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5 December 2020
I went to Jurong Bird Park with my family. The interesting part is the bird show it will be better if there is more action. I was walking to see any birds around the place.

(1) Include descriptions about some of the birds that you saw at Jurong Bird Park.
(2) Include more descriptions of the bird show. What did the birds do?
(3) Include personal thoughts and feelings.
(4) Check for punctuation. End each sentence with a full-stop.

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28 December 2019. I went to Kidzania. It is very fun because I can make burger at the KFC after that I go to the police station to be a police at Kidszania it is so fun and I decided to go there again.

(1) Check for punctuation. Make sure you have a full-stop at the end of each sentence.
(2) Include a description of Kidzania. What are some of the stations in Kidzania? What kind of activities can you do there?
(3) Include personal thoughts and feelings.

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This is Doraemon Exhibition at the National Museum. There were many things to take photos but only Singaporeans can go upstairs so mother and grandma can’t go the upstairs . The Doraemon is cute but can’t touch it . It so funny and cold in the Doraemon  , after going home , me , my sister and brother said we can go there again ? My father and mother did not say anything.

(1) Describe some of the things you took photos of. Are the Doraemon statues very big and tall?
(2) Describe the day. Was it hot and sunny?
(2) Include your personal thoughts and feelings. Are you a Doraemon fan?
(3) What was there when you went "upstairs"? Was it another exhibition room? What was on display?

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Where did you go?
Who did you go with?
When did you go there?
What did you do?
What did you see?
Did anything interesting happen?
What was your favourite moment?

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Sengkang Swimming pool with my family and my cousins. That was on December 10 2017. It was so fun when I play with my sisters, my brother, my cousin and my another cousins. Me, my sisters, brothers, my cousin and my another cousins enjoyed it. At first I was scared when I go to the bigger slide, when i had to go  the bigger slide again i was not scared with my sister and my cousins. And when I go to the bigger slide again it was not scared and I go alone. And the funniest is when I go to the bigger swimming pool I was just looking I never see my brother behind he pushed me in the bigger swimming pool I was so scared and afraid. When my cousins saw me they helped me and then me ,my cousins and my brother play catching in the middle Swimming pool it was so fun, excited, happy and not scared and afraid.

(1) Use the pronouns "We" and us when you're talking about your family members and you.
(2) Check for spelling
(3) Be clear whether you're describing the activity or your feelings.

E.g. Swimming was very fun.
I was feeling very excited.

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In holiday my family decided to go Palawan beach. When we arrived me ,my sister ,brother and grandma together playing the beach . My father and mother decide to go to the bridge at first I was scared they tell me don’t worry you won’t get eat by shark .

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I went to Bird park when we are holiday and do finish homework we have nothing to do so mother decide to go.

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13May 2017 I go to ice skating I fell down an hit my knee but it is so fun and I try to skate again It is fun and I want to go there again and that is my date of birthday 

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13May 2017 I go to ice skating I fell down an hit my knee but it is so fun and I try to skate again It is fun and I want to go there again and that is my date of birthday 

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I went to Pasir Ris park we were walking everywhere around the place

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26 February 2021I went to hotel Rolex  the hotel is so big I enjoyed myself and also the bathtub is so big there’s three toilets

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I went to Botanic Gardens I was hiking around the place and it was so tiring

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I went to gardens by the bay it was so fun.

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I went to Changi Airport I was having fun When I have homework I will do my homework

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I went to Sentosa on 28 December 2020.I went with my family. I go to the Sentosa 11 a.m. the interesting place is I go to the Luge skyline it is very scary and quite.

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I’ve went to Butterfly park. With my friends. And it was very exciting.

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Darwisyah

This is Gardens by the Bay I went there at 2016.With my  family and my cousins.it was fun with my cousins because he had to do anything it was soooooo fun and we was soo excited.But not afraid and scared at all.

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I went to Wild Wild Wet with my family on a weekend I was very excited I wanted to swim at the lazy pool it was crazy i really like to swim at wild wild wet it was very fun.

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I went to Batam on 19 DEC 2019

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I took the Sentosa Express Monorail on 10 December 2020. I went with my family. I went (where?) to have fun with my family. I saw the cable car 🚡.the interesting is about  the cable car that goes very high . I wish I can go (where?) again because it’s very fun.

(1) Describe the monorail ride. Was it very crowded? Scary? Did you enjoy it? What did you like about it?
(2) What would you do if you visit Sentosa again?

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I went to Singapore Zoo on 29 oct 2016. I don’t live near the zoo.

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9 November 2011
It’s was my birthday that’s why I went there. (Where?) It was so fun. (What was so fun?) The water is clear and (who?) take a cool picture. I got picnic and camp so can sleep and play toy. I bring many things. My parents allow me to play with my other friends. I got ice cream and go to the McDonalds, I eat so many food until I vomit and feel dizzy so I went home to sleep.

(1) Check that your verbs are in past tense.
(2) Choose one activity to describe. You can talk about your picnic or camping experience.

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I was going Merlion park and fun, I take a picture with my family.
I ‘m going with my big family more fun that I know and it’s cool.
1 January 2018. I am going night. Go home 12 o’clock .the lion have light so i  am doing record and have sound ,very fun until I  am jumping.holiday time!

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I was going Sentosa  it was so fun and take picture , I was going with big family. 1 January 2018.

