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Very cute face,
nice creative story
love,
your secret admirer

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I bwieve that teh stowy was vewy kewl, and it was intwesting.

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your idea was really original and I really enjoyed how you integrated the traditional chinese belief in the luck and power of numbers as a magical element in a realistic setting. However, I think your plot can be more fleshed out and perhaps conflict or a multitude of characters can be added to further deepen the story. You could've also been more articulate and clear in your presentation however. good job!

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Your delivered your pitch clearly, but I think that you could use a more diverse set of vocabulary.

I like your story and how you related it to Chinese culture to add a post colonial flare to your story. However, I think that you could add more depth to your explanation about the number's meanings. You could also make this story a pastiche to another story in order to add more features of magic realism.

Yo from Rachel

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Dear Katelyn,
I believe this

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I liked the imagery

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To begin with, your story was quite original and creative. However, since I could not hear your elevator pitch properly, I could not make a proper conclusion to your pitch. On the flip side, nice images of Shrek on the screen!

Peter

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The audio was slightly unclear and quiet, however your pronunciations seems to be accurate.

I like the way you incorporated your prompt into your story, but I think you could include more aspects of post colonial in your story. Also you could make your story a pastiche to another magic realism story, in order to add more details about magic.

Hello From Rachel

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The audio wasn't entirely clear, but I think

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shrek was nice but i couldn't hear anything

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Is there a clean up crew that cleans up the corpses and blood? Nice story and original idea

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The story sounds interesting and I like the implementation of the common phrase: it is raining cats and dogs. Good job!

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I think it went way unrealistic, like the mundane aspect was slightly exaggerated. But other than that, it is a very interesting and creative story, raining cats and dogs? I liked how you turned the idiom into a reality.

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I think that the hook was very good, and the story was very good. Very strong message, telling us that people are quite cold right now.

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what? raining cats and dogs????? this is a really cool story

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I really like your rhetorical question to hook the audience in. I love the goofy/simple factor and how you literally illustrate the "raining cats and dogs" idiom and turn it into an interesting magic realist story that subtly deals comments on the society and lifestyle in Hong Kong. good job!!! vv original :D

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You used an extensive list of vocabulary and delivered your story with clarity.

I really enjoyed your story, especially with the normal citizens being unfazed that live creatures are being dropped from the sky. The idea is original and quite creative.

Overall, I enjoyed that you added a moral to the story that relates to today's Hong Kong. I think that it is incredibly well thought out that it is a pastiche to another story.

Yo from Rachel

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I think that your story was very creative and was realted to thigns nowadays.

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i think you were very articulate and expressed your ideas clearly. However, there weren't any clear relations to the realistic or fantasy world. I think your story may need to be more developed in terms of plot and setting. good effort!

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nice plot, very creative

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Good story, creative, voice was really deep and resonating.

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I think you could have delivered your speech louder, but you said the words clearly.

I don't think that your story has much magical elements and is quite confusing. Including the part about the dice, I can't really see it as magical more of just a inequality in society.

Overall I think that maybe you could make your story as a pastiche and link it to another magic realism story you read before to make your story have more magical elements.

Hello From Rachel

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I think that your story was very interesting, and that it was explosive.

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Very.. creative story, and also original, good editing also

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First, I really enjoy how your video is edited and how the pictures correlate to your plot and help explain the plot. Second, your story is quite humorous and entertaining .However, you can include more magic-realism elements in your story and make your story more related post-colonialism influences on Hong Kong. Overall, nice editing of your video.

Peter

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I really liked your story and it is quite original. There are definitely some cultural Hong Kong elements which I enjoyed but the diversity and relevance to current events is also funny and relatable. sick idea dude.

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That was a BOMB video.
Griff

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8/8 very good

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I love your video so much especially the edits. I also really like your humorous plot and silly characters. That was incredible haha​​​​h

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You delivered your speech in a fun way, and I liked the way you edited the video with pictures.

I found it quite amusing that terrorists and potions can be in the same story. I enjoyed that you include mundane elements of Hong Kong, including cage homes and fengshui.

Although I don't really understand the magical elements of your story, it is a humorous and original concept.

Hi from rachel

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it was very good and original and i enjoyed your pitch a lot. I tihnk that the plot is very special and it has a deep meaning
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You have clear articulation and used excellent and relevant magic realist terminology. I liked how you linked current political events and drew inspiration from Animal Farm and TKAM. love your idea! super creative dude wowza amazing

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I think that your story idea is very interesting, and I like how you incorporated the umbrella revolution.

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noice vocab. I like how the plot revolves around the umbrella revolution

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Your delivered your narrative well and used proper grammar. The vocabulary is also incredibly extensive.

I think it is incredibly interesting that you linked it to 'To Kill a Mockingbird' and 'Animal Farm' as a pastiche. However I think you can justify the similarity between your story with Animal Farm in more depth.

Although I didn't really understand the plot, I think that the story will be incredibly unique and original once it is written and developed.

Hello from Rachel

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I like how you started with the story starter, however I think you could've added a bit more plot and original ideas to your story. ANother thing was that you basically read out your entire story, not an elevator pitch, which wasn't part of the requirement. good effort dude

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your story is a quite confusing and your pitch is too long to be an elevator pitch sorry :(

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story sounds so similar i wonder where i might have seen it hmmmmm

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Great story idea and I like all of the details that were included. Great job!

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YOU JUST COPPIED THE LATER PART OF 'THINGS'

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a mysterious plot, I already feel the tension which is great. Maybe include less of the actual things you'll add in the story, rather include a general idea

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Your narrative was clear.

