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o You have read at least 3 - 4 essays from your class

o You have also received feedback from your peers

o Then you have reviewed the student sample uploaded in the class

o Now, I want you to think about:

--> 1 aspect of essay writing you are able to do well

--> 1 area where you need to put more effort

--> The one area you need help...

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I think I do very well in embedding evidence into my analysis, though sometimes I need help in analyzing the evidence and shortening my sentences. I need to put more effort into really thinking on all my points and seeing if they are valid.

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--> 1 aspect of essay writing you are able to do well

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--> 1 aspect of essay writing you are able to do well

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I am able to come up with a good personal response

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--> 1 area where you need to put more effort

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--> 1 area where you need to put more effort

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I need to add more evidence in my paragraphs

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1) I have able to write the introduction very well by following the PEAL structure.
2) I need to put more effort in embedding evidence and analyzing them better. I also need to work on phrasing my points better as I tend to repeat some words and phrases sometimes.
3) I need help with improving my personal response.

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I don't need any help

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I feel that I was able to analyze the evidence given.I think I need to avoid repetition of words and provide a clear thesis statement.I don't need help with anything for now.

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1 aspect of essay writing you are able to do well

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1 aspect of essay writing you are able to do well

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I am able to structure the introduction well and include the points

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1.i think one of the aspects that i was good at was spreading evidence throught the questions
2.i think need to put more effort in making my essay longer
3.i dont need help

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1. I was able to do well in analysis and giving strong evidence.
2. I should put more effort in giving a personal response
3. I don't need help in anything right

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1 aspect of essay writing you are able to do well

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1 aspect of essay writing you are able to do well

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I am able to articulate and structre my sentences properly. I am also able to write a good introduction and conclusion.

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1 area where you need to put more effort

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1 area where you need to put more effort

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In analysing and restating points in the conclusion

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I am able to come up with a good introduction

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--> I think I am able to understand the essay question and form points to answer it.
-->I need to put more effort in my analysis.
--> I need help in developing my personal response and finding the right context to insert it in.

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As of now, I do not need any help

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1) Have been able to follow the PEAL Structure , and state my popints
2) I could work better on the phrasing done in my introduction.

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1) I am able to follow the PEAL structure well and form a good thesis statement. My conclusion is also good
2) I have to work on my introduction.

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Analysis of evidence

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I need to work on writing a proper personal response that relates to what the essay is about

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1 aspect of essay writing you are able to do well

- Write strong and convincing points

1 area where you need to put more effort
- The evidence and structure

The one area you need help
- I dont need any help right now

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I think I am able to write a good introduction. I need to put more effort in analyzing the evidence. I need help in embedding my personal response.

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Analysis of Language

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1) I was able to follow the peal structure
2) I need to work on developing a personal response
3) I dont need any help right now

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1. I am able to write my introduction well and the form and structure of my poem is good.
2.  I need to put more effort on analyzing my evidence. I also need to work on elaborating my points
3. I don't need any help

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I dont need help with anything.

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I am able to analyse the poem an choose the points well. However, I need to work more on structuring the essay.
I do not need an help at the moment.

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1. I feel like I was able to grasp the question really well and understand it.
2. I think i need to work on my conclusions because the were abrupt
3. I need to work on analysing my evidence.

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1) following PEAL format, analysis and incorporating a rich vocabulary of words

2) i need to work on giving a personal response

3) N.A

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I was able to write the body paragraphs well.
I need to put more effort into the introduction.
None

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1) I am able to find the right pieces of evidence and write a well-formed introduction.
2) I need to put more effort into making my conclusions more structured.
3) I don't need any help.

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I think I can elaborate on topics more and I can do that well.

I need to put more effort in the evidence gatehering and analysis

I dont need any help other than the peer rewiew

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Remember to colour this response in the same colour (purple)

What is one area of strength that you can identify?

What is one area of improvement that you can identify?

What do you think you need to do improve in this area?

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1) one place where i think i did well was in using transitional words in my essay
2) one place where i need more help is in writing in the peel format

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I think I am able to follow the PEAL structure well and write a good introduction and conclusion.

I need to improve my Body Paragraph content, quoting and providing evidence and language features, and also my Analysis of language and writer's effect.

