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1) In your own words, what makes a good turning point essay?

2) How will you use the snapshot and thoughtshot writing moves in your own narrative writing?

3) What will you try to emulate from the mentor text in your own narrative writing?

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A good turning point narrative is a detailed story about who someone was before and how that story changed their life, personality, and how they see things. I will try to use snapshot and thoughtshot writing moves to give more details in my story. I will try to say in my writing that you should try your best at everything you do.

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What makes a good turning point is detailed feelings and thoughts on the turning point

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I can use this by brainstorming and really seeing my thoughts.

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I can try to emulate some of the important values and important events/feelings in the text

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1) What makes a good turning essay is a buildup to the turning point, the climax with the turning point, and a detailed reflection.

2) I will use those by going over what was in my head at the time, whether it be fear, joy, or anger, and I will also use them by showing what things I smell, feel, or hear.

3) I will try to put in more sensory details, such as smells, sounds, sights

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What I think is a good turning point is to build up to a turning point, like really detailed feelings/emotions. But to make a turning point, you need to brainstorm first. Lastly, put details about the story, scared, happy, etc.

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1. What makes a good turning point essay is when it is talking about something then they say how it was becoming frustrating so they quit it.

2. I will use a snapshot/thoughtshot writing in my narrative by when people dont like something I do or when I feel emotions.

3. What I will try to emulate from the mentor text in my narrative writing I will get inspo from them and copy some words but not all of them.

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1. Something that makes a good turning point essay is adding emotion to the rising action and the turning point itself. And also adding a bit of dialogue makes the reader more into the essay.

2. I will use snapshot and thoughtshot in my own writing by expressing more of my feelings in the essay. Sharing thoughts and a bit more action.

3. Something that I will emulate from the mentor text in my writing is that I will add more action and senses, like what I see and hear. I will also add more detail to my actions.

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1) i think that a good turning point essay could be good if the writter made there writting clear and you can tell what their trying to say/tell

2) how i use my snapshot and thought shot would be like what i would think and my actions.

3) in the my narrative writting i would try to emulate some things from the mentor text would be how the mentor text had lots of describing actions and thoughts

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1. In my own words, I think a good turning point essay is what they share about.

2. I will use the snapshots and thoughtshots in my writing by using them in my writing while shairng my feelings for them

3. I will try to emulate when they said something, but I don't say it. I will write it as if they said.

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1. A good turning point essay includes what the narrator was thinking or saying in their memory.

2. I will use a snapshot/thoughtshot when I want to add more detail about an important moment.

3. I will try to put in more information about what exactly was going on at the time of that memory, and what my family members were thinking.

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1. What makes a good turning point essay is giving good thoughts to the essay, and by showing a lot of action in it.

2. What I will use is a snapshot and a thoughtshot is I will use my own words by showing my thoughts and feelings on the essay.

3. I will try to emulate by putting more action, details, and making sense into my essay.

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the building up the climax the twist then the end. and the turning point itself. I would use snapshots for seeing what the narrator is doing, and thought shots for feelings. I would do more feelings and lore.

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1. A good essay has details and dialogue.

2.I will add dialogue to my personal writing and have flashbacks and a but-turn opposite forshawdoing.

3. What I will try to emulate from the mentor text in my narrative, I will put similar words in my writing and with a realization.

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(1) I think some things that make a great turning point essay are great, expanded details on a scene, but not so much that you leave less for the important parts, good hooks, and a topic that makes sense. For example, you don't want to talk about a win at your first volleyball tournament and then talk about fries for the rest of the essay. (2) In my own narrative writing, I will use "Snapshots and Thoughtshots" to make my writing more creative and original. I think that adding emotion, flavor, your own twist, and tasteful writing will get a reader to try to read my story. (3) Lastly, I think something I will try to emulate/imitate from the mentor text in my own writing is the way they can move on from an event or scene quickly, but still tell the most important information.

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1.Agood turning point eassy makes a good story,deatils, were the stroy takes place,people in the story,.

2.I will use it for notes and to use it for alot of deatial in my story.

