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Overall they said they enjoyed watching it and positive comments were mainly about the non-linear narrative and the frequent action which was achieved through editing. Sharon, who also commented on the rough cut, noticed improvements in the realism of the acting which was solved by re-filming scenes and precise editing. There were positive comments on some shots including the point of view shots of Angela Smith running away from Rupert which apparently added to the action. However some disagreed and said all of the erratic action made it look more like a trailer of a film instead. Some also picked up on a sound issue caused by the microphone in one of the shots of the hypnotist which does ruin it slightly. They didn't notice another fault which is during the actual hypnotism. Our first take on voice overs was through the use of the camera and a boom pole microphone- during the editing process we simply removed the film's track and kept the audio. But after we agreed that the quality wasn't so good because of the room we were in; it had caused some unwanted echoing. Therefore we decided to do the voice overs on the Mac which improved the sound quality however we had forgotten to remove one of the previous voice over tracks which caused a clash between that and a new voice over. It is noticeable for me because I know that it isn't supposed to be there but the viewers didn't seem to pick up on this. Chloe commented on how she had to concentrate, although this wasn't a negative comment I think it would have helped to have included a shot of the photo frame in a POV shot of the doctor at his desk perhaps rearranging or neatening things up. This would establish the 'key symbol' of the photograph before the action unfolds in order to make it clearer to the audience that the hypnotist is the villain.

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Why would they want to carry on watching after my opening has ended?

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Why would they want to carry on watching after my opening has ended?

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Over the course of the opening the audience will begin to pick up on the subtle hints that suggest the hypnotist may be an unreliable character. These clues include: the ‘patient checklist’, concealed notes as Rupert enters the office, his black clothing that connotes death and darkness, his strange confrontational tone, the injection and the torn photograph that matches the photograph on the hypnotist’s desk. As the audience notices one or two of these symbols, their attention is hooked on what symbol will follow to help them crack the storyline. The audience feedback picked up on the non-linear narrative created through the staggered visions throughout which created the fast paced and frequent action typical of a thriller. One also said how it reminded them of other films such as ‘Trance’ which also used hypnotism. Another mentioned how the confusing narrative made them concentrate hard to pick up on the subtle hints which reminded them of ‘Inception’. I think this familiarisation would grasp the interest of many other viewers who also enjoy similar films. Overall, I think it is the ambiguous character of Dr. J. Smith which would make audience want to carry on watching after the opening has ended.  By putting the hints together cre dramatic irony; the audience know more than Rupert. This establishes him as the ‘victim’ which would make the viewers want to continue watching to see if and how he finds out the trouble he is truly in. From audience feedback, one person said how they are interested in seeing how the hypnotist gets caught. They enjoyed the final shot of the photograph on his desk which matched the torn copy that Rupert refers to throughout the opening in his visions.

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How does my thriller hold the audience’s attention?

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How does my thriller hold the audience’s attention?