that David was about to tell mother .

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Lilly glared daggers at him . David raised his fist suddenly Lilly screamed out loud ''HELP ME" David punched her in the face Lilly punched him back .Just then David took the remote control and slashed it at the ground .

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mother heard their screams she rushed out of the kitchen without offing the stove WHY ARE YOU FIGHTING! Ah ah ANSWER ME but they did'nt dare to speak a world because they saw orange color light from the kitchen . Mom.... did you off the stove ah..... NO! Mom rushed to he kitchen it was caught on fire Mom called for help their neighbours they helped her after that their mother banned the both from watching television .

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Lily was done with her homework and she asked her mother whether she could watch  her favourite cartoons. And she mute the volume.

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When Lily call his  brother to come and watch the TV and the brother thinks that the          cartoon is not good enough so he snatch the remote controlled  and changed to Soccer.

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Lily was angry at his brother so Lily snatch the remote control and it drop onto the floor. Lily was quarreling with his brother.

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The mother was in the kitchen than she heard a loud noise she went out to see what happened outside she saw two of them were quarreling and she stopped the quarrel.

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Lily had just came home from school and got homework.She watched  the television after she had finished her homework.
She sat on the sofa comfortably and enjoyed watching her cartoon.Just then mother came back from her office and went to the toilet to shower. When she finish showering she went to cook lunch.

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When  her brother Tom came back from his school he went to the living room and saw his sister watching the cartoon.He heard his neighbour shouting GOAL!.Then he remembered that his favourite show of football has just started.So he went to take the controller and change to the football match. Lily saw what Tom had done and shouted, "Why did you change the CHANNEL TO FOOTBALL MATCH?!I HATE WATCHING FOOTBALL!."

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While Lily was studying, her mother called her to have her lunch. After she was done eating her lunch, her mother decided to let Lily watch TV. Lily's favourite show is the funniest monster show. She enjoyed watching it at the living room.

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While Lily was watching TV, his brother Tom came because Lily on the volume too loud. Tom took the remote control and he lower the volume. Tom also decided to change to his soccer show. Lily was so shocked by Tom's aggressive action.

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Tom snatched over the remote control from Lily because he wanted to watch his favourite soccer show. Lily was so shocking mad at Tom and she started to quarrel with him. She wanted hit Tom on his face angrily. Lily was screaming on top of her voice.

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After school, Lily had done her homework and cleaned up her study desk. She asked mother's permission to watch television's program. With the permission, she happily sat on the sofa and took the remote control to switch on the television. Lily started to watch her favorite cartoon program in Channel 5.

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Lily got home from school and sat down on the sofa. She was perspiring from the walk home. She took the remote control and switched on the television. Lily squirmed in delight when she saw her favourite cartoon playing.

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Lily's brother, David dashed into the living room and snatched the remote control away from her hand. He changed the channel without asking for Lily's permission. He wanted to watch the soccer match.

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Lily's face became very red as she was very frustrated with David's actions. She got on her knees and tried to take the remote control back from him. He quickly put it away from her.

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Their mother heard them arguing very loudly in the living room. She saw them fighting over the remote control. She told them to stop and said, "If this is how you want to behave, none of you gets to watch the television anymore!" She was very furious. David turned to Lily and apologized to her. He knew it was wrong of him to snatch the remote control away from her. "It would be unfair if you do not get to watch the television because of me", said David remorsefully. Lily accepted his apology and comforted him that they can always take turns to watch their favourite show on the television.

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In a while, Lily's brother (Tom) heard the sound from television. He came out from the bedroom and jumped onto the sofa. Without knowingly by Lily, he took the remote control. And then, he switched to another channel to watch football match. Lily was shocked by his brother action.

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"STOP IT, Tom!", shouted by Lily. Tom continue watched the football match and ignored Lily. In the same time, he showed his silly face. This action triggered Lily. Both of them started to fight for the remote control loudly with anger.

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They were fighting on what channel  they wanted suddenly the controller crashed on the floor and was worried that their mom would hit them so they went to their rooms and hide from her.Luckily their mom heard them quarrelling and went to the living room in a dashed of horse.She saw them running away so she followed in a silence.She also saw them hiding in the wardrobe hiding together.

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Their mother opened the wardrobe and scolded them for being so naughty and punished them.They felt guilty and they apologised and asked  for more chance. So their mother gave them more chance and when she went back to the kitchen she realised that the whole kitchen was in a fire and they all went to a new house.

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Mom heard them screaming loudly so she came over to check what has happened to them. Mom found out that they were fighting over the remote control because Lily and Tom wanted to watch their own favourite show. Mom was so angry that she scolded them. Lily and Tom was really scared so they stoped fighting. They were sitting down on the couch listening to mom talking. Mom said " why did the two of you broke the remote controller?!''

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Lily and Tom was fighting and causing the remote control fell down on the floor. When mother heard the "crash" sound, she was very angry. Mother scolded Lily and Tom angrily: "Stop fighting for the remote control! Switched off the television! No

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Lily and Tom was fighting and causing the remote control fell down on the floor. When mother heard the "crash" sound, she was very angry. Mother scolded Lily and Tom angrily: "Stop fighting for the remote control! Switched off the television! No more watching of television program for 1 month!" Mother taught them do not fight, should discuss nicely. Both of them felt sad and sorry. They apologise to each other and mother.