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I have been planning out my strategy and timeline to ensure my workflow is smooth and have contingencies whenever I have setbacks.

I have informed Mr. Sel about my new padlet.

At the moment I have 2 tracks that have been developed into solid demos which I will be uploading after a few small tweaks but will most likely be uploaded to week 2.

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After going through the meeting with Christine, I have thought back on my previous plans on my EP.

As Christine has explained, an EP with 6 songs seems a bit much, and that the time frame I have for doing that many songs seems a bit too much to handle. However, since I already have 2 demos in the bank, I feel like it maybe be possible to crank out the next 4 as I have the general ideas for them.

One of the collaborative tracks with Daniel from cohort 9 is ready to be composed as I have all the necessary materials to work with.

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Heres the padlet link for my previous progress for Research Project
https://padlet.com/scosmic2000/bosu_limbo_ep

I have made some changes to the tracklist in that I have removed some of the tracks as I do not feel like it is what I want to express and portray at this moment.

My current tracklist consists of:

1. Intro
2. But you
3. Watch me die (ft. Daniel)
4. Interlude
5. Track 5
6. Track 6 (ft. Nicole)

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My advice at this point is to aim high and write/record as many songs, then pick the very best ones for the EP. Make sure you touch base with Mr. Sel in the coming weeks so he's aware of your EP progress!

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I have made progress on 2 tracks which will be the Intro and Interlude of the album.

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I wanted this track to have a solemn, lonely but heavy feel, with some auto-generated speeches pronouncing the words - where are you? where did you go? and please come back. - pitched way down.

This track serves as an opening to what the ep be sonically, while also having different vibes for every track but still telling a similar tale.

My references for the intro are Light Years by Kason, and an Instagram post from Focusrite

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This track serves as a divider to the EP, giving the listeners a rest with a laid-back beat and easy melody.

Personally, this track is still in its developmental stages, so there might be tweaks and changes further down the road but the general idea is laid out.

My references for the interlude are Intro by Joji from the Chloe Burbank series, and Unsaved Info by Joji.

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PRIORITY
- Writing, Recording - But You

GOALS
- Composing - Track 6

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Good updates for the week! Make sure you meet Mr. Sel to discuss your project. Continue listening (and reading) about different types of music to keep those inspirations coming!

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Nice creative layout and album concept . I am hoping you will use reference as ideas be very careful to sound similar. Yours is a little too similar for the INTRO. I would recco to have your own style --esp on the intros arrangement. Instead of Low pitched approach based on your lyrical concept... maybe try filtration [lofi] still pitched but Hi Passed and with nice reflective delay[lo-passed] or echo [long feedback]   conversing the spoken line in a distance. its just my suggestion but it will be more original and cooler. No comment on the Interlude- it sounds great with ambient effects . Good job

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I like that you have separated priorities from goals for the week - that's helpful in determining which task(s) would need your attention. Good groove there with track 6!

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I took a look at works from Emily, Li Ching, Jiann, and Ally to see what they have been up to and have been assigned to write a report on the criticisms and suggestions I have for Jiann and Ally for their project.

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Everyone's progress, albeit a bit slow, still look promising and am excited to see what they have created in the next peer review!

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Thanks for the peer reviews! I'll aim to get you back your reviews in the coming week!

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Track still at the early stage - little monotonous for me - have at least 1 or 2 melodic sequence for understanding the demo better. Excited to hear the full arrangement . Good luck Bobs

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Due to the break from raya I wasn't able to do a whole lot as I was also busy catching up with other assignments at the time.

Although my progress this week seems slow, I have completed most of the lyrics for the track I'm doing with Nicole.

I kept her part of the song short but substantial so that it would be easier and more time efficient to record the tracks due to the hectic nature of her daytime job.

