# data[].attributes.body
Errors:

1. When students have questions to ask for their subjects but if their teacher is not around, they access the internet(Sentence Structure)

2. Websites such as google or youtube

3. All of their other work to practice(Word Form)

4. One way students make good use of mobile devices for learning is that they use it to gain knowledge.(Pronoun)

Corrections:

1. ..............they access the Internet

2. ....such as Google or Youtube

3. ......other work to practise.

4. ..............they use them to gain knowledge.

# data[].attributes.body
Error:1.Mobile devices, the buzzword of the 21st century, has become such an integral part of outbound life, that it is almost impossible to imagine what happen if it ceases to exist. (Punctuation)
2.But there are also some argument for mobile divices.(Single Plural)
3.The advantages of mobile devices are limitless for students in their study.(Expression)
4.Mobile devices allow students to communicate with their teachers and each other outside of the classroom.(Expression)
5.I studied physics lessons myself at home.(Expression )

Correction:
1.Mobile devices, the buzzword of the 21st century, has become such an integral part of outbound life that it is almost impossible to imagine what happen if it ceases to exist. (Punctuation)
2.there are also some arguments for mobile divices.(Single Plural)
3.The advantages of mobile devices are limitless for students in terms of their study.(Expression)
4.Mobile devices allow students to communicate with their teachers and one another outside of the classroom.(Expression)
5.I studied physics by myself at home.(Expression )

# data[].attributes.body
Errors
1) Once someone is addicted to a game or social media, he would be very reluctant to stop using these applications and start his homework. (expression error)

2) This is because he told himself he was "taking a break" but he might continue to use his phone for half an hour. (tense error & SVA)

3) For example, a student is doing his homework and the phone vibrated suddenly as he received a notification. (tense error)

4) Many students have access to the internet nowadays (pronoun error)

Corrections
1) Once someone is addicted to a game or social media, he would be very reluctant to stop using these applications and start doing his homework

2) This is because he might have told himself he was "taking a break" but he may continue to use his phone for half an hour.

3) For example, a student is doing his homework and the phone vibrates suddenly as he receives a notification

4)Many students have access to the Internet nowadays

# data[].attributes.body
Errors:

1.For instance, some teachers have been making use of he students’ mobile phones to keep track of their learning progress by conducting quizzes on their phones.[Expression Error]

2.These group projects encourage students to complete research and gather information from the internet.[Link to mobile devices!!]

3.Students also use applications on their devices to call their friends to avoid the trouble of meeting up.[More Examples]

4.The reason for this is due to the fact that the younger generation tend to fancy using their mobile devices for learning compared to reading textbooks and completing worksheets.[Subject-Verb Agreement]

5.Rather than for leisure sake and aid them in their learning process.[Sentence Structure]

Corrections:

1.For instance, some teachers have been making use of he students’ mobile phones to keep track of their learning progress by conducting quizzes online which students have easy access to through their mobile phones.

2.Thes group projects encourage students to complete research and gather information using their mobile phones to access the web.

3.Students also use application on their devices to communicate with their friends and avoid the trouble of meeting up.For example, they can call their friends and work on a group project without having to meet up in person.

4.The reason for this is due to the fact that the younger generation tends to fancy using their mobile devices for learning compared to reading textbooks and completing worksheets

5.Rather than for leisure sake and instead, help them in their learning process.

# data[].attributes.body
Error
1. They are very attractive (WC) students like me.
2.(at the start of a paragraph)Then, the social (SS) media is even more harmful for students.
3. I said to my self ‘just scan instagram for 5 minuets then go to bed’ (SS(Singlish)) then the second time I checked my watch is 2 hours later.

Correction
1. They are extremely addictive to students like me.
2. Social media Ian even more harmful for students.
3. I remembered I just decided to scan Instagram for a short while before I go to bed, but to my surprise, I did just scan for a while, but it was about 2 hours.

# data[].attributes.body
Error

1\Nowadays, more and more students students start use the mobile devices..

2\they just use their phones to search, within few minute

3\I need a few hours to finish my homework,

4\A student who spend too much time in social media

5\the mobile devices give negative effects to students.

Correction

1\Nowadays, more and more students students start to use the mobile devices..

2\they just use their phones to search and within few minute

3\I need a few hours to finish my homework yet

4\A student who spend too much time on social media

5\the mobile devices brings negative effects to students.

