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A.      Writer’s purpose and topic

B.      Compare and contrast articles

C.      Methods used/evidence

D.      Thesis of each article + arguments

E.       Definitions

F.       Evaluation of knowledge

G.      Grey areas

H.      Rationale for third article

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A.      Structure/Presentation

B.      Paragraph unity

C.      Evidence and examples for main points

D.      Logical overall structure

E.       Relationships between ideas (e.g. – cause and effect)

F.       Effective opening sentence

G.      Summary and evaluation

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A.      Hedging (modals)

B.      Boosting (adverbs/adjectives)

C.      Language of comparison

D.      Punctuation

E.       Reporting verbs

F.       Academic style/vocabulary (AWL)

G.      Cohesive devices (pg. 50/51)

H.      Appropriate tenses

I.         Active/Passive voice

J.        Word form

K.       Using coordinators and subordinators appropriately

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1. Katie's work (content and structure a-d)
-a variety of compare and contrast forms
-good examples to support the data
-some main idea is unclear
-clear grey area
2. Linny's work  (content and structure a-d)
-clear purpose and topic
-few compare and contrast form, you should use more words that express the compare and contrast
-your paragraphs are unity and clear structure

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Lina: - I think your structure of text should follow with the outline as stated in the beginning.
- Opening sentence should have sources, topic, main argument.
- It should have one main idea per one paragraph.
- It should also mention about next step at the end of text.
Petch: -  You may think about organizing the paragraph to be one main idea per one paragraph.
- Adding some evaluation/own voice in CCR.
- Mention about the next step at the end of text is suggested.

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1.GUN:
-the main argument of every paragraph is not clear.
-purpose and topic is clear
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2.Alina
-clearly paragraph and structure
-too many words (the conclusion could be separate to every paragraph)

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Lena:Petch :1,The open sentence is very clear and I can know the thesis and map from the beginning, and cather your point easily.And the thesis has throughout  the whole text.2,Maybe you can add more your own  voice to this text, not just list the two writers’ opinion.After comparing and contrasting the two articles in one point ,you can evaluate your analysis .

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Lena:Petch :1,The open sentence is very clear and I can know the thesis and map from the beginning, and cather your point easily.And the thesis has throughout  the whole text.2,Maybe you can add more your own  voice to this text, not just list the two writers’ opinion.After comparing and contrasting the two articles in one point ,you can evaluate your analysis .

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3.The words was a little too much,you  may reduce the part --"the pages".
Notch:1,Your organization  is very clear, and  contrast the differences first, then compare the similar points.
2,And the same to Petch,maybe you can add more your own voice.
3,make the main argument more clearly

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- Structure/Presentation

There are relationships between causes and effect for each topic sentences, however, the similar and dissimilar content is a bit confused in terms of organization of paragraph (should be similarities per 1 paragraph)

Good opening sentence with source, purpose, topic,

Effective evaluation on the cases and effects

- Language
There are effective booster and hedging by the use of adjective, adverb, and reporting verbs, however it rarely to find the hedging.

Sufficient in the use of language of comparison, however, you should use more various type of comparison words e.g. synonyms (there’re a lot of using ‘but’)

Effective use of cohesive devices, tenses, word forms and coordinators

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Structure
There’s relationship between causes and effect
Good opening sentence containing source, topic and purpose specifically on arbitration and conclusion
Effective evaluation on cause and effect, similarities and differences
Language
Effective use of boosting by using adjective, adverbs, language of comparison and reporting verbs.
Also, the writing is well organized on similar and dissimilar paragraph which are clearly separated

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Structure
Presentation, unity and evidence is effective.
Opening sentence works.
If adding a conclusion in CCR will be perfect.

Language
Successfully language used, including boosting ,reporting verbs, and punctuation.
Using correct word form and appropriate tenses.
Academic style is well observed.
Using a wide range of language skills.

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Structure
Well organizing and paragraph unity.
Clear logic in the whole CCR.
Using topic sentence may make your audience much easier to catch
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Language
Academic style in language.
A wide range of language skills have been applied in your writing.
Appropriate tense and word form.