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Your introduction is excellent- especially the statistic you provided in the hook. It made me want to keep reading!
One thing to work on is maybe incorporating more transition words in your writing. Instead of using "also" all the time, you can use "furthermore", "moreover", "additionally", etc.
Great job! :)

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Your speech was great, and you even did some research!!
One thing you could improve on is to complete the speech before speaking, so you don't need to say it that it is incomplete.

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your introduction was good, it instantly hooked me onto ur speech!

i think you could prepare more

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ur speech was very well written and organized

i think you could add more sources?

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You could of used better punctuation.

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- You had good reasons and amazing evidence
- I think you could just do a bit more editing just for capitalization, but otherwise it's really good

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You had really great reasons and evidence! Next time, you may also try to focus more on capitalization and punctuation.

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You had an awesome speech with many details and even research!
One suggestion is to use more voice variety to speak, so people don't get bored soon.

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I like all your evidence and details! I also like your hook!

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it was well explained

however you could use some research

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It was a really solid essay with lots of evidence.

The ending was a bit confusing though. Are you speaking for banning books or for books?

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I think it was a fantastic topic and essay.
You said a lot of stuff that wasn't in your essay. You should try to add that stuff in.

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I like the topic, and the way you wrote your piece! Also maybe add some research too!

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I loved your evidence, and the conclusion was amazing. Your reading was really smooth with almost zero errors, and I loved your use of voice.

I think you could improve on your use of more Ethos, with more informational evidence and explaining your sources. Otherwise, I think you did a great job.

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I liked the evidence. I think you could use a bit more source citing though.

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I like all of the evidence and the details! The way you write it makes me feel like your writing is trustworthy!

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ur reasons were very valid, felt like i could believe them

maybe more citing?

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I really like all the great vocab, and also the names of a lot of things were very impressive. Maybe you can add a bit more explanation about your sources, and also add more details or specific examples, but otherwise really good job.

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But the real question is whether it is milk first or cereal first

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But the real question is whether it is milk first or cereal first

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ur speech was so well written, i loved the beginning, it was engaging and eloquent

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wait if cereal is cereal with milk then what is cereal without milk

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wait if cereal is cereal with milk then what is cereal without milk

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I like the evidence and the details too! Also i like how funny the essay is.

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AMAZING! Very funny, and soooo interesting. I laughed the whole time nonstop, and it was so, like, well, I don't know if I'll ever forget that. it was overall very funny full of evidence.