Your story isn't really a elevator pitch, but I think that your story is quite interesting. However I don't think your story is original, as it is incredibly similar to 'things'. It doesn't include many elements to post colonial. Maybe you could change the plot instead of just following the idea as Things.

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I believe that you have a relatively creative story, yet you stuttered a bit too much.

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I think that the story idea was nice, and it was nice of you to explain the symbolism behind the story. I think that you could make your pitch better by talking more smoothly.

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u enunciated very clearly and presented your story in a very logical and organized way. I enjoyed the supernatural elements of your story, but there may need to be more of a balance between the magical and realist world. i also like your moral behind the story xx i rate it 10/10

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interesting adaptation, I really like the idea and theme behind it

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I really like how you had inspiration from other stories :)

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Your speech was delivered clearly, but I think you could have used more diverse vocabulary.

I like the universe you created, however I think you could have added more mundane, realistic aspects to your story.

Overall, I liked that you added a moral to your story and I think that you put a lot of detail into your story.

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First, your ideas were quite original and creative since it is quite innovative to have a plot about escaping from an alternative world by riding on the back of a dragon. Second, your voice was clear and smooth. However you could improve by explaining the theme of the story and make your plot less magical and more mundane to include more elements of magic-realism.

Overall, nice job!

Peter

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I think that your story idea is very interesting, and I like the moral.

I think that you could have improved it by making the recording smoother.

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it has a very original and interesting plot
i liked it a lot 10/10

coco

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Your speech was clear and accurately spoken. You could have used a more extensive vocabulary.

I think that the magical universe created into your story is quite interesting. Although I think you could have added more mundane aspects in your story, currently it seems more like a fantasy story. You could also expand on your ideas about the parallel world.

Overall, I enjoyed the way the dragon, fengshui and pieces of Chinese culture was inccoperated into your story.

Hey from Rachel

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i really enjoy your story plot and the tie between magic realism and reality. i particularly like the "act of kindness" aspect cuz why not?? we should b more kind to everyone. i also liked how you have chinese cultural aspects (feng shui, dragon etc) in your story. your explanation was logical and very organized. props 2 u!

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You organized yourself very well, as you used different "subtitles" to separate different sections.
Your story was also very well thought out.
In order to improve I think you could speak more clearly.

But overall I believe you did a good job on demonstrating your ideas.

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You need some work on your grammar and pronunciation. Also I didn't really understand your story and theme.

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I think that you talked at a good pace, and that it was nice story.

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clear plot, could've stuttered less but I was still able to understand what you're saying. Creative idea and good ties to postcolonialism.

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interesting idea of combining HKU with the story.

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wow sick i like how you organized your story by time, setting, plot and you made it very clear on what your story would be about. You also had clear articulation and enunciated very clearly. good job man

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It was very confusing and didn't make much sense, and had no theme, but had good creativity.

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Try speaking more clearly. however you have a pretty interesting story. i like how you split your pitch into the different sections so that it is easier to understand and your information is organized

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it had nice plot
good job

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You delivered your story with clarity and accurate grammar.

I think that you incorporated the prompt into your story really smoothly, but I think that the post colonial aspect doesn't really exactly make any purpose in your story. I think you could justify the magical elements in more depth.

Overall, I think that your story is well thought and I liked that you thought out every detail you put in, including in the theme.

Hello from Rachel

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Very clear pronunciation and very interesting story plot. Would like to see this advance into a full story.

George

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Your elevator pitch was pretty clear and lit

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Very clear pronunciation and the story plot is nice.

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interesting story
sounds like a story ive heard before
sofia

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I liked the plot and you had very very clear pronunciation and you did not stutter and it was v good

coco

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AMAZINF MAN I LIKE HOW U RELATE IT TO THEM OLD CHING CHONG MYTHS
sasa

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I like how your plot incorporated elements from Chinese folklore, exploring the ideas of duality.

I think that you enunciated very clearly, and that you explained your plot very clearly.

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you effectively organize your opinions and ideas and you have a very interesting story that has to do with Hong Kong and its post colonial thingy

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Your speech was delivered clearly and your vocabulary was extensive.

Although you included a Chinese origin, I think that you could develop the characters and story more by adding more levels to your plot and character. For example, a starting, rise, climax and possible a twist that happens in the end of the story.

I enjoyed that you included inspiration from a Chinese classic story. Currently I am not incredibly clear about the plot of your story, but I am excited to see the outcome of your story.

Love
Rachel

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interesting plot :)))

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Very clear pronunciation, paired with a good story.
Thomas Griffin

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Good job. I think that

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I thought that your words were clear and

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I think that you spoke very clearly, and you included very good vocabulary.

I think that you have a very good plot, and that you explained your story very well.

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Wow, great moves Rachel, keep it up.
For real nice word choice
thooomas

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I think I did ok, but it was short.

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i cant focus because of your cat :))

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the cat was my favourite part like honestly

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Nice job dud love the asian cat

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Nice video and great idea for a magic realism story. The cat was a nice touch!

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Cats

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OMG YOUR CAT

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I think your magical realist story was very intriguing and I could tell you spent lots of effort on this project good job!!! def a 8 for me!!!!!!! love, your cat nibbles

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best cat

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you used perfect grammar and your pronunciation was clear (very good vocabulary)
i really enjoyed seeing your cat on screen

love from coco (to your cat)

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Story structure is fine but you could've been more creative and made it more original

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good job

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honestly outstanding
very very very good story
like omg

but why are their so many drugs involved

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Great video and I like the story. The idea of implementing the Mafia was a nice touch.

Great job from Elias.