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I love the imagery and explanation! What book was it?

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I feel like the message is equivalent to don’t judge a book by its cover but it was described so well i could vividly see you engaged in the readings

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I love the clear passion that was visualized! It felt like a very real story because of it.

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I think that the descriptions were really well done, especially at the library. I also love how you enjoy learning about English and going to the library.

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I liked the visualization and passion. It felt like you were speaking directly to me in a way

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I love how your perspective changed at the end and I love the clear and precise images you paint with words. Love love love it.

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I like the actual image I can see while you’re telling the story

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"In a room with no professional hairstylers"
I really liked the description, you vividly showed the setting. You created the dread of cutting one's hair, ugh! I've done that its one of my worst punishments.

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I love how innocent yet mischievous this story is but the dialogue flowed good with the story

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It feels like I’m being taken through the story. Very descriptive

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I love how this was a conversation or dialogue based sort of story.

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I loved the build up of tension! How long did it take for your sister to grow her hair back?

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relatable

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I love that you added the part about you and your friend thought the dolls and your hair could be the same. It reminds alot of my childhood. And I love the innocence of the story. It gives the serious tone at the end a nice touch.

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"harmful effects of assumptions"
The ideas of insecurity for you are is something that I think everyone can relate to. This is heartbreaking how stereotypes can effect people.
Bianca you did a really nice job with describing what exactly about you that you did not like. The blonde hair dye thing, I really did not know that about you.

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It's very admirable that you're powering through those stereotypes and assumptions. It's downright cruel for people, whether it be adults or kids, to say those things, but the fact that you've managed to step beyond that is wonderful.

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Although not to the point you've felt it, I've felt like I don't belong for a while. You're not alone. :) Do you know why your parents never taught you spanish?

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There are always people that make assumptions even when they don't know the full story, and I'm glad that you were able to move past those people.

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I get what its like to be on the bench, I used to be the worst player on my team. Honestly, favoritism annoys me soo much. I like how you brought about the message of sometimes quitting might possibly be the right thing. Its very different story than the others we've heard. I love the message of speaking up.

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There's a very good lesson to be learned here, especially with the ending quote. Finding things you'd enjoy and worth your time is a key to happiness.

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I relate to this a lot. It is so difficult to enjoy a sport when you feel like your potential isnt acknowledged but i think you did learn what you can tolerate when it comes to a team and im glad you knew yourself that you didnt want to be surrounded with that type of negative energy.

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I like how you reminded people to do what they love for yourself, not for others. It's also important to speak up for yourself, as you said, and the most important thing is that you try. I also know the feeling of being in a group/team and not knowing any of the others.

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This is a very different mood and tone than we've heard before. I like the fact that the ocean was a daydream. "A big ball of energy that I wasn't used to." that's a great description.

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I love the visuals! The figurative language is really strong! "I walk the way the wind blows, not daring to look back" is a very strong opening, too.

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" Days turned to years" is a really good line. I love the imagery and the comparison that you make with the moon and the sun. This piece felt very real to me, almost as if I was there.

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The poetry shake up! The wording and visualization was spectacular.

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I like the self-awareness in this personal narrative, I think you admit a lot of things people are scared to admit also I can tell it was very emotional

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the personification of impulsivity really created the imagery for me. I loved the allusions to chess, the pawn and the game. "checkmate." was such a strong ending.

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I love all of the metaphors, personification, and similes that you used, especially the chess one. I also like how that feeling was always there, however it could be defeated or held back with an "anchor."

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The instant personification is very strong. I feel like I almost immediately knew what you were talking about. I understand the effect of medication on your physical state. My medication dehydrates me and keeps me from getting hungry; I was 62 pounds in 5th grade.

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The metaphor of being a pawn seemed really strong. I've felt the same way with anxiety, but there's never been a proper way to word it for me.

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the description really shows how vulnerable you were to write this I  think you were very honest but i liked the way you almost described it as a game I think thats unique when it comes to mental illness

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I love the thought of this story and how you constructed it. It leaves the reader to think and imagine and relate too for some

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"Jumping into the deep end of a pool from the empire state building" strong quote. This is something very very relatable to most of us now. It went from hopeless, to hopeful, back to hopeless, that was very strong. one sentence, even two words can really change perspective.

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I feel that this is really relatable, especially about the college stuff. It can be a bit overwhelming with a lot of decisions to make and things to learn, but the most important thing to do is to take it one day at a time. There's that underlying pressure of the actions that you take in the future, and you notice how much they matter, even if other people say otherwise.

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¨jumping into the deep end from a pool from the empire state building¨ is so powerful to me because it definitely makes sense when life changes so suddenly. I think this is an important topic because of the pressure of junior and senior year and how youre about to become an adult.

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Yes! I love the way you showed the effect writing had on you!

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I love the depth in this story

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"my heart sank like the Titanic"
The imagery really brought me there. I loved the figurative language and message. It was darker, but love being fragile was a very different message than what we usually hear in literature.

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I like the comparisons and imagery
"love changes". deep and relatable. the message is something you don't hear often even though you know it's true

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The phrase "sank like the Titanic" is really good. I also like the fire analogy. The message was well done, and so was the imagery.

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My parents also divorced, and I think it's true that the pain of it never really goes away. It was a very powerful message.

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Wow. I learned earlier in 2020 that love is not just a feeling, it's a choice. Please remember that your parents chose not to keep the love alive, regardless of the reason they divorced. I know from a young age that's what love looks like to you, but remember that not all marriages end in divorce. Not all marriages end at all. :) The writing was very powerful, when you said it was your parents who broke your heart without saying how they did it that pulled me in even more. I'm writing a lot.

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"love can leave even if you gave it a place to stay" hit different to me because I definitely have been in that position where love wasn't enough but also I felt this very close to home because I also believe my parent's divorce was my first time experiencing heartbreak.