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Well, when people emigrate to another country they have to take into consideration, that there are many problems, affect people when they emigrate, such as language barriers, different cultures, etc.  That is  to  say  they must prepare and think well before making the decision

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Well, when people emigrate to another country they have to take into consideration, that there are many problems, affect people when they emigrate, such as language barriers, different cultures, etc.  That is  to  say  they must prepare and think well before making the decision

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When people emigrate to another country language barrier with doubt, is one of the major problems when people emigrate,  you can not comunícate with other person is so difficult when somebody ask you a question and you can answer, also if you are sick and you can not explain the doctor how do you feel, really it is Challenge . Also there is another problems that affects people who  come to another country is different culture because you have to deal with people with different ways to think, act etc. I remember the first day that l come to USA was stressful l got goosebumps all over my body, l was out norm. And  the last but not the least, living away of our family l remember day l come to USA 1 October 2018, when l saw all of peoples on the street i felt very sad because l remembered my close friends and family in D R really was terrible for me 

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When people emigrate to another country language barrier with doubt, is one of the major problems when people emigrate,  you can not comunícate with other person is so difficult when somebody ask you a question and you can answer, also if you are sick and you can not explain the doctor how do you feel, really it is Challenge . Also there is another problems that affects people who  come to another country is different culture because you have to deal with people with different ways to think, act etc. I remember the first day that l come to USA was stressful l got goosebumps all over my body, l was out norm. And  the last but not the least, living away of our family l remember day l come to USA 1 October 2018, when l saw all of peoples on the street i felt very sad because l remembered my close friends and family in D R really was terrible for me 

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Why travel to the USA?  What does it feel like to migrate to another country?  How does one feel being in another country?  Unfortunately many of us have the need to emigrate to another country because we do not find the same possibilities in the country where we grew up, we have to go out and look for opportunities in another country, in my case the United States.  THE FIRST PROBLEM I found was the language, one is exposed to discrimination but APART FROM THAT one gets used more than anything to stability of money, over time he gets used to it and learns to handle things and over time you change your habits and you get used to it.  you feel good.  Make no mistake about regretting traveling for a better future.  When I had to leave my country it was hard but I had already set goals for myself and I could not back down, as there are many people who go through this situation, I hope to be an incentive, in my opinion this country makes you feel like a robot when principle because everything is work and you do not have to get carried away because it becomes very routine and boring and you even get depressed but from my experience here it is good to organize and take time for yourself and learn more about other cultures and why not learn more about it. country that is adopting you.  Every time, even if you don't realize it, you become one more from here, be it becoming addicted to coffee, to work, valuing your free time, working overtime, etc.
The decision that one makes when traveling is the most difficult yes but perhaps it will become the best experience and decision that you have made to have better results in your life.

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My clothes did not fit, I felt without energy, I did not like to exercise, that was why I decided to make a change in my life and it was one of the best things I have done, because I have changed my life not only physical If not emotionally, I felt like I was a rare person in front of others, treating being overweight helped me to see things from another point of view because I could also help other people to achieve their ideal weight, some of the causes of Being overweight that affected me the most was stress, which does not allow you to sleep well or take rest for yourself, not including vegetables on my plate, and not eating on time, when you decide to change a lifestyle it can be very hard at first but then you get used to it and you see it easier because you want and you intend to get to be at your ideal weight and have a healthier life

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Explain three qualities of the ideal person that you would like to marry.

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Explain three qualities of the ideal person that you would like to marry.

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"How romantic is it to have a wedding with your loved one in a pure white dress!"
It was such a hopeful day full of  good fortune and only happiness in the future but, marriage is not surreal.
I think you think about your spouse's qualities before your marry for optimal results. In my opinion, the most pivotal element is helping each other, fundamentally. For instance, when I'm sick or going through difficult times in my life, I think that I need  to sympathize with the pain, comfort, and help by the side. In addition, spouse should help with childcare and housework. these things are no longer just women's work. All things considered, I think why we get married.

EXCELLENT !!!

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Explain three problems people have when they go to a new country

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Explain three problems people have when they go to a new country

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For me the first time in the USA, I was excited, confused and I cringeD for everything. In New York I saw life full of hustle of people  PEOPLE HUSTLING without grin and hostile HOSTILITY.  In my opinion, people were like robots and I also met many homeless people on the streets. OH!!!! It Made me miss home and want to go THERE home.  Fortunately, I had a good friend who were always by my side and always supportED me.

After I was in New York for 3 days, I traveled to stay at my friend's house in North Carolina.  I was very puzzled because every house in the village was closed as if no one was at home.  Each house KEEPS ITS PRIVACY  is very privacy. didn't talk when they saw someone on the roAd, just say hi and it's over.  It was different from my country when I WAS baking or cooking, I WOULD GIVE I'll gave it to my neighbors nearby.

