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Source C suggets that Malaysia medical facilities are cheaper than Singapore. This can be seen from " A quick look  comparisons would show that the costs in Malaysia are substanially cheaper as compared to  class A ward in Singapore. This implies that singaporeans would want to go to malaysia for medical facilities to save their medisave for even  expensive treatments.

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Source C show that medisave is insufficient to cover healthcare costs. this can be seen from the source that " it would be sad

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Source C show that medisave is insufficient to cover healthcare costs. this can be seen from the source that " it would be sad

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SS HW 26/02/2018 - Assessing a Claim Practice

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SS HW 26/02/2018 - Assessing a Claim Practice

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Dear 4N1 students,

Please post your I-E-E Paragraph for Source C of the SBQ Practice from TB Pg 233 - 235.

If you have written it in your notebook, please post a picture of your answers.

Thank you.

Cheers,
Miss Teo

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The one way for people to serve NS is to decrease the amount of time spent in NS (L2/3) so that the people will be more encourage to enter NS example they could decrease the time from 2 years to 1 and a half year that way people will be more encouraged and they could spent more time with the people they like and they could do more of their own things that way they will not feel so much of the pressure [so what if they don't feel so much pressure? and why would they feel pressured? please explain.]

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One way is to increase the allowance for the NS men (L2/3) .
This can allow more NS men to consider serving NS and to help serve the nation during NS . They also can have more allowance to spend on their basic needs and help to support their own family members . With the increase of allowance , they will have lesser income issues . They will then feel more excited and have the positive thought to serve NS. [why would having positive thoughts about NS encourage them to serve NS?] Therefore , this will encourage Singaporeans to serve NS more .
L2 answer.
[No example]

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One way that Singapore can encourage Singaporeans to serve National Service is to decrease the number of years they have to serve [L2/3]. By decreasing the number of years to serve National Service, one would be able to spend more time with their loved ones and would not go through alot of stress. When the number of years having to serve National Service is decreased, one would be able to spend more time with their loved ones and would not have so much pressure to deal with. Thus, one would not have to deal with alot of stress and can have more time to spend with family and friends. [what is this stress that you are referring to? vague outcome. You need to explain what you mean by this stress. and how would reducing this stress encourage Singaporeans to serve NS?]

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In my opinion, there are many ways to encourage male Singaporeans to serve National Service (NS), but the number of ways are limited based on its effectiveness towards them as many male Singaporeans have said that serving National Service may be a waste of time but it benefits in a way  that they are able to receive allowance from the government as a form of contract if they serve NS [Too much irrelevant information here. Go straight to the point]. I would then think that increasing the amount of allowance [L2/3] would encourage fellow male Singaporeans to serve NS because out there, there are many male Singaporeans yet to be enlisted whilst being poor at the same time, they may have younger siblings and adults that are unable to work which results in them being the only one to support the family. If he were to be enlisted with the current allowance, the amount of money may not be able to support everyone in his family for a month. Increasing the amount of allowance by serving NS not only benefits those kind of people, but it also give them time to consider that there is some form of support that the government give when the enlistees shows their loyalty towards Singapore which results in lesser defaulters in the future. [so how would this make Singaporeans feel? and how would this encourage them to serve NS]

L2

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In my opinion, singapore should provide singaporeans serving NS a much more comfortable environment to rest in such as installing air conditioners, having more comfortable matresses to rest on, and to re paint the rooms to make it look nicer and a much moree comfortable environment to rest in. With a more comfortable environment for the recruits to rest in, they would be recharged the next day to carry out their routines being more energetic and recharged. [L1/2]
Singaporeans are not default NS because of the difficult environment. The environment isn't that harsh in camp.

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In my opinion, I think that Singapore should distribute monetary incentive to those who completed NS without absenteeism [L2/3 : Good idea!]. The monetary incentive will be given out to the NS men that complete the field exercise without a medical excuse. Also, I suggest to have a best battalion inter-company award. This will encourage Singaporean men to serve their NS [but why? why will they feel encouraged?]. On top of that moral support from family members
and friends is crucial. Therefore, less Singaporeans would default NS.

