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Positive :
good point
Good structure
Area need to improve:
write down the references
Grammatical mistakes

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positive：Smooth and fluent sentence structure.
Academic viewpoints
negative：Not enough references,poor coherence

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Positive:
Used clear APA referencing
Flurent language with academic words
Areas to improve :
Sources need to be stronger
Improve citation methods

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good point
one positive aspecst
good Vocabulary
gammar need to improve
need more references

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positive：include 9 references
have logical structure （include an introduction,body text and conclusions)

Negative:poor grammar,too much in-text references

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Positive:grammar is correct.Explanation clear
Areas to improve:Use more references.Structure must be more complete

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Two positive aspects:  include 8 references /take it very seriously

Two areas to improve: No PEE format/in-depth with the subject should be enhanced

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two positive: structure and fluent sentences
Areas need to improve: need more references

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two positive aspects：2 theoretic concepts，well instructure
two areas to improve：need more academic words，morelinking words and improve grammar.

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the positive point：add the references to essay to convinced
the negative point：poor vocabularies and grammar problem

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Two positive aspects:
Have wrote 2 theoretical concepts and tried to relate to the industrial revolution.
Had used wide range of vocabulary.

Two areas to improve:
Less grammar mistakes.
More references can be used and refer more to academic sources.

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positive: 2 theoretical concepts
fluent sentences
negative: need more sources
need more academic words

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Two positive aspects:
Good organization
Good point

Areas need to improve:
need more point
grammar

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No positive
Areas need to improve: grammar and words check

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Positive aspects :
good structure
proper academic convention
Negative aspects :
sources aren't relevant to essay topic
improve citation structure

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Two positive aspects:
Grammar an structure
good Vocabulary

Areas need to improve:
Did not follow APA system
need more points

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Two positive aspects of my work :
Good vocabulary
Coherent & good grammar

Two areas to improve :
Add links to bibliography
Make citation alphabetical

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Two positive aspects: well structured, 13 references used
Two negative aspects: more use of in-text citations

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Two positive aspects: I have included 8 references  and also my work was very structured.

Two areas to improve: Lots of spelling errors/ did not follow the APA system.