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AIMS: review 3 paragraph structures in IELTS Writing Task 2

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Tasks:
- Decide whether a given paragraph is good or bad.
- Improve the body paragraph.

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1. There are several sound reasons why some people argue that learning fine arts is a waste of time. Firstly, arts is not a practical discipline in our lives in the sense that it does not help people much with making money, except for a small number of professional and established painters. Secondly, it appears that only a tiny proportion of children have an innate ability to learn fine arts so teaching arts for all children can be worthless. Finally, painting skills themselves also necessitate a great deal of time to be proficient, and for this reason, they rarely experience their improvement in a short period of time. As a result, they can relinquish, and learning fine arts be attributed to a meaningless time.

( 5 câu, 1 câu main idea, 3 supporting idea)

2. Nonetheless, instead of employing resources for researching the universe, I believe that mankind should pay more attention to resolving issues of the Earth. First of all, our planet is becoming increasingly hotter owing to noxious emissions of greenhouse gases which imperil lives of millions of people. To deal with global warming, more resources need to be allocated to diminish the levels of CO2 and other greenhouse gases. Second, humanity is confronting numerous endangers of atomic war and pollution, which could obliterate the human race soon. Thus, resources should also be utilized to make the Earth safer and more worthwhile by bridging the gap between countries and eliminating pollutants.

( 5 câu, 1 câu main idea, 2 supporting idea)

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The percentage of children playing computer games in their leisure time is highest, accounting for 34%.

The proportion of teenager spending their time on reading is lowest, occupying 2%.

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1. There are few acceptable reasons for why some citizens believe that studying the arts is such a waste of time. Firstly, the arts is not a practical subject in our life in the sense that it does not help us with earning money, except for some minimal amount professional and brilliant artist. Secondly, it seems that only a small number of children have an innate ability to learn arts, and hence teaching this subject to all children may be pointless. Finally, painting skill also demands a huge time to master and for this reason, people tend to can not see whether they are advance in their short period of time. As a result they may give up and studying arts is supposed just a waste of time.

2. Notwithstanding, instead of using natural resources for extraterrestrial research, I believe that inhabitant should notice solving problems of the Universe. Firstly, the Earth is hotter and hotter because of harmful emission of greenhouse gases, threatening the lives of millions of citizen. To tackle the global warming, more resources need to allocated for reducing levels of carbon dioxide and other greenhouse gases. Secondly, humanity also faces many risks of nuclear war and pollution, which could wipe human out soon. Hence, resources also should be used to make the Earth safer and more livable by bridging the gap between countries and removing hazardous waste.

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1. There are several rational reasons why some people believe that studying art is a complete waste of time. Firstly, art is not a practical subject in our lives which means it does not assist people much in making money, apart from a small number of professional and renowned artists. Secondly, it seems that merely a minute quantity of children have an innate ability to learn art, and hence it might be futile to teach whole children about art. Finally, painting skills themselves require a great deal of time to have a good grasp of them, and for this reason, it is often unable to see their progress in short time. As a result, learners might surrender what they are pursing, and then studying art is considered to be a complete waste of time.

2. Nevertheless, instead of employing resources for space research, I believe human beings should take notice of solving Earth's problems. First of all, the Earth is becoming hotter and hotter owing to harmful emissions of greenhouse gases jeopardizing the lives of millions. For purposes of going in for a crunching tackle from global warming, more resources need to be made a generous allocation to reduce levels of CO2 and other greenhouse gases. Secondly, humanity is also encountering numerous risks of nuclear war and pollution, which could wipe out humankind soon. Therefore, resources also should be used to make the Earth safer and more livable by narrowing the gaps between countries and removing pollutants.

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1. There are several good reasons why some people believe that art studying  is a waste time. First, art is not a practical subject in our life in the sense that it does not help people much with making money, except for a small number of professional and famous artists. Second, it seems that there is only a small number of children have innate ability to learn art, and so teaching the art for all chidren may be futile. Finally, the painting skill it seft also requires a lot of time to master and because of this reason, people often cannot see their progress in  short time. As a result, they may give up and learning art is seen as a waste of time.

2. However, instead of using resources for the universe research, I believe that humanity should pay attention to solving the issues of the Earth. First of all, the Earth is getting hotter because of toxic emissions from greenhouse gases, threatening the lives of millions of peole. To solve the phenomenon of globla warming, more resources than needed distribution for reductions in CO2 and other greenhouse gases. Second, humanity is also facing  many risks of nuclear war and pollution, which could wipe out humanity soon. So, the resoures should also be used to make the Earth safer and more livable by bridging the gap between water and removing substances polluted.

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1. There are some suitable reasons why a lot of people believe that learning fine art is a waste of time manner. Firstly, this subject is not a practice discipline in our life, meant not to give us a great help of earning a salary, apart from few professional and successful artists. Secondly, it appears that there are few children who have the ability of learning fine art lessons, therefore transmitting artwork knowledge to them is unnecessary. Finally, art skills themselves require a great deal of time to be good at this tough field, so most people can not have the sense of advancement in a short time period. As a result, they have a tendency to give up and this type of subject promptly is alleged as a worthless investment.