L2

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Giving heavier penalties [L2/3] ensures that all singaporeans men have to go and serve the army cause even though they have a good degree they will be scarred for life because they didnt attend NS. This will disabe them from getting their jobs or getting a punishment given
by the government. [So what if the punishments are harsh? why would that then encourage Singaporeans from serving NS]

L2 - no outcome, no example.

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I think that there should be heavier penalties [L2/3] for the Singaporeans who are defaulting NS. If there are heavier penalties, they will not dare to disobey the law [GOOD!]. Heavier penalties include banning the defaulters from certain activities for a period of time and also increase the length of their stay in jail from 2 months to 6 months so that they will learn their lesson. And because of the fear of staying for a long time in jail, Singaporeans will be encouraged to serve NS.

L3 -> L2 - no example of heavier penalties. Good attempt at outcome.

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In my opinion, 1 way that Singapore can encourage Singaporeans to serve National Service is to increase the punishment sentence for skipping and ignoring National Service (NS) and notices from the Ministry of Defence (MINDEF) [L2/3]. Like doing community services, example like doing a project to present to their juniors to let those learn how, why Singapore needs protection, security. Also, increase of the sentence in jail. Like 3 months to 5 months. So that those Singaporeans will have more fear and concern towards the consequences as NS is about 2 years plus but the consequences of skipping it is a little unfair to me [you don't need to inject an opinion about the solution you suggested, avoid digressing from the question]. Hence in conclusion, as in my opinion, 1 way that Singapore can encourage Singaporeans to serve NS is to increase the punishment sentence for skipping and ignoring NS and notices from the MINDEF.

L2 - incomplete outcome. gap in explanation. why would having more fear and concern towards consequences of heavier penalties make Singaporeans serve NS?

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Singapore should increase the penalties [L2/3] for defaulting National Service. Instead of having the defaulters to go to jail for 1.5 months, the government can add in a fine of $100- $500 [E.g.] so that the defaulters will be scared and they will not default National Service again [GOOD!]. Therfore, increasing the penalties for defaulting National Service will encourage Singaporean to serve National Service.

L2 - what are they scared of?. why would that encourage them to serve NS?
Almost an L3 answer. good attempt.

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Giving NS defaulters heavier penalties [L2/3] like sentencing them to 2 months of jail instead of 1.5 month. They still need to attend NS  after they are released from jail. It will reduce the number of defaulters as it will lengthen their time in NS.[What is the outcome of lengthening their time in NS and why would that encourage them to serve NS?] Thus they would be encouraged to serve National Service.

L2 - no outcome of way suggested.

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In my opinion, i think that we should change the mindset of parents/grandparent in Singapore. Many of the reasons why people skip NS is because parents are too over protective. We need to change the mindset of the older generations before we can have unimpeded encouragement for the younger generations. Furthermore, in order for them so feel that their child is safe, Parents  and grandparents should be able to experience the high standards of singapore's military corps. With this mindset, Singaporeans would feel more secure with a population that has personally invested their belief in serving.

Your suggestion is too farfetched. not a feasible solution.

L1/1

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Let Singaporeans know what will they do in NS before they are being admitted [L2/3]. Singaporeans default NS is due to lack of information of what they will be doing during the training. Due to that, many Singaporeans fear that they will suffer in NS, thus people default NS.

L2 - No example, no outcome

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By giving more allowance to the NS man would allow NS man to have more money to spend during their weekends ( bookout ) which allows them to distress and therefore eventually allowing them to be happy and many more would be encourage due to the high pay the army give to the soldier [why would giving them more money make them happy? examples of more allowance?]

What is the outcome of more pay? How would that encourage Singaporeans to serve NS?

L2 - No example, incomplete outcome.

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The NS should increase the pay [L2/3]. Because those who had work harder got more money than those who hardly pass all their physical fitness all this.By doing this people will strive to work harder (Good) in NS rather than escape form NS.Therefore the NS should increase the pay so that people would not escape. [Why would they strive to work harder? how does it make them feel when they get more $$ and why would that encourage them to serve NS]?