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Pre-Chorus
给我一首歌的时间

让我再爱上你一遍

希望日子过快点

咱们若一日不见

就如等你三个秋天

是否我们的对白

让你走得太快

我会在原地等着你回来

Chorus
cant this go as far as we should

hoping we could love as we would

i dont wanna say goodbye

to us tonight

lets burn the night

praying for your warmth in my bed

forget all the tears that we shed

can u be by my side

just one more night

Verse (Nicole)

you moved on

walking on your own

your silence

it reminds me that you’re gone

gone…

i regret that i

didn’t heal up in time

and it broke us apart

late again and i

babe im sorry that i

pushed you away

but can you stay

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I will be recording some vocals for this track and also start catching up on the others.

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I have successfully finished drafting ideas down for every track in the EP, leaving me to only fleshing out the ideas. I have finished writing 2 more tracks, TRACK 6 and TRACK 2 other than the intro and interlude and still fleshing out TRACK 5 and TRACK 3.

I have come to a decision whereby I will rearrange the tracklist to get a better flow of emotions.

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The song is 60% done as of right now but I have plans on modifying the ending and possibly extending it a bit more.

The reference for this track is "Afterthought" and "Normal People" by Joji.

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This track is also 60% done but I would want to redo the vocals and add more scats in the background just to fill some pockets.

The references for this track is CAN'T GET OVER YOU by Joji.

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I am still in the midst of figuring out what to do with this track but the reference for this is "MODUS" by Joji.

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Sel Comments

Track 6

Melody is good, if you want to get the lo-fi RNB pop feel your melody has to be strong and provocative. Jojis sounds are simple but if u pay attention to melody…its very unique. So far you are getting there – just spend some time on your melodic writing and arrangement, verse to pre chorus – post chorus and bridge section. Maybe can try to have a unique melodic changes or drops. Overall nice feel

Track 2

Good lo-fi vibe here, vocals can be more distorted, maybe try guitar amp effects with slap delay(pedal) on the voices. You can ven try to add auto tune on the BVs or Doubles with same guitar pedal effects. Music you can to have more of your identity (instead of too much Joji Fanclub) … I would recco some sweeps or Lo-fi percussions as rhythmic counterparts instead of voice add libs. But it’s just my recco – you are free to do anything you like, so far it is in right track .

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Track 6: I really like the groove! This is a great first draft, and I can't wait to hear more of it! I think keeping Nicole's part small in this song is good - it's effective given the message of the song. Some things to consider at this early stage: (1) Pre-chorus vocal arrangement: You could start off with one voice first, rather than two voices singing an octave apart; (2) If Nicole is able to record the pre-chorus, get her to do this. I suspect including her voice in specific parts of the pre-chorus will be very nice!

Track 2: Agree that the vocals still need some work. I suspect pronunciation will be the most challenging given the quick vocal tempo. Think about some beatboxing type of sounds as well to fill some of the space.

Track 5: While still at the fleshing out stage, this track has a lot of potential to be developed into something quite artistic. I think given its more moody nature, you might want to consider expanding beyond just singing the track, to even spoken passages - as a kind of reference/connection to your intro/interlude at the beginning of the EP ;)

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Been busy with other subjects and assignments, but still got the remainder tracks up to date, will work on it throughout the semester break.

Remainder tracks include TRACK 5 and TRACK 3(feat. Daniel)

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Do recalibrate over the mid-semester break! Looking forward to hearing developments on the tracks.

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For TRACK 3, i wanted it to have a soft ukulele intro/hook before switching to a dark heavy beat section with the tunes all chopped up. The whole track is based around the short sample and the breakdown would be the cut up clips. In this demo I still left the vocals intact but i am planning to chop them up in relation to the chopped ukulele parts

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Tell me, what you see,
through those blood red eyes?
Would you be crying?
or just watch me die?

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Over the past 7 weeks I have made the following progress:

1. Intro - Needs more work (balancing)
2. But You - Needs to record again
3. Watch me Die - Needs to be fleshed out
4. Interlude - Post-production
5. Track 5 - Needs to be written and recorded
6. Track 6 - Need to write last bit and ask Nicole to record

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I have added an outro to the song but have yet to record the scratch vocals for it.

