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Can you offer suggestions for improvement? What would you do?

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Can you offer suggestions for improvement? What would you do?

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This is a beautiful design concept. I like your limited colour palette, and your compositions. The story is cute and funny as I did not expect that ending. I think to take this even further, you could have more dialogues added in such as "sighs"- to illustrate more of the main character mood (even though their facial expression clearly shows). You could have your onomatopoeias big and bold to help illustrate another character's dramatic entrance to the burger place as well the worker's nervousness.

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Interesting to see what types of stories are being addressed across the group: fiction / non-fiction, autobiographical, fantasy, topical, etc.

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Interesting to see what types of stories are being addressed across the group: fiction / non-fiction, autobiographical, fantasy, topical, etc.

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What is the tone of the work? Dark, surreal, light-hearted, serious, funny, fantastical?

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What is the tone of the work? Dark, surreal, light-hearted, serious, funny, fantastical?

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How well does the story read across two double page spreads? How is space used?

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How well does the story read across two double page spreads? How is space used?

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The concept design is simple and stunning. Your style is lovely but I would like to see more drawings in your frames. Tell a bit more story of your character. Perhaps adding more frames of their actions towards the drink, and their facial expressions to help it feel more dramatic. The compositions are great however, I want to get to know the character and what their personalities are. They are in their room surrounded by plants which is nice but add more story elements that tell a more interesting character.  You could have small frames within a frame to help illustrate the story. More colour would be lovely to have as an addition.

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How do the materials and processes used affect the reading of the work?

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How do the materials and processes used affect the reading of the work?

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Where does the story take you? Time and place? 

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Where does the story take you? Time and place? 

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How does it begin? How does it end? Is the end satisfying?

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How does it begin? How does it end? Is the end satisfying?

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How is text / dialogue used? (if any) How does it lead the story with the story and interact with the images?

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How is text / dialogue used? (if any) How does it lead the story with the story and interact with the images?

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Is the story engaging? What makes it so? What is the reading experience like?

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Is the story engaging? What makes it so? What is the reading experience like?

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How does the work make you feel? What does the story evoke?

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How does the work make you feel? What does the story evoke?

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World building - are the characters convincing? Is the setting believable?

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World building - are the characters convincing? Is the setting believable?

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Could the work be improved? Could the story or the artwork be more developed?

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Could the work be improved? Could the story or the artwork be more developed?

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Are the pages easy to read and navigate?

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Are the pages easy to read and navigate?

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Really amazing use of colour, such lovely images. Very interesting choice of composition as well. As the seed seems to be the main part of the story you could maybe characterise it more it give it more dialogue?

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while the writing was very nice and extremely well put into each panel, making the speech flow quite nicely, I cannot read the last word of the title, "cloat"? Even when repeated in the story I could still not think of what it means.

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Leia Romhi's Short Graphic Story (K1910580)_compressed-2

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- write your question as a new post and connect it to the work
Three dots (Top Right) ...
'Connect to post'

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- use the post-it notes as prompts
- add your comments to each piece in the comments section VVV

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THE FUNCTION
communication, affect on audience, story message, readability...

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THE FORM
Use of the page, composition / the frame / use of text, narrative structure...

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THE MEDIUM
Image + text, process + materials used, colour, characterisation...

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Spend time with each piece