2. Nevertheless, instead of promoting resources extraction to discover the extraterrestrial universe, I think that we should pay more attention to solve our earth issues. First of all, the emissions of greenhouse gases are increasingly prone to causing the warming of the globe, leading to the life-threatening of millions of people. The efficient measure to this problem is that more and more energy and sources must be allocated to cut back the release of carbon dioxide and other gases into the atmosphere. Secondly, humanities are also at risk of nuclear wars and pollution, these things may be putting human life in the elimination from Earth. Therefore, most resources also should be used to make Earth more safe and worth living by bridging the gap among a variety of different countries and disposing of polluted substances.

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lesson 1:
There are justifiable reasons why some people believe that studying art is a waste of time. Firstly, art is not a practical subject in our lives in the sense that it doesn't help people much with earning, despite of a small number of professional and noble painters. Secondly, it seems that only a small number of children have an instinctive capability to learn art, and so teaching art to all children may be ill-gotten. Finally, the skill of painting itself takes a great deal of time to master and for this reason, people often cannot see their progress in a short period of time. As a result, they may give up and studying art is perceived as a waste of time.
(structure 1 and 3 supporting ideas)
lesson 2:
However, instead of using resources for extraterrestrial research, I believe that humanity should pay attention to solving the earth's problems. First of all, the earth is becoming increasingly hotter because of the detrimental emissions of greenhouse gases, which threaten the lives of millions of people. To resolve global warming, more resources need to be allocated to reducing levels of CO2 and other greenhouse gases. Secondly, humanity is also facing many risks of nuclear war and pollution, which could wipe out humanity soon. Therefore, resources should also be used to make the earth safer and more livable by bridging the gap between countries and removing pollutants.
(structure 2 and 2 supporting example)

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1. There are rational reasons why some people believe that studying art is time-wasting. Firstly, art is not a practical subject in our modern life which is opposed to offering people a lucrative career, except for a minority of professional and accomplished artists. Secondly, it seems that there are not too many children who have an innate ability to draw well, so teaching children to make an artwork is worthless. Ultimately, the skills of art requires much time spent to acquire, for this reason, people usually can not assess their progress in a short term. As a result, they easily give up and then learning how to craft is considered a time-consuming activity.

2. However, instead of using resources for investigating the universe, I believe that humans should focus on saving the Earth. Firstly, our planet is getting warm due to the emissions of greenhouses, threatening to the survival of millions of people. To solve the global warming, many resources should be allocated for mitigating the extent of carbon dioxide and other gases. Secondly, human beings prone to many risks of nuclear warfare and environmental pollution which can decimate/ destroy all humans soon. Therefore, these resources should be used for making our green planet more peace and worth-living by alleviating the gap between countries and eliminating the pollutants.

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1.      There are a few exactly reasons why some people believe that studying the art is waste of time. Firstly, the art is not an practicality subject in our life, which does not support for people in making money, except for a little bit of the person who are professional and well-known artist. Secondly, it would seem that just only the number of small children are able to learn art from congeniality, so that teaching the art for all children may become to meaningless. Finally, the skill art which are requires people spend a lot of time to master that those reason why, people regularly can not see their progress in a short time. As the result, their can surrender and studying the art was seen as a total waste of time.

2.      However, instead of using resources for studying of the universe, I believe that the human should concentrate on solving the Earth’s problems. The first of the problems, the Earth have become hotter and hotter due to harmful emissions of greenhouse, impacting the live of millions of people. To deal with global warming, a lot of more resources need to be distributed to reduce CO2 level and other emissions release. The second, humanity is facing many risks of nuclear war and pollution, those things could be devastated human lives soon. Therefore, the resources should be used to make the Earth safer and more livable by making narrow distance of other countries and removing pollution waste.

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=>There are some suitable reasons why people believe that It's a waste of time to do art. Firstly, art can not be a practical subject in our life in the mean of it can help people to earn money, except the amount of little professional art and reputation. Secondly, It seems that, there are very few children who are born with the ability to learn art, and so teaching art all children would be pointless. last, art also requires enormous time to catch up on theoretical knowledge as a result, everyone. For this reason, people usually can not see their progress in a short time. As a result, They give up, and learning art is supposed to waste of time.

=> However, instead of using resources for universe research, I believe that humans should be attention to deal with the problems on earth. Firstly, Earth is becoming hotter since harmful emission greenhouse gases, threatening the lives of millions of people. To tackle the global warming phenomenon. More resources are distributed for decreasing CO2 levels and emission greenhouses. Secondly, people also are facing risks about nuclear war and pollution, something that could wipe out humanity soon. So, resources should apply to make the earth safer and worth living by bridging the gap between countries and eliminating pollutants.