3.I will try to emualuate from the menotor text in my own narritive wrighting by listening to my teacher all the time and making sure i have all the notes she wants me to have but also asking questions if i need help on somthing or i just need to ask a question.

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1. What makes a great turning point is when you really focus on it when writing it in depth and not making it a summary. It has to be a clear idea.

2. I will use snapshots/thoughts so the reeder will feel a connection to the turning point, or at least have a good idea of what it was like.

3. I will make verbs and adjectives stronger, giving the story a bigger variety of words, adding to a better writen story

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1: I think what makes a good turning point essay is it having a lot of detail and a good turning point where the narrator actually changes.

2: I will use Snapshots and Thoughtshots in my turning point essay in important parts of the story to kind of show the reader what it was like to be there and when a have other thoughts.

3: What I will try to emulate from the mentor text is having a moment of suspense and then surprise, more sensory details and what other people were thinking and saying, not just me.

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1. What makes a good turning point essay is if it has a few small bumps leading up to a big one, and once the author gets over it, they learn a valuable lesson.

2. I will use snapshot/thoughtshot writing moves if I get over a big bump in the road and when I feel important emotions.

3. I will try to input some of the words from the mentor text into my writing.

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1. A good turning point narrative needs to be impactful and understandable. The author has to use author's craft tools, strong word choice, and clear narrative structure to make the story easy to empathize with but also stand out enough to be memorable.

2. I will add more thoughtshots that include figurative language like similes in certain parts of my story to make it more relatable. I will also use more snapshots to better describe the setting to help with imagery.

3. One thing I will try to do from the mentor text is include a flashback since it gives the story more depth and a well-developed timeline.

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What I think makes a good turning point in a personal narrative is to build up a climax, and right at the turning point, write really detailed emotions and feelings.

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What makes a turning point easy is when you have a good start that catches peoples eye

2. You use snapshots or thoughtshots through out the story

3. You build up to the climax

4. You write emotions, smells, details.

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I will use this snapshot and thoughtshot by creating more figurative language and more detailed emotions.

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1) What I think makes a good turning point in an essay is putting your emotion in it and not just throwing words together.

2) I will use a snapshot/thought when I want to connect to the reader or add more detail and emotion.

3) What I will try to emulate is something that I can connect to, but I would put the sentence in my own words.

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1. What makes a turning point essay good, is when it highly builds up to a moment to the "change" and then once that turning point happens you build a clear contrast on you before you changed and you after.

2. I will use thoughtshot and snapshots to show emotions more deeply and to make thoughts more clear.

3. I will get insporation on how to make a writing actually good, maybe stuff such as build up, contrast, etc.

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1. A good turning point essay is one that is centered around a pivotal moment that irrevocably changes the protagonist's life. Before the turning point, things are in one state (stable or otherwise), and after, they are fundamentally different, leading to character growth or a significant shift in perspective. It is relevant, precise, and avoids dwelling on insignificant details. 

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1. A good turning point essay is one that is centered around a pivotal moment that irrevocably changes the protagonist's life. Before the turning point, things are in one state (stable or otherwise), and after, they are fundamentally different, leading to character growth or a significant shift in perspective. It is relevant, precise, and avoids dwelling on insignificant details. 

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2. Snapshots and thoughtshots are techniques used to add depth and detail to narrative writing.

3. Pay attention to how the author uses a mix of long, complex sentences and short, impactful sentences to control the story's rhythm and pace.

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1: I believe a good turning point essay works best when it has plenty of description and shows a clear moment where the narrator grows or changes.

2: In my turning point essay, I’m going to add Snapshots and Thoughtshots during key moments so the reader can imagine what it felt like and also understand what was going through my head.

3: From the mentor text, I want to copy the way it builds tension and then surprises the reader. I also want to add stronger details and include what others were thinking or doing, not only myself.

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1. A good turning point is when the essay presents a few problems that the characters must overcome to reach the lesson.

2. I will use snapshots by talking more about my surroundings in the moment and the things I heard. I'll use thoughtshots by showing what I thought and, perhaps, what others around me thought in that moment.

