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Same, the boys need to build a more professional approach while creating a professional profile.

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Aisha was the most educated person her proffesionsl task looks good which means she is one of the best career oriented person

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Aisha has a better personal profile which explains all she had and ready to contribute to whichever company employed her, she was able to show her experience and ready to share it with any lucky company interested in her professionalism.

The rest personal profiles are unprofessional and needs a lot of adjustment most especially the first profile which use a lot of abbreviations and informal statements.

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Aisha profile was best she was very professionally branded her self

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Aisha's profile was more professional than the others.

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Aisha's profile very professional written

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Aisha has the best academically writing and professionaly.

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Sarah's Profile has a personal activity picture- doesn't look professional.

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Liams profile has an inappropriate images.

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liam did not additives him well but Sara did well

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On liam profile he need to be more professional

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Profile1 Liam-incomplete and irelevant.

Profile2 Sarah- profesional and adequate.

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1)

- The profile looks basic,

- The person could add more information about his experience

- He looks desperate for a job

- The grammar is not professional

- He could add more information about his education (eg the level or name of the uni)

the profile picture looks professional

The location

2)

- the profile picture looks professional

She uses professional grammar to write her experience

She didn’t write her uni name

She wrote information about her studies such as what she’s studying and the year of her graduation

The skills she added were so basic

3)

- The background doesn’t look professional

He could add more detail about his experience at the pub

He didn’t specify his location

The skill section needs more work

The education section could be more detailed

4) This profile is the best!!!

The profile picture looks professional

She specified her location

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Profile 1 - His grammar needs to improve,to present his skills in a professional way, is good that. Good thing is that he is studying in higher education.

Profile 2 - Good profile but needs more information. Cover photo too personal.

Profile 3 - Needs to change everything in his profile

Profile 4 - Professional and accurate.

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profile 1 have a good picture but its to vague

profile 2 its good

profile 3 its not good

profile 4 its very professional

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Profile 3 Jake Turner. Opening paragraph not written academically. List of jobs and education but does not contain details about what the roles involved.

Profile 4 Aisha Khan Strong academically written opening paragraph. Detailed work and education history. Professional head shot.

List of skills suited to the roles that she is interested in.

Profile 4 Is the profile that is presented the best because in contains all relevant information in detail.

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Profile 1

Good

Clear sections (About, Experience, Education, Skills)

Has work experience (retail job)

Shows responsibility (opening shop, working tills)

Mentions customer service

Includes soft skills (teamwork, fast learner)

❌ Bad / Needs Improving

Very informal language (“im”, “uni”, “lol”, “n stuff”)

Spelling and grammar mistakes

“About” section sounds casual and vague

Skills are too basic and not detailed

No dates for education or job

Profile 2

Good

Professional language and tone

Clear and well-structured sections

Strong personal summary (clear career interest)

Work experience includes dates

Bullet points are detailed and specific

Mentions relevant skills (Excel, time management)

Shows teamwork and retail experience

Looks professional overall

Could Be Better

Profile picture (skydiving) is not very professional

No measurable achievements (e.g., sales targets, results)

Skills section could be more detailed (e.g., level of Excel)

No extra activities, volunteering, or certifications

Profile 3

Good

Clear layout with sections

Has work experience (bar staff)

Shows customer service experience

Mentions interest in marketing and social media

Includes teamwork and people skills

States degree subject

❌ Needs Improving

Very informal language (“uni”, “loads”, “good job”)

About section is vague and basic

No dates for job or education

Job duties are too simple and not detailed

No achievements or results mentioned

Skills are too general

No technical skills listed (important for marketing)

Profile 4

Good Points

• Clear professional headline (degree + final-year status)

• Concise and relevant personal summary

• Experience directly linked to business/admin roles

• Bullet points are clear and easy to read

• Shows both work experience and university project experience

• Includes location (useful for recruiters)

• Skills section matches experience (Excel, communication, teamwork)

• Demonstrates part-time work alongside study (good work ethic signal)

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❌ Areas to Improve

• Achievements are not quantified (no numbers, results, impact)

• Responsibilities listed, but not outcomes

• No LinkedIn URL or contact details visible

• Education section is very brief (no key modules or grades)

• Skills are generic — could be more specific (e.g., Excel functions used)

• No extracurriculars, leadership roles, or volunteering

• Formatting looks more like a LinkedIn profile than a tailored CV

• No clear career focus (e.g., finance, marketing, operations)

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Profile 2 Sarah Ahmed. Professionally written opening paragraph. Includes education and employment history but has limited content.

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Profile 1 Liam Parker. Unprofessionally written profile. No capital letters or punctuation, Worded like it is a text message to a friend.

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The last profile was the best one.

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I think the last profile was better and more informative. The only thing that was relevant was the background.

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The profiles show clear job titles and relevant experience, which creates a good first impression. The layout is professional and easy to follow.

However, some profiles need stronger personal summaries and clearer presentation of skills and achievements. Adding measurable results, certifications, and recommendations would improve credibility. Overall, the profiles are good but could be stronger with more detail and clearer career goals.

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Profile 4 stand out for me.

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Last profile was very professional compared to the rest

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The last profile was more professional, was giving out alot of information more key catching

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The last proffile looks more professional than others

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The profiles have some strong points, such as clear job titles, relevant work experience, and a professional layout. The use of profile photos and basic summaries helps create a first impression.

However, there are also areas for improvement. Some profiles lack a strong personal summary and do not clearly highlight key skills or achievements. Adding measurable results, certifications, and more detailed descriptions of responsibilities would make the profiles stronger. In addition, improving consistency in formatting and including recommendations could increase credibility and professionalism.

Overall, the profiles are a good starting point but would benefit from clearer career goals, stronger summaries, and more evidence of achievements.

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Aysha’s profile is more professional than others.

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The last profile looked more professional and more informative.

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Everyone

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The first and third are unprofessional , the second is complete but still missing details, and the last one is the most complete. A good hint in learning how to create a profile

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Aisha's profile was the best, but there is still room for improvement.

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Aisha's profile is the best as she included everything but needed to give more details . She also wrote in a formal way.

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Profile 4

It is in a professional and academic manner, structured well, however she should have mentioned the University she is graduating from and the month. Also enhance more on her skills list and elaborate more.

Add her hobbies and interest.

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Very Interesting teach me how to creat and build a strong profile on linked in

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The Aisha profile was professional, formal spelling.

She need to detail more her skills and education.

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Aisha's profile was good Liam needs to work on his profile

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The boys need to take a more professional approach to creating a profile

Sarah & Aisha needs to work a bit more on her profile, possibly taking

some professional guidance.

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The first profile wasn't professional.

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The second profile was more detailed on what the person was experiwnced in qand had more background on the person.

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The first profile was not insightful enough about his experience

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The first Linked I'm profile was unprofessionally developed, and was not detailedor specific enough.

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The first profile was unprofessionally developed