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“You can do it!” My mom shouted. We were in Cabo. I was going to try to paddle board for the first time. I was so nervous to give it a try.

I slowly stepped off the boat and placed my foot on the board. Shortly after, it started to move. I grabbed the metal railing of the boats to brace myself. I then quickly placed my other foot on the soft foam board. Then I let go of the metal bar and the instructor pushed my board further away from the boat. My heart was pounding uncontrollably.

“I can’t do this!” I shouted to my family as I tried to balance on the board. I started to shake with fear knowing I would need to paddle soon.

As my board drifted, I got further and further away. I was still unable to move. I saw the giant smiles on my parents’ faces. They then began shouting, “Go Kim, Go!” I bent down slowly to pick up the paddle. As I did, my foot slipped on the smooth wet board and I tumbled into the cold water below. Splash!

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Lead

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Elaboration

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Conclusion

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Editing

•Spelling

•Capital letters

•Punctuation marks

•Compound sentences

•Sentence variety

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Revise

•Add more to each chapter…look at mentor text

•Word choice

•Cutting out parts…extra and what doesn’t make sense

•Read out loud to check for mistakes on own and with partner

•Reorder

•What can I do to make it better? Mark up your checklist.

•Number sentences- Meredith Alvaro

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Drafting

•Organizing the flow of chapters

•Research to say more

•Correct genre

•Hook/strong intro

•Transitions

•Study mentor author’s craft

•Concluding
sentence/paragraph
•Elaboration techniques

Expert words

Examples

Senses

Twin sentences

Non-fiction text features

Comparison

Mini-story

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Planning

•Picking a topic

•Brain Drop to organize

Meredith Alvaro’s- Parts or the 5 W’s

•Headings

•Structure of each chapter, i.e. cause & effect, sequential, etc.

•Organize each chapter and say more

•Research on the spot for further clarification

•Topic sentence

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3rd Opinion