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BACK TO TEAMS AT 12PM

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How does it begin? How does it end? Is the end satisfying?

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How does it begin? How does it end? Is the end satisfying?

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I love the exaggerations of the threats to toxic masculinity. The contrast between the vulgar upset and the innocent pink drink is funny. The quick escalation and the simple word exchange also shows the severity of the issue and how normalised the concept of tm is. Did you make this based on real life eaves dropping? very intriguing.

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What is the tone of the work? Sad, funny, serious etc

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What is the tone of the work? Sad, funny, serious etc

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I agree with Grace, the lack of human text makes you see the comic from the dog's perspective.  I find the 3rd page really interesting because it reminds me of a body language diagram. Maybe that is the dog's replacement of the text?

did you draw the dogs by observing them at the park?

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WE ARE MEETING BACK IN 5 MINUTES IN TEAMS

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I find the story very endearing because the post man keeps his regular activities going despite the circumstances (reminds me of the world trying to cope with the pandemic). Is this made with carbon paper? Sometimes its a bit hard to read which is understandable because its a difficult medium to control. Maybe you could edit it a more digitally or try writing a few times in carbon and see if that could fit in. Other than that I do think the texture is charming. It looks like it has been sitting in the post man's back pocket or laying in a post apocalyptic atmosphere.

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Is the subject matter relatable or engaging? Is it specific or broad?

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Is the subject matter relatable or engaging? Is it specific or broad?

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I really love this funny guy that you have managed to established so strongly! You made everyday mundane objects and activities absurb which is why I think this works so well. (my favorite is him sleeping in the nike sock). I also really like the design of the rooms. Does the style have a specific name?

Only too bad I cant read the text very well. It might be the compression of the image or the text needs to be a little bigger. I would love to know exactly what he is doing!

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Interesting to see what types of stories are being addressed across the group: fiction / non-fiction, autobiographical, fantasy, topical, etc.

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Interesting to see what types of stories are being addressed across the group: fiction / non-fiction, autobiographical, fantasy, topical, etc.

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Oh wow your story here is really personal and super informative! I love the references you make to the unusual British characteristics balanced with humour, serious issues and the dilemma of your split Polish and British identity.  There is a lot of information on each page and it can be overwhelming to read but I think it adds to the pace and the tension of the narrative. The colours are very clever echoing the British flag and contrasts the strikingly to the background. You put a lot of thought and hard work into it!

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Is the story engaging? What makes it so? What is the reading experience like?

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Is the story engaging? What makes it so? What is the reading experience like?

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Lack of text makes it feel really dreamlike, along with the colours and backgrounds you've created. Although if it was a bedtime story should there be text within it. I really like it as it is tho, just wondering :))

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Lack of text makes it feel really dreamlike, along with the colours and backgrounds you've created. Although if it was a bedtime story should there be text within it. I really like it as it is tho, just wondering :))

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Is the text readable and clear? What does text or dialogue (or lack of) add to the story?

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Is the text readable and clear? What does text or dialogue (or lack of) add to the story?

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really great colour palette. Creates a world this character is living in convincing. Clear story set up/narrative although text not as clear

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really great colour palette. Creates a world this character is living in convincing. Clear story set up/narrative although text not as clear

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Want to find out what Happens to this guy.

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i think you have such a talent for world building and i feel like I can walk into his crib. colour palette is delicious and i really dig the way you've incorporated text into your image back grounds. 

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i think you have such a talent for world building and i feel like I can walk into his crib. colour palette is delicious and i really dig the way you've incorporated text into your image back grounds. 

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I can't tell exactly what the story is except they're showing me the crib, wish i could read the text but yeah the energy in your drawings are sooo sick and sucks me in

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I really love the colour here! How did you make it? It looks like it could be linocut. What was your inspiration to the design of the figures?

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Medium - what affect does the materials used have on the message?

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Medium - what affect does the materials used have on the message?

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Could aspects be improved? Could the story or artwork be more developed?

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Could aspects be improved? Could the story or artwork be more developed?

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like the monochrome, makes it feel mysterious/atmospheric. do u think you'll incorporate colour at all if you edited

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like the monochrome, makes it feel mysterious/atmospheric. do u think you'll incorporate colour at all if you edited

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Really like the print effect, Wondering if it is print/why u decided to use print? also like how some images are boxed and some not eg, all the postmen walking along on page 2 

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World building - are the characters and setting convincing?

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World building - are the characters and setting convincing?

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Are the pages easy to read and navigate?

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Are the pages easy to read and navigate?

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I like that the Grandad character is the one initiating the colour to the scene. Establishing a fantasy world.

Will you use text along with his story? Perhaps you could use a script font made by yourself as well. I did not see the title until second glance.
Making a title that shows Grandads character would help make the first page more exciting and eye catching

The third page has a slightly confusing panel layout. If you make two panels slightly bigger it can help lead the eye more easily.

You created some very rich illustrations and it definetly makes you want to read it a few times to catch all the detail!

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Short comic story Christel 't Hoen_compressed

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THE FUNCTION
communication, affect on audience, story message, readability...

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THE FORM
Use of the page, composition / the frame / use of text, narrative structure...

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THE MEDIUM
Image + text, process + materials used, colour, characterisation...

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Spend time with each piece

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- write your question as a new post and connect it to the work
Three dots (Top Right) ...
'Connect to post'

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- use the post-it notes as prompts
- add your comments to each piece in the comments section VVV