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You need more material, expecially relating to migration.

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You need more material, expecially relating to migration.

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Re-read your summary journals based on Robinson, Fleming, and Greenfield.

You will need to use 100-200 words from various parts of those summaries.

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https://wp.me/p25bxK-1xj

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wrong word

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http://emswriting.wordpress.com/2012/01/05/clauses-and-clause-connectors-8/

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https://emswriting.wordpress.com/2015/12/28/dangling-participles-dangling-modifiers/

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http://emswriting.wordpress.com/2011/12/28/verb-tenses-and-time-meanings-3/

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typo?

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wrong word choice

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Your rationale is vague.

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http://emswriting.wordpress.com/2012/01/04/passive-and-active-voice-7/

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http://emswriting.wordpress.com/2011/12/25/33/

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Can you be specific?

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I rewrote the sentences to be more clarified and specific. Also I use correct way to cite to author name and the article

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Ordinally, leaders do not often put on the lips such those harmful substances in the air that cause global warming and cause air pollution even though some news pointed out the severe consequences caused by these. Why didn't anyone follow them? Nobody thinks about these future consequences. Greta Thunberg mentioned in 'The disarming case to act right now on climate change ' that global warming has caused the melting of glaciers, causing cities to be flooded by seawater, countries to be razed to the ground, and tens of thousands of people to die. But people now live as if there were no such crises. No headlines mention these crises daily, and even if there are, they are just in the corner of the news.

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potentially above 30 million people lost their homes and migrant to other places. Like some scenes portrayed, a large amount of refugees will migrate together to another nation. The climate change is reported as the biggest problem in 21st century. Action are needed to be took now, military warned to government.

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Substantial research has documented the severe consequences of climate change. People will became anxieous and tend to migrate due to the crisis. Global Warming will multply and accelerate the secrutiy threats.  If glaicer melted and sea level rised, some nation would experience 20%  land in flood. Due to this problem, militaray discusses that there will be an unimginable scale on refugees. They speculate there will be

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hide and seek which will always make me feel homesick. I could not bear to livea place without green mountains and rivers.

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River is the most important thing to me, because I spent my childhood around the river. When I went to trip to National Park with my friends, we saw a river. Suddenly, I felt homesick, as my valuable memory started to appear in my mind. We swam in the river in summer and fished in fall. The forgetten memory all came back to me. I missed my hometown so much. The river that accompanied my childhood remind me of my younger age. We played

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When I am going to say something about the past, I should use past tense.

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When I saw the mountains with green trees, my memory traced back to my hometown. Birds were singing and children were playing under the mountain. I was one of them. When I saw mountains in Santa Barbara, I almost felt a younger me playing hid and seek with friends.

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I changed the last sentence, because I think it's vague.

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Compared China to America, grade isn't everything. It's just the performance in study.  Teachers or schools will equally provide opportunies to everyone. Schools consider a student base on grade an other staffs, such as sports or extracurricular activities. Schools will meansure a student from different sides to determine whether they should give the offer to them or not.

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Schools
opportunities
providing and giving

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will put more focus on them. Even good students do something wrong. Teachers will unintentionally regard that students who have a lower grade did this bad thing. Schools will also take care of good students more in school, such as secretly providing more opportunities and giving more instructions to them.

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The most impressive thing about culture difference is the attitude toward grade. There is a big difference about grade between China and America. In China, grade isn't only mean the score you have in this course, but also the students themslves. Teachers will assioate a student with good grade to a good personality. Teachers

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I summary the Chinese culture to myself. This will be more obvious to enable the readers to understand my point.

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I was filled with their expectations. Every parent always gives their children too high hopes, and the pressure makes me breathless. Children are always trying to please their parents and expect their compliments. This is the effect of Chinese culture that has been handed down for a long time.  In this case, I can't relax. For myself, I enjoy the individualism in America. I can have plenty of time to do what ever I like.

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I further illustrate my point to enforce the impression on my parents.

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Even if I tried to protest to them, their terrible eye contact horrify me so much which lead that I didn't have the courage to continue talking, and I asked them to ask for a break.

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I further illustrate the sentense focus. It would be more clear to the reader.

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TOELF or SAT, my parents always force me to go to study something. If they saw me that I was playing games or relax at home, they would think that I did not do my homework well and did not complete the tasks that a student should do.

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All of my friends were studying during weekends and week days. I had courses every vocation. No matter

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Compare something to something
Chinese culture and America culture

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Compared Chinese culture to American culture, there were pressure everywhere.

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When I was frustated, I went to beach alone to enjoy the sunshine, which made me relax. My compact mid will be released through the time passed.

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The grammar mistake

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However, after the lecture, I can wander in the campus, enjoying the deep breath with the smell of green grass blending the dust. The course time and subject can be chosen by myself. I was able to choose whatever I liked.

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It would be more obvious to use compare.

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For America, I came here last year. I thought the pressure would be same compared to China.

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I reconsturtion the sentense to be more clear to understand.

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The more individualism culture is in America and the culture with more pressure is in China.

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I changed surely to confident.

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I am confident to say that I have experienced two kinds of culture.

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I changed the tense of the sentense from present to present perfect tense.

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This problem has not figured out yet. China doesn't have ability to accept the large wave of people.

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I changed owned and big to existed and large.

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China has already existed a large population. Besides, there are poor villiages in mountains.

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I changed also to furthermore. It's more formal. And the country to my country to be more specific.

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From my personal perspective, I don't want my country to accept such a large amount of people. Because this will raise the competition. Furthermore, there will be problems when two countries' culture bump together. For my country, the government also won't let all people live in China.