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- Starts from 9am - 12pm
- First idea is Zoo Breakfast
- Second idea is amazing race

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the class outing will be from 9am to 12pm
first idea is breakfast at the zoo where u can share your meals with their orangutans and pose with them for a memorable photograph
second area is a amazing race for students to complete challenges based on their knowledge of singapores parks and it shall be a memorable bonding experience
lastly there will also be a sea lion show showing off their agilities by performing their flips and jumps etc

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-start from 9am to 12pm                                    -first idea zoom breakfast                           -second idea  amazing race

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Starts at 9a.m to 12p.m
First idea:zoo breakfast
Second idea:amazing race

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- Starts from 9am - 12pm
- First Idea is Zoo breakfast
- Zoo breakfast also allows you to share a meal with their orangutans and get to pose with them
- Second idea is The Amazing Race
- The Amazing Race is a way for students to get out of their classrooms and complete challenges based on their knowledge of parks part of Singapore starting from Mount Faber Kent Ridge park and ending in West coast park. Promises to be a memorable bonding experience for students as they take part in these fun and engaging experiences

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Good morning, Mr Lim and my classmates. As your class chairman, I am honoured to present to you two choices regarding our class outing which will be fun as well as provide us with experiential learning beyond the classroom

The class outing will be taking place on the 13th of March ,a full-day trip from 8am to 5pm.

The first idea I want to introduce is the Learning Journey to the National Zoo as we can be able to see animals that we can only see in Singapore there. They are tamed and not wild so you can be able to feed them or touch them if the Zoo allows it.

The second idea I want to introduce to you is the Jungle Breakfast with wildlife at Ah Meng Restaurant. This restaurant is a memory of our deceased iconic orangutan, Ah Meng .Even after he passed on, we can still feel his friendly spirit still open to seeing other people to meet with.

Thank you for your time listening to what I have to say ,I hope you have chosen whether you want this or something else.

Written by: Keith Chua

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Good job in completing the word.
187 words fall short of the standard O-level requirement of the question, i.e. 250-350 words. Noted, a lower requirement is fine for NA in the beginning.

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-start from 9am- 12am
-First idea - zoom
-Second idea- amazing race

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First idea-Zoom
Second idea-Amazing race
Breakfast before starting
Starting from 9am -12pm

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Good morning, Mr Lim and my classmates, As your class chairman, i am honoured to present to you two choices regarding our class outing which will be fun as well as provide us a experiential learning beyond the classroom.

The class outing will be held on 22 Februrary at 9am to 12pm.

The first idea i want to share with you is a unique buffet experience. We would be able to share a meal with the charismatic orangutans.

The second idea i would like to share is the amazing race, students get to get out of the classroom to complete challenges based on their knowledge of the parks in Singapore. It promises to be a memorable bonding session for the students as they participate in the fun and engaging activities.

Thank you for your time and I hope you would place your vote on the activity you want the class to participate.

Written by Cheryl

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152 words is fine for NA standards but for O-level target which you like to attempt… the word requirement is about 250 words.
Ideas to have more content/words : Talk more of the activities that has been given in the examples.

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The class outing will be taking place on the 19 Nov, after the
end of year exams.It will be a half-day trip from 9am to 12pm.

The first idea is going to the zoo and eating breakfast. It is a buffet and could also pose with animals and can take picture to keep it to remember the memorable photograph and there is a beautiful view.

The second idea is participating in The Amazing Race school edition. The amazing Race lets you get out of your classroom and complete challenges based on what you could remember of parks

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There was once I had a favorite time last year, it was when I went out with my crush ,but she did not know that .We went out for lunch before CCA and walked around Seletar Mall together side by side ,she smelt like a flower that smelled fragrant and nice. She looked great too. When we ate lunch and went out together ,it was my favorite time. We also went to the arcade and I got a bear plush for her and she was overjoyed .

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Mrs Yeo, the kind and responsible teacher who taught me during Primary 5 and 6, was the best teacher I have ever met. She is different from other teachers, her personality, her teaching methods, her perspective of us and many other strengths of her. Let me tell you more about her.