# data[].attributes.body
Errors
1. Therefore, this increases the convenience of carrying for the students. (Expression Error)
2. Some solutions he can choose include: asking his peers for assistance; referring to the instructional manual or searching the internet. (Punctuation Error)

3. Therefore, I strongly agree that students are making good use of mobile devices for learning (Punctuation Error)
4. Following technological advancements, mobile devices has become more compact, yet able to store large amounts of data. (Subject-Verb Agreement)
5. There are detractors, however, who claim that mobile devices hinder students in learning as students are easily distracted by the tempting games and social media that mobile devices has to offer. (More Elaboration)
Corrections
1. Therefore, this provides students with the convenience of not needing to carry around school resources.
2. Some solutions he can choose may include asking his peers for assistance, referring to the instructional manual or searching the Internet.

3. Therefore, I strongly agree that students are making good use of mobile devices for learning.
4. Following technological advancements, mobile devices have become more compact, yet able to store larger amounts of data.
5. There are detractors, however, who claim that mobile devices hinder students in learning as students are easily distracted by the tempting games and social media that mobile devices has to offer. As multitasking is near impossible, students may lose their focus in class when engaged on their phones, which can lead to heightened stress when they do not understand the chapter or how to do their assignments.

# data[].attributes.body
1) In some cases, people argue that food should only be consumed to survive.
Correction: In some cases, people eat for the sake of survival.

2) Those new emotions and flavors can also turn into valuable experiences and memorable memories.
Correction: Those new emotions and flavors can also turn into valuable experiences and unforgettable memories.

# data[].attributes.body
Wang Yifan

Errors

1. We enjoy to eat as it provides us joy and happiness

2. People prefer to have a big meal after exam

3. Some people always say that we eat is not because of food but who we are eating with

4. We need to agree that if the food is awful and looks bad, will people still feel happy and joy while they are eating?

5. Foods can provide us energy and nutrition , we need to eat to live.

Corrections

1.We enjoy eating  as it provides us with joy and happiness

2.People prefer to have a big meal after an exam

3.Some people always say that we eat not because of the food but who we are eating with

4.We need to ask ourselves if the food is awful and looks bad, will people still feel happy and joy while they are eating?

5.Foods can provide us energy and nutrition therefore we need to eat to live.

# data[].attributes.body
Error:
1) Some people think that getting a good food is a crucial experience. (Exp)

2) These people will use everything in their hand to pursue a cuisine that satisfy their palates. (Exp)

3)It is actually an effort to even more satisfy ourselves. (Exp)

4)The idea of eating to live just does not come to mind as most people are already thrived and survived. (Exp)

5)... but you cannot argue that this goal is a form of passion that managed to create the foods we have to these days.

Correction:
1) Some people think that eating delicious food is a crucial experience. (Use eating instead of getting as it is more suitable)

2)These people will use everything in their hand to obtain cuisines which are able to satisfy their palates. (The word pursue is not suitable for food but it is more suitable for a job or dream)

3)It is actually an effort to satisfy ourselves even more.(Wrong placement)

4)The idea of eating to live just does not come to mind as most people have trived over the past decades. (Change to a more suitable grammar)

5)... but you cannot argue that this goal is a form of passion that has led to the creation of the foods we have until this day.(Change the phrase as the word "passion" is not suitable for the verb "manage" because it does not represent alive subject)

# data[].attributes.body
Error 1:

First of all,why we eat to live?

Error 2:

With the development of the society,there are more and more delicious and engaging types of food appearing.

Error 3:

Can you imagine that if a person never eat anything for a long time,what will happen?

Error 4:

It is clear that an unhealthy diet will cause harmful physical issue.

Error 5:

Living to eat is a wrong idea to have a positive and healthy life.

Correction 1:

First of all,why do we need to eat to live?

Correction 2:

With the development of the society,there are more and more delicious and special types of food being created.

Correction 3:

Can you guess what will happen if a person eat nothing during a long period of time?

Correction 4:

It is sure that an unhealthy diet will affect your physical health.

Correction 5:

In order to have a healthy body and positive living habits, forget the idea about living to eat, start exercising and eat properly.

# data[].attributes.body
Errors
1. Leisure is the time where we can think and express ourselves freely

2. Secondly, leisure is the form of stress-relieved

3. Country like Japan has the highest death rate ...

4. Nevertheless, there are people who said that leisure time is supposed to be filled with other activities that is considered as beneficial.

