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Nowadays, people's lives are gradually complete, the quality of life is increasingly improved, so technology items appear more and more. Especially computers when there are children in every house, they are exposed quite early and are interested in playing games. That has negative consequences for children's cognition.

Several reasons can explain why computer games are harmful to children. Firstly, children who are exposed to fighting games are often prone to violence. This is because not good at all because children are often not self-aware of what is a bad thing not to do. The second thing is that when children use video games too much, their eyes will be nearsighted. It is easy to see a child as young as 7 years old who is 2 degrees nearsighted and this will only increase. Not only can electronic waves have a great influence on the brain of young children. they affect directly at very close distances and for a long time.
However, there are various workable solutions that parent could take to tackle the problem.

The initial solution is that parents can let their children play with friends more, especially outdoor activities, or can let their children go to parks so that they can be more physically active instead of playing games. Parents can let their children play with friends more, especially outdoor activities, or can let their children go to parks so that they can be more physically active instead of playing games.

In conclusion, this problem stems from several reasons, but parent or schools could implement a range of measures to address this problem. If children were given more attention and attention, perhaps the harm from computers would not be so serious.

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In the 21st century, along with the advancement of technology, computers are easily accessible for a majority of people, and a variety of eye-catching video games, it is arduous for the young to resist the appeal of immersing themselves in them. The most detrimental effect of that phenomenon is preventing some children from concentrating on their more essential priorities in their real lives,  and probably the most viable resolution is to regulate the time they spend playing them.

One of the significant demerits caused by sitting for hours in front of virtual games is to stop children from doing important things to evolve into the best version of themselves. This may be explained by the fact that video games have a great influence on adolescents physically and mentally, especially in being addicted to playing games. As a consequence, academic validation can suffer a drop-down, and the chronic lack of sleep may lead to some health problems such as stroke. All the detrimental effects are exemplified by the teenagers' addiction to League of Legends in Vietnam.

One possible solution for parents would be to restrict the duration spent on computer games and substitute them with extracurricular activities. If some children engage in meaningful outdoor activities, they could acquire valuable experiences and liven up their lives. For instance, being a delegate for the Summer Camp of Wave Vietnam "Find Color Find Me" is an enormous opportunity to navigate our future and have better self-awareness.

In conclusion, this problem stems from several reasons, but an effective solution is to limit the time for playing computer games and replace them with healthier outdoor activities. If the parents do not start addressing the issue of addiction to video games, the victims will suffer more and more detrimental effects.

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The essay could be improved by providing more specific examples to support the main points. The central topic is presented clearly within each paragraph. However, the paragraphing could be improved to enhance coherence and cohesion.

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Recently, the large number of people getting access to computers have led to the most computer game player is children. The biggest problem of this phenomenon is the barrier of the children from many important things, and probably the best answer is to control their computer playing times by the parents.

As the increasing number of children play computer games owing to the development of technology, more and more children will become ignored with many prominent things in their teenager. This is because of the addition of playing computers games stems from having been playing the video games for a long time or the concerntration of their parents  to the works more than their children. If this problem continues, children can't suffer from the school work, even it may affect to their mental and physical health, such as eye diseases and obesity. For example, in Vietnam, some teenagers addicted to League of Legends.

However, there are various workable solutions that parents could take to tackle them. The initial solution is that parents should restrict time that they play computer games, at least 1 hour a day, and substitue outdoor sports for their children. Since teenagers can enrich their lives with more healthier lifestyle and better skills in stead of just playing games. A good example for this is many parents has rencently encouranged their children to play soccer and join in many social activities in summer time such as Hoa Phượng Đỏ.

In conclusion, this phenomenon causes a major harmfully problem which is making children just focus on playing computer games and ignore the important things that they should do, but parents could implement a range of measures to adress this problem such as controlling their playing game time and let them participate in outdoor activities. Moreover, school and government play an crucial role in this problem, in any rate, this issue can be effectively solved if we have the connection.

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In the era of technology, the usage and availability of computers have changed at an unprecedented rate. The computer has become significantly important to the masses since it certainly helps in various aspects for working people. However, children are also using computers for their recreation on a large scale; they play digital games on computers. And there are negative impacts associated with them.

Playing video games can have negative effects on the brain, memory, vision, physical health, stereotyping, and risk-taking. Some of these effects depend on the type and content of the games. For example, overplaying computer games can lead to weak eyesight and obesity in children. Furthermore, playing video games, especially online games, could lead to addiction. Millions of dollars are spent to make computer games so that they attract a large audience and keep them glued to the screens. So they are addictive by design. And this obsession hampers children's outdoor activities, studies, and even time to socialize and learn important life skills.

To minimize the bad effects of playing computer games, it is important for parents to monitor their children's gaming habits and set limits on the amount of time they spend playing. Encouraging children to engage in other activities such as sports or creative pursuits can also help reduce the negative impacts of playing computer games. Another way for parents to reduce the effects is to use parental control over the digital content and games their children watch or play. These measures would deter children from downloading and playing games that are not suitable for their age.

In conclusion, while playing computer games can be a fun pastime for children, it is important to be aware of the potential negative impacts and take steps to minimize them. By setting limits on gaming time and encouraging children to engage in other activities, parents can help their children enjoy the benefits of playing computer games while avoiding the negative effects.

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