FROM MY EXPERIENCE For my point of view three problems that people have when they go to a new country are :
First, Culture and high privacy. Second, Food: Yes, I like tasting food from different countries but IO cannot eat every day. Third, Life style for example in Thailand slow life but in USA fast paced life.

However, I thought this was my good experience abroad. And next time if I have to travel to another country I need to study more about the culture, language and lifestyle of people in that country.

VIYADA, WHAT YOU WROTE IS THE INTRODUCTION PARAGRAPH OF YOUR ESSAY. IT IS PRETTY GOOD!
NOW, WRITE THE BODY PARAGRAPHS AND THE CONCLUSION PARAGRAPH.

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Leaving my country was hard, but a fresh start at NYC was harder. When I first arriveD to NYC my priority was seeking employments related to my career so I COULD can support my children IN on Ecuador. Time passed slow as a snail and then I found a job where I was barely recognized for my effort, but through out this period I started to achieve a bigger client portfolio. After a year I decided to quit and startED my own business, a small cosmetic center in my department. Nowadays my clients congratulate me for my decision and also they are satisfied with my treatment results.
They always support me to carry on my dream. Taking a look back, I sigh for all the effort I made until now, but then I see my present and I can't help grin for all my achievements.

WELL ACHIEVED WRITING!!! GOOD JOB!

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What ARE  the qualities of perfect women ?
The facf for EVERYONE is how TO meet your true love. In my opinion since I CAME here to to live in New York  i HAVE never HAD LOVE EXPERIENCE for THIS REASON I HAVE NEVER MARRIED ANYONE  the only fact i need is TO trust in my couple, HOWEVER LOOKING FOR A PERFECT WOMAN FOR ME IS VERY DIFFICULT  but im sure i will find one

EDWIN: YOUR INTRODUCTION PARAGRAPH NOW IS MORE INTERESTING, PLEASE BE CAREFUL WITH SPELLING, GRAMMAR.  NOW YOU CAN WRITE THE REST OF YOUR ESSAY

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During high school I took different assignments, but the only assignment that I most liked was algebra. It was my only favorite assignment in high school. People used to tell me that I was like an airplane because I was quick in math. Everyday in class the teacher will always askED us a question, but no one will answerED it but me. I was one of the students who blurtED out the answer to the teacher. Everyday the teacher TOLD ME ¨wait for your turn to speak and the OTHER studentS  also grin at me because I always show our answer.¨

During the math test we had 20 minutes to finish. So I sighED slowly for the test Sometimes I will clenchED and cringeD to myself during the math. I GRINNED was grim when I did did good in the test. SometimeS IN MY CLASS I FELL ASLEEP BECAUSE IT WAS VERY EASY FOR ME... I will sleep and moan to when I am sleeping my friend will murmur to me.  THIS IDEAS IS ABOUT YOUR ALGEBRA CLASS??? This is something that I HAD success IN LITTLE BY LITTLE litter by litter

YOU DID A VERY GOOD DESCRIPTIVE PARAGRAPH, CHECK THE GRAMMAR POINTS I CORRECTED.

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Explain three qualities of the ideal person that you would like to marry 

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Explain three qualities of the ideal person that you would like to marry 

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Why lookING for an ideal person to marry ? I was disappointed when I heard about ideal person but here are some things that made me change the perspective about it , almost all the people need someone in their lives who loves them with sincere love , it is necessary to find a person TO HAVE THINGS IN COMMON WITH , who  wants TO START A FAMILY , and to do different activities to complement each other,For the relationship to work well, the most essential thing is respect, and the help offered to each other because marriage is about that, working as a team when necessary, the ideal person can have many things that you like and others that you do not , but as they get to know each other they decide to be a family because I, you, all the girls and boys need to find a person who loves us with true love, and feeling happy with just a hug when the things are not doing well.

PUT EVERYTHING IN ONLY ONE PARAGRAPH, DON'T SEPARATE THE LINES-

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It is Challenge to live in a  new country  ?

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It is Challenge to live in a  new country  ?

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I still remember the day I came to the USA, IMPROVE THE HOOK, REMEMBER A QUESTION OR AN ANECDOTE OR A QUOTATION
I was out OF norm, I felt very strange because I realized the risks that people have when they come to live in a new country,the language barrier ,different culture and BEING away from our families,. THESE are the different problems that we have... INCOMPLETE IDEA

WRITE A LONGER INTRODUCTION PARAGRAPH, IMPROVE IT!

