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Background music a little distracting. I was kind of confused. A few tweaks would make it better. Keep going!

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Try not to use however so many times

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A lot of information, difficult to follow

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Is there a significance to the counter on the bottom? If not, crop it?

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Change tone of your voice occasionally

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Sometimes background music too loud

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Background music 👎🏻

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Use other footage than 220297

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Check to make sure no repets

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Definitely make sure the clips match what’s happening on the screen 

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Definitely make sure the clips match what’s happening on the screen 

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Voice was often same level as music

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Nice graphics

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On your title screen it might say “telegran”

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Watch the spelling on that first title card.
The video was being played somewhat quietly.
Background music was a bit loud, or you were talking a bit quietly.
"However" was said very often. Try fixing that
Attempt to remove the watermark over most to all of the video