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Nate, I like the attention to detail you put in your story and how well you described Megs? Soundings. I also liked the great storytelling and how well you did to make it so sad, I do wish however that maybe you can dial it back on death

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one thing you did really well is the detail. I could picture it so well, you did an amazing job describing. The amount of detail you put into the smallest things was incredible. The way you describe her personality is also great. I could really feel what kind of person she was. Another thing you did well is the way you described the sad parts in the story. The part where she rushed back up the other stairs because the phone didn’t work, the way you put it that she had died was really good. Also when the bully was midway in his apologies when he was hit by a tree. The detail you put describing his body flying away was really good. But one thing i noticed was that throughout the story you say lighting instead of lightning, it was just something i noticed but other than that it was an amazing piece.

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Alright! I think your essay was a very good peice and I think it doesn’t need any work on it. I’ve got not 2, but 1-I mean 3 stars for you, ya 3, Definitely 3. No joke 3, Ok I really like how in the first paragraph you wrote about how they were Boycotting arts and after school classes. 2 star goes to the way that you described the Girl in the first section telling me and anyone else about the growing issue of schools not getting enough financial income. 3 star I’m handing over to your quote at the end of your essay “Every child is a artist. But the problem is how to remain one once we grow up”. That shocked me on how deep it was.

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NaTe MiKle Is GoInG tO TelL aBout fryDaY

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NaTe MiKle Is GoInG tO TelL aBout fryDaY

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hi  nate a strength of your essay “Money, Lives, All because of school start time” is how you really describe your starting scean it was fast but good and relatable. In addition i like how in your paragraph the way that you went from one scene to xplaining that scene very well and it made sense and was relatable. However i wish you would have mad the article and you said a teen that had a license to a young child?

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I liked that you were fighting your fears when faced with a pool. You said you could take it with confidence. I also liked that you were nervous but then your emotions were calm and tried to calm down. I only wish that you could add more similes and onomatopoeia for descriptive writing

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Your memoir is good its a good size over all good memoir i like how you set it up and over all its great you set everything up good we new what was going on the whole time and it was descriptive and good bybybyby aaaaa na t e

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Nate your descriptive writing is amazing! Quote “i put my hand on the wall and felt like a super hero on the side of a building ready to fight crime” That’s outstanding! Great word choice to, i love how you weren’t doing this cause your mom told you to earthier but because you believed you could do it. It’s good to keep a reader hooked like that and boy did you do a good job! But since this is 2 stars and a wish, i was hoping for a final moment when you breezed across the water finishing the test and earning your sweet succulent reward of being able to swim in the diving tank. the cliff hanger is a good choice to, just an opinion for maybe the next time you write about it or revise it and edit it.

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Caden B (That weird kid in your reading class) 

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Caden B (That weird kid in your reading class) 

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I really think you did a great job with the memoir. I like how you found the lesson before you finished the memoir. I also like how the memoir took place before you went in the pool, it makes it different then as lot of other memoirs. I think you could have done a better job at slowing everything down and explaining what was happening as it was slightly difficult to keep up. Great work!

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Your writing was amazing and I love the title and it shows a small glimpse of what you are getting and serious it was and the descriptive details in your writing like part the you said the challenge of the mountain side deep end pool is how we all felt when we got near that part. Although I think you talk about the area your in.

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Wow. Your writing is really good. You weren’t kidding when you said you were an amazing writer! I loved how you introduced yourself by saying “My name is Nathaniel Latham, but you could just call me Nate.” It showed me very clearly right from the start that you have a very used nickname that you mostly refer to yourself as. (I also knew that already because I was in your class last year, but that’s besides the point.) But what really hooked me in was when you said “First of all,  I only have 5 fingers. My left hand is just a palm,”. It really captures the attention of your readers because most of them probably haven’t ever met someone with 5 fingers before. It’s not very common, and makes an excellent hook, especially with the way you wrote it. Good job! Additionally, I think that your title is very good. The word choice expresses you as a writer, and using alliteration for the first two words makes it catchy. Great title! Your piece is also very you. It isn’t flat and boring, it really reflects you. You did a really great job.

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I found your quote inspiring and a quote I would choose if I had the chance. Also your about me title is clever like each of your writing was a legend but they’re not because I would give them a legend category. However, a suggestion is that you say some good things about your left hand, like how you make funny jokes with it like that time when you told Liam to throw the ball at you when you were raising it.

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I also Love the fact that you were comfortable sharing you have one hand! This will intrigue the reader even more!

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I also Love the fact that you were comfortable sharing you have one hand! This will intrigue the reader even more!

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I think you can improve on telling us about your past writing career to hook the reader on what you might have now 

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I think you can improve on telling us about your past writing career to hook the reader on what you might have now 

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Nate this intuition is outstanding! I absolutely love the way you told us about how you have a disability but still want to inspire others with acts of kindness! And also why that pad-let emoji? 

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Nate this intuition is outstanding! I absolutely love the way you told us about how you have a disability but still want to inspire others with acts of kindness! And also why that pad-let emoji? 

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It was very personal! It was fun to read too!