I think I can do this by practicing the PEAL  paragraph more, expanding my knowledge of literary devices, revising the text and thoroughly understanding it and taking notes at important stages of plays or poems where devices are explained.

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I think i can give a good personal response and I follow the structure of a peal essay properly.

I think I can work on framing my sentences and work on analyzing my evidence better.

I think i can practice writing some peal essays so that I work on these 2 points.

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I think I did well in embedding evidence into my analysis, though sometimes I need help in analyzing the evidence and shortening my sentences, along with using a better choice of words. I need to put more effort into really thinking on all my points and seeing if they are valid.

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What is one area of strength that you can identify?

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What is one area of strength that you can identify?

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I am able to find the correct evidence and analayse how it is supporting my thesis statment.

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I am able to use the PEAL structure properly and explain my point. My grammar usage and vocabulary has become better

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I enjoyed the Take it and Make it better because i got to see different perspectives to my writing and my essay. My friends and my teacher both replied and helped me make my essay better. I got advice that i should display my understanding of the poem better. Something i could work on in writing literary essays are quoting evidence and anaylisis of that specific evidence. That is one thing i could work on, something aside from that would be my time managing skills. One thing i am doing well would be writing my introductions and my thesis statements. I think i am really putting in effort to do that and i am loving my output. The introduction is a very important part of the essay and i feel like i can properly talk about what i am going to be writing in the essay and giving the readers a good hint about what will be written in this essay. In order to work on adding evidence and explaining the evidence i think i need to understand the poem really well. Every quote has a meaning to it and i think i should read every sentence properly in order to work on this.
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1. One area of strength I can identify is framing and emphasising the main points to be conveyed in the essay.
2. One area of improvement I can identify is framing my analysis and writing my introduction.
3. I need to improve on developing my personal response and inserting it in the right context. I should keep it short and to the point otherwise my point tends to get lost.

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1. What is one area of strength that you can identify? :
I think that when I have enough time I am able to analyze and frame my answers really well. I am also able to write my body paragraphs well.

2. What is one area of improvement that you can identify? :
Time management. I think I need to work on writing my essays faster and complete the work on time. When I start writing my essay I first take some time to think about my points and collect evidence. I also take time to frame my answers before writing them so I need to work on doing that faster. I need to work on writing introductions and conclusions as well. However, I would like some more feedback on all parts of my essay.

3. What do you think you need to do to improve in this area? :
I need to practice writing more essays under a time limit.

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One area of strength that I can identify is writing my introduction and conclusion. One area that I can improve is my analysis. I think I need to improve on going into more detail on my analysis and analysing better

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What is one area of improvement that you can identify?

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What is one area of improvement that you can identify?

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I could improve in cutting out repetitive lines in my essay. I could also improve in framing my thesis statment and introduction.

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I am very good citing evidence and writing the introduction.

I need to improve how I phrase my analysis and make sure my sentences aren't very long. I also need to make sure I analyze the evidence that I cite and not go off the point I am analyzing.

I need to practice more by writing more PEAL essay's where I focus on my sentence structure and the depth of my analysis.

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- I was able to follow the peal formal well
- And area I can work on is being less generic in the introduction
- I don't need any help right now

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What is one area of strength that you can identify?

I think I am able to understand and analyse the poem well, and write adequate introductions.

What is one area of improvement that you can identify?

I think i've improved on writing the essay in the PEAL structure

What do you think you need to do improve in this area?

practice writing more PEAL essays and reading more of them

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I think I need to improve on analyzing and giving strong evidence. I should also be more nuanced in my writing

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1. I think my strength was in incorporating feedback.
2. One area that I can improve in is analyzing the evidence better.
3. I need to improve on looking for the implied meanings of text.

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I need to work on my introduction and structure . I need to learn how to phrase me sentences better

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What is one area of strength that you can identify?

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What is one area of strength that you can identify?

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I listed clear evidence that properly supported my point. I embedded the quotes which improved the flow of my essay. I was also able to write and elaborate personal response that connects to the essay.

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I think I am good at coming up with thesis statements and personal responses. I need to work on giving strong evidence and quoting it in the PEAL paragraph. I can do this by reading the play more often and highlighting the quotes that I think are the most important.

