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2. Try working on 3 key points.

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1 I like the way you used some transition.

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1 I like the way you used some transition.

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2 Use more transition words Kylielynn.grantham

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1.I liked the way you described how much it costes 

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1.I liked the way you described how much it costes 

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2.you could foucs on key pontes
Aiden toon

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I think in my opinion you did really good, because I liked how you described how horrible it would be.

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1. I like the way instead of putting bad idea you put horrible idea.

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1. I like the way instead of putting bad idea you put horrible idea.

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2. I think you need work on your transition words.
Albany O'Neill

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2.Need work on putting 5 paragraphs

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2.try to stay on track with your key points

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2. Try working on explaining your 3 key points

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2. Your piece would need 5 paragraphs
Ava Futrell

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1.I like how you used the word horrible in stead of bad.

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1.I like how you used the word horrible in stead of bad.

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2.I don´t know

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1.I really like the way you set up your introduction.

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1.I really like the way you set up your introduction.

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2.Maybe try to swich it up a little and use some different transitions.
Abby

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I liked the way you used your words
you need to work on your conclusion

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2.I thank you could work on the wording

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1. I like the way you done your intro paragraph

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1. I like the way you done your intro paragraph

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2. I think you could have done more transitions and your conclusion needs a little work.
jaylee hayden

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1. I like the way you used strong feeling

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1. I like the way you used strong feeling

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2. My suggestion is to add some goog transition words
Bradley