3. I will try and use some of the words and put them in mine.

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1. I think what makes a good turning point is when you add emotions into the story and add dialogue into the story to be able to hear the characters talking.

2. I will use Snapshot and Thoughtshot in my own writing by expressing more of my feelings in the writing and sharing thoughts, and a bit more action and dialogue in my writing.

3. In my writing, I would like to try and emulate a lot more dialogue or try to emulate something from the mentor's text that had lots of describing actions and thoughts.

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1. I think what makes a good turning point is when you add emotions into the story and add dialogue into the story to be able to hear the characters talking.

2. I will use Snapshot and Thoughtshot in my own writing by expressing more of my feelings in the writing and sharing thoughts, and a bit more action and dialogue in my writing.

3. In my writing, I would like to try and emulate a lot more dialogue or try to emulate something from the mentor's text that had lots of describing actions and thoughts.

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1. I think that a rising action is something that could make a good turning point. I think that if you don't have something to start with to get people excited, then some people might not have interest.

2. I will use the snapshot and thoughtshot writing moves in my own narrative writing to create emotion and feeling. I think it's crucial to include the emotions and thought process so that the reader can get a different point of view.

3. I will try to emulate the mentor text in my own narrative writing by including the different senses. Maybe, just maybe, I will do my turning point in slo-mo. I could also just highlight important details.

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1. A good turning point essay discusses an influential moment in your life, includes moments that describe how the author felt, and offers a reflection on how they feel now.

2. I could use snapshots and thought shots to describe how things looked and how I felt about them in the moment.

3. The mentor text is a good example of what types of moments you should include.

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1. A good turning point is some surprising or something to help understand. 2. i will try to put these things in my essay.

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1. what makes a good turing point is the emotion in which you feel during that turning point.

2. i will use a snapshot/thought shot whenever the reader will need to picture it in their head

3. i will emulate what the author said and will add their thoughts and dialogue

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1. something that makes a Turing point great is lots of feelings,

2. I will use many snapshots and thought shots in my writing to allow the reader to see what I am seeing.

3. I will incorporate more emotions into my writing to make it stronger.

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1 . Detail and carefully chosen words. Making sure the reader understands the gravity. 2 . I will use a snapshot/thoughtshot by writing what I feel and think more. 3 . I will get inspo, but I won't copy any words since that would be copyright.

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1. What makes a great turning point is dialogue and having the person's feelings in the beginning, then changing in the end

2. I will use a snapshot/thoughtshot to improve my essay

3. I plan to add more feelings like in the mentor text

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1. What makes a turning point is that there is a lot of details and what made you have your turning point

2. I am going to use it for ideas and for my writing.

3. I will try to write in like it was a good choice to turn points.

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a goood turrning point is that when you add a momenr when you showed how u felt and when u had a hard moment and that when you do a deep story and how it change from this one story

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1. I think that something that makes a good turning point essay is being very detailed in explaining why it mattered.

2. I can be more detailed and stop in the moment and explain

3. I liked how she did a flashback and dialogue.

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1. What makes a good turning point essay is grabbing the reader's attention and giving a lot of detail about what is happening.

2. I will use snapshot and thoughtshot by having a lot of feelings into it so that the reader can think of what I'm feeling.

3. In my writing, I will try to add more dialogue and using stronger words.

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Something that makes a good turning point essay is talking about a moment they were in and how they were feeling then, thinking back about how it changed them.

I am going to use the snapshot to picture the moment, and I will use a thoughtshot to get the reader a better idea of how i was feeling

I want to give the reader a very clear description like how the writer did

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1. Something that makes a good turning point essay is adding details and a rising action.

2. I will use a snapshot by adding figurative language and write more about feelings and emotions.

3. In my writing, I would like to add more action and use more advanced wording.

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1. In your own words, what makes a good turning point essay?

A good turning point essay is an essay that has a lot of feeling into it and shows the biggest parts of it. And usually there should be one climax, but sometimes more than one can be more interesting.

