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The thesis seems to come later into the essay rather than in the initial introduction/first para making it hard to tell where the essay is going

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The thesis seems to come later into the essay rather than in the initial introduction/first para making it hard to tell where the essay is going

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No direct link to the question - context without content/focus

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No direct link to the question - context without content/focus

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Know some context/history is a loose reference to style - some argument does emerge in last para

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Know some context/history is a loose reference to style - some argument does emerge in last para

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confused which part of section engaging with & stop/start structure

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confused which part of section engaging with & stop/start structure

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no signposting of what texts they're going to talk about

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no signposting of what texts they're going to talk about

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thesis statement or what its interpreted as (so first sentence) seems unrelated to the rest of the essay

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thesis statement or what its interpreted as (so first sentence) seems unrelated to the rest of the essay

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addresses which part of question it is answering (c) but doesn't engage with any terms of the quote at all

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direct challenge to question needed and further use of unpicking quote, maybe definitions etc.

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direct challenge to question needed and further use of unpicking quote, maybe definitions etc.

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the intro also didn't reference the question or 'moral profit' specifically

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Does not address the question which asks about 'moral profit'.

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The specific references to chartism etc feels like a good connection to precise history 

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The specific references to chartism etc feels like a good connection to precise history 

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reference to chartism was impressive showed good understanding of context

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reference to chartism was impressive showed good understanding of context

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Not very clear on any sense of definitions (of 'style', 'prose' etc?)

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Not very clear on any sense of definitions (of 'style', 'prose' etc?)

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gaskell comes a bit randomly which links to a need to have it in the introduction

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gaskell comes a bit randomly which links to a need to have it in the introduction

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Historical context in terms of chosen texts is relatively strong

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Historical context in terms of chosen texts is relatively strong

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no links between paragraphs connecting ideas and the argument wasn't outlined

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no links between paragraphs connecting ideas and the argument wasn't outlined

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needs to unpack terms of the question

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leaps into focused arguing without making clear an overarching thesis

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leaps into focused arguing without making clear an overarching thesis

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takes too long for main point to be put across in the essay

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there was a thesis statement but it didn't make sense

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there was a thesis statement but it didn't make sense

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'moral profit' is not defined or explored enough (and then not explored in relation to the other terms of the prompt Q)

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the context didn't advance the argument and there seemed to be no argument 

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the context didn't advance the argument and there seemed to be no argument 

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introduction is not clear and does not show what is going to actually be argued in the essay

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clear reference to question - and specific focus allows for indepth analysis

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clear reference to question - and specific focus allows for indepth analysis

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immediately signpost what texts they are going to use to focalise their argument

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immediately signpost what texts they are going to use to focalise their argument

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direction that is given in introduction is sustained throughout the body of the essay

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direction that is given in introduction is sustained throughout the body of the essay

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Maybe a explicit link to urban life in the last sentence rather than the discussion of analysis - or just to supplement in - just to really tie to quote (for confusing box!)

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Maybe a explicit link to urban life in the last sentence rather than the discussion of analysis - or just to supplement in - just to really tie to quote (for confusing box!)

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Maybe a broadening beyond dubliners - show awareness of joyce's other works/ broader Irish literature 

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Maybe a broadening beyond dubliners - show awareness of joyce's other works/ broader Irish literature 

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Most of the introduction is relevant to the question and talks about the city, but the thesis statement at the end does not clearly relate to the topic