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Wwhy travelING to the USA?  what is it like to migrate to another country?  How does one feel being in another country?  Unfortunately, many of us have the need to immigrate to another country because we do not find the same possibilities in the country that we grew up in, we have to go out and look for opportunities in another country, in my case the USA. THE FIRST PROBLEM I ENCOUNTERED my first problem was the language, my customs, one is exposed to discrimination but APART FROM THAT outside of that one gets used to it and gets used to it, more than anything else you stabilize (WRONG WORD) money, over time you get used to it and you learn to handle things and over time you change your habits and you feel good, TIFANY: OMIT THIS HIGHLATED SECTION BECAUSE YOU ARE GIVING SO MANY DETAILS IN THE INTRODUCTION. You learn to organize and live well, you learn a lot about other cultures, change your way of thinking, you value your free time more and you learn to mature, I don't know if it's just me but you start loving coffee, another thing that I like a lot about here is who take great care of animals, in the end I ended up liking the 🇺🇸 😁  WRITE THE THESIS STATEMENT (MAIN IDEA) HERE, I DON'T SEE THE THESIS STATEMENT???

EXCELLENT HOOK QUESTIONS
IN THE INTRODUCTION PARAGRAPH YOU ONLY MENTION THE 3 PROBLEMS, DON'T GIVE MUCH DETAIL.

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Explain three problems people have when they go to a new country

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Explain three problems people have when they go to a new country

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MOVING Move to another country and startING a new life sounds beautiful and exciting. But there is a side that people struggle WITH. PUT EVERYTHING IN ONLY 1 PARAGRAPH.

First problem is understanding the language. I remember when I moved to USA I couldn’t speak nothing. It was so hard to COMMUNICATE communication with people. When I got lost it was even worse!  IF I COULD GO BACK

If I can go back in time I would tell my self TO study English before I moveD

SARA: IN THE INTRODUCTION YOU CAN ONLY MENTION THE 3 PROBLEMS, YOU MENTION ONLY ONE, MENTION THE OTHER 2 PROBLEMS. I SUGGEST TO WORK MORE ON YOUR THESIS STATEMENT (MAIN IDEA) BECAUSE IT ISN'T CLEAR IN YOUR PARAGRAPH.

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AMPARITO: FIRST YOU NEED TO WRITE THE HOOK (A QUESTION, OR A QUOTATION OR AN ANECDOTE THAT HAPPENED TO YOU. IN THIS PARAGRAPH THERE ISN'T ANY HOOK.

The fiRst and most difficult problem when people go to another country like the United States is the LANGUAGE lenguaje, SECOND, the people must adapt to different cultures, foods, extreme climate change. Another problem due to the cost of rent is sharing the house with other families . HERE WRITE YOUR MAIN IDEA OR THESIS STATEMENT WHICH IS MISSING,

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The three qualities the perfect woman to i want to marry

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The three qualities the perfect woman to i want to marry

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HERE WRITE A HOOK (A QUESTION OR A QUOTATION OR AN ANECDOTE)

I want to marry a person with personality , a person to I want to trust and a person to love and protect and solve the problems we turn around . THIS PART IS GOOD
EDWIN THE INTRODUCTION PARAGRAPH MUST BE LONGER THAN 3 LINES.
YOU HAVE TO WRRITE: 1) THE HOOK and 2) THE THESIS STATEMENT

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I remember the first time in the USA, it was the year 2005, everything seemed in a strange note. When I got to Miami's airport I had goosebumps all over my body and I was really hungry. Then I saw a coffee shop where I gravitated towards. I tried to order some coffee with stuttering words, I was so nervous then...Suddenly, I blurted out¨a coffee´the lady started listing all the kinds of coffee and I didn't understand anything...

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                          Dilemma?                                                       It all started IN A STRANGE NOTE very strange, it was a very STRESSFUL stressed day and I just got a call from a cousin 🙌 he asked me if I wanted to travel with them and not to worry about anything because everything was paid for and I could not miss that great opportunity, I did not ask where, when and how many days THERE WERE were they but I accepted and his answer was "in 15 min I'll get to your house 🙈", as if nothing was coming to the Poconos??? very calm, and just the fact of seeing how we arrived had me very amazed, I started To take photos of everything, in the hotel we had a very beautiful view, you could be in the pool and feel as if you were on the beach because there were waves, there was another pool that was outside the hotel and it was fascinating to be there with hot water already you around snow since it was winter, we went ice skating, something that I also did for the first time and it was not so bad because I only fell 3 times LMAO😂, there was also a program to zip line and waooo one of the best sensations that I could know, for it is  I was so amazed I completely forgot that I had not asked for permission and I did not realize that my cell phone was off, nobody knew about me and it had already been 2 and a half days 💀, when I turned on the cell phone I had a lot of missed calls of everything the world and more about my mother, when I called, my desperate mother began to ask, if I'm okay, where was I, what happened and I was very calm and I told her in the Poconos and that I was super, that I was very sorry for that and that I was already back, His answer was "wait when you get there 🥺🔫", my idea was to stay two more days so that the anger would go away, what do you think he did to me?  That was the best unexpected trip I had  .                             ♥ ️Poconos ♥ ️