2. How will you use the snapshot and thoughtshot writing moves in your own narrative writing?

I will use snapshots by putting in a lot of details and showing or picturing what was happening or what is happening in the scene. And for thoughtshots, I will make thoughts that are relatable or are accurate to how I feel.

3. What will you try to emulate from the mentor text in your own narrative writing?

I want to make my writing kind of like a story or more detailed. Before, I used to write shorter and not that long, and not really make any sense.

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1-What makes a good turning point in an essay or story is giving good thoughts and all the emotion being put into it, instead of just simple and plain words.

2-I will use snapshots to convey emotions and thoughts, allowing the reader to feel a connection to the turning point.

3. What I will try to emulate from mentor text is building tension and trying to surprise the reader. As well as add more detail and try to add other people's thoughts in the story instead of only mine.

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1 The turning point essay is about a really good story in your life that actually turned your life around

2 In my opinion a good snapshot is to use all legitimate work and I'll copy and to think really deeply about the story  when you pause

3  I will use a legitimate work  so I have a lot of details and do not have other things do my writing

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1. I think a good turning point essay needs the perspective of the character so you can visualize what's going on during that moment.

2. Snapshots and thoughtshots are important to add, so you can make up an image in your mind of what the writer is talking about.

3. I will try to include the feelings and thoughts going through the person's mind.

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1. I believe a good turning point in an essay occurs when the writer shifts to the first person and writes about their feelings towards the subject.

2. I would use a snapshot and thought if I was writing about my perspective on the things whether I like it or not.

3. I would use a lot more detail and try to be very specific while writing a turning point essay.

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1) A good Turning Point Essay is one where you have a lot of details so the reader can understand your memories and picture them better.

2) I can use them whenever I feel like my story is boring and could be more engaging.

3) Describe a lot of actions and describe my memories more.

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what i think that makes a good essay is that the person thats writing can add mostly turning points about themseves and add what the topic is

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1. I think a good turning point essay effectively uses sensory details to make the reader truly feel as if they are there, watching the moment unfold.

2. I will use it when I need to zoom in on a moment that is important or exciting (in my opinion) and write what I'm thinking

3. I will use how they show their feelings in their writing and how they use their thoughts.

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1) What makes a good turning point essay is giving details and describing the moments with visuals

2) I will use snapshots and thoughtshots throughout writing moves in my own writing by giving details about my surroundings and trying to make the turning point moment longer

3) I will try to give sensory details.

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1. I think a good turning point essay should have a lot of imagery and figurative language so that the reader can really visualize what the author is saying.

2. I will use snapshot and thoughtshot in my writing by describing what I thought, felt and what I think I should put focus on.

3. I will try to emulate the feeling from the mentor text.

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1. What makes a good essay is when there are little details that help the reader be able to picture the scene.

2. I could use snapshot when I am about to my perform. I could use thoughtshot when I first walk into the building

3. I would like to use a little more dialogue in my essay

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1. What makes a good turning point essay is giving your own thoughts and clear feelings and thoughts

2. I will use snapshots and thought shots

3. I will inclued flashbacks and dialoge

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1.) I think that a good turning point essay needs to have descriptive details that can suck you into the moment or attract you so that you can visualize/imagine it. I also think that good word choice could make a big difference in your essay. This could make it more interesting.

2.) I will use the snapshots and thoughtshots in my writing whenever there are feelings or whenever I do/think of something.

3.) I will try to emulate by adding more action or specific details that make the story more interesting or make it describe the moment/memory.

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1) A good turning point essay should include what happened before the turning point, the turning point itself, and what happened after it. It should also include first-person details and include a reflection of the turning point from the author.

2) I could use a snapshot and thoughtshot to explore further a detail that would be important for the turning point. For example, if an important event contributing to my turning point seems interesting, I could use a snapshot and a thoughtshot to further open the detail.

3) I could emulate the writing style that the author of the mentor text used to help me understand and use snapshots and thoughtshots.

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1. What makes a good turning point essay is the buildup to the turning point and a climax that is worth all of the buildup, and details that makes the reader fully understand it and almost fully see it.

