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Fracking and hydraulic fracking should be stopped because it contaminates local residents water, and it causes a lot of deaths in the US

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The Reason why there would be a positive affect on society to have gun laws and safety regulation is because thousands of americans die each year from guns including young children. Reducing the amount of guns you may obtain and restricting certain guns that are unnecessary to the regular american citizen would save thousands of lives each year.

Rewrite: The United States Government must enforce stricter gun laws restricting ownership in order to decrease the lives lost annually to gun violence.

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Representation in Hollywood does matter, and the bias of white men in Hollywood needs to change. When someone who is a minority is represented well on screen, then it can affect the whole community.

Rewrite: The entertainment industry should prioritize equitable representation of all people because..... (your reason is too vague.)

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The Opioid Crisis should be taken more seriously and those who use opioids lead self-destructive lives and are mentally ill.

Highlighting - this is too vague. What does that look like?

What is the impact of the opioid crisis on society as a whole? Outside of those addicted?

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School segregation and civil rights are something that has made a mark in the history of the United states. When people here this they often relate to the Jim crow law that was placed on southern schools that allowed segregation in those schools, but that's just the United states. School segregation and problems with civil rights does not just happen in the US it happens around the world. It is a problem that tears cities, states, countries, and the world.

Marcellus - I put specific feedback on your thesis in your outline.

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Schools can reduce the amount of bullying that happens during school hours by starting meetings to occur during school so the students can express their feelings about their peers or how they feel about school in general. The meetings can also occur for bystanders who do not know what to do in the occasion when the witness bullying happening.

This feels a little scattered and unorganized. What is it that schools overall must do? Who can ensure this happens? Why should they?

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People of different races/ethnic backgrounds have to be more cautious of the way the live in America because of the way racial profiling can affect their lives.

Highlighting - that is very vague and puts the responsibility on the POC. What needs to happen in society to reduce racial profiling? Can we emphasize that action instead?

edit: Thank You.

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Using War children in Sudan can cause children to fear for their lives and be forced to do things they regret while also having to deal with other countries wanting to recruit them. This must be stopped to preserve and help our future children's growth.

Marcus - look to outline for more specific feedback

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Politicians need to stop lying and making outrageous right to the  faces of the citizens of the US immediately to gain back the trust of the people and a good reputation.

Ack! Very emotional. Find the professional, objective way to say this.

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The immigration process must be reformed to make it easier for immigrants and eliminate illegal immigration

Feedback - this needs more specificity. The Federal Government must reform the immigration process to encourage legal immigration because....

You need reasons.