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I really like your story but you can add how you rest of you day went

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Good story add more dialogue

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I really like your story but add a title :>

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Hi

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Maybe try cropping your screenshots:>

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If you put more tran. Words and detail give it a punch

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The detail needs work and transitions and dialogue, but otherwise it’s very good. Nice job!

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Umm...  what is your theme? What is the story talking about? But over all it’s great I am in your class too it was CHAOS. You told the story in order, ok detail, and used good dialogue

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Great story, but in your conclusion try to put the theme without straight up saying it. And also make sure it’s 1 word.

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Try to make your theme a one word, but i think that this story is the best that I have read so far.

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I liked your story but maybe a title

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Good job but add a little detail and a HOOK. And some transitions.

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Maybe add more detail

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Good story but I think you could work on transportation words

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I like how you told what was happening, but try to right at least a whole page

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LA
Great story, but in your conclusion try to put the theme without saying “The moral of the story is...”
Parker Salyer

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I loved your story because I could connect to the dog treats you making but could add a title

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Such great humor I loved it! Maybe less of the cut offs to say comments, but over all I loved it!

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You need a title and some transition words too

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Try to make your theme a one word, but i think that this story is the best that I have read so far.

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Maybe you can make the story more as if you were a little kid going through it and not narrating it

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I love your story but maybe add a little more detail

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LA

I love your story but you need more transitions words to help it flow better

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I liked the story, but it needs some more transition words to make it go smoothly.

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Kailey Fortner
Your paper was great! I would recommend adding more transitions at the beginning of your paragraphs. I liked your lead.

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