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One area of strength.
I can elaborate on topics like the analisis and the explanation of the evidence.

Area of Improvement:
How I understand the poem and the evidence gathering, Literary devices and grammer.

Improvement:
The way I think about the poem and I htink I have to look into the persona's shoes. How they are feeling and their thoughts.

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1)I am able to understand the text.
2)One area for improvement for me would be to form sentences better and analyzing the evidence.
3)I think if I practice writing peal paragraphs I will be able to make these two  my strengths.

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I struggle with putting my point to words and elaborating. I often write unnecessary explanations which makes my point get lost

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One area of strength : My one area of strength is to use the peal format and analyse the evidence  and give personal responses.

One area for improvement : I could definitely work on word choice and phrasing. And i should stop repeating analysis points and make my answers crisp and to the point.

What do I need to do to improve : I should analyse more sample essays and understand how the writer has phrased it , and kept his or her work short and simple.

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One area of strength for me is stating evidence. One area that I could improve on is implementing the PEAL format in my essay. I think i could use the PEAL format in a more strict manner and follow it through out the essay.

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One thing I am able to do well in my essays is following the peal structure.
One area I need to improve on is my introduction and make it to the point instead of dragging it.
I think I can practice writing peal essays to improve on things such as a good introduction.

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What do you think you need to do improve in this area?

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What do you think you need to do improve in this area?

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Maybe I could look at some mentor texts and other essays to learn the way thesis statments are supposed to be framed. I could also do this by re-framing sentences from my body paragrpahs.

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I think that I did the introduction well because I followed the structure. But, one area in which I need to put a little more effort is the formation of structure because the structure is not the proper essay structure that I was supposed to do. I need help in forming the structure of the essay.

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What is one area of strength that you can identify?
I can identify my strength while writing PEAL essays, in analysis, explanation, and embedding quotes with rich vocabulary

What is one area of improvement that you can identify?
I noticed, that i need to improve on my introduction and conclusion

What do you think you need to do to improve in this area?
I need to give a deeper, more impactful personal response towards the end of the conclusion, and in the introduction, i need to improve on writing crisp towards the point

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What is one area of strength that you can identify?

- One area of strength would be finding the hidden meaning in phrases or sentences

What is one area of improvement that you can identify?

- I have improved my ability to use the PEAL format in my writing

What do you think you need to do to improve in this area?

- I need to improve my ability to emphasize a point and write longer paragraphs

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I find the introduction and evidences to be one of my strong suits.

My analysis are usually a little off and wrong. I feel like this is an improvement area.

I can fix this by going through past peal essays and read the text to understand the hidden meanings.

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What is one area of improvement that you can identify?

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What is one area of improvement that you can identify?

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I need to be careful while framing my sentences. In some areas, my sentences seemed rushed and may have repeated words or not conveyed my point properly. If I use more advanced words, I may be able to take my essays to a higher level.

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A few things that I was able to do well was properly follow the PEAL structure, and I was able to articulate the inferred meaning from the text and develop a personal response.

Although the choice of words was good, I failed to pay attention to grammar, punctuation and spelling.

In order to fix this problem, I need to pay close attention to the sentences that I am forming and re-read them to see if they are grammatically correct.

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Something that stopped me from writing the second draft would be Me not understanding how to use the peal format.

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1) One area of strength for me is finding the proper and correct evidence.
2) One area I need to put more effort is the analysis.
3) One area I need help is in developing my personal opinion and conclusion.

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What do you think you need to do improve in this area?

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What do you think you need to do improve in this area?

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I should use more advanced words and time my writing. Sometimes, when I am in a hurry, I rush my sentences. Maybe I could look at other pieces of writing as well do improve my writing.

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The take it and make it better assignment helped me realize what I'm doing well and areas that I need to improve on.
I followed the peal paragraph well and gave a substantial amount of evidence to and the correct evidence to prove the point I also framed the structure of the essay well.
One area in which I feel I have improved is stating evidence and embedding it in my text by not using phrases like "These lines show" Instead using phrases like "When this character says...it implies..."
One thing I need to work on is my introduction by making it less generic and give a better overview on what I'm writing my essay about. I could also work on framing my thesis statement in the introduction.