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Next week, you will be completing the descriptive writing controlled assessment using one of these five titles:

(a) Describe a school assembly on the first day in September.

(b) Describe the scene at a busy crossroads.

(c) Describe the scene on a school bus.

(d) Describe the scene on the first day of the January sales.

(e) Describe the scene at a fireworks display.

Complete a plan for what you will write in the one-hour assessment.

You might also like to complete a practice assessment, although you cannot be given feedback by your teacher on an actual CA title.

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If you struggle with sentence variety, try picking sentence ideas from the list below, and not using each one more than once per paragraph.

Begin with a present tense verb that ends in ‘-ing’.

Include a simile.

Use hyperbole, and then undermine it by admitting you are exaggerating.

Phrase as a question.

Begin with a negative statement using “is not”, then say what it “is”, eg. “The ‘hotel’ is not the Ritz. It’s not even a slightly run-down Travelodge. Instead, it’s a dilapidated shack with flickering lights and no running water.”

Begin with an adverb, eg. “Quickly,” or “Sometimes.”

Make it a simile.

Exactly 10 words.

More than 35 words.

Use commas to add extra information (embedded clauses).

Use a colon to add more specific information.

Use a semi-colon to show how two sentences are linked.

Begin with, “If…”

Begin with, “Considering that…”

Begin with, “Even though…”

Use an interesting fact or statistic.

Include irony by using a word with the meaning opposite to the meaning you intend. (This is hard to do well).

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Work on your targets to improve your mock, ideally with a different-coloured pen, unless you are writing on a new page.

You might:

•Correct all spelling / punctuation errors using a dictionary, then make a list of words to learn for next week.

•Rewrite at least two paragraphs to achieve a greater variety of sentence structures.

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One-hour mock controlled assessment under exam conditions.

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By the end of today’s session, you should be able to:

•“Describe the scene on Bonfire night” using the descriptive techniques we have practised over the last few weeks.

•Evaluate a partner’s description by identifying areas for improvement and areas of strength.

•Use feedback and self-assessment to improve at least two aspects of your mock assessment.

•Plan SMART targets to get you ready for next week’s assessment.

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Let's practise some commonly misspelled words.

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Working on your partner's computer, download this Word document, and fill it out for their descriptive writing mock.

Please then upload the document to their Class Notebook on a new page under the Feedback section. Do this using 'insert -> file printout'.

Below the copy of the feedback sheet, list the two most important things you believe your partner has done well, and the two specific things they could improve on, which are achievable and will make a difference. We are looking for SMART targets.