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                          Dilemma?                                                       It all started IN A STRANGE NOTE very strange, it was a very STRESSFUL stressed day and I just got a call from a cousin 🙌 he asked me if I wanted to travel with them and not to worry about anything because everything was paid for and I could not miss that great opportunity, I did not ask where, when and how many days THERE WERE were they but I accepted and his answer was "in 15 min I'll get to your house 🙈", as if nothing was coming to the Poconos??? very calm, and just the fact of seeing how we arrived had me very amazed, I started To take photos of everything, in the hotel we had a very beautiful view, you could be in the pool and feel as if you were on the beach because there were waves, there was another pool that was outside the hotel and it was fascinating to be there with hot water already you around snow since it was winter, we went ice skating, something that I also did for the first time and it was not so bad because I only fell 3 times LMAO😂, there was also a program to zip line and waooo one of the best sensations that I could know, for it is  I was so amazed I completely forgot that I had not asked for permission and I did not realize that my cell phone was off, nobody knew about me and it had already been 2 and a half days 💀, when I turned on the cell phone I had a lot of missed calls of everything the world and more about my mother, when I called, my desperate mother began to ask, if I'm okay, where was I, what happened and I was very calm and I told her in the Poconos and that I was super, that I was very sorry for that and that I was already back, His answer was "wait when you get there 🥺🔫", my idea was to stay two more days so that the anger would go away, what do you think he did to me?  That was the best unexpected trip I had  .                             ♥ ️Poconos ♥ ️

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Three problems when people go to different countries . 

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Three problems when people go to different countries . 

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Most OF THE TIME Most of the time  people often go to new countRies without knowing them, and they go Crazy because they don’t know what to do. Why do people go to different countries if they know they well get lost. WRITE A HOOK QUESTION HERE
People going  to new counties where people speak different languages can HAVE DIFFICULTIES communicate with THE LOCALS because they don’t speak the language. The places where you go can be hard to find difficult USE SYNONYM WORDS especially if you don’t have a family member  to stay with. In most of the countRies specially when you are alone and not knowing the places it makes yourself wanna go back home.  THERE CAN BE their can be bad SINISTER people and KIND HEARTED because when trying to ask for help most of the time people will help and others will not.

HERE WRITE YOUR THESIS STATEMENT OR MAIN IDEA (ONE SENTENCE)

PUT EVERYTHING IN ONLY ONE PARAGRAPH. DON'T LEAVE SPACES.
I SUGGEST TO USE DIFFERENT AND MORE ADVANCE VOCABULARY, USE WORDS AND EXPRESSION FROM THE BOOK.

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When i was a kid my gramps TOOK CARE cared of me in their house while my mother was working in sales, my grandma WAS cooking for all the family while my grand pa WAS is still working in his office, they TOOK ME care me to my school in the morning every day. sometimes they took me TO THE DOCTOR ONCE A MONTH once for a month care me to a doctor because I HAVE AUTISM i am autism and when i finishED the visit WE ALWAYS ATE CHICKEN WITH FRENCH FRIES always we eaten a chicken wuth french fries in pollo campero, sometimes we went out to a restaurant in the evening, always in my vacations we went out to a trip to honduras and Guatemala, ON SUNDAYS WE WENT TO THE PARK we in the sundays we went to park with my friend and when i went to the bed before I FELL ASLEEP i was sleeping they always read a STORY history before i was to sleep. I love my grandpas

GOOD JOB! IT'S TIME TO START USING NEW AND MORE COMPLEX VOCABULARY

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After God my hero is my daughter Mickaela
She is my best friend, counselor, confident, administrator and my representative in Ecuador
She is 21 years ago, she is intelligent, she studies Chemical Engineering with a scholarship at the San Francisco de Quito University, she is en seventh semester and she is one of the best students.
Mickaela is responsible, tidy, loving, serioUs, she loves and takes care of her little sister, hers, cat and dog.
She loves to exercise and TO READ reading, she likes to dress up.
She is very important in my family's life, we love her and admire her a lot.

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MY HUSBAND MY SOUL MATE, THROUGH HIS QUALITIES I CONFIRM EVERY DAY THAT HE IS MY SOUL MATE IN THIS LIFE. What qualities of my husband do I confirm every day that he is my soul mate in this life? I love his love for God and nature??? REWRITE THIS IDEA. His care, love, and expression ARE QUALITIES THAT make him my eternal boyfriend, BESIDES THE FACT THAT we share many tastes and goals in our life.