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At the start of my Primary 5 year, I met Mrs Yeo. She was enrolled as our class's form teacher along with the art teacher I met back in Primary 3. My first impression of her, I thought she was a strict and serious teacher who disciplines her students well. When we were bonding as a class with the teachers, I found that she is a very kind and optimistic person.

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During the first class with her, she gave us a notebook, " Class, I hope this notebook would follow you along your Primary school journey with all the helpful notes i have given you. "

This, is the difference between her and the other teachers, she knew our class was weak in english writing and math, she used that notebook for our spellings, and specially printed notes.

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Time had past so quickly in a blink of an eye, this year was a crucial period, it was PSLE year, for every period we have with her, she would always try to give us extra practice, hoping we would be able to score well during our PSLE. She always encourages us and sometimes even allow us to watch movies to not get ourselves stressed up.

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It was during post PSLE, the last few days of school, she spent the precious time with us, watching Matilda in a fully dark classroom, which felt like a cinema. It was the movie I watched before but I still enjoyed it together with the class and my teachers.

After all these hardwork she forked out for the class, its finally paid off. Its the day we received our PSLE scores, and the majority of the class did her proud, as many got into the express stream. The whole class gave her big thank you on the last day of school. The most encouraging thing we received was a small gift from her and a small letter which says, " Happy Graduation Day, Cheryl. "

Ever since I graduated, till now, I still cherish the memories we spent together as a class with Mrs Yeo. I am very thankful for the hardwork she spent printing notes for us, we see the encouragement she did for the class. Thank you Mrs Yeo.

Feedback: Excellent writing =) Please if you can, submit this as a nomination for you primary school teacher Mrs Yeo. This is exactly the type of writing that we need to justify and encourage Mrs Yeo to keep up the awesome work!

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I respect time whether in the morning, afternoon, evening, or night; I just love time. However, my most favourite time is early morning. There are many reasons behind this. Firstly, I feel so relaxed, and it gives me so much energy to do the things I have to do for the day.
Especially saturdays I get to wake up as late as I want I can sleep whenever I want

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The advantage of having grandparents is good as they are wiser then your parents, as they know more things then others. Like one can ask them about what happened in the past because, they know what happened during the world war.
Even though having grandparents is good for some people,
but some find it annoying because of the age between the grandchild and the grandparent. Like when the grand child is using the computer to do work but the grandparent thought he is using it to play games.
The age gap between the two also have some positive things to, like when the grandchild is curious about what happened in the past they can ask the grandparent because they know a lot. Like if the grandchild wants to know about what happened in world war two.
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I have a friend named Jenna that I have always in mind,she is funny clever and caring. She has beautiful blue eyes long blond hair and she is quite tall. Whenever I feel sad or annoyed she would always comfort me. She was my best friend everything was good till one day.

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We were still at P5 and we have been best friends since P4.We were all very stressed out as our end of year exam is coming. Me and Jenna were always studying together since we live near each other we always go to each other’s house to study.

Feedback: Setting scene done in paragraph 1, and building up on paragraph 2. Looking forward to the rest of your story.

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I remember about one time,that incident was my favourite memory,In primary 6 on the last day of school,me and my friend decided to hang out for the last time,the three of us dyed our hair,the teacher odered pizza for everyone one of us,we were allowed to use our phones,after that,at noon our teacher took us to waterway point to go and watch a movie from there.We after that got released from there.The entire day was my favourite time.

Feedack: I hope there is more to the story because as a reader, I find that the story line has finished? The structure has potential to grow so keep on writing!

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After going to the arcade, we went over to her huse to study. When we reached, her parents welcomed me in. When we got into her room, I just realised I had never been into a girl's room. I was in cold sweat for a moment but cooled down later on when we started to study .I was offered a drink later on and we continued studying .I then went home .

Feedback: The climax of the story, is 'cold sweat ' but it is too short. Do elaborate to improve on this crush/romance story : )