I contacted nicole about recording her parts for the song so I will send her everything in one go then post it here.

I will need to rerecord the vocals to my parts as well before I start the post-production processes.

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I am thinking of removing this track from the list due to the nature of it, to me it doesn't fit well with the flow and feels very forced.

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Yup - as more songs get written, always relook your lineup of tracks and question if it will fit the overall concept of the EP. Some songs may develop and mature in different ways than you expected, so always be cognizant of this.

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Received both peer reviews - thanks!

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Took Ally's suggestion of brightening the second half of the track, but made it orchestral.

Took a bit of inspiration from the intro of Billie Eilish's Isn't It Lovely.

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The addition of strings is a nice touch! Your next challenge would be to figure out the dynamics and phrasing of the orchestra. As much as possible, try to have it sound as close as possible to the acoustic.

Take inspiration from actual string music, like this one: https://youtu.be/N3MHeNt6Yjs

Observe how the musicians use their bodies and vibrato to expand the dynamics.

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Finished the arrangement and rough mix, the sound is almost there but I'm gonna tweak the vocals for the second verse later on.

I'm gonna tweak the panned drum breaks a bit more, either bump it up or add more components to compliment them to make it stand out more.

Otherwise this track is done and awaiting mastering.

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Composition-wise, this is another solid track. The element of surprise works very effectively. I like the abrupt cut at the end, but it sounds like it needs some extra effect(s) just to give it more impact. Take some inspiration from Kendrick Lamar's United in Grief, which is built on elements of surprise and abrupt cuts: https://youtu.be/tvNSXS4x9nc

Related to your compositions, do keep Mr. Sel updated about your work and/or start sending him completed tracks for advice. He asked me about the progression of your work the other day and is expecting to hear your post-production work!

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Kendrick Lamar - United In Grief (Official Audio)

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I have finished writing the song and will record the vocals soon.

I repurposed some old lyrics from previous drafts for this track.

Lyrics:

i lost my way

yet you blind me the same

diamonds they fade

20 karat cut on my face

old love new gaze

broken up in new ways

need a break yeah i need it now

need it soon would you come around

didn’t you say youd be around

cant escape your demons no

im fighting mine

can’t see it? no

got no heart?

dont feel it, no

i dont feel it, no

and i’ll always be your ghost

your shadow hides it all

wont you hold me my eyes are closed

me in your arms

sold my soul for your own

your red rose bring new thorns

sleep tight you live in my mind

speed of light, hear no sound, up right now

cant you see im going down right now

blurring the lines of u

titanic dont got no weight on u

seasons dont change when you holding still

grudges dont leave when you want them to (yeah yeah)

loving dont mean nothing when youre gone

running my paces

like the ocean rifts we split apart

poison can’t heal up a broken heart

20 mirrors can’t tell you apart

your eyes they freeze me still im stuck in time now

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This is the final draft for the song, will add some more vocal percussions to fill in the gaps, otherwise the song is complete.

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Getting there! You know what needs to be done, so remember to pace yourself until Week 14! Mr. Sel is also getting busier than usual, so make sure you touch base with him to find a suitable time to let him hear your work.

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A journey following through the stages of grief, being in a static position of pain and suffering, but not wanting to let go, in a 'Limbo'. Each track of the EP progresses with tonality and meaning, indicating that the person although is starting to let go and has a clearer mindset, ultimately still craves the person he loves most.

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Nice work - overall has nice New York vibe with lo-fi characteristic and indie soul textures. Personally lower freq presence can be enhanced slightly (kick drums) - but its just me - String arrangement on track 1 & 2 is well arranged feels like moody soundtrack. Watch me Die - is very well sampled with organic guitar, keys and beats - excellent keys programming and writing (chord Progression)- end is slightly abrupt (watch me D...) - But You - verse vocals is slightly louder than the rest - but its a good feel . Bittersweet - vocals for Nicole can be slightly clearer (wordings) during verses, still a well arranged tracks. Thats it - No Prob - Good job Bobby