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Glow:I like how descriptive you were for example in paragraph 3 you said the exact amount of boxes of tea instead of an estimate

Grow:You should probably have made your conclusion a little better by making it longer and more descriptive.

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Glow:
I like toby's introduction.
I like how toby give details.
I like how toby have a great hook.
I like toby's aweson transition words.

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I like how in your conclusion paragraph 5 you summed it up by asking a question and said you would be a Patriot through and through. In paragraph 3 and 4 it says taxation without representation 2 times and maybe you should only use it once because it does not make sense.

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I liked how you site the evidence in how you said ‘’I know this because according to the google classroom’’ next time you need to add more sentences and explain what does it say on the google classroom. If I were  grading this I would give you a two.

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I noticed you wrote your writing style different because its like this

I want  to be a patriot
because _________________

and it makes it confusing because i will not know if it is a sub title or its just a writing style.

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Glow: I notice that you cite evidence wrote a lot,I notice you used transition words and it’s special, you used details from the text you also explain .
Grow what you need to do better is I couldn’t see some words because you use different hand writing so that is all you need to do.(cool)

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Glow: I like your hook " Kings Heroes and have big hearts. But that's only in fairytales"{ It was Funny} 😂

Grow: Your conclusion " King George the III was unfair with all these silly laws and taxes. The debt is his own responsibility.✌

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Glow- I loved how you gave good evidence. Like how you talked about the Boston tea party.

Grow- Next time give better words ( I was rushing)

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Glow: Allison gave 3 reasons with good Evidence, Like" According to the article , In the Boston tea Party got taxed for tea."

Grow: She needs to make her hook more interesting and actually write the evidence she see's in the article's.

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Glow: like your hook because when it said and then you heard Bang-Bang-Bang and then a British walk in.

Grow: You really need some better transition and only one ( which is body paragraph number 2).

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Glow
Dora had a thesis statement , I know this because it says "have you ever wonder what it's like living in the coloinal times with king george.

Grow
make your pargraph bigger insead of picture I know this because the whole essay I see is picture

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Glow🌟~I liked your ending and how you reviewed everything.
Grow🌱~Beware of the word “things.” If you wrote that word then you should give examples of the “things.” On paragraph 2 it said “Like i said, the patriots had to pay taxes on a lot of things.”

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Joan needs to make another paragraph. I like how his script is fancy but you could understand it.-Jordan

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To Maya: I like your hook,I also like how you did 5 paragraphs

Grow

you need longer paragraphs you had 2 sentence paragraphs.

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I like how Becky explained the Boston massacre was a punishment. Next time you can make a better conclusion This is why I would be a patriot to stop all of this sin the colonial times

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To: Henry
I liked you transition words, it convinced me very well. You need to work on your hook, I just thought maybe you could give a question like would you be a patriot or loyalist? Or some evidence like I got this from Ducksters. Otherwise, you did pretty good.

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I like how wrote 5 and not more or fewer paragraphs. I also like how you put a good hook in it. A growth is to write more. And to make the argument A bit more interesting.

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A glow he made is that he made an interesting hook about imagine a British soldier coming in ...

A grow for him is that he has to indent his introduction and add another reason since he only has to. - Raymond

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To:Edison
I liked how u did a glossary in the end of ur essay because it helps readers understand what it means like Stamp Act:where the king taxed us. And one grow is that u need a better transition word for ur conclusion.

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The glow is that I liked how your hook was good like imagine..

The grow is  that I think you should change a font because it is hard to read and some grammar mistakes.

-- ZHANGYAN

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I like how you did a cause & effect. You started with the Boston tea party resulted in the Boston massacre.

Next time, check you grammar ~ Sophia

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I noticed that he had a good reason it is a pineapple equals $5.00 for a loyalist and $15.00 for a patriot to be a loyalist.

Something that he could do better on is to write more

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Glow
You did very good on making all of your paragraphs such as giving many reasons.
Grow
But, you shouldn't say the same thing in two paragraphs.

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To Gabriel, I like your transition word like "at the end of the day". Next time make it better by making it a better timeline maybe pictures.

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Glow
1. I liked you said "I dont want them to search threw my business"

2. I noticed that you put a lot of details in all of you paragraph

Grow

Add more details to your last reason it doesn't have much reasons

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To Elise (Elise's glow and grow) By Elita

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To Elise (Elise's glow and grow) By Elita

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Glow: I liked how you gave details and wrote good evidence like for example you gave evidence on the introduction and also explained how it was unfair

Grow: Maybe next time you could add more to the conclusion since the conclusion was only 2 sentences or lines