ALEJANDRA: I RECOMMEND TO USE MORE COMPLEX AND ADVANCE VOCABULARY WHEN YOU WRITE THE REST OF THE ESSAY. EXPRESSION WE HAVE LEARNT THROUGH THIS COURSE.

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It was the day I decided to become A stronger person.

There are many reason why I think my dad is A hero in my life.

When I was around 10 to 13 years old I used to get bullied. I really hated my school. Sometimes I didn’t go school FOR like a week, because I was scared to see my classmates.

One day after school when I got home my dad told me “Life won’t wait. Happiness requires struggle”

This words really touched my heart.

After that, I started to think about how I COULD BECOME HAPPIER IN MY LIFE can I become happier in my life.

Then I realized I should think about everything IN positive way.

IT Took a little time s but this positive thinking really changed my life. My classmates stopped bullying and I got a lot of friends.

I never will forget wheNt my dad told me THAT I WAS GOING TO HAVE A BETTER LIFE. and I’m going to have my best life.

SATISFACTORY WRITING, GOOD JOB!!! BE CAREFUL WITH SENTENCE ORDER

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They are my heroes because since I was born they have been in my life, they have given me and my siblings love and care since we were children, they are a role model because they have struggled to give us education with a lot of effort, for the   Poverty was difficult to work, EXPLAIN THIS IDEA they have fought a lot to raise their family for that reason they are my heroes, another of the very important reasons that THEY are ALSO my greatest example, BECAUSE  was that when I was a baby I almost lost my life due to an attack I SUFFERED that gave me, they without To think  WITHOUT THINKING about it they took me to the doctor, it was far away they had to walk more than an hour to get there, fearing for my life they asked God a lot for a miracle and  yes it was granted because that day was the only one I HAD THAT ATTACK that gave me that attack, after God,  parents are the ones who provide unconditional love to their children, that’s why their are my heroes .

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When I started my career AS a stylist 28 years ago.
I had to serve a client with long hair dark hair
She was serious, elegant, young and very pretty.
She asked me to make her some blonde highlights, she wanted a new look.
So I determine??? the color and the process to be carried out, but in the end..................I WAS My blindsided, her haIr was the color of a green leaf. I felt goosebumps WHEN I SAW HER.
I covered her eyes with her cap, so that she would not look at the her green hair , until the problem was solved.
At the end the color was perfect, just like she wanted.

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this was my walk in the statue of liberty with my sister And family 

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this was my walk in the statue of liberty with my sister And family 

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this was my walk in the statue of liberty with my sister, she came to visit from Maryland, we decided to gathering with  others friends  ,T O GO FOR A WALK for go to walk , my sister was excited to go to know part of nyc, while I was very happy because they were spending time with me, those days there was a flood in the train stations, that's why we decided to drive. M my boyfriend knows the streets of New York a lot, that made it easy for us to get there because there is a lot of traffic, arriving there we went to buy the tickets to get directly to the statue of liberty, my nephews were delighted to see the whole landscape, once we entered the boat THERE WAS CAMARADERIE we were camaraderie with other people who were already there, when we arrived at the monument after a while we were hungry, we decided to eat chicken and french fries, in the afternoon we returned to home namely  to rest and watch movies, it WAS is a very nice experience because we enjoyED the company of my sister and her l ittle SMALL family to the fullest.

IT'S A SATISFACTORY AND WELL STRUCTURE PARAGRAPH WITH ALL THE ELEMENTS!!!

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I can't wait to tell you that,  my superhero doesn't wear a mask and cape. He does not have bulging muscles like superman, does not climb walls like spiderman but it is the most important man in the world, Jesus Christ. He died on the cross to give you life. He is my favorite superhero ever, I love him.
WELL DONE!!! MAYBE I WOULD HAVE PROVIDE MORE DESCRIPTION OR DETAILS. GOOD HOOK

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My Mom is my friend, she is everything for me and my brother, SHE is our hero in everything. My mom is a hero to be because since I WAS a child my mother has been on top of me in my EDUCATION ecuación she never left my brother and me behind. However my mom is a kind person, a helpful person and she likes helping out people. Therefore, I have her actitud where if I or someone makes her mad she will even mad but she will always get mad with me for anything. CONFUSING IDEA, IT NEEDS TO BE REWRITTEN To put it IN another way, my mom IS if a sweet person with me and everyone. She is my hero and I love HER and she always will ALWAYS be my hero because she has been with me in everything.

PUT INTO PRACTICE THE VOCABULARY SUGGESTED AND PRACTICED DURING CLASS. USE MORE COMPLEX WORDS.

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I wanted to go to an art museum in New York City. So, I decided to visit there, namely, The Guggenheim Museum, as a rule, I don't know much about art but since I  visited this museum, I have been very interested in it, especially I fell in love with the colors of the landscapes painting and figure painting of Picasso, who is well known for his abstract paintings.  Consequently, this trip was an opportunity to increase my knowledge.