2. I will use this to double check I correctly wrote down what was in my head, and my emotions were also correct.

3. I want to try and add more details, kind of like how the story "Perfectly pan-fried tofu" made it so you can see what's going on properly in your head.

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1. A good turning point essay needs to include a hook and something that you can really tell changed the author's life, even if it's as simple as tofu.

2. I will use a snapshot and thoughtshot to bring out the turning point and ideas in my writing.

3. I will put more details and explain why and how it's my turning point.

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1. What makes a good turning point essay is really descriptive details about their feelings and thoughts before and after the turning point

2. I will use snapshots and thought shots throughout my essay by adding them to show the nervousness of our crew

3. I will add more sensory details, such as what we smelled, what the water looked like, etc.

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1. A good turning point essay includes a build-up, description, and intriguing

2. I will use the snapshot and Thoughtshot writing moves throughout my narrative by putting them in places that seem appropriate.

3. I will try to emulate my turning point.

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What makes a good turning point essay is the ability to make readers think about your subject. I would use these to mark the sentence or words that are really important. I will try to emulate how she showed how she felt, and the structure she used to make the poem/writing.

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1. What makes a good turning point is feelings before, during, and after too. In other words, thought shots and snap shots. Also, it has to have something that is small, but you wouldn't be the same without it.

2. I will use them to better explain my emotions and feelings in the story, and other people's feelings. It will also help the reader better picture the setting of the story.

3. I will try to emulate more emotions of mine and others in my story.

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1. What makes a good turning point is having flashbacks, dialogue, and feelings that evoke how you felt during that time, along with descriptive scenery.

2. I will add different descriptions of the scene, incorporate dialogue, and include various flashbacks.

3. From the mentor text, I will try to give the reader a connection with the story and relate. I also want to use strong descriptions and reflections that show both the event and the deeper meaning.

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1. Details. Details are very important for good writing.

2. I don't understand?

3. Don't use AI. If you do, then at least put the AI's response in your own words, please.

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1. What makes a good turning point essay is when the turning point shows how it changed you.

2. I will use snapshots/thoughtshots in my essay to show what I was thinking in those moments or to help me refresh my brain

3. I will add better details, like explain them better.

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1) What makes a turning point essay, and a good turning point essay? Is the use of imagery, like using snapshots. The reader or Audience can actually picture the moment. Then they like to connect to it.

2) I will use Snapshot and Thoughtshot in my essay by highlighting my most memorable moments, like a moment that really stood out to me. Like the most important ones. Then, using a thought shot by saying what I was feeling and what I was thinking in that moment.

3) What I will add in my writing is be really specidic and add a lot od detail. Because the mentor's writing was particular and I could actually picture something.

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1. I think when your writing a turning point in your life you should slow down to get the reader in suspense you should also express your emotions and how you feel or what you see, smell, and hear for example. It was first year in California I went to a new school. as I walked through the doors I felt the cold breeze I felt nervous and scared I went to my first class and sat down then the teacher walked in she said we can walk around the class and talk to more people we all stood up and talked to each other but I didn't talk to any one. I stood there for about 30 minutes and finally the bell rang I was happy that I didn't have to interact with anyone and make new friends I walked t my next class and sat down again then this boy walked up to me and said hi I said hi back he asked me what game I liked we started to talk more then at that point I knew I made a new friend and I felt more comfortable talking more.

2. I will use snapshots and thoughtshots to explain more about the turning point.

3. I will try to emulate how I slowed down but add more stuff before the turning point

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1) Something that makes a good turning point essay is when it talks about the person or it tells us what the turing point is because then it gets us excited.

2) I will try and go back and look at the story and try to look for a specific point that will lead to using my snapshot/thoughtshot

3) I will try and get inspiration from other stories and put it in my own words

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1) To make a good turning point essay, you need dialogue, description, the thoughts of the characters and their perspectives.

2) It helps you make sure you have all those details and factors of making a good essay. It also helps the reader understand what im thinking and see what i saw.

3) I'll add more descriptive details like what the class room looked like and the people i met in between

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1) I feel like what makes a good turning point essay is when you have a big buildup towards the turning point.

