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Hehe

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Your story was amazing!!!!!! If you have not red it, read it now!!!!!!!!!

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I like yours

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Mrs.”la” I like the story a lot but maybe try changing “BOOM!” to soothing like “VROOM” and beside the slight misuse of the onomatopoeia your story was great!

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1kdzaP5kbzEmntJqBdxyaZJ0uddpvvQuohgYg2rNVP-U/edit

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Ooooo

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Plz

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Add some more paragraphs

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Your story was good  but you could add more internal thoughts

-Lorelai baur

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Good deals

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WG
I’m a little confused
Why did he kill Fanta if he didn’t do anything
It just doesn’t follow up

-Riley cordray
Byeeeee

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Katie Vidacak

I love your story it had detail,action,dialogue. Even though it was kind of sad it was still good. But can you some transition words.

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Rooster by Wg was one of the greatest story’s ever everyone needs to read it NOW

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The personal who made the van story that was good I have no suggestions - Briana Thompson

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Your story was good with good details.

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Colton Gingerich

I like it because it was funny and I saw nothing wrong

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I know how it feels I lost my dad 4 years ago

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It was funny

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Check out ms gold team took ms 5 extra hours after school

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Good story but I would recommend smaller sentences     Collin Walsh

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I liked your story but you could add more transition  words

-Lorelai Baur

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It was a good story I wish I saw you pushed her

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WD

Colton Gingerich

I liked the story but you could add more paragraphs.

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Oc
I really liked it but I realized that you will need a little bit more detail!
That’s it
- Riley cordray byeeeeee

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Katie vidacak

KD I loved your story, but I would recommend more detail and more internal thoughts to your story.

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Is good but could use a bit more dialogue

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Riley here and la I LOVED your story it’s so cute

-Riley cordray in your drama class

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I think your story was good but I recommend that you put more dialogue

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Your story was good, but I have confused about the bam. Did it hit something or hit someone?

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To whom the creator of “Cerebral Palsy“ Please check your use of “&”

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KD 2nd hour

Lucas croxton

I liked how you showed internal feelings and external I would recommend that you add a few more transitions

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Kailey Fortner
Your paper was great! I would recommend adding more transitions at the beginning of your paragraphs. I liked your lead.

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