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People may think that NS is to waste people time and suffer. By giving talks about why serving NS is important [L2/3] will encourage people to come and not skip Ns. [ Example of such talks? What is the outcome of giving such talks? ]

L2/3 - No example, no outcome

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in my opinion, to encourage Singaporeans to serve national service, we should increase the pay out for those serving NS [L2/3] as people usually skip NS because of the less allowance with so much hard times in the army, by increasing the pay out, NS men would be more happy and more willing as they earn more money and they will not have a mindset like earning little money while working a lot, which leads them to be happy, therefore encouraging them to serve national service.

Why would being happy encourage them to serve NS? what else would they feel that would push them to serve NS?

L2. No example of increasing pay out.

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Increase the age limit to 20 [L2/3] and the allowance for the NS mens. this allows them to study before going for their national service which reduces their stress when studying [what do you mean by reducing their stress? are they stressed because they can't study?]. Increasing their allowance allows for them to go out during the night to go and get food. The NS men can also earn money from passing their fitness test hence they can earn money just from clearing their fitness test. [NS Men already receive an allowance when they enlist]

list only 1 way. not 2 ways.

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I feel that increasing the monthly payment for attending NS should be a better idea . This is because many NS serving boys are able to earn money and would be eager to join NS due to its high payment [GOOD OUTCOME!]. This way boys who are going to serve NS will not try to skip it due to its high payment .

No example [L3 --> L2]

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Raising the allowance of National Service (NS) [L2/3] can help encourage Singaporean men to join NS. For example, the current sum of allowance is S$560 per month, which compared to other jobs, is roughly half of basic upkeep needs, which is around S$2,000 (excluding savings needed). NS men need to eat to stay fit in NS, as ~S$6.20 per meal is not enough, as meals roughly cost S$8 in food courts (note that this does include dinner).  Bonuses in money can be rewarded such as doing well in PT and showing exemplary attendance or behaviour in NS can be used to push NS men to do better in PT and encourage Singaporean men to attend to NS. [what is the outcome of rewarding Singaporean men that would encourage them to serve NS?] Therefore, raising the allowance can help encourage Singaporean men to join and attend NS.

L2

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One way that Singapore can encourage Singaporeans to serve National Service is to increase the age requirement to serve National Service. For example, increase age limit for entlistment of full-time National Service from 18 years old to 20s years old because male citizens might need more time for their studies. Through this, they will feel less pressure and stress as some male citizens want to focus on their studies first for a while before serving National Service. This allows them to better able to fulfil their responsibility to serve National Service and so making them happy. [Why would making them happy encourage them to serve NS? apart from feeling happy about being able to complete their studies, what else would they feel?] Thus, encouraging Singaporeans to serve National Service.

Almost at L3! Good Attempt

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Increasing the age requirement [L2/3] such as 20+s to 30+s as men will have much more time to focus on their studies and will also have less stress has they won't be able to participate NS at the age when men are currently studying which gives them more time which leads to Singapore to be happy and eventually encourages Singaporean to serve NS [Why would they be stressed?? explain]

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In my opinion,I think Singapore should increase the allowance of NS Men [L2/3].From $70 per week to $105 per Week,add extra $35 and give bonus every month,like $10-30,it depends on their performance.[Eg] With the extra money they can buy supper eat if they are hungry and they can do well during training at night.With the bonus,it can encourage the NS men to do well in physical training,basic military training and training at night because the amount of money they can get depends on their  performance.Singaporeans will feel happy this way because can earn easy bucks. [Good example and attempt at outcome, however, you did not answer the question at hand. Remember to end off your answer with the Question Focus]

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Instructions:
1. Everyone must post an answer for feedback.
2. Write it in a full paragraph
3. You are not allowed to explain the way discussed in class.
(i.e. reduce the time required to serve NS)

Extract 1 (Refer to worksheet for statistics)
In 2016, 25-year-old Brian Joseph Chow was sentenced to 1.5 months of jail for avoiding National Service (NS) for 6 years. Chow had moved to Australia in 2005 to further his studies and had ignored notices from the Ministry of Defence (MINDEF) to register for NS several times. Every year only a small number, about 0.5% of those liable for NS each year, or on average 100 unresolved cases of NS defaulters a year over the past five years. The vast majority of these defaulters are staying overseas.