5. People would feel very stressful and thus ...

Comment
1. "where" is inappropriate here because the sentence is referring to the time.
Correction: Leisure is the time when we can think and express ourselves freely.
2. "the" is incorrect as there is no specification of any form of stress-relieving. Stress-relieved is also incorrect as it means that leisure is a form of activity that shows we are not stressed.
Correction: Secondly, leisure is a form of stress-relieving remedy for us.
3. The use of country is wrong as it has to be plural and not singular.
Correction: Countries like Japan has the highest death rate
4. The sentence shows error in sentence structure.
Correction: Nevertheless, there are people who said that leisure time is supposed to be filled with  more productive activities. Activities that are deemed as beneficial to the world and certainly other than free time.
5. The usage of the word "stressful" is a Word Form error because stressful means causing stress. Hence, it is wrong because it means that people would feel they are causing stress and not the intended meaning which is to feel stressed.
Correction: People would feel very stressed and thus...

# data[].attributes.body
Errors
1.Advanced communication features implemented in mobile devices include, "Whatsapp" and "Telegram"
2.Students nowadays are not motivated to study by their own and thanks to sophisticated features of mobile devices, that are able to connect virtually with the students to finish their assignments.
3. Afterall, students and teachers can come to a common understanding of responsible use of smartphones.
4.For example, students indeed have a habit of tapping on their social media to check out their updated feeds.
5.Therefore,students in fact make good use of mobile devices' accessibility to complete tasks that are assigned to us before deadlines which allows knowledge to be boosted.

Comments
1.Advanced communication features that are implemented in mobile devices includes, "Whatsapp" and "Telegram".
2. Students nowadays are not motivated to study on their own and thanks to sophisticated features of mobile devices,that are able to connect virtually with the students to finish their assignments.
3.Afterall, students and teachers can come to a common understanding of responsible use of mobile devices in class which may be  sources of distraction.
4.For example, students indeed have a habit of tapping on on their social media to check out their updated feeds.
5.Therefore,students in fact make good use of mobile devices' accessibility to complete assigned task which allows to refresh their knowledge.

# data[].attributes.body
Errors
1.Our world,what used to run solely on manpower,has now turned upside down because of technology(unclear)
2.Distractions results in students to lose focus on their studies and disrupts the quality..(exp)
3. It is also helpful in expanding students mindset of different lifestyles.

Comment
1.(add on)Machines and robots have replaced humans.
2. As a result of distractions, students tend to lose focus on their studies.Additionally,these disrupts the quality..
3.Students' mindset about different lifestyles can be expanded with the help of...

# data[].attributes.body
Error
1. Food can appeal our health
2. Food made in special manners
3. Different people of different tradition and culture eat differently
4. Eat variously
5. I suggest us to eat as much healthy as we can
6. It is a showcase to our faith, tradition…
7. What we eat refers to who we are
Comment
1.food can appeal our health condition. It is a express error as health is virtual and can't be expressed directly
2. Food which is prepared using special procedures.
3. Different people of different traditions and cultures eat differently. Tradition and culture need to be plural here because people are plural.
4. Eat diversely. Variously is a inappropriate expression of eating
5. I suggest that we eat as much healthy food as we can.
6. It is a showcase of our faith, tradition…
Wrong preposition is used
7. What we eat defines who we are. (wrong express)

# data[].attributes.body
Jorden
Jordon

# data[].attributes.body
Errors:
1) Mobile devices now serve as an extra distraction during lessons, increased the risk of affecting students emotionally which would cause them to be unable to focus in learning. (sentence structure)
2) ...rely on our mobile devices to search up answers (expression error)
3 that might cause stress in (preposition error) the other party.
4) Social media was originally supposed to be an useful site where students can relax themselves after a stressful study...(expression error)
5) Furthermore, students are not using their mobile devices wisely as a tool that is just a hand reach away from information that is beneficial for learning. (expression error)
6) Even I ,myself , as a student (expression error)
7) constantly looking down at their phone which is a worrying situation especially with students nowadays. (sentence structure)

Correction:
1)Mobile devices are now an extra distraction that can affect students emotionally making them unable to focus in learning.
2) rely on electronic devices for the researching of answers.
3) that might cause stress to the other party.
4) study sessions*/social media was meant to be an useful tool for/in
5) students are misusing their mobile devices that were supposed to provide them with easy access to information online, beneficial for their learning
6) Even as a student myself
7) The recent worrying situations where students tend to constantly look down at their phone can be observed in our daily lives.

