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Hi, Tara. Could you please comment anything under this post cause I'm not sure whether you could see this padlet. 😆 Thanks for that.

Hi Haoyang - it’s Tara yes it looks very good! You can also enable comments so I can write underneath your ideas...

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https://miro.com/app/board/o9J_kp85oDs=/

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Essay - Cultural Hybridization in Fashion

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Culture Hybridization in Fashion - The Mixing of Chinese and Western Aesthetics.

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The ideas of Cultural Hybridisation - 05/07

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The ideas of Cultural Hybridisation - 05/07

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Firstly, I totally agree with Wang’s and Yeh’s statement.

I'd like to discuss the Culture Hybridisation in fashion area. I'll research the examples that how fashion designers combine Chinese culture with western culture and how they create new collections or products.

I have already found and laid out 5 designers who managed to combine these 2 different culture into their design works. They are Angel Chen's, Jun Zhou's and Yushan Li's designs from China, John Galliano's designs in Christian Dior 2003 Spring Couture and Marc Jacob's designs in Louis Vuitton Spring 2011 Ready-To-Wear.

And I find that it is quite interesting that the Chinese designers have different thoughts and methods from the western designers in how to use Chinese culture into garment design. Maybe this idea can also be a part of the essay cause it is worth researching to me.

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Louis Vuitton Spring 2011 RTW by Marc Jacobs

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Christian Dior Spring 2003 Couture by John Galliano

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Jun Zhou's and Yushan Li's design works in 2020

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Angel Chen's design works in 2019

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1.Define Chinese aesthetic & Western aesthetic
2."new blood" - not sure; "fresh aesthetic" change into "fresh look/trend"
3.Change the order of description of fashion and craftsmanship
4. The introduction part is a little bit long.
5.Be more specific when explain "juxtaposition". (not too deeply)
6.Think about how to define each examples.
7. Change the word "enlighten".
8.The final sentences need to be much stronger.

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Week Reflective PracticeGibbsFP - Haoyang Jiao

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Kraidy MM Hybridity or the cultural logic globalisation

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Feedback of First Draft from tutorial - 17/08

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Feedback of First Draft from tutorial - 17/08

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1) Make the thesis statement & my argument more clearly. Maybe can mention "what is juxtaposition" in first paragraph. MOST IMPORTANT THING IS MY VOICE!! AGREE OR DISAGREE!!

2) Change the word in discourse paragraph 1: try to (seems like not confident) & designers designed.

3) Change the word in discourse paragraph 2: With the passage of time.

4) Mention "cultural symbol"&"aesthetic influence" from discourse paragraph in first paragraph.

5) "Three different methods of... shows the various motivations and aesthetic influence in next paragraphs." Put this sentence after the second discourse paragraph. (Maybe can also mention the "motivation of designers" in first discourse paragraph in order to give a link.)

6) Examples: Why it isn't juxtaposition? What is that mean? REASONS & RESULTS!!

7) Examples: topic sentences & signposting & why this example supports the thesis statement.

8) Change the word "methodologies"

9) Conclusion: repeat the argument clearly & consider the structure of the long sentences (maybe can be shorter)

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MOST IMPORTANT THINGS FROM FEEDBACK - 17/08

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MOST IMPORTANT THINGS FROM FEEDBACK - 17/08

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1) BE BRAVE & CONFIDENT
2) MY VOICE
3) SIGNPOSTING & LINK IN EVERY PARAGRAPHS
4) REASONS & RESULTS
5) WARNING: DO NOT BE FAR AWAY FROM WANG & YEH'S THEORY