YOU WROTE A SATISFACOTRY PARAGRAPH WITH ELEMENTS REQUESTED.

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Mom was mom, friend, and everything of us. I had 7 siblings, 6 girls and 1 boy, which was the youngest.  We knew that mom loves LOVED all of us but we also knew that mom loves LOVED our younger brother the most, WHO which we also loveD him very much.

Mom was a very strong woman. She worked at a company and when she came home, she also had to take care of us.  We associated  SPENT the weekend together, cooking, baking, talking, she had a good  perspective and SHE WAS comprehensible well as an example OF THIS when my older sister was heartbroken from her boyfriend, she WAS very sad so, my mom counseled her and said life-changing opportunity.

And on the day that we all lost our only brother, never to return, He died of illness BEING while only 29 years old.  It was a great lost day for our family, we all regretted and we knew that our mom was more REGRETFUL regretted than anyone.  But she tried not to cry for fear that we would be even more sad and she tried to CONFORT US consol us not to cry.  Our mom wouldn’t show any signs of weakness to anyone and WOULD PROTECT US will protecT us in dire situations.  I love you so much my hero.

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My interesting travel experience in “Nan Province” 

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My interesting travel experience in “Nan Province” 

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I couldn’t forget my first BIRTHDAY adventure and blindsided of my birthday in Nan Province.  Nan Province is one of Thailand's seventy-six provinces lies in upper northern Thailand.  It is a beautiful and mountainous province.  IT IS POPULAR FOR People are popular to travel in winter around December to February because the weather is cold and you can see the sea of fog in the morning.  Five years ago in February which was the month that I was born, my FRIENDS IN A GESTURE OF camaraderie invited and also compelled me to go to Nan with them and they told me to dress up pretty. A strange note I thought but I agreed.
Fifteen of us gravitates GRAVITATED towards to Nan Province by Van and our accommodation was in the National Park on the hill. But unfortunately, on the day we arrived it was raining and MADE make traveling up the hill difficult because the car couldn't go up, because the road was slippery. Oh my god!!!! WE HAD TO WALK UP THE HILL we have to walked up the hill, we SPENT spend time about 3 hours from 4 pm. to 7 pm. to walked up the hill and while we slipped, our clothes were muddy and the weather was very cold.

Finally, we arrived at the accommodation, after we finished taking a shower and were about to start eating dinner.  Suddenly, the dining room door opened. My friend brought me a birthday cake and everyone said “Surprise! and happy birthday”. I WAS BLINDSIDED, I cried and hugged them and said “thank you, thank you so much my love friends.

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My experience in Ecuador

Since I was a CHILD, WHEN I WAS four years ago, I haven’t been back to Ecuador because my parents wouldn’t let me go, however when I grew up and I turnED eighteen.My first trip was to Ecuador, my experience when I got there everything was different, it was a countryside, a field with full of animals. The place that I went to was Chunchi , where my family was. Therefore, when I went to my family house they took me to different places that I didN'T Know, but the GOOD thing there IT was very cheap and it was not expensive like it is in  Newark. I was surprised with all the things that I bought. The food was also cheap, with ten dollars I could eat Six meals and even more. The clothes WERE at the same price as Newark but everything else was cheap. People from Ecuador don't have the life ....? because INCOMPLETE IDEA they have to work double jobs to get their money. That is to say my experience in Ecuador was very  different from the place I was born in Newark.

IMPROVE HOOK SENTENCE
YOU WROTE A SATISFACTORY PARAGRAPH
GOOD USE OF CONNECTORS AND VERY DETAILED
PLEASE START USING NEW VOCABULARY

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A WONDERFUL ADVENTURE I WON'T NEVER FORGET the wonderful adventure that l never forget. i had the best experience in the world, my family and l went to the costs of our country that is to say A 5 stars hotel, l COULDN'T cant imagine the gathering that we had in this place, my husband as inventor of our trip, he decided not TO travel to another country so l was blindsided when he told me THE NEWS, I WASN'T HAPPY AT THE BEGINNING that but finally l accepted. However, we enjoyed the restaurants, beaches , mountain etc, my children howled with laughter they felt amazing. USE A CONNECTOR HERE share  SHARING with your family, you will never forget that moment

ROSI: IT'S A SATISFACOTORY PARAGRAPH WITH MANY GREAT ELEMENTS¡ PAY ATTENTION TO THE CORRECTIONS

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My Travel to Bear Mountain with my mon in train

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My Travel to Bear Mountain with my mon in train