2) I will use the snapshots and thoughtshot writing move in my writing when I want to add a little more feeling and emotions during specific scenes.

3) I will also try to put as much effort and dedication the mentor text did.

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1). What makes a good turning point essay is building up your essay to the turning point and presenting it in an expected way, especially presenting your thoughts and feelings of it

2). I will use thought shots and snap shots to show a visual and give more detail to my narrative

3). I will try to emulate by putting more action details, and give a more visual look to my narrative

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1. To me, what makes a good turning point essay is when you make the turning point dramatic so that you can really get the readers hooked. And add a lot of detail.

2. I will use snapshots and thoughtshots in my own narrative writing when the story needs detail, and it has some dramatic and emotional moments.

3. Something I will try to emulate from my mentor's text is to have a rollercoaster of emotions and to make my story slow-mo for the dramatic part.

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1) Besides the details about opening with the story with immediate context and other details like that, building up the climax & actually making it surprising in a way. It's probably the best way to make a turning point essay.

2) I will use snapshots to relay more detail, such as the things that can be seen, touched, & felt, so that the reader can picture it in their head. I will use Thoughtshots to share my feelings that are in my head through my experiences. This way, I can really express my emotions at that moment, and it's easier for a reader to picture moments and a person's feelings about them.

3) I will try to emulate being in an unexpected state and reacting to a moment that's the opposite of the usual play. In "Perfectly Pan-Fried Tofu", Charis had flashbacks of her elementary & middle school friends not liking the smell of her Korean tofu lunch and usually scooting away from her to avoid the smell. But then in high school, her new friend, and the entire class in the lunchroom ate all of the tofu from her lunchbox.

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1.a good turning point is when a charicter or the setting gose through a very intresting change of events

2.i will use them in diffrent ways to affect my writting in effective ways

3.i will emulate when a charicter is talking in sted of saying said i will say a veriedy of diffrent refrences on how thay say things like he shouted or she wispered

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1.) What makes a good turning point is if it goes straight into the action, and what is happening during that moment that made you rethink or is still thinking about that changed the way you thought about something, through first person.

2.) I will use Snapshot and Thoughtshot in my writing to further capture the moments in my writing to bring the audience closer to the moments that I was having, but also how my thoughts and feelings changed.

3.) I will try to emulate adding sensory details. And jumping straight into action. I can try to make it so the story is understandable to the reader, and they understand how I'm feeling, and how it changed throughout the moment.

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1) I think what makes a good turning point essay is when the turning point moment is written in slow-mo. It has details that describe the moment so that it feels like the reader is in the moment and is experiencing what you experienced.

2) I can use snapshot and thoughtshot writing moves in my own narrative writing by adding flashbacks related to the turning point to help the reader understand my point of view. I can add thoughtshots of what I am thinking about in my narrative to add emotions and my feelings into my writing.

3) Some things that I will try to emulate from the mentor's text into my own writing are lengthening my turning moment and adding more details to make it feel like the reader is in the moment. I will also include more flashbacks in my writing to help show my perspectives.

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1: What makes a good turning point essay is the emotions, conflict, and the reflection afterward, learning the lesson of the story. and with these problems and reflections, help the reader connect with the author because maybe they are going through something similar. Another thing that makes turning point essays good is that they are true and personal to you.

2: I use the snapshot at a special moments, so it will feel like the reader is right there experiencing the scene. You really get the attention of the reader if you draw a picture to imagine. I will use the thoughtshot at some moments that need expanding or more expression in the writing.

3: I will try to show more of my thoughts and emotions that the characters are going through. Also add details, simple or long, and use the three-word magic technique

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1. What makes a good turning point essay is when you add small details. Such as emotions and smells

2. I can use Snapshot or Thoughtshot by really paying attention and imagining my thoughts.

3. I will try to emulate the emotions in my own narrative writing

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1) A good turning point essay is when they add a lot of dialogue and thought to show the emotion of what the narrator is showing.

2) I will use snapshots and thoughts in my own narrative writing by what I would think and the actions that I did or others did.

3) I will try to emulate from the mentor text by describing my actions and memories more.

