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Essay 1:

This is a very good introduction

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Clear language and explicit focus on KQ

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Structure is easy to follow and there is a clear sense of direction.

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The example is personal, original (could be bett

er used)

and reasonably used.

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The distinctions that are to be made in the essay are clearly indicated, and in the final lines there

is a clear thesis which is, presumably, to be explored in the body of the essay.

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The term “

certainty

” is clarified concisely without a dictionary.

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It is interesting.

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Essay 2:

This is a very poor introduction

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This could be said to be focussed on the KQ of the question, but as it is simply re

-iterating rather

than exploring the issues, there is little credit; one would need to see som

e development.

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The use of a dictionary adds nothing to the essay; there is no indication that the student

understands what these quotes mean.

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There is no specific direction for the essay.  It says little more than “

I shall answer the question”

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Essay 3:

This is a good introduction

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Clear and explicit focus on KQ

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The initial juxtaposition is thought

-provoking and original, though the smoking example needs a

reference.

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Clear language.

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Original, personal example is very well used.

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It is certainly possible t

o use the term “

true

” in addressing this title

, but using this problematic

term in line 3 as if it were clear, only to say in line 11 that it will not be discussed in the essay, is

unwise and confusing.

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The direction of the essay is clearly outlin

ed in the

last two lines, but these really say no more

than “

I shall investigate the question”

. Some more detail, or a thesis, would help.

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It is interesting.

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Essay 4:  This is a good introduction

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Clearly focussed on the KQ of the question, but while it does explor

e (cf essay 2), it does not not

explicitly develop the ideas (cf essay 1). Of course, this development may come later in the

essay.

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Clear, simple language; interesting and an excellent personal voice.

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Shows a clear and direct understanding of the title.

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Th

e last two lines do hint at a direction “

...should we want to...”

, but there is room for a little

more in this respect.

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One could add explicit KQ by modifying the last sentence to “In this essay I shall explore the

questions

Why do different sourc

es of knowl

edge conflict?

and

Can we resolve all such

knowledge conflicts?  When we can, should we?

For this latter question, I shall argue the answer

is a surprising ‘no’.”