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We departED FROM to house in THE morning. Our first travel started went WHEN we arrived TO at Grand Central we bougth to Hhudson and TOOK take a taxi to Bbear mountain, we WERE listening TO DRIVER'S STORY the past history of the chofer while while we arrived in a small town to buy our lunch. FINALLY, and WE arrived in our destiny and we SAID say goodbye to our new friend we WENT go to the lobbi and needED to WAIT UNTIL 3 waiting at 3:00 pm to go TO our room, so we walked to the park ,next we TOOK take a boat in the lake, them we WENT go to the zoo in a another sider to the park and SAW see the animals in the cages, finally we go to the lobbi and go to the park hotel room. When we enter in our room im a 5:00pm its starting raining no more to do we watched tv and see a tv series bunnicuna, teen titans go and other series, next  we eat puzza for the dinner , then we taked a shower go to  our bed and go to slept at 11:00 pm we waked up at 8:00 am and taked a shower and taking our breakfast  and prepare to take the train to grand central at 11:30 am and traveling to our home. When arrived in our home i say to my family that trip was very exceptional.

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Once I traveled with my kids, nephews, sister and friends to the Quilotoa lagoon.
We arrived at the hotel at night and it was very cold, but they litGHTED the fireplaces.
The next morning I took a shower, although the others had told me not to do it.
Then we went down to the lagoon, along the way we find a lot of dust, therefore my long hair got messed up just like my clothes, however I enjoyED with my family.

YOU WRITE IN A COHERENT AND ORGANIZED WAY, HOWEVER, USE THE NEW VOCABULARY LEARNT IN CLASS AND WRITE A CONCLUDING SENTENCE WHICH IS A MORAL OR LESSON YOU LEARNT FROM THE TRIP.

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I could not believe it happened again. The day started out on a strange note on a Friday afternoon. It happens every year on my birthday. My parents would always put the wool over my eyes. They would tell me it’s my day so I can do what everyTHING I want after school, so my friends and I will GO shopping and to concerts.  My friends would also know about the SUSPICIOUS suspect birthday and would not also tell me about it. It goES night and my family and I will got  GET HOME to my house, and when I open the door of my house everyone yelled `` happy birthday'' to suspects??? WHAT DO YOU MEAN BY THE SUSPECTS??? .Every year I will fall for it.

YOU WRITE PRRETTY WELL AND YOU ARE USING THE VOCABULARY SUGGESTED!!!

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It was an event that I will never forget.  I’ve always a strange note that how I did that, THIS SENTENCES IS NOT CORRECT when I was young about 12 or 13 years, I had a best friend we are  WERE very close and we always talkED and playED together.  One day It was the first days of the semester, I'm   WAS very glad to be able to come back to school and see my friends and also my BEloveD friend. And this THAT day I also lost my best friend forever.

When I arrived at school while my best friend has HAD not yet arrived, I and another friend set up for something bad.  We pull the wool over my best friend’s eyes.  We pretended not to know her when she came in to talk to us.  I know she thought it WAS i s out of the norm and she tried to talk to us but we ignored it. So, she was very angry, she cried and ran away.

We WERE are shocked, we thought we were just teasing her. And I stalled to said “Sorry” to her, from that day, she did not talk TO ME ANYMORE. don't DIDN'T play with me anymore.  And a year later, her father moved home so her SHE also had to change d schools. And since then, I've never seen her again.

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I could not believe it happened again! I made the mistake of packing according to climate. The last 2 weeks ago, I travelED from Newark to Sap in Honduras, I didn't have time to thoughtfully assess my clothes choices, my clothes out OF a strange note some days,NOT CLEAR, REWRITE THIS IDEA because I choose to dress up for my job, WHAT DOES THIS IDEAS HAS TO DO WITH THE CLIMATE IN HONDURAS? the problem is the climate in Honduras now is very hot, a heat like an intimidating fire, well I have worn days I hung up my wore and dressing down, WHAT DO YOU MEAN? Now some days I wear clothes FRESHER AND LIGHTER CLOTHES more fresh and light.

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Teacher my topic is my weekend

When THESE DAYS COME this day comings,l feel happy and relax
My weekend IS my favorite days of the week, because l feel happy, relax USE MORE COMPLEX VOCABULARY etc. First, l get up at  9a.m., take a shower then,l prepare  my breakfast and watch my favorite program, around 11 or 12 o’clock l usually go out to many places such a stores and cinema. I try to go with my family , they are important to me, finally ,  I comeback to my house happy and relax. REPETITIVE, USE SYNONYMS
On weekend try to go out, if you do it, you ‘ll feel better.

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MY PET CAT

I work almost every day and he waits for me at the door to greet me.  When it is my day off, he knocks on the door of the room to sleep for a while with me and then we get up to play for a while, sometimes I feel like he looks a lot like me because he's a blackhead, he enjoys the music I play by closing his eyes and shaking his head. He likes me to see him, he is very grateful, I read that cats bring you things when they are grateful to you and I have already brought 2 mice, 3 little snakes and 1 little bird to me because my skin gets goose bumps.