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What makes a good turning point is the climax, the lead-up, and having very descriptive thoughts that can allow the reader to create an image in there head of the item or person you are describing.

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I will use the snapshot and thoughtshot writing moves in my own narrative writing by expressing my feelings/emotions in that moment.

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I will try to include more descriptive details, including sensory details, and also include some dialogue.

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1. What makes a good turning point essay is when there are unexpected results.

2. I will use snapshot writing moves so the reader can picture what I'm writing. I will use thoughtshot writing moves when I think of what I think should happen.

3. I could emulate more details and strong words.

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1. What I would think is a good essay is that the person writing could add turning points about themselves, if it's a story that its about yourself.

2. How I will use snapshots or thoughtshots in my own narrative writing is that I can talk about myself or other people and I can also talk about my thoughts

3. what I would try to emulate from them mentor text is that I can get insperation but in my own word and not copy from them.

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1. I think what makes a good Turning Point is when you provide evidence on how you changed, keeping the Turning Point on topic, and having a good conclusion/resolution.

2. I will use snapshots and thoughtshots in my writing by using the information to tell which part is which, then highlighting them in certain colors.

3. What I'll emulate from the Mentor's personal writing is looking at how they build up to the turning point. I'll also be looking for descriptive words that I think would be good to put into my writing.

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1) What makes a good turning point essay is when you adds dialogue and have the characters speak their thoughts.

2) I will use Snapshot and Thoughtshot when people have opinions about what I do, and when someone writes emotions.

3) I will try to take suggestions from the mentor text and take words and put them into my own words.

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1. What I think makes a good turning point story is that you involve a big moment you change, and shape your future.

2. I will use the snapshot to make my essay more interesting by adding many details to describe the big moment.

3. Something I will emulate from the mentor text will be adding more descriptive text, making sense, and putting more emotion into the text.

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1. A good turning point is made by learning how a character failed and them learning that they are able to return better than they were before, hooking the reader more

2. I will use snapshot and thoughtshot to make my shots more interesting and detailed. It will also make the reader motivated to keep on reading my narrative.

3. I will try to emulate it from getting the inspiration from other writers. I will also try to put in sense and action into my narrative.

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A good turning point story shows how someone changes as a person. It tells what they were like before, what happened, and how it made them think or feel differently. I will use snapshot and thoughtshot writing to add more details so people can really picture what's going on and understand what I was thinking. In my story, I want to show that you should always try your best, no matter what

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A turning point in an essay is an important part of a story that affects the narrator/and or character. Through the snapshots and note highlights, I will be able to incorporate them into my writing by describing how a part of my story looks or feels. From the mentor text, I wanted to emulate the descriptive words that show how things smell or look from different perspectives and people.

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1.) What makes a good turning point essay is Punctuation, a good twist, but before that twist, it has to have a good lead-up.

2.) I will use a Thoughtshot in my writing narrative by using detailed descriptions when I'm explaining something, making sure to be very specific about what I'm saying/doing.

3.) I will try to emulate by putting action, detail, description, making the writing makes sense.

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(1) A good turning point essay is zoomed in on a single moment and shows how that moment changed you. (2) I will use snapshots and thoughtshots to be more creative and original. (3) I will try to emulate the amount of detail from the mentor text.

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What I think makes a good turning point is to make your turning point clear and visible, and make it strong and unexpected.

I can use snapshots and thoughtshots to show how I feel, to show at this point of the story if I'm mad or happy.

What I can use from the mentor text to make my narrative stronger is quotes and dialogue, to show the reader any examples or anything that you remember that someone said.

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1. What makes a good turning point essay is what changes all of a sudden, expressing their feelings more.

2. I will use a snapshot or a thoughtshot essay by showing my emotions more in my essay.

3. I will try to emulate my own narrative writing by writing doing better

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1 What make a good turning point is no mater what keep it cool

2 I would use a snapshot

3I will add more games like Roblox

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What makes a good turning point is an essay about someone or your feelings, like how you express yourself

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i can use it by thinking and brainstorming with friends

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I can try to emulate feelings or expressions