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I think the example 3 is a very good example of feedback that the student can use to improve their essay while not being discouraged to write the next. It gives also enough direction to the students for a better grade - however, I would have thought using some examples from the essay (or giving some examples on how to 'adopt greater analytical tone' would have helped the student more.

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I thought the feedback is providing a good guidance on how to improve the essay but focuses mainly (if not only) on the negative aspects of it. It might be better to point out at least one or two good thing that the student did to encourage them in writing more.

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In my opinion inappropriately written (imho)

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In my opinion inappropriately written (imho)

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I think this is a derogatory way to write a feedback - good that they use an example but it does not seem a constructive feedback to me (leaving alone whether the student would be too discouraged to attempt another work).

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The feedback is nicely put - but in my opinion needed to use some examples from the student's work to point them out the details more. It could have also used pointing out some positive aspects of the student's writing.

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The way it's written is not wrong, but might not be helpful. Wording includes teaching jargon that links it well with the official assessment criteria, but, as a result, it's not specific enough, which makes it not very actionable.
Student might ignores this or seek further comments from the marker.

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Feedback is too informal and inappropriate, even rude. It is also not actionable. Good idea to attach feedback to specific passages in the submission.
Student will feel discouraged and will rightly file a complaint.

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Bullet-point list format looks effective. Positive feedback is well-worded and sounds encouraging. Suggestions for improvement are a little vague and not quite actionable.
Student might need to seek further comments from the marker, but will feel encouraged to do so.

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This example seems to be most specific and actionable, but it doesn't include any examples of what was done well.
Student might feel discouraged. They'll have a clearer idea of how to improve, but might still need to seek further comments from the marker.

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Bullet points can make it easier for the student to understand the different comments. It is also a good idea to add the positive part first, and the "suggestion for improvement" later on.

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They could have put the basic grasp of economic theory as a positive point for instance. We do face some non-sense essays sometimes, and it might be better to explain the lack of coherence and vagueness in a more neutral manner

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Also agree with more detailed information and providing examples. This could also be done in-text when correcting them online. I think in-text comments are also quite helpful.

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Only negative comments, too short and with no examples.

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Aggresive language, focused only on the negative sides.

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Balanced analysis, even negative points are described as ways to improve in the future. Bullet points help visualization.

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Better language and structure than examples 1 and 2. There are some comments to be improved. But still too negative.