I met this kitten in a park when I was little and I am very grateful that they put it in my path.

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Work from home combined with studying at the same time perhaps is the greatest challenge when you are a mother and to keep up with all.
You need to have a clear goal of why you want to do it and then make a careful plan of how to do it and establish a routine.
I started with a segments schedule, by priority.
To get everything right, I get up at 4:30 a.m. my day ends at 9:30 p.m.
The secret to handling the load is to respect my scheduled times.
It is not easy, but if possible, I think about why I do it? What do I do it for? this has just helped me in difficult times not to give up and continue to motivate me to ACHIEVE my goal.

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My weekend is not how I imagine it, why? 

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My weekend is not how I imagine it, why? 

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On Friday I thought about my weekend, I imagined and organized everything I would do, starting on Saturday, but it happened very differently, how I had planned it. One day I asked myself why THIS IS HAPPENING is this happening?  and I found that I should not worry about things that will happen, and learnT to organize what to do the same day, if I think about it a lot it will bring me stress and I will not be able to do well what is really necessary to do, how to take time for myself, to my family, and cook what I like

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My Daily Life at Tuesday

My day begins when I inwake up at 7:00 am, in AT 7:15am i take a shower , i take a shower at 7:30am i take my breakfast when i finish my breakfast at 7:50 i enter in my online english school to FROM 8:00 am to 10:00 am.

I go out FROM to my house at 10:30 am, i go to train station to take the train at 10:45am, IT TAKES ME ONE HOUR TO GET TO MY WORK the time to take to my work  is 1 hour to travel . When i arrive to my job i buy my lunch in a food truck at 11:50am. I take my lunch at 12:00pm , i use the elevator tothe penthouse and vacuum THE entire BUILDING buildong FROM to 12:40pm to 4:00 pm. WhEn i finish i put the vacuum cleaner into the closet i go to the train station to my house at 4:10 pm, to my house i arrive into my home at 5:20 pm to my house and when i enter to my house i take a shower at 5:30 pm .

In evening at 6:00 pm i do my homework, next i take my dinner at 7:00 pm , i go to my room and WATCH watching tv tp 7:30 om to 10:30 pm, before i go to sleep i put the trash and brush my teeth AND amd i go to SLEEP seel in my bed at 11:00 pm.

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My first day in high school was my first achievement from being a child to a teenager and getting more education and knowledge.

Being in high school and starting a new life was hard for me from being a child to a teenager bBecause I had more and even more hard work to do .

In high school it was not the same as elementary school because when I started my first class everything was different because the way that my teachers taught me was quick and everything was fast and I had to learn everything.

High school at first for me was difficult because I had to take lots of tests and reports to do, but that was not everything: those tests and reports had to BE me done in less then 45 minutes. In elementary school it wasn’t like that, everything was easy, not that easy, but being in high school was challenging for me.

This was my first  life experience in high school it no that easy being in high school I went through a lots of things, and that is not all, more LIFE CHANGING EXPERIENCES thing are coming for me and it will be more difficult and challenging for me.

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From Monday to Thursday I have the same routine. REMEMBER THE HOOK SENTENCE AND THE TOPIC SENTENCE WITH CONTROLING IDEA
I get up at 7:30am, I make breakfast.
When a I finish breakfast at 8:30am, I go to online English classes until 10:30am, them I take the shower and get myself for work.
when I don't have clients, I cook lunch at 1:00pm or INSTEAD else I buy in the restaurant.
for now  BY NOW I spend my free time studying for the final exam of my Technology COURSE, and we are planning with my sister the business of the beauty salon WITH MY SISTER.
At 10:30pm I am tired and ready to go to bed . THE MORAL OR THE LESSON OF THIS TOUTINE???
Thank you so much Teacher

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I came to America about 18 years ago.
it was hard to listening and speaking in English.
so I always needed help to translate language.
Also ,I couldn't get good job. LINK THE 2 IDEAS
Parent teacher conference is too close for comfort.( because I can not understand what she said)    THIS IDEA NEEDS TO BE SUPPORTED, EXPLAIN WHY ARE YOU MENTIONING IT
my goal in life is to speak English very well.
and I want to live confidently in America.
I THINK THE PARAGRAPH NEEDS MORE DEVELOPMENT AND IDEA SHOULD BE CONNECTED(thank you teacher!)

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My oldest son is my best friend.
we have time for drinking something and jogging during the weekday.
I'm very busy on Thursday and Friday .
My son takes care of his younger brothers instead of me.
we play boxing together with Nintendo every Friday night. we go to ice rink every Saturday and enjoy time together all weekend.
honestly, my son is better than another.
I think family is really good friend ever.