# data[].attributes.body
the visualiser and the classic laptop, where under the careful guidance of their teachers, they make use of fully.
1 comment

Wei Lun Tan 9m
Everyday, students come to school and experience firsthand the wonders of technology, such as the visualiser and the classic laptop. Under the careful guidance of their teachers, it is almost certain that students will make full use of such technology
Your avatar

Add comment

more_vert

# data[].attributes.body
Instead, they watch irrelevant videos such as cooking videos and videos of their favourite singers recorded by others. [Expression Error

# data[].attributes.body
Paragraph 3 Comment: Immediate? --> Elaborate

Context: ...he will instantly turn to his mobile device and message his teacher for further clarification, which results in his teachers responding and answering whatever burning questions he may have.

# data[].attributes.body
Most of the time, the content viewed by students in social media is irrelevant to whatever the are learning in class. [Sentence Structure

# data[].attributes.body
 the student could overcome this problem is by asking his peers for assistance, referring to t

# data[].attributes.body
Phone, a device that most of us have especially students.
(SS)

# data[].attributes.body
For example,students indeed have a habit of tapping on their social media to check out their updated feeds.

# data[].attributes.body
Students often use or scroll through social media during break to relax. [Expression Error]

# data[].attributes.body
An example is a personal experience

# data[].attributes.headline
The Singapore National Cadet Corps Command Band Swiss Winds of Swiss Cottage Secondary School. 

# data[].attributes.subject
The Singapore National Cadet Corps Command Band Swiss Winds of Swiss Cottage Secondary School. 

# data[].attributes.body
Mobile phones have developed to be the amazing device it is today. [Expression Error]

# data[].attributes.body
Therefore,students in fact make good use of mobile devices' accessibility to complete tasks that are assigned to us before deadlines which allows knowledge to be boosted

# data[].attributes.body
I think that students who are of a young age , are lacking of self control

# data[].attributes.body
They may think that cyberbullying is just a small matter and they are just having fun, 'nothing will go wrong' is their mindset.
(SS)

# data[].attributes.body
Error:expression
Accessibility is the ability of how easily something can be reached.

# data[].attributes.body
From a tool used solely for the sake of communication, to a device which revolutionised the way people study, talk, and surf the net (SENTENCE INCOMPLETE MISTAKE) k can thanks bye

# data[].attributes.body
Another reason why I disagree to the statement because i think that ...

# data[].attributes.body
...doesn't necessary means they are true as netizen can always start fake news. [ EXP ]

# data[].attributes.body
To some extent(P) I think that

# data[].attributes.body
As the years pass, technology advances, increasing the phone abilities a phone could have - weather forecast, social media e.t.c. And because of all the abilities a phone has, it causes distractions.
(WC, S.F.)

# data[].attributes.body
1. have left the factories to fall into the hands of consumers
2. break the teacher's trust for them to use their mobile devices solely for educational purposes.
3. forums only view the opinions of people...

# data[].attributes.body
1. Therefore, this increases the convenience of carrying for the students. (Expression Error)
2. Some solutions he can choose include: asking his peers for assistance; referring to the instructional manual or searching the internet.

(Punctuation Error)

3. Therefore, I strongly agree that students are making good use of mobile devices for learning (Punctuation Error)

# data[].attributes.body
From a research made by proffessor in the United States

# data[].attributes.body
1)students tend to abuse their rights to use their phones during school hours
2)

# data[].attributes.body
I personally feels (SVA)

# data[].attributes.body
Students can use their mobile devices to search for some websites for them to study on. In this way, teachers do not need to have the hassle on speaking more and students can learn from there.

# data[].attributes.body
If students could just boost up their courage and ask teachers, they might have a better clarification on the question that they are not sure of.
(exp)

# data[].attributes.body
If students could just

# data[].attributes.body
Life is a mistake, for kishor

# data[].attributes.body
Mobile phones have developed to be the amazing device it is today. A device can store so much information, all of it accessible within seconds. Schools have used this in hopes of improvising the learning of their students. However, are students making good use of this? I personally think that student are not making good use of mobile devices for learning, as

# data[].attributes.body
are you ridin

# data[].attributes.body
1) new post
It is scary how impatient students are, they never seem to be able to wait ...[sentence structure]

# data[].attributes.body
Jordan
i

# data[].attributes.body
[Sentence Structure] Everyday, students come to school and experience firsthand the wonders of technology, such as the visualiser and the classic laptop, where under the careful guidance of their teachers, they make use of fully.