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Resort World Sentosa Singapore|Sentosa Singapore|Place to visit Singapore|Day look out view

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11 December 2019

I visited Chile with my two friends. We woke up at about 6 am and got ready for the long hike. It was 20km long!

The first part was easy but it soon started to rain and it got wet and slippery. By noon, we were all feeling very tired. My legs felt like they were going to break and my toes were numb.

At about 2pm, we finally reached the base of the three towers. It was a bit foggy but we still took pictures with the three towers. It was such a rewarding climb!

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Forgot the place. But I am scared only my brother can do that.It’s my first time to go the deeper swimming pool. Always happen,I excidentely fall down than my parents shocked than my brother rescued me.I say I don’t want to go there because the place was so slippery. That why.
Went,16 December 2012 when it’s holiday. Wet shirt because I didn’t change the shimming costume.

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I think we can put more verbs, use past tense or present tense

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We should include actions,

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We can use descriptions,

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Add more actions to make it interesting

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Put more effort

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Miss Han -
I live very near East Coast Park and I cycle there almost every weekend.

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I went to Singapore zoo on 19 December 2018

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I went to Cat cafe

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I went Science Centre

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These are called Super Trees. They are made of metal. They are gigantic!

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Ice skating

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I went to Dhoby Ghaut

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I went to Singapore Flyer

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I went to Sentosa

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It was so cold .

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This is Wild Wild Wet in Pasir Ris.

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I went to Suntec City

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Wani

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I went to universal studios with my grandma,mother and my brother
(Was it your first time there?)
We just go there to take pictures.we were happy. the interesting part is
The globe was moving slowly and it is so big. (What are the words on the globe?) The date is 1 Jun it was my little brother birthday. (What did you do after you left Universal Studios?)

(1) Include more personal feelings
and thoughts into your diary entry.
(2) What would you do if you visit USS again?

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I when sengkang swimming pool with my family I when on p3 holiday I play the the slides then play the higher level water then I go to the colorful slides and at first I was scared then when I ride I shout  then I go to the slide again then play with my family and i go to the higher level of the swimming pool then the wave was high then at last i go eat pizza

(1) Check for punctuation. Use Capital letters for names and add a full-stop at the end of each sentence.
(2) Check for spelling. "I went..."
(3) Check that all your verbs are in the past tense.

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I went to Wild Wild Wet at Pasir Ris. I went with my stepsister, stepbrother, brother and stepfather.  I went there at 20  December 2019  i played at the slide and i like to jump in the pool. I saw a lot of slides. There is interesting that happen i saw a big slide but only for adult can . My favourite moment is the big slide . I took it 5 times.

(1) Include a description of the day. Was it hot and sunny?
(2) Share your personal thoughts and feelings. What were you thinking of when you went down the big slide? How did you feel? Scared? Happy? How did you feel at the end of the day?
(3) Check for punctuation mistakes. "I" must always be capitalised.

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I went to the SEA Aquarium with my family on a holiday weekend. My favourite moment is the Hammerhead shark.

(1) Include descriptions of the SEA Aquarium. What else did you see there?
(2) Describe what else you did at the Aquarium.
(3) Describe how you felt when you saw the shark and your reaction.

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I went to Sentosa. I went there to have fun with my family. We took the Sentosa Express Monorail. The monorail ride was a bit slow and crowded. It was a bit scary. I enjoyed the ride.

I saw the cable car but we did not take it. The interesting thing is about the cable car that goes very high.

I wish I can go to Sentosa again because it’s very fun. I like the places and the monorail.

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Last time and the weekend I go there only sometimes in weekend.Me darwisyah

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I went to the Doraemon Exhibition  at the National Museum. It had air conditioning in it.Outside the National Museum , there were many Doraemon statues. All of them were as tall as my brother .

We took many photographs outside the National Museum. We can’t touch the statues , so my three siblings were extremely sad .

When we finish taking photographing, we went into the National Museum. It was gigantic ! My siblings and I saw a Dancer dancing. She danced very well. It was amazing!

It is free for Singaporean and PRs.But work permit holders need to pay $10 ,  to go upstairs. There were many places to go but we had no time , so we just went to look at the  LED and 3D lights. Colourful rays of light were all over the place. We had a lot of fun today. On our way home, my siblings and I asked our parents, “Can we visit  the Doraemon National Museum again? “ Sadly, our parents did not reply.

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Your sentence is short only. Just make little bit longer, ok. From Adawiyah.

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I went to Wild Wild Wet at Pasir Ris. It was hot and sunny. I went there with my step sister, step brother, brother, step father and mother. I played on the slides and I jumped into the pool. I saw a lot of slides. There is an interesting thing that happened. I saw a big slide but it is only for adults. I was very sad. But then my mother told me there a big slides for children. My favourite moment is when I went down the sides. I took it five times. At first I felt scared but later, it was fun. When it was time to go home, I was happy because I got to play with most of the family.

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That cool if you go there. I wish I go there. My dream not come true Wani.from Adwaiyah

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Cool place👍

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We should include the date and time and insert pictures.

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I went east coast park with my family and friends and my neighbour. me and my friends build the sand castle and I swim when I swim far away it was very deep I was very scared I did not dare to swim very far because there was huge ship. I even clean the up with my family and friends. And I eat delicious food with my family and friends. At the end, my family danced while we were playing.

(1) Use "My friends and I..."
(2) Check that your verbs are in past tense
(3) End every sentence with a full-stop.
(4) What would you do if you visit Sentosa again?