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Obviously most everyone would agree, that Gaspar de Portola's early life, expeditions, and accomplishments were very important to what is California today. I think that Portola is a very important explorer and I wonder if you do to?

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Obviously most everyone would agree, that Sebastian Vizcaino's early life, expeditions, and accomplishments were very important to what is California today. I hope people in our time will continue what Vizcaino Drake and other explorers started.

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As you can see Portola’s early life, expeditions, and accomplishments have helped to shape California. How might California be different if Portola hadn't led the Sacred Expedition and established the first two presidios?

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