(a) Extract 1 talks about the problem of Singaporeans not serving National Service in Singapore.

In your opinion, what is 1 way that Singapore can encourage Singaporeans to serve National Service?  [7 marks]

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Singlish. It is a Singaporean language which contains a mixture of English, Chinese, Malay and Tamil languages. We communicate with people using singlish words like 'lah' and 'walao'. For eg, "Go do it yourself lah" and "Walao why the weather so hot". Everyone uses singlish as part of our communication with one another and we do this everyday, so we are comfortable using it [GOOD!]. It is like Singapore's traditional way of speaking. This makes us feel a sense of belonging towards our country. Therefore, makes someone feel Singaporean. [GOOD!]

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NDP - It is a day where we celebrate our country''s birthday and to also show our military weapons to show how serious we are about protecting our country . It also symbolises our unity and our identity as a Singaporean as we celebrate this day . We sing the national anthem and take the pledge together on this day as well . National Day is where only Singaporean celebrate and we celebrate differently from other country, therefore it will make them feel Singaporean.

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Language -> Singlish -> singlish contains of many languages mainly the four different languages from different races of Singapore, they will feel more useful for example, ' Lai we go makan ' which most of Singaporean understands the meaning of this, easily able to communicate with each other well as only Singapore uses singlish as one the main language thus being unique and so they will feel a sense of belonging which makes them feel Singaporean [Miss Teo : Please don't write the entire thing in one sentence. It doesn't make sense when you do this.]

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Singlish bring us closer as many people in singapore use it on a daily basis. An example would be the word Simi, which means what in english terms. This is mostly used in a more agressive tones. Many of our singlish words actually do sound agressive. However,is something unique to Singapore as no other country uses this kind of "language". Therefore, this would result in one feeling a sense of belonging in Singapore.

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Hawker Centers -
Describe - An amenity where you can buy the best local foods, without having to pay a huge sum of money.
Explain/Example - You will always definitely see a long queue at one of the stores, and it is always either Chicken Rice, Kway Teow, or Roti Prata. These food items shows that Singaporeans like their own variety of food culture, it is affordable, and can be produced easily, its quality of food is also always mainly exceptional, it creates sharing of words and comments of these foods, bonding Singaporeans. It sums up how our consumer culture mostly likes following cheap and popular items.
Outcome - These factors, when taken into account makes the Singaporean bond [how will Singaporeans bond? need to explain] and rise in popularity, making it a Singaporean culture. Therefore, this makes us feel Singaporean! [Ms Teo: Good Attempt! need to elaborate on how Singaporean bond to make it an answer worth full marks!]

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Saying the national pledge. It helps by showing that we contribute to the society such as when we say " pledge ourselves as one united nation" as that shows that we are united and at same contribute our hardworking to make singapore a better nation which makes someone feel Singaporean. [Ms Teo : how does saying the pledge show that you contribute to a better nation?]

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Suhail

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Singlish is a common around us singaporeans as it gives us a way to identify ourselves. When someone says the word 'walao' overseas we would be able to identify ourselves even when we are out from our country the mixture of hokkien, malay, english, chinese and indian shows how unique our country is. [Miss Teo : Gap in explanation. How does Singlish being unique to SG contribute to one having a sense of belonging?]  Therefore, we would sense a sense of belonging

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Singlish is a form of slang english mixed up together. People in Singapore use it frequently in their conversations. An example is wah lao types of singlish words, commonly used among the Singaporean [Miss Teo : Incomplete]

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Food culture: Many Singaporeans loves food, especially from different culture of food. And so, we mix the ingredients from the different  cultures, becoming dishes like Rojak, is an example of a dish that consists of different ingredients from different culture. Making us comfortable to be one of the unique dish in Singapore [Miss Teo : This sentence does not make sense]. Thus, it gives us Singaporeans a sense of belonging in Singapore and makes someone feel Singaporean. [Miss Teo : Explanation is disjointed. Answer does not make sense]

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Singlish- Singlish is what brings us singaporeans together and makes an indivisual feel singaporean. Being a multi racial country, we can have a mix of languages in a sentence.
This makes it comfortable for many of us as (Ms Teo : what is?) is something that we all can understand, and speak. singlish would help one feel a sense of belonging in Singapore [Miss Teo: because... more elaboration required].

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Singlish:
Describe- Singlish is a form of english and singapore slang mixed up together. People in Singapore use it frequently in their informal conversations. Words like wah lao eh, la and sia are types of singlish words, commonly used among the Singaporeans. It brings us Singaporeans together when we can interact and start conversations with a kind of "language" we are comfortable with. (GOOD!)
Therfore I feel Singaporean.

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NDP - It is a day where we celebrate our country''s birthday and to also show our military weapons to show how serious we are about protecting our country . It also symbolises our unity and our identity as a Singaporean as we celebrate this day . We sing the national anthem and take the pledge together on this day as well .

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Describe - "Singlish", a term whereby it's commonly used in Singapore. A language consisting of many languages mixed in like the Chinese and Malay languages being incorporated inside a sentence'
Example -  Sentence or phrase consisting of words like "lah" "sia" "lor" whereby an example of it is, "Eh! Today no work sia! I feel very good lor! Powerful holiday lah!"
Outcome: Therefore, having "Singlish" used as part of our daily lives gives us a sense of belonging such that we know that 'language' define us as a Singaporean. [GOOD!]

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Hawker Centers -
Describe - An amenity where you can buy the best local foods, without having to pay a huge sum of money.
Explain/Example - You will always definitely see a long queue at one of the stores, and it is always either Chicken Rice, Kway Teow, or Roti Prata. It sums up how our consumer culture mostly likes following cheap and popular items.
Outcome - Therefore, this makes us feel Singaporean!

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Singlish- this "language" includes Hokkien, English, Malay and Chinese. A simple sentence we say in our daily life contains words like "lah" , "leh" , etc. These words are used to relay meaning or create a certain mood and they are used by everyone. Communicating to one another in Singlish is unique among Singaporeans thus it gives us a sense of belonging.

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Singlish - We use this language to communicate with our family and friends everyday. It has a mix of different languages such as English, Malay, Tamil and Chinese.For example the word "wahlao", is a form of expression that means oh my god. Words like this this are used by everyone in our daily life. We can communicate easily with one another and feel comfortable using Singlish. It is also very unique to Singaporeans and bring a sense of belonging to us Singaporeans. Therefore, this makes us feel comfortable and feel a sense of belonging in Singapore. [Miss Teo : Need to ATQ here. that it makes you feel Singaporean/ defines you as a Singaporean.]

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Food culture - Many Singaporeans know that our food culture is very unique, our choices of meals are a huge variety and we have local dishes such as Chili Crab, Rojak and etc. - Thus, this is 1 way that make us feel Singaporean.

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Suhail And Bing Jie

Singing the national anthem. As when you sing the national anthem we will feel a sense of pride that you have contributed to the society which makes someone as a Singaporean.

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Singlish - Singlish allows us to mix any kind of languages with English when we are communicating . For example : eh , wah , walao , leh , atc . These languages allow us to communicate well and also socialise with each other - Therefore this makes someone comfortable as we are speaking the same language and feel more like
a Singaporean .
(Ms Teo: How does being comfortable make someone feel Singaporean?)

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Explain 1 way you feel makes someone Singaporean?

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Explain 1 way you feel makes someone Singaporean?

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Use the Describe -> Example -> Outcome to explain your answer.

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